It's a.. so-so start. Not that impressive. Maybe your next few chapters will be better.

>>349417349417  Heh, I know it's a bit vague....but if I reveal too much about V's reasons to leave the city right now...it'll seem like I'm just repeating myself later in the story

I always suck at story intros anyways

>>349432349432

It's something like a prologue? Well it's going either way to be a HiE or a PoE one... Good luck for the next chapter!

>>349438349438  Heh yep, more of a very extended story summary preview thingy (the original chapter title was actually "Prologue" but I felt that was kinda lazy XD; )

New chapter coming up in a bit!

And they WILL get a bit longer soon!

EDIT: it's up!

Chapter three is up!

...Feedback is sparse...

Oh wellz!

*soldiers on*

It gets a bit more..in spirit of the show after this!  

Chapter 4 is up!

Heh, hope I wrote the characters correctly (keeping track of the Flim Flam brothers is a pain!)  

Things will get...interesting as Detective Pinkie Pie tries to solve the case of the disappearing Apple Family!

hells yea

It's as good as far as crossovers go. A very good plot so far and Applebloom suggesting they slash tires? Anyway keep up the good work.

Great job so far keep it up can't wait for the next chapter.

>>377755377755 Thanks!

I've hit a bit of a wall on this one, but I've got the whole plot bullet-pointed, so it's really just a matter of fleshing it out

Stop stealing my time, college!!!

*shakyfist*

Damn those educational facilities and stealing time from the important things.

And in this story I especially like that fact that out of the mane 6 it's centered around Applejack. Cause Applejack is my favourite pony

>>378310378310 And I would like to thank you reading this story has given me some inspiration to do a cross over of my own.

>>387880387880  You're very welcome!

Heh, AJ is my fave bu Dash is certainly a close second

It's like: I could see myself with someone like AJ for life, but I'd hang out with Dash in a heartbeat, idk

Heh, I'm just about past this wall on the chapter...I've never written nonsensically like Pinkie Pie speaks and it's....tough to say the least

I shall prevail though!!!

Keep working on that chapter.

And like you Applejack is my favorite then Rainbowdash. Who doesn't like Rainbowdash.

>>387984387984  Thanks for encouragement

And you know what...I really can't find any Dash haters unless they're just plain anti-pony in general...interesting

>>388121388121 For that same reason I thought Rainbowdash would be the most popular. Turns out she isn't nowhere near. There was a graph on EQd a while ago showing the most googled ponies. First was Twilight second was somepony I can't remember. Third was Princess Luna. I think Rainbowdash was fifth and Applejack was one of the least popular

>>388121388121        http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=b1prPjy6s58

Just thought you might enjoy this song. I was listening to this whilst I read through your story.

>>388412388412 Aww WTF no love for AJ?!

Ooh, diggin that song!  

And it came out on my birthday!

>>390571390571

Coincidence I think not.

But I am definitely looking forward to the next chapter.

and I can't believe AJ is one of the least popular. And to my count she only gets about 4 episodes in the whole series dedicated to her

These results please me. I always liked AJ but according to this i'm most like AJ.

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Good show! Jolly good show! (Cookie if you get that reference.)

NEEDZ MOAR!

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It's so quiet around here...

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I'm... actually somewhat curious now, but I guess the hiatus will last until you finish Blue Angel?

I also find it interesting how so many people will follow a story and then not look at the author's previous work.

well if you want feedback, your characters are perfect i think, even if the Flam brothers are a pain to write, the first four chapters where a great way to settle the character of V, and the world he is living in, i think this story has potential i was sad to see it on a hiatus status, if you could it would be great if you find the chance to continue it.

on a side note i think you captured the exact feeling some bronies, me included get when they got to know the characters for the first time, i was in love at AJ personality, it reminded me that i´m not the only one out there who values honesty, so yeah good story, as soon as university lets me i will read your other stories, i´m curious as to how a story about air fighters and ponies go along so i will definitely read your Blue Angel story

>>18794481879448  That's very likely

>>23296622329662  Thanks!

Heh, yeah, I kinda need to find some time to write out the rest of this thing, eh?

One word...

NO.

Just kidding... But don't even fuck with my Applejack bro.