It is a casual day in Ponyville, and what wouldn't be a casual day without Twilight messing things up with her magic? After a failure spell, she messes up each her friend's race, including her own. The six friends set on their way to Canterlot to search for answers, however, what they find out is not very pleasant, especially to Rainbow Dash, who is ready to go any lengths to regain her lost skies.
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Comic Sans Rainbow Dash?
RUN AWAY!
But seriously, all jokes aside, great story so far
Have a like, while I never track sad-fics for fear of falling into depression, I still like to give out a little token of good-writer's appreciation
This is very well written so far. Tracking
I found a wittle error though; 'Suddenly I u?nderstood' That's all!
342016
Daw what the hell. Instead of tracking, I'll favorite it
I dont know why no one has commented on this chapter yet. This is brialliant just one thing. You put Rainbow Dash instead of Twillight Sparkle when Twillight spoke of the potion
Definitely tracking
This is really good, but you re-he-heally need to start proof reading, or asking someone else too!
I haven't read it yet. Oh No, Not
! She's a unicorn? Nooooooooooooooooooooo!
Without Wings - Corrosion Of Conformity
Broken Man - Corrosion Of Conformity
nice story... still a few mistakes though.. u might want to look it over again
next!
Not bad, not bad at all.
Aw, thank y'all. And yes, I know I am not very good at grammar, or, for that case - punctuation. I talk in a foreign language, where commas are completely different from English, so every now and then there might be an off-comma. I'll look more carefully in the future though, so thanks for all the comments!
I'm not usually a fan of first person but I'm loving this story first per- pony or not
Tracking
The plot thikness
i used to love pinkie being pinkie.
now i hate pinkie!
pinkie is worst pony here!
If I were Dash I would slap the shiz out of Pinkie
But good story anyway ^_^
Well, I know I wrote as if Pinkie was 'evil', but really, that was never my intention. Pinkie sure got a little carried away - but admit it, hasn't that happened with you at least once in your lifetime? She wasn't aware of what she was doing. And, by future chapters you'll know why she is so attached to her new wings.
Pobrecitas ponies. Poor Pinkie! And while nopony can really blame Pinkie for being Pinkie, it is still one of the downsides to having a friend who is so blissfully ignorant of the outside world and tact. Still, Dash will probably understand/forgive her by the end of it, especially once she had her wings back and it would then be Pinkie's turn to be heartbroken.
Lookin forward to next time as usual!
pinkie pie being a bitch, interesting
Loving this story.
Bookmarked, and tracking.
wow....
erm... right... they actually done something right in my opinion... how so you ask? it's quite simple. They now discovered an instance of abuse and can put things right for her and possibly others.
WHAT THE FUCK IS THIS SHIT
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364404 This shit is my shit. Since I know that most kids who bully others are bullied or abused themselves, I decided to throw in this scene. I'm sorry if you didn't like it too much, I know that my writing ability has limits and that I can't write any good. Thanks for commenting anyway.
Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon are barely bullies, though. In the actual show at least, not in fanfiction, where they can get really nasty.
Well that was a bit random. I assume you know that you need to incorporate this into the rest of the story, yes?
The saying about this kind of thing is "If you introduce a gun in chapter one, it better go off by chapter three, and there better be a damn good reason for it."
In this case, the "Gun" is Filthy Rich and his daughter's relationship. I just hope you know what you're doing.
I wholeheartedly concur with 365005. While it does follow naturally that this is a possible scenario, you'd better be planning to incorporate it at the second if not the first opportunity. It's just jarring otherwise, and will detract from your eventual finished product.
I assure you -- everything is currently [kinda] planned out and under control.
Or, at least, I think so.
Basic reward/punishment conditioning, discourages negative behaviour. I see nothing wrong with this.
Hiatus? Damn. ...No matter, adding it to my favourites in case it starts moving again.
In my mind twilight did the right thing
DT got what was coming to her
Poor DT, no wonder she's a bully, her father treats her like crap!