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Taco Belle


Dat Taco Lovin' Brony

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Zecora was always considered strange by the 'Ponyfolk' of Equestria, her appearance off-putting to many, and her place of dwelling absolutely terrifies the majority of Ponyville's residents...

Yet, she was ultimately accepted, and became well known and liked by the populace who grew fond of her exotic appearance, humorous speech, and her alchemical skills...

But they would not tolerate her if they knew the truth...

The truth of why she is even in Equestria to begin with.

Proofreading by: Doctor N

General Story Assistance by: TP Night!

Cover Art by: The same Pony as above, TP Night!

Tags: Mild Gore due to a little blood being spilled here and there, Zombie Ponies, and Terrible Rhyming.

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 72 )

A Vampire Zecora, who would've a story about would get written. I sure am glad it did, for I do so enjoy a good Vampire Pony story. ;)

Good story though the only thing that bothers me is that zecora had a reflection though that could be the fact that vamponies are different to vampires

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3848215 *Blinks alot*:rainbowderp:

More of a Ghoul then a Vampire/Vampony actually, a bit of a Hodge-Podge of Undead I've seen in D&D really.:trixieshiftright:

The reason i went with this is because, more often then Not, a Vampire can Survive off of Donations, and this story is about Zecora outright Denying her curse, and one of the reasons for it is because her addiction, so to speak, is Flesh.:rainbowwild:

Plus i had a Nightmare(*) about a toothy zecora wanting to Eat applebloom(Me for some reason), so i made this.

(*: About as much as anything pony-related can be considered a Nightmare.:rainbowlaugh:)

Oh ok, still a totally awesome story though. Major awesome work I must say. :)

3849283 Glad you liked it, I am still thinking on a chapter 2, which will either be more about her interactions with Ponies, and how they see her..

Or specifically how :applecry: has been noticing Zecora hitting herself in the head alot lately, and grabbing :unsuresweetie: and :scootangel: to investigate, and end up sneaking into Zecora's room at night.:pinkiecrazy:

Pants wetting will ensue.:rainbowlaugh:

Since you yourself pointed out in the Authors Note at the end that this is NOT proofread yet, I won't complain about the spelling or grammar errors..

Instead I will point out that sometimes it seemed to be written in Present tense and sometimes in Past tense, in the same sentence..

But other than the spelling / grammar problems, It's good.

The rhymes are.. not perfect, but good enough at least :derpytongue2:

You stay true to Zecora's personality, even though you've added the undead part, you still manage to keep her seem like herself..

As for the story itself, I really like the idea of Zecora being "undead" but hiding it, and the struggle to keep herself from doing something unforgivable to somepony else.. This can be a really nice story if you keep it like this, and DO NOT add any comedy to it.

I repeat - DO. NOT. ADD. COMEDY.

Keep it dark and mysterious, make it about Zecoras struggle to remain sane, and MAYBE have somepony starting to notice (Applebloom most likely),
But still, DO NOT make it in any FUN way, KEEP IT dark.

Just because CMC might get involved does NOT mean it HAS to be fun, you CAN make dark CMC as well.:rainbowderp:

I feel that this should NOT be a fun, slapstick zombie comedy. I want it to remain like THIS. if anything, even darker.:pinkiecrazy:

3855819 Well I am kind of aiming for this fic to be 3-5 chapters long, without much Padding, 3 is looking most likely..

The next chapter, unless i get a epiphiny for something to happen, it'll be a week later, and start from AB's perspective, where she has convinced her friends to help her check on Zecora, who has been... acting erratic lately(Remember when Zecora gave herself a Rock Treatment? Yeah Ab spotted that on her way to help Zecora clean, but was too weirded out to ask about it then.) at night, and finding the door locked.. sneak in, and get attacked by a undead zebra,,,

Then we get the same scene from a drowsy Zecora's perspective, where she was just trying to get them to stop so she could explain, but they escaped, Scootaloo suffering a minor gash because the drowsy Zecora forgot how Sharp her hooves get...


Thoughts?:trollestia:

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Should work out fine, yes.. Just try to keep away from any unnecessary slapstick that most people add "just to have it" when CMC is involved.. This should remain dark, Scoot should be lightly traumatized by the events.. they should all become afraid of Zecora, and logically AppleBloom does NOT return there, but they DO go to Twilight, Applejack, and the rest, to tell them about it..

However, at that point the perspecdtive switches back to Zecora, now having to convince the townspeople that the kids are iether just messing around or had some sort of nightmare, and that she is NOT a monster (even thoug she really IS, but she can't admit that to anyone)

3855927 Yeah, Zecora would not Lie about it, By the time Twilight arrives to Investigate, i would think Zecora was in the middle of relocating her junk, either to a deeper, more isolated part of the Everfree, or away from Equestria entirely, a long-winded apology letter nailed to her now abandoned door.:fluttershysad:

Mayhaps we should shift to PM's, as i am very interested in your Imput here... toss me a PM and we'll chat more about my Plans to try and keep Zecora's... problem as "Plausible" within the shows actual canon.



And yes, Scootaloo will be traumatized, and be a bit of a lump in her bed covers for a few days, after pushing her dresser in front of her window.

Applebloom will have her... own issues, wanting to go back use to being in Denial about the monster BEING Zecora,and generally not wanting to accept the truth.

so tempted to have Aj say "toldja so".:facehoof:

I loved the emotions Zecora went through. You can literally feel her struggle.
Unfortunately, I only got this the second time reading this. the first time I was distracted by a 'Slice of Life' story being about a zombie.

3856849 ..Snrk.... Hahahahahahahaha:rainbowlaugh:

Wow, subconsciously, I'm a comedic genius.:derpytongue2:


Well i hope you enjoy seeing the struggle from the other side, through the eyes of terrified fillies, who incidentally let they're fear warp they're perception of the events that transpired.:pinkiegasp:

Then the whole Scenario was a shamed, half-asleep and panicked Zebra's perspective.:trollestia:

3855927 Two updates in like.. 3 days?

I think this may be a passive-aggressive way of venting Angst at some of my fave stories not updating for months at a time.:facehoof:

Was going to read this, but then I noticed a typo in both chapter titles. That doesn't inspire confidence.

3857510 Yeah i posted them without proofreading first... i have a hard time spotting my own Mess-ups.:facehoof:

Thanks for pointing them out, I'll fix them Asap.

If you change your mind, feel free to point out any specific errors, and try to let the story shine past its flaws.

I'm terribly sorry. But I must become a grammar nazi.
Whenever you have the letter 'I'(<not an L) by itself you need to capitalize it.
So instead of "i like pie." The correct way to write it would be "I like pie."

3857587 Oh, thank you, tho like i said before, i didn't get this stuff proofread any...:facehoof:

So besides that, and my of habit of random Capitalization...

Didja like the story any?:pinkiesmile:

3857518 Well after a polite and prompt response like that I felt compelled to read it.

The verdict:

The Good: Very interesting premise, not many writers accept the Zecora challenge, I'm very interested in where this story is going.

The Bad: Abundant technical issues and typos. Really needs a good once over from a good editor, but not worse than many first drafts. Other than that fairly well written.

I'm withholding a like until it gets cleaned up a bit, but I am adding to favorites.

3858310 I hopefully got someone Proofreading now, lets hope he cleans up my Errors.:raritywink:

RC

Taco. You rule at all languistic schools. Though not manny beleave rhyming is worth it, i do so just because i will get a bit. Though ghoul zecorra is a smart placement, even if the main 6 are never gonna stop having a replacement. I say this my belle frend, let this story not find a swift end.

3868046 I had assumed there was less Stories focusing on Zecora, cuz her speech can be annoying...

And i had to scrap 1400 words today because i realized the next chapter focused almost entirely on Twilight, and not the titular character,,,:facehoof:

RC

3868609 that dosent bother me. I beleave from what you said it from appleblomes pov then twilights after she lerns what happens. It may be a chaleng but it is fun.

3873328 The next Chapter will primarily be from Fluttershy's perspective, trying to deal with three panicked fillies, and Doctoring Scootaloo's flank.

But we'll also see Zecora decide on what to do next, and stuff.:rainbowwild:

RC

3873344 oh good sir, should you need help with zecoras rhyms im am the one who you can call to voice her. For with rhymes i can speack with out a dime. A poet i may not be yet rhymes are made for me.

RC

Simply put.:facehoof: :facehoof: :facehoof: :facehoof: :facehoof: :facehoof: :facehoof: :facehoof: :facehoof: :facehoof: :facehoof: :facehoof: :facehoof: :facehoof: :facehoof: :facehoof: :facehoof: :facehoof: :facehoof: :facehoof:
Sorry but the only good bit this chapter is the flutterbat is back part.

3913043 Kind of a In-between Chapter, Not much happening, some Set up of Motivations, and while it may seem random, Flutterbat's important here.:pinkiecrazy:

RC

3913065 she was alwas flutterbat. The incdent with the vampfrut bats only awoke her true self. She alwase know zecora a ghoule. And she was alwas cool. The pire and ghoule work like alli, not tool.
And should any pire need help, the ghoule shal allwas be around.

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Brilliant concept and chilling execution!

And that cover! :pinkiegasp:

Only thing I can think of to complain about is that this fic could use an editor that's good at spotting typos, because spelling is something of the bane of my existence and I still noticed quite a few.

4372475 Yeah, Cover's by TP Night, IMO, it may be the best part of my fic.:twilightblush:

You may of noticed, but i am procrastinating the BUCK out of the last(or two) Chapter(s).:facehoof:

I am worried I'll roll a 1 on my Craft(Fanfic) check and botch it.:raritydespair:

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Yeah, been there myself.

I've known exactly how I wan't it to end since I started the darn thing, but actually getting there has proven... irritating.

Still, even a failure means you still tried, and all that. Good luck.

4373420 it's mostly the Emotions in the first Scene, a Piss'd Dash, and her subsequent Emotion and Misunderstanding fueled Boss-Fight against Zecora...

And how that gets resolved without seeming corny.:trixieshiftright:

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No offence, but given the impression I've gotten of the Zecora in this fic a fight between those two would be... short. :rainbowderp:

Well, unless RD gets in a lucky shot, but I didn't get that feel.

You sure you want to even have a fight? If your muse says otherwise that's of course fine, but I'd personally guessed the gang catching up to Zecora and expecting a fight, but instead she all but lays down and just gives in since she can't take the situation anymore. Heck, if it wasn't for the presence of Flutterbat implying post or during season four I'd expected Zecora to beg them to give her a rainbow blast by now.

And there's nothing wrong with a bit of hammy-ness if the story calls for it!

Just my proverbial two cents.

4373586 Well, Rainbow's very protective of her Lil' Sis(who got accidentally mauled), and Flies off in a Rage, and being Rainbow Dash, no one can really catch up with her...

And yeah, she gets a Lucky shot... rainbooming right into a Unsuspecting Zecora...:rainbowdetermined2:

But the sudden damage kind of.. pushes Zecora's Emergency Feral Button, and the fights VERY one sided from there, until the calvery arrives to diffuse the situation(and save Dashie)...

It serves to show a few things, mainly, what would happen if Zecora lost control.:pinkiecrazy:

Also, the resolution is specifically why Flutterbat was brought up, as she, being a Monster with a Unyielding Hunger herself(Cept for apples... it still counts!), can mediate between Zecora's plight and the others.

4373651 If i ever get over this procrastination, i can talk ABOUT the next chapter for days, but actually WRITING it is another story...:facehoof:

have to say i like necrora or necrozecora hmm we need a good name for this

5147134 Zomcora. Occasionally Zombecora, but that makes me think of Yugioh....:trixieshiftright:

I need to finish this don't i?:trixieshiftleft:

My Cutie-Mark is in Procrastination.:facehoof:

5158655 Guess what, you inspired me to stop stressing over making the Chapter longer, and trying to find a better segway, and just post what i got and start a new chapter fresh!:pinkiecrazy:

So, heres the "More" you so nicely asked for!:rainbowwild:

Edit: That was NOT Sarcasm, i know it sort of sounded like it on hindsight...:facehoof:

Oh boy.

First Zomcora, now we have Scootaghoul, and now maybe Putrid Pie?

Could this be the start of a zombie outbreak?

5161433 ...that is definitely the conclusion i want you to make, yes.:pinkiecrazy:

But thats not whats happening, the truth is so much more insane!

RC

Well tacobelle i just have this to say, WHAT EVER UNHOLY HAY!?!?
first you leave it hanging, now you leave it with our hearts banging!
i hope you see that this darkness come from within, for from her death it only begins.
i ask this with a plee, dont let this go for ages do you agree?
as a fan whom has yet to be disapont, pleas keep updating fot this to become joint.

5161605 Hehehehe, that gave me the warm fuzzy feelings.:rainbowkiss:

I'll try and get the next one out... barring a for-fun Epilogue, it should be the last one, and segway into the NEXT fic...

Hint: The main character is Scootaloo.:scootangel:

:pinkiecrazy:Prepare your throats!:pinkiecrazy:

happy halloween :P

RC

5162276 i thank you my frend, pleas make this not com3 to a swift end. I hope it comes out soon, but i ask it comes with some fair room. My dear frend your story are worth of their ends, i scincerly hope this one becomes wothy of your list and that nothig is amiss.

aw cmon dammit zecora dont start the zombie apocalypse already we have atleast 2 years until its supposed to break out

Don't have much to say on this chapter itself, but nice to see this story isn't dead. :twilightsmile:

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