Rarity wakes up with a splitting headache, a hatred for light and sound, fuzzy memories she's sure are better left forgotten, and Trixie Lulamoon clung onto her beneath the covers.
Join Rarity as she struggles to understand how and why the most boastful mare in the universe has dedicated every living breathing moment to please her. And feel free to laugh at Rarity's pitiful attempts to hate it.
Rated "Teen" for suggestive themes, implied alcoholism, innuendo, and crack-shipping syndrome... Don't judge me.
Enjoy!
Chapters (2)
This is gonna be a good one.
Always like seeing a good Trixie ship.
So. Let's see what ya do, boss.
~Skeeter The Lurker
*sees tags* Are you sure this isn't a Comedy?
... It really sounds like a Comedy.
Oh hey! New Craine fic.
And a pretty damn good one at that too. However, I feel like how you tended to brush past a lot of the details was a bit of a detriment, but this is just the first chapter, so maybe the next chapter will throw us into the thick of it a little more.
I am thoroughly confused, but intrigued.
I'm not sure how I feel about the lack of dialogue in the middle section, but I'm intrigued enough to stay.
This was a weird start, but it's got my attention at least.
You know, it's really easy to lead these characters on if you just learn how to adjust to their quirks. Trixie is the type of pony that I can see doing that.
I will be keeping watch. Just what did happen in Manehattan? I guess this is not the case of what happens in Manehattan, stays in Manehattan...
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Well this is different.
CLOP CLOP CLOP CLOP CLOP CLOP CLOP CLOP CLOP CLOP CLOP CLOP CLOP CLOP CLOP CLOP CLOP CLOP CLOP CLOP CLOP CLOP CLOP
CLOP
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Do it. You know you want to
That is all. Equestria is ours.
4014425 The time to see it is NOW!
4014478 Well, it ain't! And that's final!
4014821 Uh... Truth be told, it was originally gonna be a 9000 word oneshot. Whether I think I did, or think I DIDN'T make the right choice... I'm probably right, either way, no?
4015180 Confused?? *see's old habits smiling at me* Uh-oh...
4015631 Felt the same way as I read over the second draft. You should have seen the revision frenzy I was on when I read how boring and unengaging it was the first time. *shudders*
4015639 Wow., you... you can??? Lol! I'll be honest, I was laughing at myself the whole time I was revising this, thinking, 'NO ONE is gonna buy this!' Hmm... Now I'm intrigued.
4015864 It most CERTAINLY is!
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man...rarity is a A1 player in this when she gets drunk, from getting slapped To ready to bed in a couple sentences
A really beautiful story so far. Really a unique shipping story with great characterization.
I think I speak for everyone when I say that if you choose to write more of it, like, lots more of it, there won't be any complaints.
4017015 Okay, not as confused now, still some small things that're a bit unclear, but overall very nice. I think this is a beautiful story and I'd love to see more of it.
I like this story a lot, but I do feel as if... eh, the characters just seem a little schizophrenic, I suppose. I found it hard to follow their trains of thought at times, and it was a little bit confusing sometimes too. Maybe I'm just tired. Sorry for being unspecific.
In any case, really cute shipping story! I say go for the bonus chapter. Can't hurt, right?
This was good. Felt very natural. Two characters, budding attraction, trepidation and nervousness, trying to overcome past mistakes and move on.
The fact that it also avoided a huge bunch of cliches helped too.
Bravo.
4017057 Lol! I know, right?
4017095 Oooooh... Yeah, I didn't plan that far ahead. Like, at all.
4017129 Still not sure what I left out. Something specific that caught your eye? Also, bonus chapter may be the most of it, I'm afraid.
4017820 Kkk-kk-pffft
Schizophrenic?! That's a new one! And really, this one seems focused on introspection more than my other fics. Probably where all the jumble is coming from. I don't know. A bonus chapter for this is a strong possibility, but it may take time. Revisions, and all that.
Until then, it's complete. Felt good to right it though...
4017866 Happy you enjoyed it! I WOULD give you a whole spiel on the hours of revisions I did to kill those clichés in their sleep. Buuuut I get pretty detailed.
Craine...
Stop teasing us. Give us what we want!
4018227 You... I... Da... Gu...! F**K!
If you want clop, ask my Apprentice! I'm sure he'd be ALL for futanarizing my fic!
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The jerk.
4018131 Well, then I shall have to be satisfied with this bonus chapter. But can we, in the future, expect more delightful F/F crack shipping?
4018407 Depends. Do you like Discord?
4018668 Depends on how mean he is to everyone.
If this ends here, I'll be satisfied. All secrets were laid bare and the relationship is pretty much settled.
I mirror Prose's comments that Rarity's thought process went from one extreme to the other. However, given that this is Rarity, drama queen extraordinaire, I can accept that, if only a little.
Nice work with this!
wont you make an after marriage chapter? i think that would be the ultimate cherry on this sweet tale those two getting married...make it. please? you could even keep the same rarity acting like she is but this wont be done without a marriage ending
unusual ship, but it seems promising.
Go for the bonus!
Bonus? Sounds like a great idea!
Years?
Also, following you now.
4018838 Hehe. Well, if you know how I write Discrod, I think you should enjoy what I have to offer later on.
4019633 Whew! I'm relieved. To be honest, though, Rarity being the inherent drama=queen that she is, played very little in writing her thought process. But as it stands, I can be happy with it too. Especially in the bonus chapter that need revising. A LOT of revising.
Well, thanks for all your suppo...
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I just realized... You've followed me for months. You've written stories. And I've read none of them...
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Activating correction protocols. Please standby.
4020872 A.. A-A... A marriage scene????? Wow. that's, uh... very temping, actually.
4021342 S'What I was aimin' for!
4022268 Revisions being done at a steady rate!
4022458 Well stick around. I'm FULL of good ide--wait... *looks at fic written before this one*
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Bonus chapter it is!
4022500 Score! I shall continue to deserve this follow!
4022929 give in to your desire, you know fighting it is futile
4022929 HOORAY!
Really liked this story,it was definitely a different take on both characters than I normally see. Was kinda surprised when i looked at this again and saw it was complete. But re-reading the ending again I guess it was a fair time to end it. Hope to see more like this, or maybe even a sequel as this seems to end with them both being pretty confused about the whole relationship, but clearly wanting to be together.
Everyone wants it. You want it. Don't lie to yourself. Give in to your desires. Or something.
JUST WRITE MORE OF THIS.
I'm sorry, that was uncalled for. Really, lovely short little thing you got here... Short, but sweet. Small, but endearing. I hope you don't feel like I'm insinuating something.
(I totally am insinuating you should write more of this. But it's fine if you don't.)
How did I never consider how adorable these two could be together?
Dude. This story has so much potential. It's beautiful as is, but it seems a waste if you do end up finishing it here. Keep writing this stuff. Forever!
Please write more. This seems ripe for continuation. Telling friends, first (proper) date, meet the parents, proposal, marriage, kids, all the slice-of-life filler chapters in-between, the works!
Oops.
clicked on this under the popular box on my Ipad, thinking the title was Pony Phaser. (everything is tiny on the Ipad mini.)
Oh well. (didn't read this, just thought my misconception was hilarious.)
Darn, now I MUST write a story titled Pony Phaser.
4023257 YOU'LL HAVE TO KILL ME!!!! Still playing the revising game, though. Will take time.
4023546 YAROOH!!
4026617 Not sure if you saw the blog about this, but it was intended to be a simple oneshot. Then 8000 words kinda crept unto what I had. Really, I didn't intend to take this very far, and a 'bonus' chapter may be all I'll ever do with this. Still, glad you liked it, and even glader (yeah, yeah, I know) that I can still make characters different but believable.
Many thanks!
4029203 Hehe! No promises, o enthusiastic one.
4030110 Because I hadn't gotten around to writing it at the time!!!! I mean, um...
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*jumps out of window*
4031666 Forever? As in Four ever's?? As in forever forever???? As in the amount of time it took me to write and post this? You tryin' to kill me?!
4032019 God dammit. You guys are giving me SO many ideas, right now! Gotta sift through, and see if I can't squeeze bits of them in my bonus chapter revisions.
4032142
You do that...
4032276 hahaha resistance is FUTILE!!!! cant wait
Huh.
You created a nice little illusion and then shattered it.
Alright then.
I thought the merits of a winning pony were banging anyone, anytime, anywhere, anyhow.
4032142
Pew pew pew?
Somepony just missed her period.
How how indeed.
Name fail.
Nice fic. It's a little hard to follow the trains of thoughts sometimes, and I never thought of Rar as a hard-core alcoholic, but this was nice. Fav'ing, liking, etc. Overall, I give it an A-.
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Nothing at all personal. Just not into this type of story.
4034373
Yes! Pony Phaser!
I look back at my coment and now I feel that I worded that in the worst way possible and now look like an A-hole. Sorry.
4033244 It's a habit, I'm afraid
4034327 Recall the end of chapter two
4034373 Fixed... Fixed! With extreme prejudice, all of it, FIXED!!!!
4034966 Aw, no harm done. Just... try to keep story comments relative to the story (if you've read it), in the future, please.
4032276 If it means one more chapter, then yes. Finish it, then you may have my permission to die.
An interesting idea that is well executed. Looking forward to the bonus chapter, and maybe more.
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.
Somewhere in that saunaroom, Fluttershy is rocking back and forth in shock and with her forelegs wrapped tightly around her knees.
And then, they "talked."