Woohoo!

So, this is going to be the prologue for every Ponyfall story?

Sweet!

>>434377434377

Not entirely. Each will focus on a different character, but the confrontation with Discord will look similar in each if the showdown is rendered as fact. For Rarity's version, we're going to opt to include it as a flashback of Rarity's so we can claim an imperfect narrator if the details don't mesh perfectly with the others.

>>434398434398 Well, of course, and some ponies might not even be anywhere near Ground "Negative One", as it were. I just simply meant that, while the details might not match up perfectly - as if you'd copy-pasta'd it from somewhere - they'd still stay true to each other in form. They might not be the same hips, but they wear the same pants. To completely destroy a movie I've never watched by using it as an analogy.

The movie, btw, is the Brotherhood of the venturing jockstrap. But gender-swapped.

i just realized something....

its going to be a horrible day when MLP:FiM is canceled...

>>434518434518 Don't you dare speek of such things!

>>434518434518

Us Bronies will never let the show die! Should it end, we'll still have an incredibly inspired and talented community, bursting with fics, music, and animations. Never will it end! EVAR. Seriously, if it does I'm gonna go raid hasbro and force them to make more.

Woah...

Now you just gotta add the 1st chapter again.

Me gusta.  Considerably better written than the first chapter.  Have a mustache.  

That's just, wow. I wuv dis sooooooooo much! Seriously, it makes it all so much cooler!

MISA LIKES!!

it is better than the original so pretty cool I guess

keep up the good work!

nice prolouge. can't wait for updated ch. 1

OSSIM POSSIM! I've been waiting so long for this. Can't wait for chapter one!

ok, question time, will Rainbow Dash have wings this time around? personally I think she should as (aside from her phobia of clothing) her wings are her most redeeming quality, plus it would help with convincing humans she's telling the truth...or they might just think she used photoshop...in real life

What happened to boob squeezing?

>>443095443095

I hope it's gone forever

Really, the style isn't bad so Silverness, if your rewriting it PLEASE skip that part and maybe cover the girl instead of staring. This way your selfinsert will become much more likable

I wanna write one 4 derpy + awesome prologue

Hey, Silverness here!  Finally, Chapter One is done and now posted here.  If you notice any thoughts that need to be italicized, tell me because the italics didn't transfer right from google docs to fimfiction.  So enjoy Chapter One! AND give Bridgebrain, my pre-reader some credit along with Ponyaddict and TheSlorg (when he had time), but Bridgebrain did most of the work

Oh cool, does this mean the quality control issues have all been sorted out?

>>577914577914 Yup, we're supposed to get the chapter reviewed three times before posting it up.  Bridgebrain checked it all three times so yeah.  Also, we got things sorted out

finally

nice.

>>577965577965 Yes, finally lol

I wonder what a rainbow milkshake tastes like, spicy? (Wink)

Is it bad that I thought of something completely different when he said The Milkshake club?

>>578029578029 Haha, I think I know what you meant, but yeah I got that a few times

all I can say is, ITS ABOUT DAMN TIME! lol excellent chapter btw, I trust we can expect more regular updates? (I hope? pls?)

yo just saying but "that want beat the crap outta me." should be that want to....hope that helps

>>578075578075 I'll try to do regular updates (Yes, I hope the updates wont be monthly, possibly a week or two updates)

>>578089578089 Thanks! google docs screwed up some of the wording when I transferred it over

Didn't I already read this?

>>578168578168 Some of it is redone, like some major and minor details

So awesome that the revised version is now out!  Now... I... want... MOAR!

Keep up the swag.

At long last

Having crazy thoughts is only funny in the Discord story.

>>578341578341 Exactly Don't worry, Cody rarely has crazy thoughts

I'm kinda mad.  Why?  Because for a month or so none of my favorite stories have been updated.  So when I saw the 1 next to the gold star I felt then I read the chapter and was I Read this already.  I know you spent a long time on this and all but I am

>>578694578694 Don't worry, I was already working on Chapter Two and have ideas for it already, I'll start working on it as soon as possible

Okay, Cody is gonna get the crap beat out of him by Rainbow Dash.  Ironic because that's his favorite pony beating him up, and again ironic because he just escaped being pancaked by a couple football jocks.  Plus, I'm starting a story on GDocs about me finding Spitfire.  No nudity, I find her in her Wonderbolts outfit.

Why didn't he just leave her on the porch and then open the back door from the inside of the house?

I can't wait til' the next chapter when he get's his ass WHOOPED!

Say, I noticed your a fan of a certain tense (the dreaded present tense) and I won't lie, I hate it. I hate present tense (the past tense system is a lot more professional, in my opinion, and results in an easier to comprehend story. Maybe that's just because EVERY book I've ever read is in past tense but still... Anyway, nice chapter and I hope it gets out soon.

This is good.

>>579177579177 I actually didn't have this at present tense at first, my pre-reader told me that since it's happening and your seeing it, its present tense

>>578799578799 That sounds interesting. Are you with the Ponyfall crew?

>>578796578796

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YAY!!! The repost I've been waiting for!

Keep it coming.

Finally! I thought it was just sitting in my favorites for nothing!

>>579203579203 Well, I mean, you're conveying a story, a message, you're telling the reader something, the reader wasn't nescesarily there in the moment, as it happened, so it wouldn't really be in the present tense, as far as I know, but then I'm in grade nine and I only read 0.5 four-hundred page books a day, so what do I know?

>>579273579273 Same grade and I have no idea why either *shrugs* but he is a pre-reader and did a pretty nice job doing it though

>>579177579177 MY GOD, SOME ONE WHO UNDERSTANDS ME

I'm eager to find out where this one is going

... although, I gotta agree with Jaohni on this one. The present-tense makes it a bit hard to read. I usually prefer past-tense with the omniscient third-person perspective. I'd say you should probably stick with what you have though. Seems like you put a lot of work into getting this chapter together. If I were the author, then another re-write would probably cause a severe damper on my mood.

>>577923577923

Why did you rewrite the chapter?

I swear I've read this before...?

>>579582579582 I prefer past-tense too really

>>579781579781 It was part of the "Save Ponyfall" thing and all of us had to do it (some major and minor details were rewritten)

>>579801579801 Yeah, this is the rewritten Chapter One, it still has some of the details from the old chapter, but I did modifications on it (along with pre-reader help)

>>578694578694 Well, if you actually tried reading it, you would know that he made it better.

>>579992579992 I did... kinda I read little less than half than kind of skimmed for something different.  To be honest I liked it the first time.

>>580005580005 No, read the whole damn thing. It's way better, because toward the end is where most of the changes were made.

didnt this have several chapters before???

all the ponyfall fics have taken a wonderful increase in quality, phew!

>>579236579236  No, apparently they're not accepting new authors, so I'm letting the author of Misty Mountains critique.

>>579814579814

Oh, you mean the scene with the.....

First off. I notice that there is no boob squeezing XD

Chapter 1, we meet again...

I'm sorry to have to say this, but your a whore

>>577923577923 Yeah, um... You might want to get it proofread again. And by CheeseDeluxe. No offense to Bridgebrain, but he missed a lot of stuff, not so much spelling as typographal errors and sme grammar issues. Also, you repeat words a lot, there's multiple run on sentences, and you cuss WAY too much. Not trying to be mean, I like your work, just... Refine it.

>>580005580005 Your picture is scary. Where did you get it?

>>578799578799 What is the story called. Could I help proof-read it?

>>581991581991

pfffffft that's not even the main issue here

>>582283582283  It's on GDocs, called Blazing Fire, basically a Ponyfall-esque story where I find Spitfire.  However, the group isn't accepting authors at the moment, so I'm stuck working with the author of Misty Mountains.

>>579273579273 I wish I could do that... all my books that are 400 pages or less sorta finish in like four hours, no enjoyment in that...

>>582462582462 To be fair, I get up every half an hour and practice martial arts for 10 minutes, so there's that

>>582283582283 I googled it

>>582285582285 Then what is...?

>>582941582941 He seriously missed things? That's probably due to him being distracted...

-Chase scene was rewritten a bit

-Beginning was rewritten a bit

-No bangs (only one)

-Finding Scene was rewritten (MAJOR)

-From the finding scene onwards was rewritten (Major/Minor)

Note: Now... I'm going to go lay my head in a pillow and sleep because I just got back from a trip and I'm tired

>>579273579273 Meh, it was a spur of the moment decision really. There were a lot of tense shifts going on, so I had him choose one. While I prefer the past tense too, I was tired and didn't question it, and was halfway through conjugating the chapter before I realized what I was doing. Would have delayed things even further to reformat. Oh well, present tense is underutilized in todays day and age, it deserves at least the occasional flexing. Hope you enjoy it anyways.

>>581991581991 Point out the things I missed if you would. Or are you trolling? Also *some

>>584062584062 I'm sure I missed a few things, but remember, Dashian is an obnoxious troll normally (whether he is being one right now or not is questionable.) Don't feed the trolls if you can avoid it.

>>587779587779 Well, it's just kinda hard to pr anyway (Nooffense to Silverness's writing skill), due to it being VERY erroneous. One of the main problems was the fluctuating prose. Lots of purple prose when talking about a milkshake store, but skipping details when speaking of the girl fallen from the sky. Also, you missed lots of repeated words. For example, ""Salt should wake her up, it has a small trace of ammonia gas that wakes up people that are unconscious,” I said, remembering my biology paper about ammonia." just 'biology paper' would have been fine. Also, you missed a blatant slash directly after a period near the beginning. And a few grammar errors. The spelling was great, though.

>>587799587799 Ah. That kind of duplication. There was a lot of that, but I left some for clarity's sake. See if you can find the slash though, and we'll fix it. Sorry for calling you a troll when you were being helpful Friends?

>>587813587813 Friends. And just look around the time he tips the trash cans.

wants to get into a house he lives in, breaks down door. Y U NO USE KEYS!? uses water to try and wake her up, slowly pours out a pitcher full of water on her head. Y U NO USE SPLASH CUP!?!? Cody, Y U NO THINK!?

okay, I just hope the next chapter doesn't take more than a month to update...

oh no Dash is mad, this wont be pleasant for Cody, great chapter tho, cant wait for more

This is not going to end well. The CMC is annoying, but they are little girls. Dash is downright dangerous

So, I kinda feel bad now. This has been updated for just over a week and I just now got around to reading it. *sigh* Oh where has my loyalty gone? *fake tear*

Ok, I am a big fan of the Ponyfall stuff, and I was extremely excited when I saw one for Rainbow. So, how is chapter 2 coming along? I do want you to hurry and finish it, but I also want it to be good, so I don't want to rush it.  Please put me out of my misery and POST!!!

>>671130671130 Chapter Two is done, but it needs to be checked first

Also, Chapter Three is done, but it's in the same boat as Two

So don't worry, once they are checked, I shall put them up

>>672886672886 that's good to hear. I am really enjoying these stories, and their lack of updates lately has had me worried. Good to know they're not on some unnannunced hiatus. I look forward to your next update.

>>674559674559 Yeah, I'm not putting it on hiatus and good to hear

Chapter Two is up   There are some significant changes in this chapter, so yup enjoy

To tell you the truth John, I'm surprised.

>>696088696088 You're surprised? (and who is this John you speak of?)

Hmm, Payment not enough. I request more, as I have basically already read this chapter.

As new payment, I request a third chapter. Naow.

Good Day sir.

-Master Chief in a Tutu

Wow, she sure sounds pissed.  By the way, if for any reason they pass over where I live, tell Dash I said hi, k?

By his lack of reaction to rainbows nudity.

(and it was a reference to something)

>>696098696098 Oh don't worry, I have Chapter Three done already I just need to make it longer and add some more details

>>696101696101 Sure

>>696105696105 Oh that, Cody is more worried about why is there a pony turned human is house (he is worried about the nudity though, I did mention it in this chapter )

Alright, and if she wants to, she can hang out at my house anytime.  I'm always up for anything, plus she can meet my parents.

>>696145696145 Dreamer.

Nah, I kid; and you're right, she'd be an awesome GF.

I, for one, am interested in Rainbow's reaction when she sees My Little Pony. Who wants to bet that she slugs Cody again?

Holy shit this updated. Pretty good, looking forward to where this is going.

DAMN HE GOT KICKED IN THE FACE!!!!

this is going to be cool, too bad most of the other ponyfall stories havnt been updated since teh day they were posted.

Well, I'd like to announce that Chapter Three was done after Two was finished, but I'm adding some more stuff so it can be longer   I'll try and finish it as fast as I can

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WHEE!!!! New chapter!. Please hurry up with chapter three.

Ok, this guy bought into the whole "Rainbow Dash was turned human" thing way too fast.

By simply referencing the show he almost instantly believes her. The Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie story made much more sense. It took the guy more than a day, and some Pinkie Pie crazyness before he thought they were more than drug addled fans.

>>696300696300 Would you want to get kicked and punched?  Cody decided to act fast remember that, it was either that or simply just going with it

>>696309696309

I'd consider agreeing to whatever she said until she let me up, then first chance I got I'd run outside yelling that a crazy naked chick was trying to kill me.  And considering a promise to get her wings back was promptly met with running away, she'd probably give chase letting everyone outside see her attack again.

Idiot for honestly believing her.... that would be extremely stupid. Like, suicidal, stupid.