On an outer space adventure, four ponies were hit by powerful cosmic rays. When they crash landed back to Earth, the four were changed in the most fantastic of ways. Time Turner became the elastic Doctor Whooves. Rarity could fade from sight as the Invisible Mare. Fleetfoot became the Equine Torch. And Burnt Oak became the ever lovin' blue eyed Thing.
Together as the Fantastic Four, they will face the greatest threats the world has ever seen. Such as the World Eater, Galactus, their arch-enemy Doctor Doom, and the invasion of the shape-shifting Changelings. Face front, true believer, because here comes the Four.
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Well. This was awesome. You got the characters spot on, it was well written and hardly any grammatical errors. However I did find one that stands out.
See if you can spot the problem.
3769067 Aw, I see. Thanks for the heads up.
Great story, a few grammatical errors, do you need proofreaders?
3780337 If you're offering, I could use another. The problem is that I didn't get it to my proofreaders as fast as I wanted to, so they weren't able to do a thorough scan of the project. Again, it's not their fault, it was my fault.
3780947 uh sure i guess i could be one
3780951 If you don't want to, you don't have to. I just assumed you were offering. I apologize for my abruptness.
3780953 i'll do it, my first ever time being a proofreader, add me on skype, skype name hotwheels14901
3780959 ... I don't have a Skype account.
3780965 ok well what do ya have then?
3780969 A gmail and yahoo account.
3780974 hmmm :/ maybe u could get a skype? it usually works best for chat for me
3780980 I'll look into it, but I've looked at the cost for a Skype and it's $3.00's a month. Don't know if I can afford that. I can barely afford what I have now.
3780985 u only have to pay for skype if u use it to call phones, skype to skype is all free, silly
3780980 Never mind. Maybe it is free.
3780990 i know its free silly, im using it for free right now
3769067 3770161 D'OH!!
Can't believed I missed that 
Anyway, like I said before this story is..............
3781692 Took the words right out of my mouth.
3781692 Yeah. My eyes nearly BUGGED out when I read that. Don't worry about it though. No use making a mountain out of an ant hill. And I have now hit my daily quota f stupid puns thank you.
3781866 Puns are not stupid. They're... wait for it... 'pun' y!
3781874 My god. Really? Really? That's the joke you go with?
You made them cry, 
confused her, 
dissapointed these ponies and....... 
dammit Pinkie stop smiling its not funny. 
3781923 I knew I could count on you, Pinkie. That's why you're number 5 on my list.
Well... yeah...
Well, because Rarity and Luna and Celestia and Fluttershy are higher on the list.
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Oh, come on, Pinkie. Just because you're not higher on this list doesn't mean I don't like you.
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And... here comes the fans who yell at me because Pinkie Pie isn't my favorite. Raise the shields.
3782038 Oh! Oh, I got this hang on.
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Ummm... never mind.
3784316 I like it!
Ah, Golden-age style writing. Gotta love it.
The Good: You nailed Rarity Note for Note. There are no other words for it, she was absolutely brilliant here!
The Mole Master (Bonus points for the name) functioned as a great villain, and each of the Four got his or her moment to shine. There are a few plot holes, and Mole Masters motivation seemed unnecessarily Dark and a little illogical, but since this fic is deliberately written as a classic Marvel comic, I'm willing to let them go as part of the style.
The Bad: Not a lot. like I said before, many of the Plot holes are just staples of the style of super hero story this is:Over the top and tons of fun. Something that stuck out a little more was your characterization of the Four.
Now, dont get me wrong, they all acted like real characters (and I cannot stress how impressed I am with Rarity) but the Thing, Equine Torch, and Doctor Whooves all had one problem: They weren't changed at all.
One of the things I love about Fusion Fic's is casting the characters. Like Rarity in Iron Mare, or your The Incredible Flutterhulk. They were ways of looking at the characters differently, while still being completely accurate to the characters themselves. The three members of the Fantastic four that aren't Rarity are perfect characterizations of the Fantastic Four, but that's the problem. They are interchangeable.
Other than that:
This is great.
A very quick but well paced story that highlights all the Fantastic Four, without focusing to much on one or the other in a classic Silver age Marvel Romp. I hope to see more.
3799674 Again, thank you for the review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I admit to struggling with the characters. Rarity was probably the one I spent the most time on, because I really wanted to get her right. I probably should have spent more time on the other characters as well. Hopefully, I'll get better at separating the ponies from the Marvel Comic characters.
I loved the Mole Master. I wanted to keep the alliteration in the name. But Mole Man wasn't going to work for this story, for obvious reasons. And it was difficult to come up with a name, but I'm glad it paid off.
I loved writing this. I had a lot of fun with this story and I'd love to do more. And to be honest, I probably will. I just had a lot of fun writing this and I hope to continue this with more stories. Thanks again for your honest thoughts.
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I'm think the main problem wasn't separating Marvel characters and Ponies, so much as your casting. If, for example, Applejack or Big Mac had been The Thing, it would have naturally felt different. I dont recall reading about Oak before, and his lack of preset personality meant that when writing, almost everything defaulted to The Thing himself. That's the main reason I don't like it when Someone uses O.C's in main roles. Flutterhulk almost had that problem, but it was longer, and had several supporting characters that were original, (the Circus) or changed up from their colic counterpart (Rick Jones)
No words to describe how much I . . . . . ... . . . . LOVED IT!!!!!!!!!
4627861 Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Hopefully, one day, I will do more.
I hope you do too! You are awesome at doing stories. I can tell
I shall read this, if only to see more Doctor Doom in a FiMFic...