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Damn, this story gave me a big bonner
I'm sorry, I had to.
3959684
Bonners for everyone.
This story could really benefit from a standard grammar check. There's a lot of misspellings, and missing or incorrect words, as well as lots of incorrect verb tenses. Toss it into word (or an equivalent word processor) and run a grammar check, it should catch the lion's share of the mistakes.
Pretty good, I loved the sexual tension, it was really palpable. The grammar does need a little work though.
Also, I've been to Bonners Ferry, Idaho, thanks for the memories.
3961449 Shit, I just have to fix this bo'nn'er thing
My teacher would be so disappointed with me...
Noticed more mistakes when you started the hot stuff.
Probably was getting flustered by how things were going that you began to rush. 
That's why inexperienced writers like me don't write clop without plenty of focus. 
3962495 Yep, but the errors are the key to learn. Is too easy just send the story to an editor, and get it back completely checked and grammatically correct. All the English I learned (And i'm still learning) came from books and films; besides the stupid 'English' they teach you in the school, I never had a teacher about this. Brazil sucks.
3961742 That's alright. I actually went through this and proofread. Most of the mistakes are simple like possesives: 'Filthy Rich mansion > Filthy Rich's mansion" and prepositions: "at the couch > on the couch", "it was a hard day to Mac > It was a hard day for Mac." Also, "wan't" isn't a contraction, it's just 'want'.
Still a very enjoyable read.
3963977 Thanks
HA!
3962877 Well then congratulations on your English studies!
Keep practicing and you're writing will definitely improve. If I had a suggestion it would be to find an editor that can maybe not only help but also explain the few errors to better improve future projects. Contacting a patient and knowledgeable editor is an easy way to get a new friend! 
3967787 Thanks man, with some luck and patience I must find one...
That last line made me laugh.
mmhmm...
"Yes... I just wan't to make you FELL better." She blushed furiously. Now the question was; where to begin?
fail
Two bucking lines. Was all it took for me to fall off my bed laughing and crying.
i just realized this kind of thing could totally become canon
. . . the 'lost my voice from singing too much' excuse
.
LAWL
dat mircophone tho
Okay, first of all, I this is a good story but I think it could be better if you'd improved the characters persona; aside that, it's GREAT.
Oh, and DAT FINALE
4564713 This was one of my first stories, and it really fascinates me the fact that people still read it today! I'm glad you like it, but I still have to rewrite/edit it to my most recent standards
This is some funny FlutterMac!
hahahahahahahahahahahahaha i love this
There were a few typos, but the content was absolutely wonderful.
I just have to point one out because I nearly fell out of my chair when I read it.
5519820 Yup, sorry for that, it's one of my oldest stories, and back then I was merely a crazy Brazilian guy, with almost no grammatical coherence.
Ha
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