Things haven't been going so great for Caramel. Simply a foal, without home, his friends were all he had left. Even then, he'd rather be alone...
But when a strange stallion comes and offers him some clarity, he heads off to find answers in one way or another. All starting on the eve of Hearth's Warming too...
Side story to Hospice.
Based off of The Antler's "Cold War".
Edited by Flint Sparks
Illustrated by MidnightDancer and zel
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Off to read it!
3678585
I have to say...
Nice work with this.
And the illustrations are a nice touch, too.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Ohhh the penguin story :(
Nicely done bit of storytelling, Regi. I enjoyed it.
My feels... they are gone
This story is amazing! One of the few stories I've read that actually earn a like and favorite.
3678829
I agree
Dude, when you get your head around to writing something serious: you really do it justice.
People like me can only hope to be this good, honestly.
3679724 aw, thank you!
3680541 It's a shame no one bothered to read it, though
3680764
Unfortunately stories get less views around Christmas time, y'know? I'm a tad shocked, though... I mean you have like +1,000 followers who should be loving the shit out of this!
Is your mom okay?
3681939 oh yeah, she's fine
why?
3681955
You've used Caramel to tell your own stories before.
3681963 Caramel isn't me, per se, but he's a reflection of how I feel; without getting 2pretentious4u, he's like an echo of my emotions.
3679892 I concur
I really want to read this right now, but... the holiday; it's eating up my time.
*stashes for later*
3683385 it's alright, I understand.
3682671
I second that notion
3684085
3692266
3693103 Do you taste like raisins?
3693108
No, but I have the best flopping parties
3693130 Pics or it did not happen
3697592
This is the 911 of comment threads
3698092 Nah, I've seen better
I will start by saying I am not one of your regular fans, just someone who randomly stumbled apon this story while looking at a forum. I have no prior experience with your work, and only know of you through word of moth and the occasional joke in comments.
This out of the way, I am blown away. Firstly, the level of creativity here, between the setting and the scenario is something to be admired. That was before I read the stories in the story. I am not sure if they are based on something else or not, maybe the second one more likely, but how you used them and how you connected them together to form something else entirely was a perfect subtle. It wasn't a blown out in your face message, but something that left me lingering around thinking for several minutes after I had finished. I thought about the two storied and what they meant, then I started to wonder what they meant to me. The loneliness in knowing loss, yet at times even then when things are bleakest you find a friend, doesn't matter who, that you didn't know you needed. Be it another, yourself, or in the comfort of nature itself. This is what it meant to me, and it was an emotional thing to say the least. Excellent job. Not much more I can say besides that.
3719872 I'm glad you enjoyed it! Due to this being my biggest flop in all of my writing career, I have been discouraged to write more, but with words like that, I can hardly keep myself from jumping right back to the document to continue the next chapter!
This is one of the few stories where I took a step back and decided "Yeah, let's put some real emotion into this." I'm glad that it was able to make such a resounding impact, it was really quite a story to work on, if not as rewarding as I originally hoped. Still, if I get comments like this... they're worth it.
I thank you kindly for the praises, and hope you enjoy the next chapter just as much.
3721499 Any numbskull can write something goofy and silly, and become really popular for it. It takes true creativity to make a story that makes you think. I am indeed going to wait patiently for the next chapter.
Also, this is anything but a flop. A flop is something that just outright sucks, and can't be enjoyed by anyone. This is art. Something that can only be enjoyed by people who are mature enough to look at something from different angles, and see the beauty the artist is trying to convey. You are obviously a talented writer, having wrote more than your fair share of fics here, and I am going to assume MLP isn't your first domain of creative writing. Don't ever think something you put so much effort into is a flop. I guarantee I am not alone in saying this, even if I am the only one to speak my mind.
Congratulations! This story has officially been deemed a Sapphire by The Gem Hunters
3727071 I have no idea what that means, but thank you!
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A Gem Hunter's Sapphire
3750541 again
no idea what this means
but thank you
3752408 its a new group, people submit fics and 1 of 3 reviewers grades them on a scale of 1 to 11 based on gemstones.
3752938 oh cool
where is sapphire on this scale?
3752948 3rd. You should go take a look.
3752958 aight
This line hurt.