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This will take us along Part 1 of the show My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic. When Corolla Shine and Myriad Alacrity receive a letter in-directly from Princess Celestia for the Summer Sun Celebration, they decide to attend along with many other ponies going, which it seems to be held in Ponyville this time around, the only pony who hasn't heard yet is JetStream.

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Comment posted by moviemaster8510 deleted Feb 8th, 2014

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Add the fact that the OCs are Sues ( because they're so cool that Celestia herself write to invite them to the celebration ).

Comment posted by LunicStream1105 deleted Feb 9th, 2014

3910847 I just don't get why everybody's so jumpy about OCs...

3920573 Because you're not making an original story about him. All you're doing, is inserting him into the show's episodes. That's not original.

3926543 I see... I (just want to make sure) thought it was a interesting idea. Anyway, thanks for the calm reply.

It appears that wall-of-texts are a bit present in this story, and can easily be fixed if you space out the paragraphs a bit more, to avoid clumping them into one huge block. You should make sure you also know what to capitalize, and what you shouldn't. Also, inserting an OC into episodes, as before mentioned, has been done numerous times, and most have them have failed immensely, as the episode either remains pretty much the same, or the plot line of the show and the Mane 6 instead focus on the OC. A great OC insertion into episodes is totallynotabrony's A Dream.

Farewell.

-ShadowFall

3920573 because all you have done is take something that already exists (the episodes) and jam an oc into them without changing anything. If you are going to add an oc to a story its often best to start from scratch.

OCs are like golf swings. There are a billion ways to fuck it up, but if you can do it just right, you can get a hole in one. This... is not a hole in one. A for effort though.

4329532 Either way you'll get there, eventually. Thanks.:twilightsheepish:

Hm. So I was looking around the search bar and found this. Seems like "Jetstream" is taken. :applejackunsure:

4684594 Sorry about that, this is embarrasing...

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