Wielders and Keepers
I’m going to keep beginning author’s notes short, but I need to say this. I know that Rei’s a little irritating right now, but you have to realize that she’s a freaking ten-year-old girl who just got changed into a unicorn and put into a land of ponies. This isn’t entirely her personality; this is a reaction to a stimulus.
Thank you.
Incoming info dump. Bear with it Kingdom Hearts people.
Disclaimer: Kingdom Hearts and My Little Pony are owned by Square-Enix, Disney, and Hasbro, not me.
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Guardians of Magic
Chapter 3: Wielders and Keepers
Twilight Sparkle was silent as the group walked through the halls of Canterlot Castle up from the dungeons. Her mind was abuzz with more questions than she could count, and she wasn’t entirely sure who she should direct them to. Everything these ponies had said seemed so outrageous that it couldn’t be possible, but the way they had said it all just made her want to believe that it was all true. Besides, those shadows that Sora had called Heartless had been real, so it was quite possible that what he said was just as real.
And what Rei said, that I’m one of ‘them’. What is that about? What does she mean, ‘them’? Directing her attention towards the unicorn filly, she saw that Rei was occupied with asking Spike the latest in a string of questions.
“Can you breathe fire?”
“Well, yes,” Spike answered proudly, glad to see that somepony was excited to talk to a dragon. “Want to see?” Rei nodded her head eagerly, and Spike took a deep breath before exhaling. A tongue of green fire, only as long as the baby dragon’s body, leapt from his mouth. Rei’s face lit up in excitement.
“Sora-nii-chan!” she shouted. “Look! He can breathe green fire! Green!” He laughed.
“Green, huh?” he asked. “I wonder how Mushu will react to a dragon that breathes green fire.” Rainbow Dash leaned close to Twilight.
“What does that mean anyway?” she asked.
“What does what mean Rainbow?”
“That…nii-chan thing that she says.” Twilight shook her head.
“I have no idea Rainbow Dash,” she answered truthfully. “There are a lot of things that they’ve said that I don’t quite understand.”
Rainbow Dash groaned. “You’re telling me. Still, that Keyblade thing was pretty cool.”
“Onii-chan means ‘big brother’,” Rei said suddenly, turning around and walking backwards. “So that’s what I call Sora-nii-chan, big brother Sora.”
Sora turned his head around from where he walked close to the front with Kairi and Princess Celestia. On his face was a weary smile. “And I’m the only one she uses honourifics for. Doesn’t call Kairi ‘Kairi-chan’ or Riku ‘Riku-kun’ or Riku-san, or nee-san or nii-san, just me.” He sighed. “Sometimes I regret showing her that anime channel.” His marefriend giggled slightly to herself.
“So, Riku, you wouldn’t happen to have a marefriend, would you?” Rarity asked from behind Twilight, the marshmallow-white unicorn walking next to the turquoise one.
“No,” he replied flatly, “and I’m not looking.”
Twilight tuned out Rarity in the back and turned her attention back at the filly. Rei was still walking backwards with a warm smile on her face, and she was staring up at Twilight. “What is it?” she asked. “Do I have something on my face?” Rei shook her head.
“No, I just still can’t believe that I’m here,” she answered cheerily. “This place is like a dream.”
“And why’s that lil’ missy?” Applejack asked, amused. “You don’t have ponies where you and Sora are from?”
Rei shook her head. “No, we do, it’s just that there aren’t a lot of them, they don’t talk, none are unicorns or pegasuses—I mean pegasi—and none of them have candy-coloured coats like you guys do.”
“Hm, sounds pretty lame to me,” Rainbow Dash muttered.
“But, if there are so few ponies,” Fluttershy asked in genuine concern, “what about all of the animals?”
Twilight could see Rei looking at the pink-maned pegasus in confusion. “What about them?”
“How do they survive? Who looks after them? It must be such hard work for so few ponies to take care of them all.”
Riku appeared to have been listening in from behind them, answering with, “They look after themselves?” as if it were obvious.
Neither Twilight nor her friends could withhold gasps. All six of them stopped in their tracks and stared at the four other ponies, all gathering around each other and gazing at Twilight’s group with perplexed expressions. “What?” Riku asked.
“They take care of themselves?” Spike asked. “But—but that’s not right!”
“Their world must be like the Everfree Forest,” Rainbow Dash said, chewing slightly on her hooves, “and we all know how creepy that place is. It just doesn’t work the same as Equestria.”
The four human-turned ponies looked at one another. “Everfree Forest?” Sora asked.
Twilight began to explain, although she was now suddenly wary of them again. Animals looking after themselves, and without anypony lifting a hoof to help? She wasn’t the best with animals, not like Fluttershy or even Applejack, but even Twilight knew how important it was to look after Equestria’s wildlife. “The Everfree Forest is a place where—”
“Here we are,” Princess Celestia cut her off, opening a door with her magic. “Come on in everypony. We can talk here in more comfort than those dank dungeons.”
“Uh, Princess,” Applejack pointed out, “this here’s the infirmary.”
“You’re right Applejack, it is,” Celestia said. “I recall that you and Captain Cloudhammer came across a pony being attacked by the Heartless, correct? I think that she would like to know exactly what those creatures that attacked her were when she wakes up.”
“You do have a point, Princess,” Rarity agreed. “I know that if that had been me, I would have liked to know myself.”
“Yeah, same here,” added Rainbow Dash. Princess Celestia nodded and all of them filed into the room. A light grey unicorn stallion in a white doctor’s coat with a stethoscope around his neck and salt and pepper mane was examining Trixie as she lay on one of the beds. He turned around at the sound of their entrance and smiled slightly.
“Ah, good afternoon Princess Celestia,” he said. “What brings you here?”
“Good afternoon Doctor Checkup,” the Princess greeted. “How fares our little pony?”
“She’s doing quite well, considering,” he answered, his smile not leaving his face. “Only a few scrapes and bumps, and it looks like she pulled a muscle in her front left cannon, but beyond that it’s a textbook case of magical exhaustion. However…” he sighed, and this time the smile did slip from his face. “She also appears to be suffering from dehydration and the first effects of prolonged malnutrition. Look at how tight her skin is to her ribcage. She’s lost quite a bit of fat and muscle tissue.”
“So what are you saying doctor?” Twilight asked. “Is Trixie going to be alright?” She turned her violet eyes onto Trixie and couldn’t help but feel pity for her. What could have happened to the proud mare after she’d left Ponyville that could end up leaving her on the ropes like this? Even Rainbow Dash and Rarity were looking at one another in concern.
“She should be fine Miss Sparkle,” Doctor Checkup told her, “but I recommend that she gets plenty of rest, water, and nutritious meals for the next week, and be confined to this bed for the rest of the day when she wakes up. Don’t let her overeat though. Suddenly gorging herself after living off what looks to be minimal food could upset her system just as much as not eating would.”
Princess Celestia nodded. “Thank you Doctor Checkup. We’ll make sure that your recommendation is followed. Would you be a dear and go down to the kitchens? I’m sure that our friend here would love some black bean and carrot soup and a fresh loaf of bread when she wakes; and get some food yourself. I know that you’ve been worrying yourself since Luna brought young Starshine and Moondancer in last night.”
Checkup smiled and nodded his head. “As you wish, Your Highness. I’ll be sure to send some up.” As he trotted away, Rei slowly walked up to the bed in which Trixie was lying asleep. Twilight had to admit, Trixie didn’t look anywhere near as haughty while she was sleeping.
“Onii-chan,” the little filly said quietly, her eyes still on Trixie’s face, “she’s another one of them.”
“What? Two of them?” Riku asked, stunned. Rainbow Dash hovered above him and turned him around. Circles of aquamarine stared into frustrated, brilliant, rose.
“Two of WHAT?” Rainbow Dash countered. “What is going on here?”
“I’d like to know that too,” Twilight said, glancing at each of the Keyblade ponies. “What did Rei mean when she said that I was one of them? I’m one of what? What’s this about?” She looked to Princess Celestia, but her mentor didn’t say a word and only watched.
Sora sighed. “I think it’s time we told you our story.”
Twilight and the others listened patiently as mostly Sora, Riku, and Kairi told them about how they’d lived on tropical islands in peace for years, with Riku feeling trapped and confined, struck by wanderlust to go out and explore other worlds, and how in his need he opened the door to the heart of their world and accidentally let the Heartless in to destroy it. They listened to Sora’s tale of how he’d adventured across numerous worlds with two people named Donald and Goofy, trying to find both Riku and Kairi while they searched for their king, and of how Riku fell in with a witch named Maleficent and betrayed Sora because of his jealousy and their rivalry over Kairi’s affections. Kairi’s tale of how her heart had come to rest within Sora’s to keep it safe had them hanging on to every word, and she explained that she was one of seven ‘Princesses of Heart’, maidens with pure hearts of light who when brought together were the key to opening the door to darkness, beyond which lay Kingdom Hearts and the Realm of Darkness. Maleficent had used Riku to assist her in gathering the princesses, but they’d needed Kairi’s heart to make their keyhole to the darkness complete, and it couldn’t be completed or the keyhole sealed while her heart was within Sora’s.
“Wait just a minute!” Rarity exclaimed. “You stabbed yourself?”
Sora reared up onto his hind legs and pointed at a thin line in his chest. “Right there,” he said solemnly. “When I stabbed myself with the Keyblade of Captive Hearts to unlock Kairi’s heart, it came out and was returned to her, but it also caused my heart to fall into darkness.”
“Right in front of my face,” Kairi sighed. “Ansem then turned up and would have ended us, but Riku was able to regain control long enough for us to run. Ansem sent a bunch of Heartless after us, but Sora’s Heartless turned out to be just a little Shadow that followed Donald, Goofy, and me all the way through Hollow Bastion. I knew it was him when it looked at me and refused to attack us.”
“And I still need to pay Donald back for whacking me on the head with his staff,” grumbled Sora.
Kairi had seen through to Sora, and when the other Heartless surrounded and jumped them she’d shielded him with her body, and the light in her heart took out the Heartless and brought Sora’s heart back into the light. They’d all left Hollow Bastion and returned to Traverse Town for a short while, before Sora, Donald, and Goofy returned to Hollow Bastion to seal the keyhole and continue on to save Riku from Ansem. They ventured all the way to the End of the World, where they saw all that remained of the hundreds of worlds shattered and taken by the Heartless, before they found and confronted Ansem. In an epic battle, Sora and his friends emerged victorious in front of the Door to Darkness, but Ansem opened the door. To his dismay, Sora revealed that Kingdom Hearts wasn’t everlasting, eternal darkness, but light, and the light of all the worlds destroyed Ansem. Behind the door to Kingdom Hearts lay the Realm of Darkness, where thousands upon thousands of Heartless gathered, prepared to leave the Realm of Darkness and invade the Realm of Light. They were able to shut the door, but it required Riku and King Mickey to stay behind in the Realm of Darkness in able to do it. Then, as all of the worlds whose hearts had been taken were restored, Sora remained behind to search for Riku while Kairi returned to the Islands to wait for them.
Spike was blowing his nose on a tissue Rarity levitated to him, and Twilight rubbed her eyes with a hoof, feeling them getting a bit misty too. Trixie’s soup had arrived even though the unicorn showed no signs of waking yet, and Twilight admitted privately that she was getting a little hungry too; but the story wasn’t over though, and the five little ponies, Princess Celestia, and Spike continued to listen as Sora and Riku each explained about how they both came upon Castle Oblivion and their exploits within, Riku trying to master the darkness still within him in the form of Ansem, and Sora dealing with his ever-changing memories at the manipulation of a girl named Naminé.
“Naminé?” Spike asked. “Wait, didn’t you mention her before, Kairi.”
She nodded her head. “I did. Naminé is my Nobody. Roxas is Sora’s Nobody, and all of the people in black cloaks that Sora, Donald, Goofy, Riku, and King Mickey were meeting were Nobodies.”
“Then, what is a Nobody?” Celestia asked.
“If a Heartless is the heart consumed by darkness, the Nobody is the body and soul left behind by a strong heart,” Riku answered. “Because all Nobodies are born from strong hearts, even the most basic Nobodies are stronger than about half of the Heartless varieties we’ve come across, and the more powerful the Nobody the more they look like what they were in life.”
“There were once a group of thirteen powerful Nobodies led by one called Xemnas,” Sora explained. “They called themselves Organization XIII, and their goal was to collect hearts with the Keyblade in order to make their own Kingdom Hearts, and use its power to make themselves whole again.”
“Well, that sounds reasonable,” Fluttershy said. “I mean, if I didn’t have a heart, I’d want mine back too.”
“You’d think it sounds reasonable,” Sora sighed, “but the thing is that without a heart, Nobodies aren’t able to feel emotion. The end completely justifies the means when they have no ethics holding them back. Their thirteenth member was Roxas, my Nobody, and because he was a part of me he could use the Keyblade, so they unleashed Heartless into the worlds for Roxas to defeat and collect hearts, not caring about anyone they hurt in the process. Once Riku, DiZ, and Naminé fixed up my memories and forced Roxas to merge back with me, the Organization continued by using me to gather hearts for them, and they also kidnapped Kairi to ensure my obedience.”
“Despicable,” growled Rarity.
“Preaching to the choir there, Rarity,” Kairi agreed. “The only nice ones from what I’ve heard from Naminé and Roxas were Axel and Demyx, while the others could be nice when they tried. Saïx,” she spat his name like it was poison, “certainly wasn’t that nice to me.”
“How can you have heard from these two?” Twilight asked before Rainbow Dash could ask the same question. “I thought that at the end of this story you would have beaten Xemnas and the rest of the Organization, rescued Kairi, been reunited with all of your friends, and returned home? And since you’re here, you’re obviously whole, so Roxas and Naminé shouldn’t exist at all, right?” Her friends all looked at Twilight and she flattened her ears sheepishly. “Well, that is the logical conclusion.”
“And it’s almost right,” Rei exclaimed. “Sora-nii-chan did beat the Organization and come home with Kairi and Riku and the others, but because Roxas-nii-chan and Naminé merged with Sora-nii-chan and Kairi, they aren’t gone and live instead inside of them.”
“Huh?”
The three older ponies laughed. “We’ve got them living inside of us,” Sora explained, pointing a hoof at his chest. “We can talk to them telepathically and when Kairi and I are in close proximity they can talk to each other. We essentially have real alter-egos, and with a little effort Kairi and I can switch with Roxas and Naminé, and they’ll appear on the outside and have control of our bodies. We’ve been able to figure out so far that Roxas and Naminé have the ability to remain the dominant personality in control for as long as a week before they tire out and need to go back inside, but we’ve also learned that at any time Kairi or I can hijack their control and put them back.”
“Interesting,” Twilight said, rubbing her face with a hoof. “Do you think we could meet them?” Sora and Kairi glanced at one another, and then they bent their heads down and closed their eyes. A slight wind blew around them in the room, rustling their manes and coats of fur. From their hooves up their colours began changing. Sora’s mahogany coat darkened into a dark grey colour, and his tail and mane shifted from their chocolate-brown into a golden-blonde. Kairi’s light pink colouring softened until she was just as white as Rarity, her own mane and tail becoming a mix of white-blonde and platinum blonde. On Naminé’s snow-white cannons were pink hoof bands, but the most startling change was that the wings Sora and Kairi each had vanished as their colours changed. A horn grew out of Roxas’ head, while Naminé stood a resplendent earth pony, still wearing the raspberry beret Kairi had been wearing. Roxas’ cutie mark was a pair of crossed Keyblades one white and beautiful and the other the black one Sora had used earlier, while Naminé’s was of an artist’s palette.
“Hey there,” Roxas said, his cerulean eyes the exact same shade as Sora’s.
“It’s nice to meet you,” Naminé added, bowing her head slightly. Twilight Sparkle just stared at them in awe while Riku started to snigger, and both Roxas and Naminé turned to look at him. “What is it, Riku?”
“He’s a unicorn and you’re an earth pony,” he answered.
Naminé did not seem to be very amused. “Really? I’m an earth pony? I’m the most magical one in this group and I become an earth pony while the two who can barely use magic become unicorns? How does that make any sense?”
“Naminé, it makes perfect sense,” Roxas answered her. She trained her indigo eyes onto him in complete skepticism. “Sora and Kairi are the most athletic of us, so they get wings and become pegasi, able to run and fly and do all sorts of cool tricks.”
“Naturally,” Rainbow Dash agreed, puffing her chest out proudly on behalf of all pegasi.
“Tell me how they’re the most athletic when Riku’s the one on the Maechen Manticores’ Blitzball team and Sora and Kairi are only second-string for the Basch Justiciars’ senior boys and girls teams?”
“Ever see me doing those crazy flips and acrobatics that they’re always using?” Riku asked.
“Hmm,” Naminé grumbled, “point taken.”
“And remember what horns are?” Roxas asked her. “What do animals use their horns for?”
“Establishing male dominance and proclaiming their strength and ability for all eligible females and for rival males to take note of when searching for mates,” Naminé supplied dryly.
Roxas rolled his eyes. “They’re weapons Naminé, used for competing with each other and defending their mates and herds. Riku and I are the best swordsmen of the group—no, Sora, I’m still better than you—so it’s only natural that we get them.”
Spike looked up at Fluttershy. “Is that really what they’re for?”
“I believe so,” she said, “but I know that I’ve never seen any of my deer friends fighting one another over a doe before. When one of them takes an interest in a doe, they just go for a stroll in the meadow together, not compete with another male in a way they could get hurt.”
“And you,” Roxas said, “you, well…”
Naminé sighed. “I’m not the most athletic or very good with a sword. My art can be just as magic as my magical arts are, but I’m not physically strong.”
“Well now that doesn’t make very much sense at all, dear,” Rarity said. “Most earth ponies are stronger physically than unicorns or pegasi.”
“And while they can’t actively use magic like us unicorns can,” Twilight added, “they do have a stronger connection to the earth when it comes to growing things or taking care of animals than other ponies. But it does make some sense too; a lot of earth ponies have a variety of talents besides looking after the land or animals. Pinkie Pie’s a real party pony, and both she and the Cakes are pastry chefs. I don’t think any of them are anywhere near as strong as Applejack.”
“Aw, shucks Twi, yer making me blush.”
The colouring of the Roxas and Naminé started to revert as Sora and Kairi reasserted control. “Well, that was short-lived,” Roxas said dryly.
“It was nice seeing you all personally!” Naminé added.
“I do see why Kairi keeps that beret though,” Rarity called. “It looks lovely on you Naminé!”
“Thank you!” Naminé answered just before her head became light pink once again.
Sora shook his head, now fully in control once again. He looked at Riku. “I’m surprised you didn’t try to head-butt Roxas.”
“Meh, he had a horn too. Would’ve taken us hours for me to get the better of him.”
“He says that he agrees, except you’d be the loser.”
“When we have a free day, he can come at me and prove it himself.”
Rarity sidled up to Twilight and began whispering in her ear. “Now that’s something I wouldn’t mind watching,” she said. Twilight sighed.
“So, you guys got back home,” she said. “What happened then?”
Kairi answered. “King Mickey, Donald, Goofy, Pluto, and Jiminy all went back to Disney Castle, and we returned home to our daily lives. Rei was really excited to see Sora back, and all of us were grounded for two weeks. School started up again, we got a letter from King Mickey thanking us for all of our hard work and sacrifice, and time passed peacefully. However, we knew that we certainly hadn’t seen the end of it, and I had just gotten my own Keyblade and wasn’t that good with it, so Sora and Riku trained me both in swordplay and magic.”
“We could notice her getting better and stronger every week,” Sora said proudly. “In five months, Kairi was almost on par when it came to fighting with her Keyblade to me and Riku, and she’d already surpassed me in her ability to use magic. We started dating six months after we got back to the islands—”
“About fricking time too,” Riku muttered.
“—and while her dad wasn’t the most supportive of us training her to fight after he found out, he did understand the need for it and both of our feelings in the matter. Kairi didn’t want to be a damsel in distress anymore and help me and Riku out without being a burden, and more than anything I wanted to make sure she was safe, so keeping her close but able to stand on her own two feet were the best things to do,” Sora continued, smiling at his marefriend.
“That was almost seven months ago,” Kairi said. “We kept on training and doing schoolwork, hanging out and having fun, but then, just over a month ago, something happened that told us our peacetime was over.” She looked at Rei.
The filly gulped and looked at Twilight Sparkle. She glanced once to Princess Celestia, and then to her older brother. He nodded, and Rei turned back to Twilight. Apprehension filled every limb in Twilight’s body. Now she would learn just what it was that Rei had mentioned. Rei opened her mouth to speak, but before she could get more than two words out a groan from the bed interrupted her.
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Trixie opened her eyes slowly, seeing everything in a fuzzy haze while consciousness returned to her. Dull pain wracked her body, and she felt incredibly weary. Her stomach ached from its now chronic emptiness, and Trixie regretted having eaten that last cinnamon-coated pinecone as a late-night snack instead of saving it for a time when she needed it, like right now.
She closed her eyes again, and remembered what had happened before she blacked out. Those shadows, what were they, and where was she for that matter? She couldn’t have gotten rid of all of them, and even if she had, shouldn’t she be lying on the road? This certainly felt like a bed beneath her back.
Trixie opened her eyes again. There was a white ceiling above her. “Where am I?” she asked aloud.
“Ah, so you’re awake now.”
That voice! There was only one pony in all of Equestria who had such a maternal and majestic voice like that. Trixie turned her head in a little bit of shock to see Princess Celestia herself standing beside her bed. “P-Princess!” she stammered. “To what does the Great and P—I mean, to what does the humble Trixie owe the pleasure?”
Sweat began beading on Trixie’s face as the questions continued to assault her mind. Obviously she was now in Canterlot Castle with the princess here, but how did she get here, and why would Princess Celestia be here, waiting for her to wake up?
The Sun Princess’ gentle voice touched her ears again. “You have no need to be afraid, Trixie,” she said. She lowered a wing to softly brush against Trixie’s face. “The castle is safe from the shadows that attacked you earlier. Please, be calm; you’re among friends here.”
Trixie felt herself calming down at the soft words Princess Celestia spoke. Her touch felt like a warm sunbeam, and Trixie let a small smile come to her face as some of her worries were swept away for the moment. “Thank you, but Princess Celestia,” she had to ask, “how did Trixie get here?”
“You could thank us for that.”
Trixie’s eyes widened at the voice. She’d heard it before, but it had certainly belonged to one of the ponies that she had humiliated when she’d performed in Ponyville. Princess Celestia still smiled warmly and stepped aside, revealing several other ponies in the room, and Trixie could immediately recognize most of them as Ponyvillians. It was the blue pegasus who had spoken, and even though she sounded a little annoyed, she did look somewhat concerned.
“Are you alright, Trixie?” the lavender unicorn asked her. Trixie’s eyes darted between the unicorn and Princess Celestia. Trixie had heard more about this particular mare and her friends since she’d left Ponyville. She was undoubtedly Twilight Sparkle, the Bearer of the Element of Magic of the six Elements of Harmony, a pony that had saved Equestria from eternal night and chaos along with her friends, and was the personal protégé of the white alicorn standing beside Trixie’s bed.
And Trixie had…
A small unicorn filly looked up at a brown pegasus stallion. “Sora-nii-chan, why is her face turning white?”
“Trixie, you don’t have to be scared,” Princess Celestia said in understanding, drawing the azure unicorn’s attention back to her and away from the Ponyville ponies. “I have heard about you from my faithful student, and I want you to know that neither I nor Twilight harbour any ill feelings towards you.”
Trixie blinked, and some of the colour returned to her face. “You…you don’t hate Trixie for what she did?”
Twilight shook her head and smiled softly. “No Trixie. Although your boasting about things you never did was a bit much, nopony could have expected Snips and Snails to actually go and bring an Ursa Minor to town.”
Rarity stomped a hoof on the floor. “You turned my mane green!”
Trixie bit her lip and lowered her head. “Yes, well, Trixie does feel a little foalish for her conduct in Ponyville.”
Applejack huffed. “A little? Are you hearing this Twi?”
“Applejack,” Twilight hissed.
“In fact, it was not only Ponyville that gazed upon the Great and Powerful Trixie as some of you did,” Trixie admitted in a quiet voice. “Fillydelphia and Baltimare were…less kind to Trixie than the rustic Ponyville was.”
Spike rolled his eyes. “Gee, why am I not surprised?”
Trixie shot the baby dragon a look. “If you must know, the Great and Powerful Trixie’s feats of unparalleled magic show ended in Ponyville. The Ursa Minor showed Trixie that she was a fool to trumpet feats she had never accomplished; that sooner or later her she would get herself into situations too big for her if she continued, or turn ponies she couldn’t best against her and possibly get herself hurt.”
Princess Celestia nodded kindly. “It sounds like you learned an important lesson about friendship.”
“Friendship?” Trixie laughed. “Princess, you give the Great and Powerful Trixie too much credit. Trixie only remembered to be honest and a bit more modest to other ponies.”
“But honesty is an important part of friendship,” Fluttershy said softly, coming closer towards Trixie and earning the unicorn’s attention for the first time. “Why, if nopony was honest with anypony else, then the foundation of trust many friendships are built on couldn’t exist.”
“You must be Fluttershy, Bearer of the Element of Kindness.” Trixie noted that the yellow pegasus took a half-step back at her blunt tone.
“Why, yes, I am. It’s nice to actually meet you, Trixie, but I don’t really think we should keep you talking very long. You just woke up after all, and I’m sure you’re very hungry.” Trixie’s traitorous stomach growled loudly in agreement, and she defiantly raised her head, daring any of them to laugh.
Twilight’s horn glowed with magenta light, and a bowl of soup flew towards Trixie’s bedside. “Here,” said Princess Celestia. “I had the doctor looking after you send this up from the kitchens. Eat up my little pony, and don’t hesitate to ask for more when you’ve finished.” A loaf of fresh bread was also levitated towards her, and Trixie felt a smile come to her face when she saw that none of them were now giving her looks of distrust.
“Thank you,” she said, her horn now glowing with violet light as she grasped hold of the bowl of soup and spoon. “Trixie is…grateful for your kindness and understanding, Twilight Sparkle, but she…I must know. How did I get here? The last thing Trixie saw were those shadow things surrounding her.”
“Princess Celestia summoned us to Canterlot and had one of the Pegasus Guard captains assigned to get us,” Twilight Sparkle answered. “We saw a big flash of light below us and saw you surrounded by Heartless, so that’s when Captain Cloudhammer and his team flew us down to your rescue.”
Trixie paused in eating her soup to raise her eyebrow at Twilight. “Heartless?” she asked snidely. “Is that what we’re calling those things?”
“It’s what they are,” spoke up one of the other ponies in the room, a brown pegasus with a wildly spiked chocolate mane, “and unfortunately, you and Twilight are going to be seeing a lot more of them.”
“And you are?” Trixie asked.
“I’m Sora,” he replied, “and this is Kairi, Riku, and Rei. We came to Equestria by accident, but we’re here to deal with the Heartless, and we’d like you and Twilight to accompany us when we leave.”
Trixie narrowed her eyes. “And why should the Great and Powerful Trixie go with you?”
For some reason, all the ponies looked at the little filly. She sighed, took a deep breath, and came closer to Trixie. Rei glanced at Sora, then Twilight, and finally settled her gaze on Trixie. “About a month ago, I had a dream,” she said. “I was standing on a platform with a floor of stained glass in the middle of a dark place. Painted on it were me and my brother, and at first I didn’t know why I was having this dream, but then a voice spoke to me. It told me that dark days were ahead, and that my brother would need my help to overcome them. The voice showed me flashes of people that would be the key. I can’t really remember what they look like now, but I know that I know who they are, and the voice told me to gather them, the Keepers of the Art.”
“Keepers of the Art?” Rainbow Dash asked.
“Well what in the hay are they supposed to be?” Applejack wondered, glancing around.
Princess Celestia, however, gasped and leaned towards Rei. “Are you sure? Are you sure you were told to gather the Keepers?” Rei nodded, apparently surprised at the sudden earnest of the alicorn.
“Princess Celestia, what is it? What are the Keepers of the Art?” Twilight Sparkle asked.
“And what do Twilight Sparkle and Trixie have to do with them?” Trixie asked. She took another sip of her soup, but she had to admit that the filly’s tale was intriguing. Preposterous for all of this fuss because of a dream and a voice, but Celestia’s reaction to it was no doubt intriguing.
The Sun Princess turned a steady eye on her pupil. “The Keepers of the Art are said in legend to be six beings, united together in mastery of the arcane art that we call magic. Together, they can perform feats of magic impossible for a single unicorn to do alone, or even a hundred combined. Luna and I together would even be dwarfed by their combined power.”
“Really?” Trixie asked, the spoon dropping onto the white sheet and slowly beginning to stain it red. Princess Celestia nodded.
“Yes,” she said, “and it is also said that together they can divine the location of any magical artifact and summon it, or at least clear a path towards it, in an instant. They also uphold the universe’s flow of magic just by existing.”
Kairi nodded her head. “Yeah. Master Yen Sid said about the same thing to us. He also told us that new Guardians are born whenever the others eventually die, but that if all six were to be killed at once then the Realms of both Light and Darkness would be thrown into total chaos as magic went haywire without anyone to uphold it.”
“Soon after Rei had the dream, Heartless appeared on the Islands and tried to take her,” Sora said. “But we were able to fight them off, and Rei got a Keyblade during the fighting. I…I honestly didn’t want to believe that she was the only one who knew who the Guardians were; that my little sister was to be my key to connecting everything, but she is. Thanks to her we’ve already found one of them, and now you and Trixie bring our count up to three, Twilight.”
“You said, ‘Guardians’ just now,” Trixie said. “I thought that they were called ‘Keepers’.”
Sora smiled sheepishly. “Well, technically, yes. But, Keepers of the Art just doesn’t sound as cool or easy to understand as Guardians of Magic does, because that’s essentially what they are.”
“So Sora’s taken to calling them the Guardians of Magic,” Riku clarified.
“You hear that Twilight,” the baby dragon said. “You’re a Guardian of Magic! How cool is that?”
“But what makes you so sure that Trixie is one of them?” Trixie demanded before anypony else could speak. “Tell me you have more to go on than a filly’s dreams! It is true that Trixie’s talent is magic, but she has not the power of Twilight Sparkle or the princesses. Trixie cannot defeat an Ursa Major, or even an Ursa Minor, and has never channelled the magic of the universe before. Though Trixie has good mastery and understanding of magic, all she has for tricks are minor conjurations and illusions, though she has—”
A flash of light silenced Trixie as her voice continued to drop. In front of the mare hovered something that she had never truly seen before, but thought she glimpsed before fading into unconsciousness earlier.
“There was only one other thing that Master Yen Sid gave us to go off of when finding the Guardians besides Rei’s half-remembered dream vision,” Sora said. “Each of the Guardians has the potential to summon a Keyblade.”
-G-M-
So yes, Trixie has a Keyblade and Twilight will be getting one as well. The astute will note that this means that Zelda has one too.
Please leave your feedback if you wish, and I hope you’re all enjoying the story. 
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I was wondering what Trixie's role in this story would be. And now I know. Congrats on completely blindsiding me with the end there.
While it wasn't the most exciting chapter ever, it was a nice summary of everything that happened through KH II for those unfamiliar with the games. Personally, I like the summary you provided in this story much more than the long, drawn out explanations you gave back in the AoD part one.
Looking forward to more!
Aspicio, diluculo Infinitas Noctis.
Shadow Horizons
Thanks for the info dump, as a mostly non-Kingdom Hearts person it was definitely helpful backstory.
*Clap clap clap* One of my personal favorite crossovers is getting better and better! Keep it up!
Trixie gets to play as part of the role of this storry!
As a fan of MLP:FIM and KH I just find this fic amazing, but why didn't they use cure on Trixie
415192 I luled :D
Anywho, loving the world building. Even to those of us who played the games, this gives us your take on what's important and therefor plot relevant.
Also, I have to say I was hoping that Namine would look like Derpy but with normal eyes :/ Alas, she's still beautiful in the description
This is awesome
The plot is twisted so much that I just derped so bad
I think you're driving me insane
How About Gordon Freeman has a keyblade???
Kinda saw Trixie and Twilight's involvement coming after how much focus was on them. But, this means I'll be seeing more of my favorite characters! Though, I am a little disappointed that Trixie isn't as much of a braggart. I was hoping to see her character development from that to a more humble pony through this story. Instead, much of her development happened off screen. But, that's just me.
I'll be honest, the story of Kingdom Hearts frustrates the hell out of me. For someone who has only played the PS2 games, and not the myriad of portable games, I have no idea who Rei is. SquareEnix has this annoying habit of spreading out this series onto counsels that I don't own and having me do research to fill in the blanks. Is it really so hard to keep to one system and not have countless stories happen in between the main games? Bah!
Anyway, so far things are looking fairly interesting. I'll be keeping watch! Till then!
Edit: Oh, and is it just me, or are there way too many Keyblades?! I mean, they are suppose to be special, right? Now it seems that everyone and their pet pony gets one!
Thank you for the summary. Right before I read this chapter, I was wondering if I should have started looking for a playthrough again.
416067
She's in front of the god-empress of their entire species, beaten, sick, starving, and having recently been humiliated in two cities after her crushing defeat in Ponyville. If she were a braggart NOW she'd be a total fool and not worthy of respect. I'm sure once she gets back on her hooves she'll get her snark back.
416067
Well, there are Keyblade weilders, and Keyblade Masters. The original Xehanort was a Master, and going by the end of re:Coded, Sora and Riku will be tested for mastery soon.
Also, as Shire stated in the author's note, Rei is an OC.
i40.tinypic.com/bjbmvs.png Stalin and crew here with another installation of Stalinview!
i40.tinypic.com/bjbmvs.png Let's look at "Wielders and Keepers"!
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“Can you breathe fire?”
i40.tinypic.com/bjbmvs.png Just for a record, what types of heartless attacked Destiny Town with nobody of Shan Yu?
“Sora-nii-chan!” she shouted. “Look! He can breathe green fire! Green!” He laughed.
i39.tinypic.com/35bxab6.png I am confused. I thought Rei is Sora's "sister", but here is "HE" laughed.
“And I’m the only one she uses honourifics for. Doesn’t call Kairi ‘Kairi-chan’ or Riku ‘Riku-kun’ or Riku-san, or nee-san or nii-san, just me.”
i43.tinypic.com/14ux72x.png *sigh*
i40.tinypic.com/2wptjee.png Oh my god... So viabu..
Rei shook her head. “No, we do, it’s just that there aren’t a lot of them, they don’t talk, none are unicorns or pegasuses—I mean pegasi—and none of them have candy-coloured coats like you guys do.
i40.tinypic.com/2wptjee.png Oh please. Destiny island have no ponies. Radiant Garden or whatever the place she came from have no ponies. There is not even horse-based heartless (except Rider, which is Centaur)
"Doctor Checkup"
i40.tinypic.com/2wptjee.png Poor guy. He must've had harsh childhood
i39.tinypic.com/35bxab6.png *sniff*
i40.tinypic.com/bjbmvs.png By the way, Stalin likes that you made a proper thing with all this "animals care for themselves" stuff.
"people"
i40.tinypic.com/2wptjee.png ERROR! ERROR! UNINDEFENETE WORD!
"Keyblade of Captive Hearts"
i43.tinypic.com/14ux72x.png Keyblade of People's Hearts. It's called Keyblade of People's Hearts.
"Ansem"
i40.tinypic.com/2wptjee.png i40.tinypic.com/bjbmvs.png Stop calling him that! They are perfectly knows that Xehanort's heartless is not Ansem.
i40.tinypic.com/2wptjee.png Also, GIANT, HEAVY BLOCK OF TEXT!
There were once a group of thirteen"
You forgot about Xion 
i40.tinypic.com/bjbmvs.png Fourteen
i40.tinypic.com/bjbmvs.png And yeah, i know that Sora and crew dont know about her, but ROXAS do.
The three older ponies laughed. “We’ve got them living inside of us,” Sora explained, pointing a hoof at his chest. “We can talk to them telepathically and when Kairi and I are in close proximity they can talk to each other. We essentially have real alter-egos, and with a little effort Kairi and I can switch with Roxas and Naminé, and they’ll appear on the outside and have control of our bodies. We’ve been able to figure out so far that Roxas and Naminé have the ability to remain the dominant personality in control for as long as a week before they tire out and need to go back inside, but we’ve also learned that at any time Kairi or I can hijack their control and put them back.”
i40.tinypic.com/bjbmvs.png Ehh. I doubt that possibility, but since you explained why u did that, autor, i'll roll with it.
i43.tinypic.com/14ux72x.png Oh my god... They are swapping bodies...
i39.tinypic.com/35bxab6.png Finally, some explanation on OC's backstory.
i40.tinypic.com/bjbmvs.png By the way, Stalin thinks that your exposition of entire two first kingdom hearts (btw you forgot Chain of Memories) is a waste of time and space. There are a HUGE percent of readers of that story knows kIngom hearts well.
i40.tinypic.com/bjbmvs.png Ah, Trixie, Trixie. Stalin personally don't like her.
i42.tinypic.com/1r4u8n.png ...Guardians? You mean Keyblade Mast... whatever. I don't understand a half of it guard stuff. Let's roll with it.
i40.tinypic.com/bjbmvs.png Okay. That wraps up this chapter.
OVERVIEW:
i40.tinypic.com/bjbmvs.png Exposition on ANOTHER FANFIC's OC is helpful, although you needn't expose entire backstory of Kingdom Hearts. It just took too much space you could've filled with battles with Darksides.
i39.tinypic.com/35bxab6.png By the way, are you going to make World-specific heartless? Misha look forward to those.
Stay tuned to the next Stalinview!
416266
Perhaps what I would have liked to have seen was a Trixie not at the end of her ropes. A Trixie that's had some setbacks, but is still marginally successful. That way, she can justify in her mind that things aren't so bad and convince herself that she's still at the top of her game. I have read tons of stories where Trixie is at her lowest when she appears, which makes it easier for her to drop her guards and start being nice to everyone. Like here.
Call me crazy, but I love Trixie's character because she's a bitch. It gives her a defining character trait much different from the rest of the cast. I feel it adds a dynamic that keeps some conflict going and allows for more growth.
Shire Folk, don't take this as me hating your work or bemoaning that things aren't the way I want them. I'm just a guy on the internet with an opinion, for what it's worth. What you have here also works and I look forward to more of the story as it unfolds. I'm sure that what you have in store for us will shut me up and entertain just fine.
416269
Ah, I missed that in the notes. That's my bad. With how out-of-the-loop I've been with the whole mythos of Kingdom Hearts, it wouldn't have surprised me had Ria been a new character that I wasn't aware of.
Anyway, enough from me. Keep it up!
414888 I agree with this pony so keep up the great work.
416433
And you missed the end of what I said. Who's to say that with her newfound lofty position being a tender of all magic in existence, collectively more powerful than even the living deities of their entire race who control the very essence of the world and the skies, she's quite likely to get a good bit of it back.
Of course, it'd have to be toned down a good deal. Being a huge bitch in a group where you have to have harmony to be successful is pretty much dooming them all to failure. And last minute changes of heart are so cliche.
414761
Figured that that would surprise someponies on here. And yeah, I figured a few things out about summarizing when I wrote a ten page report on the entire history of the One Ring and how it came to be forged, including Sauron's involvement in the fall of Numenor.
414842 you're welcome.
414888 I shall!
415122 oh yeah, she does.
415936...hm, don't know. I'm pretty sure I've got a stowaway plan for Portal that I could use, but I don't know about actual Half-Life making it in.
416067, 416266, 416269 I see that you guys have been having your own conversation about Trixie and all that jazz, so I don't feel much need to comment besides mentioning that there used to be hundreds of Keyblade Wielders in ages past, so why can't there be a few more when it seems to be making a comeback?
416251 you're welcome.
416421 ah Stalin
... Here we go with a wall of text. The Heartless that attacked Destiny Islands in The Annals of Darkness: Light's Growth (specifically the island Dunash) were Shadows, Soldiers, Neoshadows, Legionnaires (custom Heartless from Gaul out of the Asterix comics), Assault Riders, Sahagins (based off of the aquatic Sahagan enemy from various Final Fantasy games), Large Bodies, Bolt Towers, and Rapid Thrusters. That he is referencing Sora because she is speaking to him. You don't need to change paragraphs all the time. Who says that Destiny Islands and Radiant Garden don't have ponies or horses? It's more likely that they have chocobos, but that doesn't meant that they can't have ponies or horses. 
eh? Keyblade of People's Hearts, Keyblade of Captive Hearts...I've been calling it the Keyblade of Captive Hearts (since it was created from the hearts of the six captive Princesses of Heart) for years, and my head canon on that isn't about to change. They know that, but they haven't gotten around to explaining that Ansem wasn't really Ansem yet. Organization XIII was never renamed Organization XIV! Xion was never a numbered member! Besides, NOBODY remembers Xion, except perhaps Namine, and in this fic's continuity Xion (at the moment) never did exist.
My exposition on the first two Kingdom Hearts games and a brief tidbit on Chain of Memories is only partially for the readers' benefit (since there have been comments thanking me for the recap); it's mostly for the benefit of the ponies, since they do not know the story of Kingdom Hearts. No, I don't mean Keyblade Masters, I mean Guardians of Magic: six beings who uphold all magic in the universe. They are the crux this story is based upon. Rei is different between Annals of Darkness and Guardians of Magic. In AoD, she's Sora's surrogate little sis and apprentice; in GoM she's Sora's biological little sis. Also, no Darksides were attacking the castle, so we don't have an epic battle just yet
. Don't worry though, they will come, as will world-specific Heartless. 
416525 thank you!
Thanks everyone for the comments and feedback. I hope I've answered all questions as best as I can without giving spoilers, and I hope you'll continue to read and enjoy Guardians of Magic!
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P.S. Twilight Sparkle is best pony.
418911
Destiny island can't have horses. Why? Cuz it is a small island where there iks no need for them. Make a parallel. Does Madagaskar have ponies? Does island... errr.. with that giant stone heads have ponies? No.
And Radiant Garden is A GIANT TOWN. There is no place for wild ponies, and no need to breed PONIES (need i remind you that PONIES were breeded to work in MINES where normal horses could'nt fit?)
418911 I have heard of Kingdom hearts, My brother plays it a lot as well. But I myself have never played the game nor know the stories. So I think you for the recap. Stories are meant for EVERYONE. Except Mature, those are only for the cool poeple. Anyways. Stories for everyone, so there does need a bit of history and info for those of us who want to read and not waste time playing a useless horrible game to get some story.
Now, onto the story. It is awesome, it is epic, and it needs more chapters, so get writing more!
You cuoud try dood.
420443 fc04.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2012/098/3/1/castle_on_destiny_islands_by_shire_folk-d4vet1o.jpg
Quality's not the best, but when you play through the 4th Day again in the prologue with Roxas and get to that cutscene, you will see that that's a castle. A castle, made of stone. STONE. They needed a quarry to get all of that stone, drag it into place, and build it. Therefore, beasts of burden, since castles aren't built too much in the modern era they seem to be living in. The islands are also large and mountainous, and we do not know how many of them there are. It's not cost-effective or efficient to have to trade with the mainland (however far away that may be) for metallic goods, so there are likely mines somewhere. They also need food. So there's got to be farms around too, and probably also ranches for their meat. It doesn't look like there's room before the mountains on this island, but that doesn't mean that there aren't others or other regions with the space to raise and breed horses. Taking in your parallels to Madagascar and Easter Island, neither of those islands really have civilization on them, but a similar mountainous archipelago like Japan
certainly has horses, as does Great Britain.
We've also only seen the town of Radiant Garden, and that it's surrounded by stone. Again, more stone. Also, stone for miles around. There's gotta be a place just past as far as the eye can see where there isn't stone and are grassy plains and fertile fields that can be used for agricultural purposes. They need to feed all these people in the town don't they? Radiant Garden also doesn't appear too mountainous in nature, so there should be plenty of room for wild horses, and there are surely mines around somewhere. Think of where you live. Are there any mines within ten or fifteen kilometers of your home? If the answer is no, does that still prevent you from ever having seen a pony or knowing what real ponies are?
I don't think about just the couple of places that we've seen in the canon. The worlds are a lot bigger than the games allow because there are so many of them. If we had just one world in a KH game (like only playing on Destiny Islands or Radiant Garden for the whole game), the world would be as big as a Final Fantasy world or (
) Skyrim! And Skyrim's even part of a much bigger world! I don't think that they're all tiny, isolated little places. We only get to see small portions of each place in the game because of plot, but they're all much larger worlds than what we've seen.
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420628
useless horrible game
USELESS HORRIBLE GAME
????
Okay, your opinion, but I don't know...you're reading an epic story about ponies crossed over with a "useless horrible game" that was created by the developers of Final Fantasy in which Mickey is a king and takes five levels of badassery, Donald Duck shoots lightning bolts at creatures made out of total darkness, and you get to fight alongside the Beast.
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421175
Dude, stone doesnt mean PONIES. Horses arent existed in australia before ppl brought them there. Ponies can't be EVERYWHERE, cuz that'd be just stupid...
420628
Congratulations! Stalin won't ever review your stories
Hey Shire Folk, can I toss in a request? I'd like to see a certain species show up. What do you know about Prinny?
"He's requesting a camio for us? D00d! That's awesome!"
"I know D00d, too cool!"
"I'd like to meet Fluttershy D00d. She sounds like she would make a better boss than Master Etna."
"D00d, who WOULDN'T make a better boss than Master Etna? Am I right?"
"Totally D00d, unless it's like an end boss or something. Master Etna is totally scarry D00d, give me ponies any day."
"Eat up my little pony"
Oh wow. You're jumping into the shipping right away, aren't you?
421202 Story is somewhat ok from what I have seen. That doesn't make it a bad game. But the gameplay does. Especially the games on the NDS and other handhelds. I like games for the story, not running back and forth doing little side things again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again, and again for levels and money. Just makes for a bad game and wasted hours of play. I might go watch a lets play of the games maybe if there is one.
Also, [you're reading an epic story about ponies crossed over with a "useless horrible game"] Story form, using your own imagination and not having to waste hours of leveling? Much better than most games out there. I know I liked the retelling of Final Fantasy 1 in stroy form than I ever did playing the actual game. Same with Metriod Fusion... Halo... Diablo... Doom... and many others...
421235 Jokes on you. I don't have stories.
Now I am confused.
Due to the fact that I have not read Annals of Darkness yet, but since you said that there are six Guardians of Magic and the Kingdom Hearts crew have already found three of them (First Zelda, then Twilight Sparkle, and Trixie) does that mean after this story is finished, will the MLP: FiM gang be featured in your original Kingdom Hearts story?
I'm sure you hear this a lot, (I probably said it too, but I can't remember) Try to keep your OC's out of Crossovers, and if you really want them there in some capacity, try to keep them from distracting from the main plot, or keep them off screen (so to speak).
I cringe a little bit every time I hear Rei say "Onii-chan" to the point where I'm actually skipping a large portion of dialog to not read her :/ She really is a useless character in this case ~
421232 I never, ever thought that I would say this, but you're too far stuck in the canon.
422404
422788 Alright, got it!
I'm on the level. Hours of gameplay devoted to leveling=
422859 The two fics aren't related at all. The only thing they share is one OC, and she's been altered.
422877 ...so no OCs? At all? You know that a Kingdom Hearts story itself is a huge crossover, and putting an OC into a Kingdom Hearts story automatically means that there's an OC in a crossover story? So... no OCs in KH fanfiction, is that right?
C'mon fellow bronies and pegasisters, love and tolerate. You've seen Rei for only two chapters, TWO, and she's already become The Scrappy basically just because she exists! Trixie was a total bitch in Boast Busters, and the Cutie Mark Crusaders are all little fillies like Rei is, and yet we ADORE them! Each new character in MLP has been well-received and has a following, even that water dragon in episode two whose moustache was ruined, Iron Will, and the forepony who was charging Fluttershy ten bits for a single cherry! Why is a new character in a fanfic suddenly so reviled? You guys are acting as if I told you I was going to kill off Aerith!!
I'm kidding. She's not going to die.
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423036
Heh, canons are only things that i am abiding.... Dude, i am frigging Stalin! The stalliion...
I really like Rei, I happen to think that she adds some nice background to Sora and rounds out the KH cast nicely. I really enjoy where the story is going so far and hope you keep up the good work.
423036
So does that mean that the MLP: FiM cast won't be making an appearance in the Annals of Darkness series after this story is complete?
425466
I don't recall saying that ponies appearing in Annals hinged upon the completion of this story...
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424909
Somepony who likes Rei!
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426293
I mean why not? every group needs a kid with a squeaky voice to make comic relief, she may not keep that childlike demeanor when they leave but for right now shes a little girl in a world of Technicolored talking ponies, she has the right to be hyper and excited. When done well (and you have) background on characters that isn't official canon still add to the story.
Im sorry if the wording isnt making much sents, iv worked 40 hours in 3 days with little sleep so i may edit or something after a bit of a nap.
426293
I haven't seen enough of Rei to make an opinion yet (so far, she doesn't seem so bad), but I don't have anything against original characters. It all depends on how the author handles them. I've read entire stories that were nothing but OC's, and I loved the heck out of them. Though, I will agree that there is a knee jerk reaction whenever they show up. I say that us readers should give the author more than a few chapters to see how things will go. And that includes me as well.
As for the Keyblade issue, I figured that there were more than one wielder in the past, due to the extended ending in Kingdom Hearts 2. That always rubbed me the wrong way, but hey, that's canon and there's not much I can do about that.
Keep at it!
Wait... I haven't read Annals of Darkness... but I'm just trying to understand what you're saying: Is this going to be the start of a standalone spinoff from it, or is there a precursor to this, or am I just interpreting what you're saying incorrectly?
(And I do plan on reading Annals of Darkness eventually... I just want to actually play KH first... which I'm in the process of doing)
434657
This is completely unrelated, this is completely unrelated, this is completely unrelated. And this is my punishment for having two Kingdom Hearts fics in which the same OC appears... I am never able to get across that the only similarity between them is a singular OC.
434854
I take it you can't read Tolkien either, with how he fills up an entire couple pages describing the Bree-land or almost a half-page telling us what the Prancing Pony looks like.
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435451 lol... I must have missed something along the way... I haven't read all the comments. And like I said, I haven't read Annals of Darkness, so I didn't know what kind of parallels could've been drawn across (or will be drawn across)
I find this a little more true when you talk about HOW Rei is connected to Sora in the comment just above.
Thanks for the response though. I was fairly sure that had been what you were doing, just had to double check
I like hat you'v put in your author's note, Over Stimulation of a 10 year old girl with pastel colored ponies. If whe is what most would call "girly" then I do not blame her for becoming over excited like a small child in a sugar rush... or one released upon Chuckie Cheese's. Her little nickname for Sora holds a slightly annoying, yet understandable "tip of the hat" to the Japanese origins of the characters of Riku, Sora and Kairi; explaining away the phrase with exposure to an Anime Channel paints a picture to for what a child may be inclined to do.
Anywho, I've found this story to be a fun little tidbit to carry around in my head an roll around for a bit. I wonder how the Ponies would react to seeing Pegasus now that I think about it. Kinda cute I think.
20% of this plot is now canon yes its happening
click the link if u don't believe me however its
KH dream drop spoilers so click at ur own risk
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and the kairi
Hey, just popping in after reading the 6th chapter in AOD to say that your characterization and buildup are absolutely top notch :) You should continue to be proud as pinkie about your success and skills
I...I...I...I...I...
I think I just found the holy grail of MLP fanfics...
Please, PLEASE tell me this will be continued!! I GOTTA HAVE MOREEEEEEE!!!!
I had a concept for one heckuva story myself... but this... I surrender. Forget my story.
"The evening star is bright enough, but the Milky Way—”
The Milky Way
So apparently Equestria is in our galaxy and, more importantly, Canterlot is somewhere in the Northern Hemisphere...
As an Australian I'm not very familiar with Polaris, but out of interest, can Virgo and the Little Dipper be seen at the same time or did you just choose two random star cluster? Also was Polaris chosen because of the Ursa Minor Constellation?
Also another peeve with the prologue was right at the end. Earlier in the chapter when the two princesses were interacting (which was cute) Luna repeatedly called Celestia Celly, so we know the pair do not stand for formalities between themselves, but at the end of the chapter when Luna is talking to Moondancer and Starshine she tells them to not bother with formalities, but then her parting words are: “I will be sure to have a long talk with Princess Celestia about this.”. I can understand not using Celly in front of subjects, but the Title Princess seems unnatural when referring to her own sister...
Chapter 1 was a typical first chapter, sure you did it better than most, but first chapters are rarely exciting reads. Interesting possibly, but rarely exciting.
But General Arrow... Is General a title or a name? Because Arrow is a pretty pathetic name. And if General was part of his name, then surely he would be Gen. General Arrow, unless Major Bright Flare was the other pony's name, which would make him Maj. Major Bright Flare, and I'm rambling.
The Point is, General Arrow is a terrible name.
Not much else to say about this chapter then, onward to Chapter 2
Firstly, Do you see Daring Do as Indiana Jones, or Harry Potter? Secondly WHAT DID SHINING ARMOUR'S LETTER SAY!?!?!?!? Is it a Chekhov's Gun????? And why does Celestia want Spike to come as well, they never bring him on their other adventures.
Trixie seems just as brash and abrasive as ever when we first saw her, but she seems to change drastically when speaking to the other in the infirmary, Did I miss something? Given the fact it'd 6am and I havent been to bed yet, probably. For this reason I'm going to end this comment/review/whatever now.
Hope to see more soon.
@Shire Folk
Just a quick point of intrest, is this story set during the main story of KH2, slightly after, like during Re:coded and Dream Drop Distance, or during KH3?
...What? I'm confused. Didn't Chain of Memories happen between KH1 and 2? And wasn't the whole Roxas prologue thing in 2 culminating in him going back into Sora? What happened to the two DS games, are they part of this continuity?
Also, can I make a request?
If the Guardians aren't all picked yet, can one of them be Fina the Silvite? Or perhaps Arche Klein?
438965 Lol. I'm not going to watch any clips from KH: DDD, and I won't give into temptation to watch the secret movie subbed. I shall wait until we get our July 31 release in North America... THEN I'LL LET SQUARE DEVOUR MY SOUL FOR FORTY-FIVE HOURS!!!
442380 Thank you very much.
442852 It will be continued. I don't stop until I'm done. Take a look at my other fic. It's... let's see, thirty chapters in the first volume, twenty three in the second, I'm on seventy two in the third part and there's a five chapter side fic that's part of the third part...and I'm still not done it...
Don't worry though, this fic will continue.
448720 Apparently so...
Yes. Virgo and the Little Dipper can be seen at the same time. Actually, finding the Big Dipper is a good way to find Virgo as well as the Little Dipper. And yes, Polaris was chosen because of Ursa Minor.
Well, she was still in front of her subjects, but she could just have easily said Celestia instead. Likely it was a bit of a slip on my part.
General is his rank. Yes, Arrow is a crappy name, but there's got to be ponies with bad names, right?
? Snips? Snails? Puppy dog tails?
I see Daring Do as Indie. Celestia also wants Spike because she is aware that she might need to send the Elements across Equestria, and having Spike along ensures a quick method of communication between herself and the Elements.
(Ahem) Princess Celestia is in the infirmary in front of her.
That should clear it up.
Yeah, you should go to sleep.
449641 The setting for this is a bit over a year after KH2. Re:Coded and Dream, Drop, Distance don't exist here. Remember the days before 358/2 Days, BBS, and Re:Coded came out? Act as if you found this story when there was no continuation past KH2 except for the King's letter and all it said was congrats.
450591 Refer to above. Yes, CoM did happen. Roxas merged with Sora. Namine merged with Kairi. Their consciousnesses remained, however, and the two Nobodies can talk to their Somebodies from within their hearts.
Sorry, all Guardians have been chosen.
May the Grace of the Valar Protect You
Shire Folk
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Don't know if my questions about Shining Armours letter was ignored because you overlooked it, or because you didn't want to give away an important plot point...
Is Trixie going to become jealous of Twilight and turn to evil in order to finally become better than her/ punish her for humiliating her all that time ago? She seems a fairly vindictive sort of character. Is there any point to asking these sort of questions, or will you just say wait and find out?
How long is this story going to be, 100k, 60k, 250k, any idea at all? How much of the story is already planned in your head? What role will the main 6 serve in this story, the Elements of Harmony seem a bit out of there league against the Heartless, and I can't imagine them getting much action. Basically, will this story focus on the Keybearers doing their thing with ponies along for the ride, or ponies being epic?
Oh and thank god the Keybearers were turned into ponies. Because it's you, I'll overlook an OC related to main characters, The fact that every man and his dog can get a keyblade*, and the fact that it's Kingdom Hearts Fanfiction (which I've found, as a rule of thumb, to be pretty awful). But nothing can justify Human in Equestria. (Except maybe Rorschach).
Your Headcannon universe, where is it located? In a Galaxy far far away? A different universe? An Alternate Milky way? One Galaxy? Or the entire universe/multiverse? And is there a limit to to the range of dragon fire messages? How fast does a message sent via dragon fire travel? Instantly, or the speed of light, the latter having serious implication if they travel out of the solar system? I need to know these things so I can nitpick the story later.
And what do you call RarityxRiku? Rariku?
Oh dear. This is why I could never write my own story. I got distracted before I even finished a comment.... It's been like 2 hours between now and the previous paragraph. I've totally forgotten what I was going to say...
I guess I'll just finish with some positive re-enforcement: I don't generally bother telling you how good your work is, because I feel as though it goes without saying.
EDIT: I just saw an asterisk and remembered why it was there. Okay, the part about everyone getting keyblades was not me saying I think you gave too many keyblades out, rather it was an extension of the bad fanfiction trope of KH, where every author gives there Mary Sue Self-Insert a keyblade, and gives every character they like one as well.
See. I like you so much I'll even overlook your OC Keybearer who uses Japanese honourifics, and is related to Sora. I trust your judgement with her.