After Rarity leaves for a Fashion tour Spike has to deal with life without her for a year. And what happens when Rarity returns with a big surprise that will change everything.
This is my first FIC.
Sorry I had to finish this story like this, I recently became a Marine and this story is SOO outdated that it is hard to try to write something that I had intended to be about the show 6 years ago. So much has changed that this story would fall flat if I continued it with the logic of 2013
Chapters (5)
Question! Before I begin reading, is their Spilight?
I know I shouldn't ask is this a sparity?
O.O oh well,, dun worry spike sweetie belle is still available :)
You have my interest and tentative fave star. Let's see if you can keep it with future chapters
sorry about the confusion if this is spilight or sparity my laptop was acting up and would not let me put it in the specific folder. but to answer the question this is spilight
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URA!
More Spilight is always a good thing!
please continue
This is good. Let's see what happens next.
Feels like I read this one story before.... anyway I like the story so please as you may....
nice chapter
poor Rainbow, i hope it was nothing... nefarious
Good stuff man
moar please
3739994 You have, this is the same premise as Always Together Besides Me and Forever In My Heart.
Quick comment: Always make sure the first sentence is free of errors, it's the first impression for the audience and whether people will continue you reading. I highly doubt it was the begging of summer instead of the beginning
3749690 ya thats the story that kinda inspired me to write this
3750360 thank you for pointing that out
hey guy im sorry for the delay but im having a serious writers block.
i dont know when ill get the next chapter out but by the looks of it it's probably not going to be any time soon
Its review time!
Let me first tell you, I like this story, you are doing good for your first fic
I must confess that after reading chapter 1 I had the impression that action is happening a little too fast...but it seems that its no longer the problem in this chapter which is improvement because pacing is very important.
There might be some errors here and there, but I'm not one to talk as english isn't my first language
However I did caught one thing you probably will want to change:
I'm pretty sure you didn't mean witch as in evil sorceress, you probably wanted to use which
Apart from that one mistake, you might add some "," during dialogues. Think of them as a slight pause during conversation between characters, so they don't speak everything in one breath
Keep up good work!
4005298 thanks man that really means a lot to me.
and thanks for pointing out that mistake
Don't worry i plan on getting this next chapter up by the end of the month.
.......or not
Next chapter
Thumb down for poor punctuation.
You don't always get the one you love.
If Spike does have some Cider, it'd probably still take a lot to affect him, he's bigger than ponies and reptiles generally have better immune systems.
You have my full attention friend.
Not bad I like it lol.
Enjoying the story so far, just a heads up it's shelf, shelves and re-shelving.
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And that is why English and i don't get along
Enjoy the reading, i can't waiting for the next
This is going to be fun.
I was waiting for this chapter, thanks bro!
The story is great, my only grievance is that this is the first annually updated story I've ever seen not accounting Christmas stories.
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i am trying to update this story way more often than once a year but irl responsibilities come first.
Do what you can everyone understands irl stuff comes first. They just get a little antsy once in awhile. I like the story so far.
It's something and that's good enough
Sad I couldn't read that in new chapters, but thanks for trying and letting us know. Later!
well at least u ended it even though it wasn't the end we were all hoping for.