Trixie and Twilight are best ponies! (Diamond Tiara is best filly :D )
Diamond Tiara is unable to grasp the true spirit of Christmas. Thankfully, there are three spirits, who may just have what it takes to turn that sour attitude around and help the filly embrace what Christmas is truly all about: kindness and sharing.
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Amazing story, as usual.
All my
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Very cute
This... I can like this. Here. Take it.
What an amazing lesson! I am not sure what the lesson is, but it's amazing.
Amazing....wow...Fluttershy really died.....
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Be nice to others and you shall become prom queen... Or somethin' like that
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And here I thought it was "find out how to treat your patient properly before starting therapy" XD
So awesome!
deserves many more veiws 
but so amaze
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Yes, such a shame to see an acrobat like her, cut down in her prime by a criminal's bullet. But she still gets to roam the earth, using her ability to possess the living as a means of helping others while trying to solve the mystery of her own murder.
Oh, wait, no... I'm thinking of Deadman.
>>CrowMagon
all that just for the tittle of PROM QUEEN!!!!
Time Turner's definition of time travel must be the contemporary one where you can actually interact with the environment around you and affect things. It'd be funny if it wasn't, though, because that would mean he contradicted himself harder than any criminal from the Phoenix Wright series. I have to say, this journey into the Yukiverse was notably more entertaining than normal. And considering you know my opinion of your other stories, you can imagine how high up the mountain I'd place this one.
Parodies of A Christmas Carol are a dime a dozen, but it's rare that I come across one done this well. Typically, reviewing one of them amounts to simply listing which characters play which role. Who's the Scrooge? Who's the Marley? Who are the three ghosts? Etc. However, this story parodies the original by basing itself around it rather than attempting to copy it outright. The format remains the same, but the humor, the tone, and the final outcome have very little to do with the work of Charles Dickens.
You always have to sneak in your 'Diamond Tiara likes anime' reference, don't you? I'd call it your idée fixe, but frankly you've got far too many of those for me to assign you with only one. Regardless, I like how you used Diamond's age as a source of humor in this story. It's as you say. It's difficult to have a twisted background when you're still at the age where you develop your background. I also enjoyed how you had Diamond debate with the ghosts about why they were haunting her. It added much of the story's self-aware tone and brought a little gray back into the scenes that are so often portrayed as black and white.
If I were to rank the ghosts based on their entertainment, I'd actually rank them in the order they arrived, starting with Luna and ending with TT. And speaking of the ghosts, you sure know how to play the arbitrary game with your character selection. I don't know if you made a list of all the characters from the show and randomized them, but it would explain the lack of rhyme and/or reason concerning their roles. The dentist gets the past, the animal lover gets the present, and the not-time traveler gets the future. What's Luna doing to recruit these ponies, anyway? You did a fairly good job explaining how each of them became ghosts, though some were more believable than others. All of them brought enough humor to the table. That much I know. And I can also say that I've never seen the three ponies you chose used together in any other story. So you've also got the point for uniqueness.
The second I saw this was a comedy, I knew the glimpse into the future was going to be something ridiculous that somehow induced the scare factor on Diamond, but I was expecting it to be something outrageous like her getting one less Christmas present than usual or deciding that yellow was a good color on her. I guess I set my standards too high to appreciate the more conservative prom queen route. Still, there wasn't any buildup to it or mention of it beforehand, and it basically consumed the rest of the story after we found out about it. To me, it seemed like the largest dip in creativity this story had to offer.
As for the epilogue, to me it came across like a parody of this parody. We go from Diamond deciding to change so she can become prom queen to her and Silver Spoon becoming impossibly close friends with the CMC. While the rest of the story has the notion of Diamond's 'redemption' to ground it, the epilogue floats away on a bed of dream clouds into the wild pink yonder. So I don't know if you intended it to be viewed this way, but I see the epilogue as a joke meant to be viewed as a separate entity despite it technically continuing the story. It's difficult to say since the entire story is a joke in itself, but that's just how I view it.
Grammar and syntax seemed fine. Here are the few errors I managed to catch:
It's one of the better A Christmas Carol parodies I've read, which is good considering how often this story is parodied. It has its own unique flavor, and I thought its hit percentage was fairly strong in regards to its comedy. Now you just need to work on putting less dialogue in ALL CAPS.
I'd call this story a Christmas cookie, but not one of those cheap, hard ones you buy at the store. I'm talking about those round ones with the Christmas shapes on them that taste good even after they just come out of the oven. It's a wonderful Christmas treat.
Make the most!
I hope you don't mind but I did a reading of your story. :) Reading