Please don't read my old stories, wow.
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Octavia has always felt alone. In fact, that's all she knows. Sure she's got her band, but she doesn't have anyone super close to her. She decides to look for a roommate, to alleviate some of her loneliness. But her loneliness is so deep, can one pony make a difference?
Written in memory for my baby sister who's birthday would have been on March 4th.
Huge thanks to my editor LonelyBrony42
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Bravo. Bravo, I say. Bravo.
reminded me of clannad.
Didn't get a chance to comment on this yesterday. It's nice to see all the work we've done (well, mostly you) come to fruition.
Octavia's plushie always makes me think of this song.
This was a marvelous story. I don't know what happened to your sister, but I cannot put words to my sorrow for you.
4135273 My sister actually died of SIDS as well when I was a child. Thank you for caring.
4137899 Wow. I am terribly sorry for your loss. I also have a sister, so I know how much love you must have felt for her. That's so terrible. Celestia bless you, and keep on writing.
4137899 I think we both have a lot in common.
I like Doctor Who, I like Jessie, I like Evanescence, obviously I like pizza ('cause of my name), and I'm only two and 1/2 years younger than you. And as you know now, I also have a sister who's in college right now.
4138071 Seems like we do.
The feels are too much.....
I can feel the tears coming...
Wow..... I almost cried, which is impressive, I don't cry at much. This story deserves WAY more attention. Good job, I'm gonna go cry into a pillow now.
~TheEmpressEclipse~
No offense but this story seemed pretty rushed to me, I feel like it could have benefited a lot from a slower pace and if it had a little more time to boil over.
Otherwise I liked it, I just thought I would mention that.
Why must I feel these.... feels! ;_;
Thank you for this heart-wrenching story, and thank you LonelyBrony42 for the editing; this was a stellar experience.
Couldn't find any glaring errors, but sometimes the chronology of the flashbacks got a bit confusing until more context was given in the narrative. If I had to pick just one aspect of excellence for this story, it would be Octavia's internal musings near the start of the story. You made me feel like I was in her place, and that's quite the feat!
Keep up the good work! You've earned a like and a new watcher!
Brilliant story, absolutely brilliant. ^-^ I loved it.
A few things, though - One, it seemed a wee bit short. There's a lot of potential in the moments that you chose to skip to further their relationship so that it doesn't seem rushed.
Also, there's one thing that I sat and glared at (as a writer) for a few moments.
Unless Derpy had no idea that it was champagne, she would've never, ever touched it.
Why?
Something like that would put a mare like her off any kind of alcohol for life, hands down, end of story. You don't go through trauma like that, that is alcohol-originated, without it coming up in your mind almost every time you see that.
So, I'd say, either it needs to be explained that Derpy didn't know (say Octavia was about to stop her but she'd already had some, and Octavia had opted to not say that she'd just had some in fear of making her freak out), or else you've got a wee bit of a plot problem
Seriously, though, amazing story!
~SoDF
Dang... that was good. Beautiful. Hit me right in the feels, it did.