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Obselescence


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In the beginning, the world was void and without form—and boring as well, since nothing lived on it and there wasn't all that much to do. For a long time the new world lay dark.

Then Celestia chose to walk it alone, and at last there was light.

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Oh man, this story was great. :pinkiehappy:

Ew gay

What an enjoyable origin story...

Approved for Twilight's Library.

~Skeeter The Lurker

In the beginning, there was story spam! Ooo! Origin story! I'll definitely give this a look.

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Ooh, this was very pleasant to read. :twilightsmile:

I like the premise of this. It gives me inspiration and ideas for aspects of one of my stories.

... and unfortunately, Celestia could not help it...

As Vexy said, this was very pleasant to read. The style was very nice. Well done! :twilightsmile:

No fair, I was going to write an origin story!
Well, whatever. Mine's way different anyways.

Good, but this has been done before, and in a far better way.

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Fair 'nuff, I guess. I sort of delved into this story as a side project when I got stuck on something. Been trying to get my head back in the game since my dog died and the semester started, and I sort of needed a little fun detour like this one to help get some semblance of flow back.

Thanks for reading either way.

Oh, hey, it's another FiMVerse origin story thing or something.

I love these. I might actually read this.

This story is okay, but it felt a bit cliche.

Obs, have you ever read Thus Dwell in Joy? It's like the evil version of this story.

The pic... At first I thought Celly was SUPER PREGGERS or something. Then I was slightly less confused.

Not gonna lie. When I saw that cover art. The first thing I thought of was this.

http://veggie55.deviantart.com/art/Curse-you-Poseidon-391439701

Beautiful origin story. It feels like a Native American story as told by Neil Gaiman. It feels like the kind of story that ponies might tell each other.

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I have not read it, but it sounds interesting if that's the case. I might have to check it out.

In the beginning, there was nothing...

And Celestia said, "LET THERE BE LIGHT!"

And there was still nothing, but now you could see it.

:trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia:

And then came the serpent into paradise and whispered unto Luna, "Why should it not all be yours as you know it to be?" And lo, Luna fell unto temptation sought to bring night eternal...

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It's worth it.

~Skeeter The Lurker

A great little origin story, which like all good such, raises mor questions than it answers. Well done!

It's only January and I've already picked my favorite story for the year.

Nice. While it certainly was a tad cliché, it was still beautiful in its own right. I like seeing work like this. Thanks.

I greatly enjoyed this, the simplistic outlook and total indifference to time gave Celestia a very interesting and sort of alien perspective for most of the fic, allowing us a good view into her steady changes as she interacted with the ponies.

Interesting read indeed.
I find it great how you manage to portrait Celestia in a way that makes her seems ageless and immortal, but nevertheless young.
It shows well that a mind grows with experience, and experience only happens to correlate with the passage of time.
:heart:
I really like its mane!

3801394 One of the things this fic stands out for, indeed. A lot of people ignore this.

Patrick O'Hearn - So Flows the Current
Patrick O'Hearn - Beyond this Moment

Both of these songs seem to fit this tale quite well.

I don't subscribe to the idea that Celestia and Luna are gods, which does reduce a little how much enjoyment I can get out of a story like this.

I enjoyed it regardless, well written and sweet. :twilightsmile:

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Agreed. Celestia's mane does need more credit.

For a second, I thought the cover art was the princesses holding a really fat Fluttershy wearing a diaper.

Not usually into the whole 'literal goddesses' thing but..

Damn, you made it work. Excellently executed without any boorish details. :twilightsmile:

Not usually into the whole 'literal goddesses' thing but..

Damn, you made it work. Excellently executed without any boorish details. :twilightsmile:

Mr. Obselescence: I have heard from many others on this fair site praise you one of the best fanfic writers here. I now understand why. This story here was short, sweet, simple, yet full. It's a nice origin story for how Celestia and Luna came to be together and how the wide world of Equestria came to be. I like how Celestia measures time by millions and billions of steps. It really gives us this sense of how an immortal being tells time, especially since day and night had not been invented yet. I also can effectively feel Celestia's loneliness and her desire to be with another like her. It is not good for Celestia to be alone. :trollestia::raritywink: Anyway, I really liked this story, and I'm definitely going to check out more of your stuff. Keep up the good work. :pinkiehappy:

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D'aw, thanks.

Means a lot to hear that. Really, it does.

I'll keep working.

This is a good origin story for Celestia and Luna, it kind of reminds me of Equestria From Dust.

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As a huge Supernatural fan, I'm heavily reminded of Chuck and Amara here. Amara was the only one in the beginning, darkness, until Chuck (God) came into being and brought light and life and form to the universe. The siblings had fights, argued, and Chuck even sealed his dark sister away, like Celestia did to Luna, but in the end, she was re-formed and they're the happy siblings again, dark and light ruling together as they should.

Very nice story. I liked it.

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