I hope to entertain with warm fuzzies, heart stirring perspectives, and lots of comedy. Sometimes there's subtext in the subtext and sometimes its a cigar.
This is a test fic. I wrote it to see if i could capture obvious emotions. Spike and Rarity are in Rarity's shop after working on a project. What is on the surface, is not always what is real. What is real, sometimes, are things we do, in hopes that others see the sincerity. This is a oneshot Sparity.
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There were a few times you forgot to make separate characters talking a new paragraph, and it should be he not his in the first paragraph. Also, you repeated late when talking about him going home.
Short but sweet,
Despite it's shortness I feel this really captured both characters feelings very well.
3810028 Fixed! Thanks for looking at this Cloud! ^_^
3810218 Thank you!
This was meant to be short, I actually had to add more text to it for it to be accepted. I wanted it to be as minimal as possible, with the maximum amount of story. It's an experiment
. With the comments and PMs that I've received, I can say the experiment concluded with favorable results! 
Thank you everybrony that looks at this. 
A nice 1st work, That old Nag needs a good hug,
Keep em rolling.