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SunDaggerxX


there's always a reason for things to be right, you just need to open your eyes and find those reasons

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As a filly, Ditzy never knew why she was teased, but as she grew older she realized she different from everypony else, and still doesn't exactly know how to deal with it. Join us as we tell a tale of a simple grey mailmare turning something that was thought to be ugly and a disgrace into something beautiful.

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I actually like where this is going! You have earned a like and a favorite :pinkiehappy:

Like and faved:twilightsmile:

As Ditzy (you need to add was) trotting down a dirt road she let out a small sigh. This wasn't the first time she had dropped something on another pony, or messed up a mailbox, or derped up anything. It was an average day when she messed up something without even knowing she did, and it was all because of her stupid eye lazy.

Normally, she didn't take it into much consideration. It was apart of her and she had to live with it, no matter how annoying it was. But lately, her lazy eye has been causing her more trouble. She had lost her second job as a moving pony because of her little.. accident with the couch and she was barely making enough bits to pay the bills and support her little filly, Dinky.

Not only was it become a health hazard, the ponies in Ponyville treated her differently. Some treat her like she was stupid, or she couldn't handle some things because they seemed to "complex" for her. Other ponies bullied her and called her "Derpy" because she eyesight wasn't the best, and because was usually bumping into things. Hay, Ditzy would put bits on it that ninety percent of Ponyville didn't even know her real name, just that rude nickname that some bullies in flight school gave her.

This paragraph was just too long, so I broke it up for you!

The story, though sort of short and no real direction as of yet, had a gentle sweetness to it. I can't wait to see more!

3697004 Thank you! Sorry about the long paragraph, this was really my first time typing and my stupid roommate wouldn't let use the computer for a week...

3698902 You're welcome! It's just more pleasing to the eye when all of the paragraphs are about the same length. This is a great start to the story. This is the only thing you should change so far. I'd like to see where this goes!

3706260 Ditzy is like best pony :rainbowkiss: o I await moar

Well nopony's perfect(more a comment on Ditzy than anything else and how ponies need to be more forgiving of her than they are). A little error in word order near the end(You say "eye lazy" and I think you meant "lazy eye"... maybe, I guess you might have done that intentionally... so if that's the case I apologize.) still whatever error or lack there of is more than forgivable when such a short chapter and a synopsis get me hooked enough to want to read more.

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