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    • Moving with the Wind
      Follow Atomic Vortex as he tackles a new life head on!

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    • New Winds on the Horizon
      As Applejack gives birth, we follow Atom's adventures while life get even crazier!
      10,890 words · 469 views · 33 likes · 19 dislikes
    • Another Rainbow in the Sky
      Rainbow Dash-The only pony to ever do the Sonic Rainboom...Until this horrifying morning.
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    *CURRENTLY UNDERGOING REWRITE!*

    (If your coming here from my sequel, trust me my writing improves every chapter.)

    Atomic Vortex. A kind, intelligent pony with a violent temper is trying to escape his traumatic past. Wounded, tired and dehydrated he stumbles out of the Everfree Forest with no idea where he is, or what he can expect in this new environment...

    DISCLAIMER: I did not come up with the idea of separate consciences. The author KillJoy did, and I give him 100% credit for it.

    Coverart credit to Kryptchildarts! Click the picture and you'll get zapped to his awesome Tumblr page! (Tumblr link is NSFW - you have been warned.)

    First Published
    18th Mar 2012
    Last Modified
    3rd Jul 2012

    Comments ( 551 )

    #1 · Chapter 1 · 61w, 5d ago · · ·
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    TWIN TORNADOS

    SERIOUS FUCKING BUSINESS

    *liked* :yay:

    #2 · Chapter 1 · 61w, 5d ago · · ·
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    You need to add me into this bro.

    Oh and LOVE the picture for story.

    #3 · Chapter 1 · 61w, 5d ago · · ·
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    So this guys a skitzo right?

    #4 · Chapter 1 · 61w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Hmmm... what kind of shipping...

    #5 · Chapter 1 · 61w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Time 4 a super comment.

    >>338780: Thats pretty awesome....*thinks about it* Yup thats AWESOME!!!!

    >>338891:Hmmmm....well I presume he is.

    >>339032: I'm going WITH.....Twilight,appleJack or Rainbow Dash.

    #6 · Chapter 1 · 61w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>338780 That actually just came from a google image search of "tornado", simple as that

    >>338891 You'll have to wait and see, but trust me Atom is fucking deadly when he's mad!

    >>338844 I'm thinking of adding you in....but then again you've been in my other 2 fics, so I might give someone else a chance! EDIT: You know what actually fuck it I am going to put you in! But expect me to use you as the first f*g*t scene - yeah that's kinda obvious what it is but I'm really anxious to write one!

    #7 · Chapter 2 · 61w, 4d ago · · ·
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    interesting, tracked.

    #8 · Chapter 2 · 61w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>341258

    Thanks man it's all appreciated!:pinkiehappy:

    #9 · Chapter 2 · 61w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>341272

    You seem to have gotten Atom's and my personality perfectly...are you stalking me?:applejackunsure:

    #10 · Chapter 2 · 61w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>341264No problem, you deserve it. The premise seems interesting in and of itself, the personalities serve to give different views on every situation, and the character seems both familiar to seem comfortable yet unknown so that we eagerly await to see what he does next.>>341264

    #11 · Chapter 2 · 61w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>341061: Mother Fucking Epic, but PM me.....we need to talk.

    #12 · Chapter 3 · 61w, 3d ago · · ·
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    You serious?

    I'M your LITTLE BROTHER?!?!?!

    Didn't see THAT coming.:rainbowderp:

    #13 · Chapter 3 · 61w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>345092

    Dun dun duuuuuuuuuun! :rainbowlaugh:

    That's not the big thing though. You stabbed me in the FUCKING STOMACH!

    #14 · Chapter 3 · 61w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>345521: OH......*breaths through teeth* sorry....You like AJ?ME TOO!!!!:raritywink:

    #15 · Chapter 3 · 61w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>345779

    How'd you get that?[That was sarcastic by the way]

    Dude you answered a question in a chapter I'm in the middle of writing! :rainbowhuh:

    #16 · Chapter 3 · 61w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>345788: Cause I'm awesome that way.

    #18 · Chapter 5 · 61w, 3d ago · · ·
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    3 chapters in 1 day?...mad respects earned... oh and a thumbs up :pinkiehappy:

    #19 · Chapter 5 · 61w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>346676

    Thanks man, I did it for you guys and the fact that I couldn't resist writing.

    #20 · Chapter 5 · 61w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I SO beat Rainbow in that contest!

    AND........I NEVER FAINT!!!!!!

    I FAINT AS MUCH AS TWIIGHT IS GREAT AT DANCING...........NEVER!!!!

    EXAMPLE!!!!

    SEE?!?!?!?

    Love the chapter though, I WOULD jump at the crowd of ponies and laugh....ALOT!

    BUT....I'm still better than Dash.....and I can prove it.:rainbowdetermined2:

    #21 · Chapter 5 · 61w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>346855

    You will...hint, hint!

    :ajsmug:<--Don't be starin' at my girl!

    #24 · Chapter 5 · 61w, 3d ago · · ·
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    #27 · Chapter 5 · 61w, 3d ago · · ·
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    #28 · Chapter 5 · 61w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>346934: OH YEAH?!?!?

    LIKE A BAWS!!!!!!!!

    YOU JUST GOT TROLLED!!!!!!!!

    #29 · Chapter 6 · 61w, 2d ago · · ·
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    SO.....Me and rainbow raciing?

    THIS can only end well...............:heart:

    #30 · Chapter 7 · 61w, 5h ago · · ·
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    BITCH I DO WHAT I WANT!

    THAT SOUNDED SOO WRONG!!! My friend on Skype is being really thick!]

    Dude....WTF?!?!?

    AJ kissed you? AH YEAH!!!!!

    Me and Rainbow Dash in the bed?

    Whats happening in there is NOT WHAT YOU THINK YOU PERVERTS!!!!

    THIS...is whats happening:

    Hey Dark.

    Yeah?

    I CHALLENGE YOU TO JUMPING CONTEST!!!!!!

    CHALLENGE ACCEPTED!!!!!!

    *Both start jumping on bed*

    #31 · Chapter 7 · 61w, 5h ago · · ·
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    >>357763

    Like I mentioned this is one of those moments when I say "Dear Celestia I hate you sometimes..."

    :ajbemused:

    #32 · Chapter 7 · 61w, 4h ago · · ·
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    >>357778: Why?

    Is it because of the "Jumping Scene"?

    Or your friend on Skype scene?

    #33 · Chapter 8 · 60w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>360962

    Since when has Dark worn clothes though?:trollestia:

    #34 · Chapter 8 · 60w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>361261:....Hmmm, Touche .

    #35 · Chapter 8 · 60w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Something stops them, but they make it an hour late

    #36 · Chapter 9 · 60w, 5d ago · · ·
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    HAH.....Your Crying like a Pussy.....HAH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    Anger Managment Much?

    Need to go Nocturnal ABYSS on someponies ass....OH and Atom, I MIGHT be able to get you another OC, I need to ask first.

    #37 · Chapter 9 · 60w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>364706

    You killed the mood you bastard!:twilightangry2:

    ~Yeah, c'mon man that was meant to be a touching moment!~

    #38 · Chapter 9 · 60w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>364793: <=We don't give a crap......=>

    #39 · Chapter 10 · 60w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Hmmm....Indeed.

    #40 · Chapter 11 · 60w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Without spoiling anything, would it be possible for you to expand upon what some of the future roles that will need OCs are?

    #41 · Chapter 11 · 60w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>369684

    I'm thinking of using them to basically be,  you know usual friendly sort of guys and maybe to back me and Dark up during fight scenes!

    #42 · Chapter 13 · 59w, 6d ago · · ·
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    I used to fight.....then I took an arrow to the the knee:trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia:

    BUT, I must say, you were right Atom, this was very nice and hearting.:pinkiesad2:

    #43 · Chapter 13 · 59w, 6d ago · · ·
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    *Insert that one pic featuring a standing ovation and that one guy slow clapping while in tears.*

    #44 · Chapter 14 · 59w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Heheh, wow nice job there helping me get my snark on.:raritywink: Excellent job nailing the fight scene as well.

    #45 · Chapter 14 · 59w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Also not sure I understand a line there at the beginning, we were talking about cider and then you said something about me being forgetful... I don't get it, where did forgetfulness come from?

    #46 · Chapter 14 · 59w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>394344

    No you called ME forgetful...you asshole...

    #47 · Chapter 14 · 59w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>394348 Oh I see it now, hey if I'm slightly trolling you it just means I'm comfortable around you.

    #48 · Chapter 14 · 59w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>394351

    Well you are living in MY house....so...:ajsmug:<---Don't be perving up my mare-friend!

    #49 · Chapter 14 · 59w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>394360 No worries man, I'm a one mare stallion, I just worry about when I'll inevitably forget to resist slipping into AJ's accent...

    #50 · Chapter 14 · 59w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>394371

    When that day comes expect to find a Cyclone Trap out side of your bedroom door....:rainbowwild:

    #51 · Chapter 14 · 59w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>394386 I'm not trying to offend her! It just happens unless I'm watching myself.

    Also mind reading might make it hard to trap me... unless I'm asleep or otherwise distracted...

    #52 · Chapter 14 · 59w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>394397: What if he does it...BY ACCIDENT?!?!?:trollestia:

    Oh and you can't troll him, only I can troll him.

    #53 · Chapter 14 · 59w, 5d ago · · ·
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    HELL YEAH!

    Dash and AJ beating up Gilda...HELL YEAH!

    #54 · Chapter 14 · 59w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Lol "Stop breaking the fourth wall"

    #55 · Chapter 15 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    I vote comedy chapters.

    Hmm war huh? Maybe I could be a field medic...

    #56 · Chapter 15 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>406795

    We'll see...

    #57 · Chapter 15 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>406816 You should have been there when I was reading, I was like "resist the urge to go to war, come on resist" He goes "I'm coming with you" I'm like "dammit" Oh well.

    Also, slashed across the nose like a baws.

    #58 · Chapter 15 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>406821

    Hmm...actually field medic can put you in a good spot when we get to the ALL-OUT WAR CHAPTER!!!!

    #59 · Chapter 15 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>406823...I'm scared.

    #60 · Chapter 15 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Hmm here are some possible comedy plot devices I thought of:

    1. Pinkie/Dash/Dark pranking

    2. The mystery that is Ditzy Doo

    3. A day with the CMC

    4. Summer day shenanigans, you know, water activities, possible beach trip (walking carriage as Atom is hurt), stuff you do on a hot day when your bored

    5. Guys day out

    And now here are some less comedic but not quite serious plot devices:

    1. triple date

    2. the whole town sending them off

    3. a day with marefriends

    That's all I got for now, oh let me know if you want me to send you the new section of Rhino's bio: Backstory

    #61 · Chapter 15 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>406904: I like ALL of those Ideas.:ajsmug:

    #62 · Chapter 15 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>406970

    I'm already writing one of them!:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

    #63 · Chapter 15 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>406970 Thanks Dark!

    #64 · Chapter 15 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    COMEDY CHAPS!!!!!!

    I need to prank the SHIT out of evrypony.

    And I noticed how she didn't say anything to me joining....cause unlike the other 2 people she just wants me to be cool...and I'm awesome so it makes it better.:rainbowkiss:

    #65 · Chapter 15 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>406975

    Yes indeed OLD BEAN!:moustache:

    #66 · Chapter 15 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>406972: Yeah....only problem is I won't be able to prank you with your Mind Powers.....bastard.:rainbowwild:

    >>406971: Alright then.

    #68 · Chapter 15 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>406982 Wait, clarify something for me, does the mind thing work on both Dark and Atom or just Atom?

    #69 · Chapter 15 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>406992Both of course and I'm actually just about to write a bit of speech from Abyss now!:pinkiehappy:

    #70 · Chapter 15 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>406999: *Le GASP*:pinkiegasp:

    >>406992: Like Atom said....both, its just that you and I have never really spoken before.

    #71 · Chapter 15 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>406999 Neat.

    Hmm I wonder if I should grow out my beard in the war...

    #72 · Chapter 15 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>407004 Oh yay, I now have the possibility of having to listen to 6 different voices having different conversations... where the hay is the cut-off for this spell

    #73 · Chapter 15 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>407009: YOU CAN NEVER TURN IT OFF!!!!!!!

    Thats actually a good thing becase when the Marepocalypse happens, you'll be able to trace where the mares are so you can evade them.

    #74 · Chapter 15 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>407011 I thought it didn't work on anypony except you two... well at least relaying info between us will be easy.

    And I already have a plan for the marepocalypse, just ironing out the details

    #75 · Chapter 15 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>407011

    You give me bad ideas for the next few chapters...:ajsmug:

    MUAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!

    #76 · Chapter 15 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>407013: Me too, in all marepocalypse chapters, people have not tried ONE thing thats so simple....and its going to be my plan.:ajsmug:

    >>407014: Well whatever it is you should put a Marepocalypse in the story.

    When you need helpPM me, I have experience with them.

    #77 · Chapter 16 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Bitch I'm making your life a HELL in my fic now.

    And you think were stuck?

    THink again.

    1.HAve Rainbow unrestrain me.

    2.Burn the wood.

    3.Wood Burns to dust

    4.Break Damaged Wood

    5.Get Out

    6.Make Out in Hay

    7.Pranking Spree

    #78 · Chapter 16 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>407139

    How are you going to burn the wood? All you have down there is four apples!:ajsmug:

    #79 · Chapter 16 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>407145: Lightning Powers Dumbass.

    XD

    #80 · Chapter 16 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>407146

    Hmm...that would work...IF WOOD CONDUCTED ELECTRICITY!!!!!

    EPIC FAIL BEEATCH!

    #81 · Chapter 16 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>407148: Wood SO condures electricity!

    Why do you think in forests there are Forests fires during storms!

    EPIC FAIILLLLL BBEEYAATTCH!!!!!

    #82 · Chapter 16 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>407152

    Wood DOESN'T conduct electricity...I don't know why lightning strikes cause wild-fires though.

    Someone else help me here because WOOD DOES NOT CONDUCT ELECTRICITY!!!

    #83 · Chapter 16 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>407159: IT DOES!!!!!!!

    Your acting as if also wind can't put out fire.

    #84 · Chapter 16 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>407162

    Ok then!

    If you used wood instead of a wire what would happen?!

    NOTHING!

    #85 · Chapter 16 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>407159 you are right as wood does not conduct electricity, the reason that when a lightning bolt hits wood and it lights on fire, is that when the lightning strikes the wood the lightning has a temperature of around one million degrees fahrenheit.

    #86 · Chapter 16 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>407167: WRONG!

    If I used a wire, then I just have to melt it.:ajsmug:

    Myth: Wood doesn’t conduct electricity so it’s safe to cut tree branches that are touching power lines. Wooden ladders and tool handles also deter the flow of electricity.

    Facts: Wood can conduct electricity. It’s a good insulator only when every trace of moisture and chemical deposits is removed.

    WHAT NOW?!?!?!?

    #87 · Chapter 16 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>407175: So it does conjure electricity.

    #88 · Chapter 16 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>407181

    Conjure?! Conjure is to create I think. We're saying CONDUCT.

    #90 · Chapter 16 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>407211

    I'll bitch-slap you AND Trixie!

    #91 · Chapter 16 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    #92 · Chapter 16 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>407225

    I'm a pegasus too dipshit...:ajbemused:

    #93 · Chapter 16 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>407230: Yeah I know, but I'm faster.:ajsmug:

    XD

    Now calm down and have a Cartoon about AJ

    #94 · Chapter 16 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    I get the feeling I am somehow going to end up in the middle of this... if you excuse me I have to go lock the doors before you two get back.

    #95 · Chapter 16 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>407269

    Before I get back!

    #96 · Chapter 16 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>407276 ...plan B, I'm going to take a walk, maybe grab some cupcakes, I've hidden the key near the door... try to keep the debris to a minimum in the house.

    #97 · Chapter 16 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>407269: AND IM BACK!

    >>407276: your late.

    >>407286: Cupcakes? You don't know where those been.

    #98 · Chapter 16 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>407581

    Or WHO they've been!:pinkiegasp:

    #99 · Chapter 16 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>407585: Where's Fluttershy?:rainbowderp:

    #100 · Chapter 16 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>407586>>407286

    Oh fuck...Um should I be putting a reply to Rhino as well?

    ...Too late....:facehoof:

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