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Awkward Elipsis


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**Renamed from A Not so Ordinary Traveling Editor**

"Sometimes even the greatest need a little push here and there."
-StarSwirl The Bearded

In ancient Equestiran history, there once lived a creature that hasn't been seen for generations. Tales speak of a bi-pedaled, black-cloaked being that has the ability to shape-shift and travel through the darkness. However, because much of the information that had been gathered was highly controversial, historians deemed that creature a myth, a made up creature that haunted the dreams of foals.

And now, after hundreds of years, this creature returns.

Editor(s): S0ngb1rd

Tags may be added as story progresses.

... Since when did this get featured? >_> September 29, 2017
*Due for Rework*

Chapters (11)
Comments ( 34 )
Comment posted by Awkward Elipsis deleted Jan 18th, 2014

Dear lord, it's only a little over a thousand words but enjoy!:applejackunsure:

It's pretty good! Please write more soon! :twilightsmile:
Yay! Trollestia features in this story! :trollestia:

3804336 Yes very, actually i should change that Molestia to Trollestia...

3805097 Thank you:twilightsmile:, and yes I'm working on the next chapter. I'm working on getting more words into each chapter, they just feel too short to me.

3807431 Thanks, also fun fact, the four constellations' names are real constellations. Except Equuleus, that one is just a normal horse constellation.

This is actually really good to read, can't wait for more!

3807431 I edit the chapters, though at the rate you read them, I might not have at the time (I am a huge procrastinator :twilightsheepish:). Surprisingly enough, the chapters that say '[Edited]' on them are, in fact, edited :trollestia:. However, you never know, I might have overlooked something :derpytongue2:. So if there is any word or phrase that sounds (to the reader's ear) wrong, don't hesitate to tell me, and I will fix it up as quickly as I can. :twilightsmile:

3817670 I have only just finished editing this chapter and have sent it to Noctis, so the edited chapter wild be up soon. Sorry for the inconvenience! :twilightsmile:

Comment posted by Awkward Elipsis deleted Feb 22nd, 2014

If you are going to use any songs in the story just link them.

I'm happy to see i made an impact on someone!

Unless your inspiration came from you saying to yourself : "Man, TheKingofHearts sucks at writing, I can do better than this turd face!"

Hell, even if that WAS the case, I'm still pretty happy about it.

I haven't gotten a chance to look at it, but i'll upvote.

3922634 No, I really liked your story. It was like the spark that ignited all of my ideas that were gathered in my head.:twilightsheepish:

Why does Celestia want Noctus at the Gala? Will the songs be directly linked? How many questions will I ask? Find out next time on Batman/Dragon Ball Z/This Story!

It talks of a bi-pedalled, black-cloaked being that has the ability to shape-shift and travel through the darkness. It appears in many historical events but never is seen for long.

I was instantly like,"The doctor.the end":rainbowlaugh::rainbowwild:

bi-pedalled, black-cloaked being that has the ability to shape-shift...

Bi-pedaled=human figure, Black-clocked=his suits,Ability to shape-shift=regenerating.

Travels through the darkness and It appears in many historical events but never is seen for long.

Travels through the darkness=TARDIS in the time vortex,It appears in many historical events...=totally like him!:trollestia:

3982397 Now that you mention it, that could be taken that way as well...:twilightsheepish:

3984489 No sorry. The only mention is of the Doctor so far is one chapter. Although I didn't think someone would think that the black cloak was the Doctor. I thought the cloak would make someone think that it wasn't the Doctor.

3982397 At first I thought it was Tobi from Naruto, but sadly it wasn't :ajsleepy: (Though I still read Noctus in Tobi's voice)

Eh, this is a bit disappointing. You start with an interesting idea that I want to follow. You have a character who has unknown powers, other than transformation, and that is mysterious with connections to possibly great tragedies. You then show him manipulating events with a grudge against Celestia. After all this, I then get the episodes of the show with such minor differences as to be nearly non-existent to the point of wondering why I'd read this over just watching the show. Are you planning on diverging at some point because after this one, I'm not sure this is the type of story that interests me.

Rainbow Jenkins.
I see what you did there.:twistnerd:

update are thou must sever connections to this alternate universe of a story or you will drink prune juice :pinkiecrazy:

"Ehh, she DID go for the mustache."
"HA told you so!" yelled Noctus from downstairs.

"NOTH listening anymore!" Noctus yelled from the bottom of the stairs.

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All noctus does is remind me of spectre knight from shovel-knight

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