A collection of deleted scenes and side stories that fell outside of the Onto the Pony Planet arc.
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How is it that so few nobles served in the Guard? At least on Earth there is a long tradition of a martial nobility.
3767951
The impression I got from Grand Galloping Gala and Sweet and Elite is that most of the upper-class and (presumed) noble ponies are useless twits. Besides that, I think that the idea of nobility serving in combat--as was very common during the middle ages (and still is in many places) would be less of an ideal for the ponies, since their recent history suggests that there haven't been any wars, especially not wars of conquest.
3767951
It is called scutage.
3767975
An army with no wars to fight seems like the perfect place to put a bunch of upper class twits. Why, they might make fine Modern Major Generals.
3768064
Oh, sure, if you've got to foist them off on someone. But there wouldn't be any glory in it--so if anypony was in the military, it would be the second or third son, who wouldn't be on the nobles' council anyway.
3768113
Ah, I see.
I'm assuming you didn't ask for permission, and since you didn't even leave a link;
How about some links to the creator of the cover pic? Unless you made it, which, no offense, I doubt you have the ability to make.
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I did leave the URL for the image (it shows up in the lower right corner of the coverart if you mouse over), but was remiss in not also including a link to the artist's DeviantArt page.
Besides writing, most of my work is photography or scale models. I probably could do coverart for a story, but thus far I haven't.
3772285 Ah, my bad, on a mobile device's browser, no mouse, so I can't hover over anything. I'll keep that in mind.
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No worries! Most of my stories do have the sources tagged in the pic, although I haven't always remembered to include the artist's deviantArt page (sometimes it's just a link to the big image). If it is a deviantArt link, the artist's name is in the URL (in this case, http://th06.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/f/2013/237/4/7/see__by_rublegun-d6jkhgw.png)--but not everybody knows that.
I like these side stories, it gives a broader view over the over all story.
3806260
Thank you! There's another one that's mostly-written, and a fourth in the planning stages.
That spear...
It wasn't one of the guards' was it? What was it? (That's going to bug me)
After seeing just how deep a dive she had to do, and considering the risks that swirl took (I mean that is not micromorts, that is milimorts), I debate the decision of them retrieving the glasses rather than just recreating them. Of course Twilight might not have known just how much danger she was putting Swirl in but I do not think she would have had an easy time forgiving herself (and she might have taken it out on Dale) if Swirl had died.
3877663
So, I assumed you made up the word 'micromorts' and googled it. I just learned something!
According to the wikipedia page, scuba diving is only 4.7 micromorts, although I'd assume that's at a normal depth.
I'm assuming Sea Swirl is an experienced diver (since she has a dive boat and a hard hat dive suit). She's relying on routines to keep her safe, including keeping the shot line down in case she needs to make a free ascent, and having two air pumps. That having been said, it is a dangerous enterprise.
3877611
Of course it was. Dropped during the rescue.
3877772
And I read way too far into things again. I suppose her hallucinations didn't help either. I initially expected that the spear was a reference to something - another story of yours or a favorite. Simple is better though.
Now back to trying to consider all the possible outcomes for the evil character in another story.
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Defenestration, disembowelment, decapitation, or something else that starts with D.
3877897
"Defenestration is the act of throwing someone or something out of a window." Help me... I can't breathe...
How about deep-sea diving disaster? It's even thematic! And, as always, amazingly alliterative!
3877762
Well, I was going to concur that Twilight would surely have looked for a professional for this job, somepony who is well aware of the risks and has accepted them. But, then I double-checked, and it looks more like she just said "Hey, I know a pony with a set of diving equipment, why not her?". So, uh, yikes.
3877897
How about the Judas cradle?
Doesn't start with a D, but it's pretty bad.
Nice. I've been reading diving tales off-and-on since I was a kid - my introduction to the sub-genre was a 1930s-vintage adventure involving Navy hard-hat divers salvaging the treasure on a Spanish galleon I'd found on the back shelves of my small-town Carnegie library. Oddly, I've never pursued diving, either as a career, or a hobby. OTOH, I can tell that you, like the fellow who wrote that pulp young-adult/juvenile adventure, did your homework. Thank you.
How the devil did I manage to fail to like and fave the side stories before now?
3877897
Y'know, I actually want her to survive. I want her to be slapped down hard, but only so I can see her be built back up as a better pony. But I'll agree that she needs a deep D'ing if only to directly inject some amount of decency into her. (Oh God that sounds so wrong!
)
It's like many fan's reaction to Nightmare Moon or Chrysalis, this just happens to be an OC.
3878156
Given the technology of the show, and the likelihood that most ponies are essentially self-employed craftsponies or farmers--especially in Ponyville--Sea Swirl is as professional a diver as she's going to get.
3878295
Well, she could survive defenestration and--with prompt medical attention--disembowelment. How about fleas?
3880908
Fair enough!
3880912
Ok, that is a seriously Disturbing thought: disembowelment as a criminal punishment. Have a professional surgeon and some EMTs on hand (hoof) to do the deed without (seriously) damaging any major organs, let the punished suffer for a bit, and then patch them back up. I'm so glad that's not a thing.
Oh rarity, willingly making ugly things for the sake of the customer! We wondered why she put those stripes on the shirt. ;)
Did a report on Denim pants at one point, I can tell you that, at least for 'working' jeans, the rivets are very much NOT decorative. There's a reason why on good jeans the seams are all double-stiched and there are rivets at certain strategic spots - they reinforce the cloth.
Got into a conversation with a German once about it - he was of the take that jeans were 'rich people's clothes', then I pointed out that at least in the USA(where I'm from), they were originally made for gold prospectors because regular pants just couldn't survive, and while a good pair might be as expensive as a decent pair of other pants, they'd be far tougher.
3924911
I'm gonna have to take a closer look at my pants. The carpenter jeans I wore today have rivets reinforcing the thigh pockets and triple-stitching on most of the important seams. I'll so a survey of the rest of my pants when I get home and let you know the rivet status on them, and then make changes to the text if needed.
Yay for the continued adventures of wall repair pony!
And now I want to meet Lecul. She's a riot and 3/4 - would be fun to hang out with. Stupid professors have no idea what they're missing.
3924911
Further update: I took an inventory of my jeans. Most of them are Wranglers, in their Classic, Relaxed, Signature, and Carpenter line. Some of them have rivets at the corners of the front pockets, while some don't. Some of them have one or two rivets in the 'watch pocket' (or whatever that little pocket on the right side is called), and some of them don't.
Of all the pants failures I've had in the past, none of them have involved a piece which may be rivited: besides the expected tears in the knees or crotch as they get old, I've lost belt loops and back pockets. I did have a side pocket fail on a pair of work pants, but that was after it got caught in a doorknob, so I don't think that should count.
In the context of the story, I don't think Rarity would be familiar with the way side pockets in pants are used by people, therefore I think that she would view the rivets as decoration, rather than a requirement.
Nevertheless, it's always nice to learn something new--I didn't know that the rivets had an important function on jeans; I just figured that they were a traditional holdover in jean design.
ah the joys of small towns. Gossip travels at the speed of light.
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3937290
You have no idea how long I've been waiting to use that reference.
Wow, so many ponies crammed into one chapter! You probably went through half the population of Ponyville! Well, that's what my view of Ponyville says, at least. I've always viewed it as more of a 'tourist attraction', with most of the buildings being extended-stay hotels, inns, or cottages, rather than a large town of permanent houses, mostly because a lot of the ponies we see there change regularly.
P.S. I just realized that the large building in the upper left of the courtyard in this picture has an opening... is it a garage? It has a driveway/path... hmm.
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3937351
Hah, not hardly. There's probably about thirty canon ponies that are just Apple relatives, maybe more.
I'd put Ponyville's total population between one and two thousand ponies, if we count the farms that undoubtedly lie around it and the pegasi who reside over it. True, we've only seen Sweet Apple Acres and (presumably) Golden Harvest's farm, but there are probably more.
I would assume that any 'garage-like' structures we see are carriage houses or wagon houses.
Dale is gonna crack up when he sees the elmo carvings.
oh man.
...that's a lot of rumour...
3937351
It doesn’t, you’re just tricked by the perspective — the two buildings aren’t connected. What you’ve mistaken for a garage is actually an alley between the two houses. The brown “wall” is shadow; you can see a similar example not too far above it.
You are tremendous at writing dialog like this. This sort of small town gossip feels so natural in a place like Ponyville (or even Canterlot in academic circles, nice nod to the comics BTW)
So many refs, yet they didn't overpower the tale because the conversations were so natural. I cheer when these update.
lol The rumor trio strike again at the end there, eh? XD Wonder how it'll be at the point where one of them noticed Dale in the window.^_^
I love how you worked in Professor Inkwell. Nicely done.
3937440
I'll admit I was exaggerating quite a bit, but I don't think it would be as high as two thousand. Firstly, considering Ponyville is mainly an earth pony town, I don't think it has a proper 'upper' section for pegasi. As far as we know, only Rainbow Dash has a proper cloud house, and nothing thus far has suggested that there are any more for the other pegasi in the area. Also, AJ's family is huge, but most of them are scattered seemingly to the edges of the map and beyond, as Apple Family Reunion points out early on. They're not Ponyvillans.
I can't argue the point about farms around Ponyville, but I wasn't really counting them. I was focusing more on Ponyville proper, which, if the street scenes are to believed, is mostly comprised of shops. Even then, and assuming the owners live above their stores in flats, and if about half the town is single or lives alone, the maximum population would still only be about six or seven hundred not including any farms.
It's unlikely that there are 'farm hands' or live-in workers for the fields, as neither of the canon farms seem to have any. With that in mind, depending on how far the official city border extends, population in the countryside could potentially range anywhere between less than 50 and just over a few hundred. Overall, the maximum population (in my opinion and 'headcanon') would just barely scrape one thousand. The minimum could be as low as three or four hundred.
...I don't know why I typed this all out, but I'll be damned if it's going to go to waste now!
Sorry.
Oh hey, the new chapter is not the last chapter...
I totally love the gossip ideas springing around!
Keep going! ;)
I agree with 3937735, you write some of the most natural dialogue I have ever seen. That being said, I found it very difficult to keep the various characters straight, but that might be because I have a bit of a habit of skipping character names.
Dale's encounter with the repair pony seems totally different now that we get her perspective.
I assume Brittaneigh is a reference to the Brittany region of France. I remember going there on vacation many years ago.
3938725
Yes, it is. I've never been there, only Paris and some of the southern region.
I did add more dialogue tags than the draft had, but that can be one limitation of the written word vs. radio or TV. Too many dialogue tags broke up the flow of the conversation too much, I felt, and to be honest, in some of the conversations, it didn't really matter who said what, just the general flow of conversation. I've noticed Robert B. Parker did this a lot in some of his books, especially in dialogue between Spenser and Hawk. If I went back and tried to see who was speaking, I'd have to count lines; but if I just let the conversation flow naturally, I found that it felt like I was hearing the two characters speak.
For what it's worth, Last Night Pinkie Pie Exploded (recently in the Poplar Stories box) has no dialogue tags or descriptive text at all.
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3937735
Thank you!