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Jayellow


Can I go back to sleep yet?

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After a date with Cadance, the only thought going through Shining Armor's head is "Don't say something stupid!" So, of course, that's exactly what he does.


Inspired by the song Something Stupid by Frank Sinatra


Proofread by debio and The Princess Rarity

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Aww...this made me smile, a lot. Also, it's well detailed for a short story. Keep writing.

I liked that, it was cute. Well done.

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Thanks :twilightsmile: I was trying to make it fluffier than sheep, so I'm glad to know that I succeeded.


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Oh stop, you're gonna give me a big head. :twilightblush: (Not really, keep it coming! :rainbowwild:)


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Truly what? Were you responding to the last line, maybe? :trixieshiftright:

3892622 I'm just saying, that saying something stupid can lead to great things.

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I suppose that to someone who has never heard the song this story was inspired by, the title and summary could be a bit misleading. If you haven't listened to the song yet though, I highly recommend that you do. It's pretty awesome. Also, I'm glad that my attempts at fluffiness were successful. :rainbowkiss:

What was the stupid thing? Saying I love you? That's not stupid!

D'awww, this was a sweet story! I have to say, I liked it very much.
Thanks for writing this! :twilightsmile:

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Take a listen to the song, that's where the title and subsequently that line came from. I get where you're coming from though. It's not that saying "I love you" is stupid though, it's more like saying it comes with some heavy meaning, which could make things awkward and ruin an evening. Did that help? :unsuresweetie:


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You're very welcome. :twilightsmile:

The way you set the story up made it sound like they hadn't been dating very long. When Shining said I love you, it reminded me of the first episode of How I Met Your Mother, where Ted says I Love You on his first date with Robin.
I'm glad this turned out a little better.
I also kinda liked how it hinted at continuity with the comics.

:yay: See shiny it wasnt that bad after all

Nice little story

This was a little short for my tastes, but there was something to be enjoyed in all of this.

The set up was really well done. I like the fact that Shining Armor is kind of a dorky nerd in this. I like that he is uncertain of himself and doesn't have that vast amount of confidence that other writers (me included) put into him. I thought that was a very interesting and very unique take on him. I liked the fact that he knew he was going to say something stupid and create an awkward scenario, I felt that was very relatable. I know many gentlemen out there who faced the same problem, again me included. So that was relatable.

I liked the part describing the date to us. I thought that was very well done. I wish it could have been a little longer detailing more of the scene with the restaurant and how Armor held up and with him being paranoid to every little twitch Cadence makes and him misinterpreting it. I don't know maybe that's just my mind working. Regardless, I would have love to see more depth to that. Again with the theater, I would have loved to have seen more. Maybe not what the play was about, but more of what was going on in Shining's mind as the play went on.

The ending was cute. The "stupid" line was cute and it was a fun way to end the story.

I thought it could have had more depth to it, but overall a very enjoyable story. Thank you for letting me read it and I'll catch you later. Take care. :pinkiehappy:

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It was always kinda my head-canon that while Shining Armor may be a confident dude when it comes to things like his job, he is a total mess at times when he is around the ladies. I don't know, that was just the vibe I got off of him right from the first part of A Canterlot Wedding. I was happy when it was reinforced in the comics, although I didn't expect them to take him to nerd status. I suppose his nerdiness shouldn't be a surprise though, he is related to Twilight after all. :twilightsheepish:

As for the date scenes, I do understand what you mean. I certainly could have made them longer, but I chose not to in favor of focusing on the scene on the hill. I didn't want to take a long break from the tension on the hill to explain the date, even if it probably would have added a comedy tag to the story. My whole purpose in writing this story was the uber-fluff of Shining freaking out over telling Cadance for the first time that he loves her. It's funny though, every other story idea I have involving those two is, well... Absolutely nothing at all like this. And yet, if I ever use those other ideas, this story would totally be canon to that universe.

I'm getting sidetracked, so I'll just end it here. I'm really glad you enjoyed this little piece of fluff. I'm just happy spreading the warm n' fuzzies around. :ajsmug:

4000080 Wait, Shining Armor is a nerd in the comics? They write comics about this show? :pinkiegasp:

A little short... but still cute.

4001192 You didn't know about them? If you haven't already, read them, read them now, the Main series and Micro series. Now. Right this instant. Drop everything you are doing and read.

Despite being so short, it was a great cute read. It was fun getting inside Shining's head like that.

You defiantly get a upvote from me :pinkiehappy: and I'll have to keep an eye out for any more Shining/Cadence you write.

Review from PC&RG here :twilightsmile:

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