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Cromegas_Flare

"To become who you are meant to be. You must first accept your flaws, then make them into your strengths; only then, can you fully be who you are meant to be"

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Hack Writings
Hack Writings #1 · Jan 22nd, 2014 · · ·
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This feels like it has a lot missing. The aliens came out of nowhere. Have you heard of foreshadowing? Also, where were the apostrophes?

Cromegas_Flare
Cromegas_Flare #2 · Jan 22nd, 2014 · · ·
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They are supposed to, if aliens came to earth..... not everyone would notice right away. So when it comes to your first issue, I think I nailed the concern to what I wanted. I for shadowed enough, in the first sentence. I shy away from heavy foreshadowing, for I see it as a flaw in the story. {Slice of Life} tag, cough, cough

The story was never about the aliens.... not once not ever. I don't make things obvious, that would make things to easy. And I don't like a society that expects things to be easy.

As for the Apostrophes....
Who needs stinking apostrophes?:flutterrage:
No seriously though, I'll go through it and fix that.

Thanks.

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