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...... I see potential. Tracking.......... you know what would be funny? If Celestia forgot to tell Twilight why she was sending Faith there. Then Twilight would be all "YAY! EXPERIMENTS!" ......... good times. Potentially.
Cool, another Human story!![]()
And a girl named Faith? Where did I heard this name before? It sounds familiar and I can't quite put my hoof(finger) on it.![]()
Ahhh! Now I remember! I used to play that game a long time ago and it was cool. And you are using her as a main character for her to be in Equestria?! Brilliant!![]()
I think Rainbow Dash will soon have connections with Faith, just because both of them are athletic.
Can't wait for another chapter, keep it up. ;)
> Idly muse about FiM Crossovers and mention ME
> See this a week later
I suppose I shall have to read this now.
Oh, how a love a fast paced story. Faith seems like a great character w/ a lot of energy behind her. Keep up the great work.
Another awesome chapter!![]()
Three things I found it interesting...
1. Princess Celestia told Faith to drop the language (Thank Luna! No more swearing.)![]()
2. Escaping from Prince Blueblood and when she did, she did a 'troll' face. LOL![]()
3. The way you wrote about how she runs obstacles in a very detailed way.
Nice writing, and I will see you next time.![]()
You should lengthen the descriptions and such, as I feel the story is sometimes hard to follow, but all in all, It's a solid story. Keep up the good work
Looks good so far, can't see any grammar mistakes, but I feel the thing rushed. "what are you? Now go to ponyville and meet the mane 6 hurr". Not to sound aggressive or anything, but there's not enough development. I prefer lack of development then developing bad ideas/doing it wrong though. Leaves no room for atrocities a lot of fanfic writers fell into.
This was the first story I have ever written. I have periodically been copying it over from my account on Fanfiction.net. Everything from chapters 1 to 4 is already written, and I don't have enough motivation to change it. Don't worry. Everything chapter 5 and past will be better written.
Then, where's chapter four?
Sorry if I seem impatient, but it's 2012 now, and when I found this story it was 2011. A man gets tired of waiting after 1 month. It is July 27, 2012, the London Summer Olympics have started and I just now remembered this great work of Fiction.
Do I really need a TL;DR section?
Okay, FINE!
Tired of waiting, it's summer 2012, and MOAR!! ![]()
please continue. I have a feeling you don't have a real plot yet, but this can be very good.
M. Bison: Yes! Yes!
I am so glad that you're back for writing a new chapter, thank you so much, my very good friend.
OP certainly does deliver. Tell me, was it my comment on the previous chapter that inspired you to write this chapter?
Sorry about the cut off at the end. My stupid tablet is glitchy when it comes to internet stuff. It is meant to say (after it cut) 'stomach and stated "I think I just worked off lunch." Everyone burst into laughter.' End.
Good story. I'd suggest laying off the nouns, and using some pronouns, but I guess it's too late for this suggestion
Well, I'm just gonna read on. Here I gooo!







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