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John Bon Pony. 321111

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    John Bon Pony.'s Stories (3)

    • Until you met her
      (2nd Person Fic. You X Rainbow Dash.) How can a rainbow brighten your life?

      37,072 words · 21,848 views · 1,187 likes · 28 dislikes
    • The Doctor is Dying.
      The Doctor says goodbye.
      4,313 words · 523 views · 28 likes · 3 dislikes
    • Twilight and the Wind-Beasts.
      Sometimes, somethings should just be left where you found them
      5,096 words · 211 views · 7 likes · 2 dislikes
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    Carousel Boutique was a shop where many ponies purchased their more “Fancy” clothing. The owner, one “Rarity”, made every garment herself and took great pleasure in mentioning so whenever ever a potential customer came in. Her designs were so well known that your mother was a frequent patron of the store, often leaving for hours and coming back with her saddle bags almost bursting at the seams from all the new dresses and clothing she had purchased. You had never been by the shop yourself, but you were sure that you mother had mentioned you in hopes that she could help you make friends.  Normally you would be mildly irritated at the idea of having to speak to a pony who knew who you were and about your wealthy lineage, but given how you were on a rather important errand, you could see how it might come in handy.

    As you approach the shop you see a young filly unicorn sitting on out front of the door, looking very dejected and sad. She lets out a long, heavy sigh as you approach her and clear your throat.

    “Ahem…”

    The filly looks up at you in surprise. “Oh… Hi there. Are you looking for my sister Rarity? She isn’t seeing anyone today.”

    You a bit surprised. “What? Why not?”

    The little unicorn sighs again, placing her forehooves against her cheeks as she slumps down and stares ahead with a bored expression. “She’s in one of her moods.  One of her regular customers sent her a dress for alterations and apparently they are sooo important that she has been running around all day freaking out about the whole. She kicked me out a little while ago ‘cause she said I was being “to distracting”.

    You look at the unicorn then at one of the shop windows. Through it you see who you assume is Rairty, frantically stitching and mending a black garment. Every so often she steps back to get a better look at her creation, only to let out a short scream and tear the pieces off that she had just put on.  It would be funny if her intensity wasn’t so scary. Her Amethyst mane was disheveled and messy, and her eyes had large bags under them. She muttered to herself as she tried desperately to finish her customers order, only t shriek and start over again.

    “Um... Wow… that’s… unnerving…”

    The little unicorn walks over to you and props herself up against the wall, craning her neck to look through the window. “Yeah… she’ll cool down once she finishes.”

    “How long will that be?”

    The unicorn shrugs. “I dunno. She can go on for hours like this.”

    You groan. “Great… and I was making such good time to.” You sigh and set your saddle bags on the ground, rummaging through them and producing your list. You hold it in your teeth and point at the opal dust so the little unicorn can see it.

    “Oh! Are you here for Nurse Red Heart? I can let you in if it’s an emergency!” She jumps down from the window and runs to the door, opening it and hollering to her sister.

    “Hey sis! Somepony is here for Nurse Red Heart!”

    Through the window you watch as Rarity tenses up in surprise as her sister shouts for her. She sighs in frustration before removing the measuring tape that is around her neck and looks out the window at you. For a moment, you just smile and wave before she zips off to the side and come running up next you.

    “I am so dreadfully sorry you had to wait out here! Please, come inside and I shall have you ready to go in no time!”

    Even though her attitude has changed, you can still see that the unicorn is stressed. Never the less, you move the thought of asking her is she is ok out of your mind and simply follow her inside.

    “Please, do excuse the mess… I have been under A LOT of pressure to get this dress finished and for the life of me I simply cannot get it to work!”

    She isn’t lying when she says mess. What you thought would be a glamorous and fancy boutique turns out to be a boutique with over turned mannequins, reams of fabric, and thin papered pattern cutouts of various shapes, all of which are strewn about the store. You wonder for a moment if this is the same Boutique that your mother told you about.

    “It’s alright… it’s got a… lived in… feel to it.” You try your best not to sound sarcastic.

    “If by “Lived in” you are referring to the squalor of some diamond dog hovel, then yes, it is much lived in. Now, what can I get for you? Sweetie Bell said you were here for Nurse Red Heart?”

    You nod and show here the list. “Yeah, I need opal dust, and I was told I can get it from you.”

    Rarity’s horn glows brightly as the list is whisked away from your hooves and brought to hover in front of the white unicorns face. “Ah yes, this will only take a moment. Just take a seat somewhere and be careful not to touch anything.”

    With that, Rarity saunters off through a door to the back of the building where you guess she has what you are after.  Rather than stand around you move a roll fabric from a small chair and sit down, looking around the room. Your eyes stop and rest upon the piece Rarity was working on. It’s the same black color and design as the one your mother owns back home. Your concentration breaks as Rarity returns, several opal gems and a rough stone levitating just above her head.

    “Sorry, but this may take a while. My sister and her friends thought it would be fun to see if they were “Gem Shapers” and use my best grinding stones. Needless to say I am left with only this dull one. It will do the job, but it will be longer than I anticipated.”

    “Oh... that’s alright… I can spare the time...” you blush and chuckle. You wish you could tell her to hurry up, but she was stressed enough. You look around the room again as Rarity set’s to work grinding away when you come across a picture hanging on the wall; You get up and move closer for a better look. On it you see a group of six ponies, one of them being Rainbow Dash.  Under the picture is small, recently polished plaque that reads “My best friends.”

    “Huh… what are the odds?”

    Rarity looks up from her grinding. “Did you say something?”

    “Oh, uh… sorry. I was just looking at this picture here… one of my friends is in it.”

    “Oh is that so?” Rarity resumes her grinding but keeps her gaze fixed on you. “And who is that?”

    “Rainbow Dash. We met a few days ago.”

    Rarity stops grinding. You look over to see why the sound has ceased, and catch the glamorous pony with a sly smile on her face.

    “Ohhh…”

    You look around for a second. “What’s “Ohhhhh…”?”

    “So YOU’RE the “Special Friend”

    You stand in place, confused. “I am?”

    With a slight giggle, Rarity stands up from her set, laying the grinding stone and the gems to the side. “Rainbow Dash had lunch with me and Twilight Sparkle the other day. She talked all about this new pony that she had met. She said some very nice things about you.”

    “Oh... oh really?”

    Rarity stood by your side, looking at the picture with you. “I’ll let you in on a little secret. Rainbow Dash has never had a lot of luck with relationships. I mean sure, the girl has had her fair share of one night stands and all, but when it comes to the long term, the poor girl just hasn’t been able to get a bite.”

    “Soo… she likes me?” You’re a little nervous asking, afraid of what the answer might me.

    “Oh no, she doesn’t like you.”

    Your heart sinks. “O-oh…”

    “She ADORES you!”

    Now you’re confused. “I’m sorry… come again?”

    Rarity smiles and at you. “She talked about you like you were the Wonder Bolts. She went on and on about how good looking you were, how much you enjoyed the show… she even told us a story about how you climbed a tree to get a doll down and that’s how she fell for you.”

    You blush. “She told me how she felt the other night… but I wasn’t sure if it was her talking or the result of being caught in the storm for an hour… She really said that?”

    Rarity nodded. “You’re all she talked about, in that puppy dogs and sunshine kind of way. She adores you; be good to her.”

    You feel an immense sense of pride well up inside you. “I… I will.”

    Rarity lowers her gaze and looks at you seriously. “I mean it. Don’t break her heart”

    You nod your head in understanding.  “I won’t… promise. Truth is, I really like her to.”

    Rarity smiles, patting you on the back as she returns to her work at grinding the gem down to dust. “So...From what you said about Rainbow Dash being out in last night’s storm for an hour, I assume that this is for her?”

    You nod. “Yeah.. . She got caught in it after weather detail and ended up at my place. She’s still there, her friend Fluttershy is tending to her while I get the ingredients for Nurse Red Heart.”

    Rarity nods, then curses under her breath. She quickly apologizes for what she calls “Unladylike behavior” before setting the grinding stone down.”

    “I’m terribly sorry to ask this of you, but I need to have my stone sharpened. Over at the library lives my friend Twilight Sparkle and her companion Spike. Could you be a dear and take this stone over to him and ask him to sharpen it for me? Otherwise I don’t know how long it will take to grind these gems, and I don’t want to make you wait any longer then you have to.” Rarity bats her long lashes a couple of times, as if somehow doing so would influence what your response was.

    “Yeah, sure. No problem. I have to head over there anyways and pick up a book for the nurse, so this works out perfectly.” You take the grinding stone from the pony and place it in your bag. You say your goodbyes and head to the door with your next destination in mind when Rarity stops you.

    “I’m… I’m sorry to ask you this as you are trying to leave, but I didn’t catch your name.”

    You sigh before responding.

    Comments ( 50 )

    #1 · 80w, 4d ago · · ·
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    :rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkisscan't wait to read it

    #2 · 80w, 4d ago · · ·
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    The plot thickens...

    #3 · 80w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I can't wait til tomorrow!  This is so good, one of my favorite fics

    #4 · 80w, 4d ago · · ·
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    whats his name?

    #5 · 80w, 4d ago · · ·
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    This chapter was very short :fluttercry: oh well I guess ill just have to be... Patient *shudders*

    #6 · 80w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>22061 Calm down. You can do this I believe in you. you just have to be strong.

    #7 · 80w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I see what you did there with your mass effect references :rainbowkiss:

    #8 · 80w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Damn... Rarity STILL scares the living day-lights outta me!!

    ...and not Just because Im a girl who HATES dresses btw.

    I mean Really! She freaks me out sometimes xD but in a good way.:scootangel:

    #9 · 80w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Today is a double update correct? :pinkiehappy:

    #10 · 80w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Nevermind. I'll just go back into depression now >_>

    #11 · 80w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Meh, heh, Do you know who ate all the doughnuts? :duck::trixieshiftright:

    #12 · 80w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>22060

    He seems to be building it to put you in the guy shoes, giving a name would ruin that

    #13 · 80w, 4d ago · · ·
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    It was a bit shorter, but still liked it. :ajsmug:

    What will happen after the errands? :duck:

    All the ponies gathered around to bed, (lol) waiting for him? :rainbowlaugh:

    That will be pretty funny if you wrote it (lol again)

    Incest? No!

    Inception? Yeah!

    :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

    I can't stop laughing for some reason! :rainbowlaugh:

    #14 · 80w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Started reading this fic this morning, gets updated this evening.

    manface.jpg

    (Also this might be the best RD fic i've ever read, just sayin :rainbowkiss: )

    #15 · 80w, 4d ago · · ·
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    *sees update* *SQUEE* Okay time 2 read :3

    #16 · 80w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Awwww. why must i read so fast :raritycry: now i need to sleep, i hope it gets updated while in in my own ponyville....wait, why am i still typing that......ignore that last part  :derpyderp1: :derpyderp2:

    #17 · 80w, 4d ago · · ·
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    NNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOGREATCHAPTEROOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO >_> AMAZING chapter but NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO its over ;__; ;_; ;_: :applecry: :applecry: :applecry: :applecry: This ship is so awesome i just cant bring myself 2 read somehthing else atm :\ butttt...i guess ill be patient *shudders*

    #18 · 80w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>22060 It's in second-pony. The author uses "you" a lot. I'm sure no-one knows your name better than you.

    Anyway, a few grammatical mistakes, but everything else was fine; it's still enjoyable to read, and I'm looking forward to how it turns out. Keep it up.

    #19 · 80w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Yay, updates are always fun.

    #20 · 80w, 4d ago · · ·
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    The goodness continues.:pinkiehappy:

    #21 · 80w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Aaaaaaaaaaand que Rarity freak-out in THREE! TWO! ONE! ACTION! ... ... ... Aaaaaaaaaaand CUT! *Checks the gate* ... We have liftoff! That's a wrap!

    (In all seriousness though, there are several typos and whatnot that need ti be fixed, but one is afraid you'll have to wait until Trevor can access his laptop. Ones phone just doesn't cut it when trying to help make changes...)

    ~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

    #22 · 80w, 3d ago · · ·
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    aaaahhh yes... his name...

    #23 · 80w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Yay,update.:pinkiehappy:

    #24 · 80w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>22060 well whats your name, its seems to be meant to put you in his hooves:derpytongue2:

    #25 · 80w, 3d ago · · ·
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    This is so amazing, I love this story :D :pinkiehappy:

    #26 · 80w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I ADORE this fic!!!! Please write some more chapters!!!!!! :rainbowkiss:

    #27 · 80w, 3d ago · · ·
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    NEED MORE CHAPTERS.....please

    #28 · 80w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>22055 I hope you like it!

    >>22058 Sort of! Kinda! Not really... I'm sorry.

    >>22059 Thanks!

    >>22060 Jibby Mcsqubblebus. No, not really. They dont have one. It's a second person fic, so it puts you In the drivers seat. Kind of like on of those "choose your own adventure" stories, except I make all the choices for you.

    >>22061 Yeah im sorry. Rarity isnt my favorite so i kinda had to force this one out of me.

    >>22064 Eye of the Tiger!

    >>22067 Yes! Someone got it! Awesome! I Award you with the Photo Finish of victory!

    >>22068 Rarity is easy to write for, but not being my favorite makes it harder.

    >>22075 & >>22078 Sorry, bad weekend.

    >>22080

    >>22085 Names are labels man...

    >>22088 Sugarfree is hitting the sugar again

    >>22093 Awww, thanks!

    >>22095 Enjoy!

    >>22098 Okey dokey!

    >>22099 Your scream of despair has broken my heart, and my ears. I will try to update soon

    >>22100 Roger that!

    >>22102 I like to think so

    >>22108 Mmmm... goodness...

    >>22175 Quite good, sir.

    >>22198 Pegasus who? Pegasus who!? PEG-A-SUS WHO!?

    >>22205 Yay Comment!

    >>22242 My name is what? My name is who? My name is *Scritcha-Scritcha* Slim Shady! ...I'll stop now

    >>22255 Thanks! Always nice to hear form my fans!

    >>22262 More chapters coming soon!

    >>22285 I'm working on it! Bear with me lol!

    >>22346 & >>22347 that was a fun one to write

    #29 · 80w, 3d ago · · ·
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    i hear todays a double update day :rainbowkiss:

    #30 · 80w, 3d ago · · ·
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    please i needs the updates! because this story is so amazing. I really like shipping stories. (not the perverted "watch it for the "plot"" stuff) but to watch their love grow UPDATE SOON we nee more Icons.

    #31 · 80w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I don't always read second person perspective fics, but when I do, it's this one.

    Better than a lot of the other second person stories I've seen around.

    #32 · 80w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>13845 Trouble figuring out Rainbow's personality? Use this: http://www.enneagraminstitute.com/intro.asp#

    This is a personality mapping system. You can use it to more effectively map a characters personality, and how they react/why they react or act like they do. What is their primary emotion? what is their biggest fear, or their biggest driving desire? and it also shows how different personalities and therefore different characters interact. Its a neat system you could use if you have trouble gauging how a character would act in a given situation and why, and also will give you a better idea about what that characters personality is like.

    Rainbow is totally a 3 with a 4 wing.

    If this helps, yay. Good fic btw.

    #33 · 80w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>22531

    OOOooooor we could just watch the show and base it upon that....

    #34 · 80w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Simply amazing! I just can't wait for the next chapter to come out. This is part of my top 10 favorites as of now!

    #35 · 80w, 3d ago · · ·
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    *eagerly awaits next chapter* (i don't often like stories written in the first person, but this is done really well.)

    #36 · 80w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I thought you had pinkie pie spot on, but now I see I have yet to see the true meaning of that statement, I read every one of Rarity's lines in her voice, I could hear her in my head.

    Awww yeah, prepare for Rarity to go crazy cant wait.:rainbowlaugh:

    #37 · 80w, 3d ago · · ·
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    #38 · 80w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>22814 More win.

    #39 · 80w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>19624 Weeeeell, then again, Rainbow Dash would call anyone a dude probably, be it a male or female. I'll have to reference the show on that one.

    #40 · 80w, 3d ago · · ·
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    AAAAHHH. :D :D :D

    My first time actually writing a comment on this site and it's for this story. :twilightblush:

    But I just want you to know that I'm really loving your story. The fact that the mysterious main character could be anyone is real awesomely... myserious. Also the fact that the main character is so infatuated with Rainbow Dash makes it even better. She's definitely my favorite pegasus. :rainbowkiss:

    Keep up the awesome work! :moustache:

    #41 · 80w, 2d ago · · ·
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    GIVE ME MORE PONY!:flutterrage:

    #42 · 80w, 2d ago · · ·
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    awwww yeah. i adore.

    #43 · 79w, 3d ago · · ·
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    "to finish her customers order, only t shriek and start over again."

    needs an 'O'.

    *sigh* how did i know that he would have to see twi? still, a good fic!

    aww... shucks.  too late to read the next one, i will have to wait for tomorrow morning!

    #44 · 77w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>22060

    His name is you.  Youare him.  It's a second person story, which immenses you into the plot so much that it feels like you are the main character.

    #45 · 68w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Mass Effect references? Huh, where?:rainbowderp:

    #46 · 65w, 3d ago · · ·
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    "Through it you see who you assume is Rairty" - Lolwut? :rainbowhuh:

    Love the story.

    #47 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Poor guy, SO MANY SIDE-QUESTS!! :ajbemused:

    I know the feeling bud.

    #48 · 56w, 6d ago · · ·
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    And Rarity freaks out because the object of her wrath and aggravation is a dress request from your mother... RAN AWAY BEFORE SHE gets OBSESSED!

    #49 · 41w, 1d ago · · ·
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    ALL THE FETCH QUESTS!

    Alot of people are asking him to get alot of stuff, was the writier of this mayhaps been playing alot of Skyrim? :rainbowhuh:

    I jest :rainbowlaugh: Great work with it!

    #50 · 38w, 7h ago · · ·
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    >>22060

    I dont know what our name is...

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