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This was absolutely delightful! I wasn't sure what to expect going in, but I am glad I gave your story a try. Just plain fun and happy, and it made me feel giggly, which was very nice indeed!

More please?

>>334785334785

Absolutely!  This was planned from the start as a two-parter, and chapter two is largely blocked out conceptually -- I just need to find the time to actually write it out.  Glad you like it!

I laughed out loud on several occasions. Like Chatoyance, I wasn't sure what to expect. But it's an amusing story no matter how you look at it. And might I say, expertly written.

This was so awesome! This needs to be featured and put on eqd like now!

This was freaking awesome lol and I hope that the new voice is spike lol or a sentient doll!

Sorry for taking so long to read, but this was worth the wait. This was fantastic! I especially loved all the little jokes that gave away the dolls as dolls. Also, was that a reference to RD and AJ being voiced by the same actress, or am I just seeing things? Anyway, this was great. A few grammar mistakes, but none stuck out or ruined the flow of the story. I saw Pinkie's attempt to turn this into a doll clop fic coming a mile away, and yet I still loled. As for chapter two, I can't wait!

P.S. If you decide to make this a more-than-two parter, bring in the rest of the mane 6. I would love to see their reactions and what scenarios they can come up with.

Edit: This should be featured. The site's featured fics for less.

This was really really funny

"I'm a frayed knot."

I honestly did not think I'd ever see that used in any MLP fic, much less delivered properly. I stand corrected, on both counts. I lost it there, and didn't think the fic could get better.

And then I continued reading.

Feel good story of the year? Feel good story of the year. You deserve all my thumbs.

I'd say this is very episodic (can be a real episode). I can really see Pinkie doing this. Oh! The color of the Princess Celestia doll is true and very funny. I can't believe how Pinkie mentioned it. But seriously, Pink?! She is White not Pink! I can't believe Hasbro did that.

This was awesome! If I could give you stars I would give you 5, but you'll have to settle for a like and a track.

Also>>335176335176 Hasbro thankfully changed the color for the princess.

>>335290335290 Yay! I'll be sure to buy her soon.

>>335290335290

I know, they went and spoiled my joke.  

>> Shrederman38

I think you commented in detail less than two hours after the story went up, so an apology hardly seems called for!    If you spotted some errors, I wouldn't mind having them pointed out for fixing -- I'm usually *very* picky about such things, but a fresh set of eyes often spots what the original author doesn't.  And indeed, it was a double-layered joke about RD and AJ having the same voice, as well as both being played in that scene by Twilight.

>> Gullywasher

I'm fairly sure it's the worst, most aged pun I've pulled off with a straight face all year.  

>> Everypony else

Thanks so much for the kind words!  You've certainly given me the energy to get the second part spanked into shape soon!

Heh.

Hehehehe.

BWAHAHAHAHAHAHA!

That was just pure, undiluted awesome. I lost it at Twilight and Pinkie's first banter as Dash and Rarity, and I don't think I stopped laughing once after that.

Well done. Just beautiful.

>>335084335084

If by 'same actress', you mean Tara Strong, then yes.

>>338286338286 No, RD and AJ are both voiced by Ashleigh Ball. I'm wondering if that part where AJ's voice is described as "yet still curiously similar to the voice of Rainbow Dash." is  a reference to that, or just to them both being voiced by the same pony.

>>338357338357

Both, yes.  

So: if this were an episode, it would feature Tara Strong, as Twilight, doing impressions of Ashleigh Ball as Dash and AJ, and of Andrea Libman as Fluttershy.  Andrea Libman, in turn, as Pinkie, would be doing an impression of Tabitha St. Germain as Rarity -- except for a couple lines in which she also does both of Ashleigh Ball's voices.

The second half will involve Strong-as-Twilight impersonating Libman-as-Pinkie, Libman-as-Pinkie impersonating Strong-as-Twilight, and Libman-as-Pinkie impersonating Libman-as-Fluttershy.  Among other things that happen.

Just in case anypony is still not confused.

>>338414338414=my face

>>338435338435

I have succeeded.  

>>338452338452 I hate to rain on your parade, but the entire time you were flaunting your success a hoard of angry readers emerged with pitchforks and various questions along the lines of "Why do you have time to comment like this when you should be writing?"

I'll just let you deal with them on your own. *runs away, expertly dodging claims of hypocrisy*

>>338357338357

What I meant was, I'm assuming it's just because they're both being voiced by Twilight Sparkle (ie, Tara Strong)

...And in the time it took to write this, Baby Boo answered the question instead. Oh well!

>>338470338470

*Boo is dragged away kicking and screaming to...well, to the exact same place, but with the word-processor window open*

>>338508338508 Haha! We'll have a new chapter by tomorrow! Then, I'll- Oh, hello there. What do you want?

*realizes he hasn't updated his own story in a month*

Um... I can explain?

*Is similarly dragged away, kicking and screaming*

>>338490338490

No harm done.  

For maximum clarity, that line was meant to establish within the story that Twilight was playing both characters, but the behind-the-scenes joke is the reason I arranged the scene so that the same character would be doing both.

This is funny. It reminds me of that episode of Powerpuff Girls when they play as themselves on a rainy day. I can't wait to see what happens next.

"NOT SO FAST!" DUN DUN DUUUNNN!!! I wonder who the mystery pony is? I'm crossing my fingers for Derpy or Princess Luna! Or maybe it's Discord, come back for revenge by making THEM his dolls!!! (Pokemon Season 1 episode with Sabrina's Gym) The possibilities are ENDLESS! Update soon!

Ellipses as used here are generally formatted as three dots, then a space (like... this). There were a few other errors, but I didn't mind because this is a great little story. Sweet, funny, light—it makes me happy to read it.

>>359631359631

Corrected!  At first I thought this was merely an eccentric usage on this site, but I looked up some style manuals, and... well, they conflict about it, but it appears that the way I've long been using ellipses, with no space before or after, isn't correct in any standard (I left spaces out where the ellipsis leads directly into punctuation, though, since that seems to be widely accepted).  Learn something new every day, I reckon.

If you spotted other errors, do please feel free to point them out.  There are some odd constructions that I'll stand up for as stylistic choices, but I do like to be aware of actual mistakes.

I'm glad you like the story!  I've got nothing against cloppiness or darker themes, but it's quite refreshing to write something purely fun and breezy.

So yeah, this was a delightful read. To quote Twi, the entire concept was "bizarrely sweet". Pinkie Pie in particular seemed perfectly in-character. A bunch of great references like Lyra, pink Celestia, and this might be the first time I've seen Appledash used as a verb The play scenes were charming both in how Pinkie/Twi were characterizing their friends, as well as how it remained self-aware ("the martial art of randomly smacking against each other").

The present-tense was a bit different to get used to in the beginning, but a few paragraphs in, I didn't even notice it anymore, so IMHO it's fine as-is. One very minor quibble, the few instances of two hyphens (--) should be replaced with em-dash (—, ALT+0151).

>“Oh, relax!  These are make-believe ponies"

I'll predict that at least one of the ponies will learn about the dolls, but won't appreciate Pinkie role-playing them in muzzle-bumping makeout sessions.

Looking forward to the next chapter!

>>360017360017

Thanks!  The em-dash thing had been bugging me but I had no idea how to fix it.  The Alt+0151 thing didn't work for me, but I just copy-pasted the em-dash from your post.  

I got an answer from the EqD pre-readers on this one today; they requested a re-write in the present tense and suggested some editing in the opening section, so I'm going to take the opportunity to make some structural changes suggested by other readers as well, to better set up the following chapter.

awsome where is chaptor two?

I'm glad this didn't turn out to be a sex story, it has so much more comedy potential than just "Twilight was bored, so Pinkie brought over some toys and sex was all over the place".

This is gorgeous, light-hearted fun. Your Pinkie is really on-point, too. Looking forward to part two.

This I enjoyed! Faved and liked!

Yo dawg i heard you like ponies...

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This is such a silly, feel-good story and I loved every minute of reading it.  Spike needs to get in on the fun.

This was epically adorable and felt like a real episode!

Can't wait for more!

I'm surprised that I didn't find this before, it's a real gem.

A fantastic read, I thoroughly enjoyed it.

Honestly, I'm not sure if I would be charmed or disturbed at the prospect that a friend of mine had made dolls of me and my friends and to-scale replicas of me and my friends homes and played with them on rainy days...

But it's Pinkie Pie so it's alright XD

I found it wonderfully imaginative and I eagerly look forward to the second chapter, as well as more mind bendingly complicated voice actress shoutouts.

>>409606409606   Just be glad Rarity didn't make the dolls, she'd be in pieces if she did.

And in another universe, Bubbles looks up in confusion, interrupting her and her sisters' game of make believe.

Take note Hasbro, this is your Season 3 opener right here.

Excellent!

Haha, this is simply marvellous.

This is actually the first fanfic comedy I have read. Oh my goodness! When Pinkie got out the My Little Pony dolls I laughed a lot. Then when Pinkie described the Celestia doll all I could think of was the one my daughter has! This was very amusing and I really, really, really hope there is more to come soon. I love this fic. Thank you for ending my day on a happy note!

this,

this is art.

Appledasing? And implied Twinking? Me Gusta.

Lolz now kiss muha muha

I lost it at "Let's make smoochies!" This is so cute and the characters are totally spot on. Also, no thumbs downs?? This story deserves it.

Also, the story is very sweet for a potential "reclaiming childhood" theme.

Pinkie's staid, boring rock farm upbringing, and Twilight's self-imposed STUDY.

A new challanger approaches?! Game on!

Cute and funny.... in a weirdly recursive way.

Oh, that was thoroughly enjoyable. I must confess I did snicker here and there.

That, was one of the greatest things I've ever read...

I love fan-fics like this, very good job here.

EPIC!  5 out of 5 mustaches for you, good sir.  

So the ponies are bronies? Interesting....

Now that everyone here knows what I do in my spare time (Same as the story.... )

More please? WHo is the mysterious voice? Rainbow? Luna? (<-HOpes for luna like crazy)

Have a moustache or three

This. Is. GENIUS!

I will enjoy this forever!

This was delightful and I eagerly await its conclusion

This is a really fun, well-written little story that I thoroughly enjoyed reading! It's small gems like these that really perk up my lunch-breaks.

However, I will admit that there was one little thing that detracted just slightly from its awesome score: Twilight calling Spike "honey." To me at least, "honey" is something a married or close couple would call each other and it just sounded strange coming from her.

Other than that though, this was an excellent read that I would recommend to anyone!

This was absolutely hilarious! It set me grinning. I was going to make a list of all the things you did right, but it got too long.

Pinkie is so very excellently written in this story. Truly, she is. This story could be about watching paint dry, and I'd still continue to read it just to get more of Pinkie's excellent characterization.  Luckily, that is not the case, as the story itself is also great! The interaction between the dolls is just hilarious.

My only complaint is that Pinkie doesn't ship PinkieDash. The story is far from over, however, and the Pinkie doll hasn't been used. There's still time :P!

Nicely done.

so much win.

Cuter than this: If I dare say so myself.

>>411866411866

Interesting, someone on EqD commented about that also.  I agree that it's not something she would say to him routinely, but in that line I wanted to emphasize that she was making an extra effort to be nice.  Where I live, 'honey' is used rather casually, especially by women.  If it's distracting readers, though, I'd like to find a more suitable word.  Anypony have any thoughts on this?

This made me smile, smile, smile.

I just died of lack of breath. That was amazing!

Okay this is funny.  I like.

More pleaes

I adore this idea xD Can't wait to see more.

Very cute and very funny, yet it still has a good, solid point.

Pinkie's line about make-believe ponies making smoochies made me laugh out loud. Well done!

Oh, that was wonderful! Adorable and amusing. I love it!

I love the rope analogy, as well.

not good but not bad, hopefully this will go somewhere as of right now its about a 6/10 until the plot gets here, then it should be exiciting pretty decent

I, too, wish to learn the ancient martial art of randomly colliding with my opponent and yelling random words.

I would be unstoppable.

Please tell me I wasn't the only one to notice the Spongebob Squarepants reference?

Glorious from the first fifty lines.

awsome keep em coming con-rad

This is so awesomely meta! I can't wait to read more.

This story was an absolute delight to read. Easy going, yet engaging enough to keep a pony's attention. The only, and I do mean only, problem that bugged me ever so slightly was the font colour for the dolls. Given, that purple is probably one of the best colours to use, the fact of the matter is that having any coloured font tends to draw attention away from the black font type, and can be annoying to read. If you were going to change anything, I'd say change it so that section is also in black, but do something fancy with the font that doesn't involve colour if you have to.

Overall, a beautifully well-written story

Keep writing and make chapter two even better!

"Astoundingly, sex does not ensue."

!  :D  *reads*

This is wonderful! I love reading about Pinkie doing what Pinkie does best - making other ponies smile and laugh. I can actually imagine Pinkie Pie doing this, too, and I love the idea of her putting so much effort into painting the dolls and buildings. Pinklestia was just the right amount of meta.

Took a little while to get going, but I ended up loving it.

>>413219413219

Let's see... "THE"

Only seven hundred ninety-nine words to go.

“Help!  Help!  I’m being...FROU-FROU’D!” she cried.

Oh I lost my fight with laughter at this point.

I can't wait for the next part! This is do good I would love to see it as an actual episode. Quick! Someone tell Hasbro!

A positively magnificent story. While I liked the whole of it, your large vocabulary and word choice in several areas are what I enjoyed the most. It really keeps interest up.

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Just great, one more fimfic series I must read. It's so hard having a life outside mlp when your a brony I:  *favorite/trackung*

I enjoyed that and all its lighthearted glory. I'm looking forward to more.

I read it, now I can't stop smiling Brilliant story, please continue.

I like stories that are unusual, well done!

This may just me the cutest, sweetest, most ADORABLE thing I've read in years.  I've got a huge smile on my face, and it won't go away! XD  NOW I remember why I fell in love with this show.  It's the pure innocence, the way it opens up your heart and lets my inner child out from the dark and into a world that's sunshine and IMPOSSIBLE colors.  It's a reminder that we never really grow up......we just lose sight of the little kid in us, and ponies help us to find it again.  Thank you.  Thank you SO MUCH for the smile you've brought to my face.  I'll be watching you with a good deal of wide-eyed anticipation from now on. ( ;

WHAT!? THEY'RE PLAYING WITH DOLLS AND NO RANDOM DOLL-SEX!?

I'm sorry, I just wanted to go for a quick joke, but you have to admit, some of us hormone-confused teenagers would be thinking this. Brilliant piece of work, I'd love to and can imagine seeing this as an episode (a minisode, considering the pace of this) about how sometimes it's good to fool around at times. An 'all work and no play makes (insert name here) a dull pony' type of lesson. I'm dying to know who the third voice is. I'm going to guess Spike finally jumping in after doing whatever he was doing (eating I assume) or Rarity ,bored at home, visiting to look for reading material and notices the epic doll fight and joins as a deux ex machina for the sake of being able to join in.

We are entertained! If Pinkie breaks the 4th wall next chapter this will be perfect.

I'm a hyper-critical bugger when it comes to writing, and a notorious word-crafter that causes me to point out the slightest flaws in diction and variety. But here...I have no words, so I'm just going to avoid an hour long gush session and explain my thoughts in a single word...

GENIUS.

... And then, suddenly Princess Pinklestia apeared!

>>413881413881

Yes!

This was very funny. Yay for mini mane six.