Applejack is a supernatural detective slash hunter in the bustling city of Manehattan. She and her partner, Twilight Sparkle, are responsible for taking care of the gruesome murders, shake downs, and other crimes committed by the supernatural that the regular cops cant detect. Now, assigned with protecting an heiress from her vampire ex-girlfriend, she must put her hopes of finding her lost friend aside and defend this woman's life- all while trying not to fall for her.
Originally By NewYorkBrony. Check Him Out.
Chapters (1)
so far so good you have earned a fave. and a thumbs up.
Looks great, plus the picture looks amazing. Props for finding that. But just one thing that I'm worried about. PLEASE, O' PLEASE! Don't not the only supernatural species vampires. Try to extend the range of it if you are only doing vampires.
Seems promising.
Ah kinda feel like ah should plug this later.
3790105 don't worry im gonna do every supernatural being in the book. It'd be boring as heck if I just did vampires!
3790794 i.imgur.com/tG3Xt.gif
Um...is Rarity supposed to have ebony skin (black) or was that a mistake?
That should have a comma not a full-stop. You don't end dialogue like that if you use some variant of "she/he said".
You did it again.
Nothing grammatical, but you could use a pause before Twilight becomes apologetic.
I feel like you did it again, but it still looks like it works without. I think you're good either way.
heey! any updates on this one in the pipeline?
Please let there be more ... someday
7527229 Ive been trying, but what i have isnt too good.
7527884 PM me