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Kyoko 511

Joined March 2012
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    Kyoko's Stories (5)

    • Tea Lessons (Derpy's Date)
      Octavia is teaching Derpy proper tea etiquette... But then Trixie comes along and tries to help.

      1,030 words · 307 views · 10 likes · 1 dislikes
    • Sen and the Fountain
      A short story about a Gambler, a Mirage, a Mathmatician and a Librarian on a quest.
      2,043 words · 84 views · 3 likes · 0 dislikes
    • The Element of Shipping: Trixie, Fluttershy and Applejack
      Trixie returns to Ponyville and is helped by a kind pegasus, but not everypony supports her return.
      1,399 words · 457 views · 9 likes · 4 dislikes
    • Miss Octavia Ravenclaw
      A dark story of betrayal, hatred and lost dreams.
      1,421 words · 230 views · 7 likes · 3 dislikes
    • Sen-Zen Shipping
      3,308 words · 86 views · 0 likes · 0 dislikes

    Sen is an illusion, a mirage. She appears before a traveller, who decides to help her realise her destiny.

    After meeting up with Chocolate Pi and Twilight Sparkle, the four of them undergo a quest to free Sen from her current state.

    Stars 3 OC ponies and one Canon one.

    Basically used as an introduction to Sen and Fortune.

    First Published
    2nd May 2012
    Last Modified
    2nd May 2012

    Comments ( 3 )

    #1 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·
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    I suppose this was an one-shot? Sen wasn't that much developed, so her fears in drinking from the fountain was unjustified until that point, as she was just that "mysterious and wise" spirit. And, exactly for the same reason, they shouldn't be so close out of basically nowhere. I suggest you to not fragment the paragraphs like you did, as it worsens the overall quality of the writing.

    Well, it was a good pastime, at least.

    #2 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·
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    I agree with Shukin, seems more like a oneshot then a huge continuous story :rainbowdetermined2:

    #3 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·
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    your OC

    Chocolate Pi

    my OC

    Chocolate Pie

    Chocolate Pi and Pie have glasses

    Chocolate Pi and Pie have brown coats

    Chocolate Pi and Pie are different (but just slightly)

    And I'm all like wat? :rainbowlaugh:

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