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  • T Barking Mad: Echoes

    The history and life of a certain insane pony are revealed.
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  • T Punch Drunk

    The thoughts of the pure often give great insight into just how tainted some of us have become...
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  • E Rage Against the Memes

    The forces of the internet are unleashed on the mane-six; taxing their nerves, wit and patience.
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  • 96w, 4d
    Second Chapter of Punch Drunk

    It's up!

    1 comments · 103 views
  • 104w, 5d
    I'm dorsal

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  • 115w, 6d
    You know what's hard?

    Get your mind out of the gutters, all of you.

    But seriously you know what's hard? Trying to write in a house with 3 extremely loud younger brothers, a dad who encourages them, and two TVs blasting either Lifetime movies or baseball. In other words...I CAN'T CONCENTRATE!

    Because of this (yes I'm going to place the blame on people other than myself) I lost what little inspiration I had for practically two of my stories and I'm now in a huge writer's block (so what less is new).

    Anyone who is still following me I'm sorry if I haven't made any progress since...April. I'm new to this whole 'creative' thing and am having trouble writing anything (due to both internal and external distractions).

    I understand that what many of you will say is the appropriate response to this is to 'take a break' or 'relax' or 'just let the ideas come to you' but that hasn't worked and I don't think it will. The ideas are all there but I just can't get them out. I need to write something, anything!

    To those who read this, thanks for listening to the ramblings of some guy who once was, I guess, a 'good' writer.

    6 comments · 69 views
  • 116w, 3d
    RATM: The Rebirth (Epic ain't it?)

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  • 117w, 4d
    Gasp! Some actual writing by TheQwardvark?!

    Yeppers. I've decided to cancel my fic, Punch Drunk. Why? I don't know a dang thing about alcohol, which was the focus of the story. So instead of just chucking it and letting go to waste, I'm going to put the prologue/1st chapter thing in this here blog post. I'd appreciate it if anyone could tell me what they think of it, since I will be writing fics like this in the future. Thanks and enjoy Punch Drunk: The First Blow.

    Entry #1

    Hi there. Mom gave you to me a couple minutes ago, but I am not sure what I should do with you. She said that you were a ‘journal’ and that I should write all about my life. She said that you would keep my memories safe. I don’t know how paper is supposed to protect something. I told Mom this and she said, “You’d be surprised what weak things can protect.”

    I don’t know what she meant by that. Berry told Mom that was a load of horseapples and that you need to be strong in order to protect something. She then said that is why Dad left because Mom could not protect their marriage and Mom began to cry. I got really mad and I wanted to hurt Berry but I knew that I could not since Mom told me I had to get along with her. I watched as Berry yelled at Mom more and then she yelled at me and ran out of the house.

    She probably went to go hang out with her friends again and get into more trouble and make Mom even more sad. She should stop doing that. Last week her and her friends got in huge trouble at school. I don’t know what they did exactly but I did hear what Mr. Slate (that’s Berry’s teacher) told Mom.

    He said something about Berry and secks behind the school. I do not know what secks is but I think it is a game because the teacher said that she was doing it with one of her friends. She couldn’t go to school for a few days. Tomorrow she can go back.

    She also had to go see a doctor. I don’t know why she had to go see a doctor though. Maybe the reason that she got in trouble for playing secks is that ponies could get sick from it! That must be it. I’m glad she did not, Mom would not be happy and I would not be happy. I will tell her this when I see her again. I think she will feel better knowing that I care about her. Mom says that she is a good pony but she does bad things because she is really sad inside.

    Mom was crying for a long time after Berry left. She was lying on the floor and had her hooves in front of her face. I felt bad for her so I sat down next to her and gave her a hug. She wrapped her hooves around me and hugged me back. She said something but I couldn’t hear it. I think she said “choo two are chappy white” but that doesn’t make any sense.

    She wanted to be alone and sent me up here (I’m in my room). And here I am. Writing in you about what happened my life. But Mom did say I should write all about my life. I’ll write about myself and my family then.

    My name is Cross Punch and I am 6 years old. When I was born my eyes were crossed and Mom told me that I was frowning. She said that Dad named me Cross as a joke. I’m glad he did. Mom told me that she wanted to name me Ti (that means ‘small’ in Prench). I don’t need everypony reminding me about my size when they say my name.  

    My favorite food is ice cream and my favorite flavor is strawberry. Mom takes me to get some every week. Her favorite flavor is strawberry too.

    I am in 1st grade even though I am only 6. I skipped kindergarten because they said that my reading and writing skills were very good. I love reading books. Ms. Shine my 1st grade teacher told me that I’m one of the most literet (she said that means ‘well-read’) students she has ever seen. She gives me a gold star each time I finish a book. I have 38 stars so far. Ms. Shine also said that once I have 50 I get a big sticker! I’m going to put the sticker up on my wall when I get it.

    I live with my mom and my big sister Berry. I don’t know where or who my dad is. He used to live with us but he left when I was 1 and Berry was 7. I remember one thing about him. He would pick up me and Berry and give us rides. Mom is still really sad about Dad leaving us and I’m mad at him for making Mom sad. He should come back! Mom would be happy if he did. I told Mom this but she said that’s not going to happen. She wasn’t happy when she said this. I told her that I’d find Dad someday and make him come back. She gave me a hug and said thanks but she didn’t smile.

    We live in the Punch Bowl. It is the store that my family owns. We sell drinks for parties to adults. My mom handles money and customers and takes orders and I help out a little. I only help after school and sometimes on weekends though, so Mom is busy most of the time running the store by herself. Berry doesn’t help out at all. She says that she does not like the smell of the ethanol and that she wants to be with her friends and not stuck in the store. Mom said that was fine as long as she is happy. Mom says that she is going to get somepony else to help soon. I hope the pony she gets is nice.

    My sister is 6 years older than me and she is in 6th grade. She spends all her time with her friends. I can’t remember all of her friends names but I do know a few. There’s somepony named Cheerilee. I have not met her but she is my sister’s best friend. Another one is a colt named Hay Bale who Berry talks about all the time. I have only seen him once and he’s huge! I think he’s older than 12 but he’s still in 6th grade with my sister. He must be stupid not smart. Oops Mom told me to never say that word. She said it was mean.

    My sister is mean all the time. She always yells at Mom and says bad things to her. I do not like it when she does that. I sometimes feel like I want to hit her a lot and make her say she is sorry. I know this is bad but I can’t help it. Mom never gets mad at her though. She has never yelled at either of us. Mom says that she knows why Berry is acting like she is and says that she is fine with it.

    Mom says that Berry is a nice filly in her heart and I think so too. She is nice sometimes. Last year she stood up to some bullies at school for me! The bullies were these ponies named Thunder and Lightning and they are pegasi. They took a book I was reading out of my hooves and ran away with it. I remember that I ran after them but I can’t run that far so I did not catch them. I began to cry and went home. Berry had the day off because she got in trouble at school again. I told Berry what happened and she said for me to wait in the house. She must have known where they were because she came back with the book really fast! She told me that they would not bother me anymore.

    She told me “You owe me.” I still have not done anything for her. I’ll save her when she is in trouble then!  

    Mom’s name is Barba Punch. I think it is a strange name but Mom likes it. She has a white coat and yellow hair. I think she is very pretty. She is my favorite pony in the whole world. She is always nice to me and everypony that she meets. She is almost always smiling. She smiles when Berry is around but Berry makes her stop smiling a lot by saying those bad things to her.

    Mom works very hard all the time. Our store is always busy and she is busy making the drinks and making the customers (the ponies who buy our drinks) happy. She talks with the customers and laughs with them too. Everypony loves my mom. I know that for sure.  

    I don’t hear Mom crying anymore. I think she is okay now. I am going to see how she is doing so I am done writing for now. Thank you for protecting what I have told you. I’ll write more later.

    Berry came home right before I went to bed. That doesn’t happen often so I went to tell her that I’m glad she didn’t get sick from the secks. She had just walked into the back of the building and was wearing a weird looking smile. It didn’t look right but I didn’t tell her that because she might think I was calling her ugly. She REALLY doesn’t like to be called that by anypony. I think she once had a friend named Colgate who called her that and now they’re not friends anymore. I remember watching Colgate say that she was sorry but Berry was so mad that she said she just told her to buck off. I asked Mom what that meant and she told me to never say that again.

    She was whistling too. I don’t think it was a song. Just a lot of random whistles. It sounded happy though. She must have had a good time tonight. At least she didn’t get into trouble.

    I told Berry that I was glad she didn’t get sick from the secks. She tilted her head and stared at me for some time and then she said, “No horseapples Sherclops.” I told her that I love her. She didn’t respond. I said good night. She said good night to me. Then she went up to her room.

    After that I went into the store to say good night to Mom. Our house has our bedrooms in the back, behind the store which is in front. There are 2 floors. Downstairs is Mom’s room and the living room. Upstairs there is my room and Berry’s room which are right next to each other. There are some other empty rooms down the hall but we don’t really use them. When relahtivs visit though they stay in those rooms. Downstairs there is also a fireplace that we use to get warm during the winter. Mom says that she doesn’t like the cold and she sleeps out in front of the fireplace when it is cold out.

    Anyways I went into the store to say good night to Mom. She watches over the store until 3 in the morning. I guess some adults get thirsty late at night. When I went into the store I saw Mom resting her head against the counter and her eyes were closed.

    I think I’m going to stop writing for tonight. I’m too tired. And I don’t feel good. I’ll finish tomorrow.

    ---

    Berry Punch’s hooves shake as she closes the journal. Still holding onto the book she feels her body go numb and she gazes across the room at the unlit fireplace. Her eyes are laden with remorse. ‘I shouldn’t have done that,’ she thought. ‘I should’ve just left it alone.’ She looks down at the cover of the journal and reads some barely legible words that her brother had scribbled there: SECRET! NOPONY ALLOWED TO READ! THAT MEANS YOU BERRY!  

    Berry begins to breathe heavily and her mouth curls into a snarl. She rears the hoof that is holding the journal back. Using as much strength as she can muster, she throws the journal onto the ground. Her eyes moist and her entire face is contorted by rage. She yells, “YOU’RE JOKING! YOU JUST LEAVE ME ALONE AND YOU WON’T EVEN LET ME KNOW WHY?! DAMMIT CROSS! DAMMIT! DAMMIT! Dammit! Dammit! Dammit...” She collapses to the floor as her outburst peters out into a quiet whimper.

    Berry picks the book up and brings it to her chest. She envelops it in an embrace and sits on the floor for a while, caressing her brother’s life in her hooves and his memories in her mind. “Cross please? I need to know,” she whispers into the baby blue binding. And she cries silently. She cries tears of remembrance. She cries tears of frustration. Most of all, she cries tears of regret.  

    She cries for nearly thirty minutes before the small clock on the mantle chimes 10 times. Startled by the sudden noise Berry lifts her head up. She turns to the timepiece and stares in disbelief, wiping her eyes with her empty hoof. “Only 5 more hours until the ceremony,” she says dully.

    After glancing down at Cross’ journal she thinks ‘I’d better put this back.’ She carefully puts the journal into her mouth so that her teeth are latched onto the book’s spine. She trots out of the family room and to the staircase that leads to the second floor. As she lifts her hoof to get onto the first step, however, she notices something written in large letters on the back cover. Curious she lays the book onto another step so she can read what it says:

    DON’T FORGET HER LAST WORDS: “MAKE SURE BERRY IS HAPPY AND SAFE.”

    Berry’s eyes grow to the size of saucers. She lets out a small gasp, dropping the book in the process. Her mind races as she tries to figure out what this new discovery could mean. ‘Who does he mean by ‘her’? Make sure I’m happy and safe? Was I ever in danger? Does this have anything to do with...’

    Terrified by a sudden thought she lets out another gasp, much louder than the first. She hurriedly picks up the journal again and rushes over to the couch. ‘I’m sorry Cross, but you made it my business.’ Her heartbeat fills the once silent room as she opens the book to begin where she left off...

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A mare, trapped in her own mind. What is a day for her like? And what horror could drive such a sweet pony to madness? If only she weren't barking mad, maybe she would tell us. Maybe, she still can.

Thanks to Bronymaster for editing and pre-reading.

Credit for Cover Image goes to Stardust XIII

(Featured on Equestria Daily)

First Published
14th Mar 2012
Last Modified
14th Mar 2012
#1 · 136w, 3d ago · · ·

At first I was like :derpytongue2:

But then I was like :rainbowhuh:

Then I was all :pinkiegasp:

And then I was like :raritydespair:

And the last line broke my :heart:

#2 · 136w, 3d ago · · ·

Fantastic, I really hope this story gets some attention with a feature! Really, this did everything right; the character, the interaction, the subtle hints, the emotion it was all great, thank you for this story!

#3 · 136w, 3d ago · · ·

This, by far, is one of the best stories EVER! I loved it! Everything was just perfect, the title, the writing style, just.....AWESOME! :pinkiehappy:

#4 · 136w, 3d ago · · ·

Why isn't this featured?!

#5 · 136w, 3d ago · · ·

>>322318

You're welcome. I'm glad you liked it!:twilightsmile:

#6 · 136w, 3d ago · · ·

:fluttershbad: IS SO SAD!

#7 · 136w, 8h ago · · ·

>>322765

Thanks for the compliment :pinkiehappy:! I think it's because it was made available a bit too late, around 1 A.M. Oh well, there's always next time.

#8 · 136w, 7h ago · · ·

>>333969

Still... should be up there. It's amazingness. (And for the record, Pegasis here :twilightblush: )

#9 · 136w, 7h ago · · ·

>>334256

Pegasis here? What do you mean:applejackconfused:?

#10 · 136w, 2h ago · · ·

>>334275

:facehoof: "Thanks for the compliment man"

:derpytongue2: Sorry, I'm never clear - I'm a girl :twilightblush:

#11 · 136w, 1h ago · · ·

>>335358

Whoops...

Well, this is awkward:twilightoops:.

#12 · 135w, 6d ago · · ·

>>335588

... definitely.

#13 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

Why does this have so few views?! :flutterrage:

This is amazing. It made me feel. It made my heart feel. God, this is good stuff.

#14 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

Wow... normally I avoid stories with those tags, but this was very well written.:fluttershysad: Bravo.

Now I just want to see some kind of happy ending... maybe a longer sequel where she finally starts to heal/recover/etc. I don't expect such a story, mind you, but would love to see it.

#15 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

This was great:pinkiehappy:

even if the ending made me:fluttercry:

#16 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

Hmmm... I was expecting a more indirect reference to dogs or maybe dogs not being an active part of her condition; like in Freud: The Secret Passion. The brain wouldn't actually make her bark like a dog because, by doing so, it would actually remind her of what it's trying to suppress.

But nonetheless, the story was very enjoyable. It is a shame that it focuses so much on the emotional aspect, but not enough on the psychological aspect of the subject.

#17 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

I took me a while to realize what was going on, but this is one of the best fanfics I have ever read.

#18 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

>>346193

I plan to make the sequel focus more on her psyche while remaining as emotional. I'm glad you liked it nonetheless though:pinkiehappy:!

#19 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

hope you write a sequel to this :pinkiesad2:  oh, and congrats on getting mentioned on Equestria Daily :twilightsmile:

#20 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

>>346211 A sequel as in; one more chapter to this story or as in a new story?

#21 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

Neat.  Fairly obvious where it was going, especially given the image that goes with it, but still manages to be engaging.  Upward thumb.

(Y'know, at first I didn't really like the thumb system, but it makes judging a story a LOT easier.)

#22 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

>>346221

An extension on her backstory as well as her future. So sort of a new story, but not really if that makes sense:derpytongue2:.

#23 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

>>346229 No, no. I mean: A new chapter on this story (on the site) or as a new story completely (on the site)?

#24 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

>>346234

New story, though it will be linked.

#25 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

Shit, I wanted to track to read it later, but instead hit the thumb up. Nothing left to do than to read it, then. Maybe tomorrow, when I'm not so sleepy. :pinkiesad2:

#26 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

Good job. Almost Faulknerian how you put us inside the mind of madness. My only substantive feedback is that Screwloose's thoughts and the sentence structure and grammar you use are perhaps slightly too coherent, logical, and correct to fully let us into her head. It's almost as we are reading the story from a combined perspective of both her and the author, and I think it would be more powerful to have total immersion, even if it made it much more challenging to read. Anyway, this story was (substantively) great and (emotionally) powerful. :trixieshiftright: Loved it.

#27 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

>>346330

I'm glad you associated my story with Faulkner. I got the idea to write this after reading As I Lay Dying and I tried to write stream of conciousness like him.

#28 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

>>346337

Yes, I saw what you did there, as it were. I was immediately reminded of Benjy in The Sound and the Fury, so nice job! :raritywink:

#29 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

I lost it after that last line. I'm gonna go pick up the pieces of my broken heart now.

#30 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

Good stuff, bravo. MOAR.

#31 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

Now that was quite the interesting read, even if it did give me just the vaguest air of deja-vu. :rainbowhuh: There aren't that many first person fan fics out there, so it's always good to see more. I suppose my only complaint is that, while this is a nice short read, it's a little too short and could use with a lot more development. Writing from the POV of a mad character is very tricky, and here it felt maybe a tad too rushed. While I normally wouldn't recommend this sort of thing, I feel that a sequel would definitely be a good idea in order to elaborate on this character, though it would have been nice to have seen it in this story.

#32 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

>>346690

A sequel is already in the making:twilightsmile:!

#33 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

I found it a little difficult to follow, both in the good, mind-bending way and the less good confusing, unclear way. For the first half of the story I thought the purple-maned pony was Screwball, especially given the repeated references to her hat. The blurring of the line between past and present worked for the most part, but by the end I was unsure if it was written out of sequence or if any actual incursions into the past had occurred. I also can't tell whether the barking was in our heroine's head or if she was actually barking throughout, which leads to the further question of how the nurse was able to understand her, if at all. It's surreal enough that I can tell it's not meant to be straightforward, but instead of the uncertainty invoking a sense of wonder in me I just felt confused. Also, given the amount of trauma that it actually takes to give someone a lifelong crippling mental issue, I found the reveal at the end to be a little weak.

But that aside, don't think I didn't enjoy this. The characters are wonderfully well-realized and I felt a range of clear emotional connections between them. When I wasn't distracted by the chronology I loved the scenes with Screw Loose and her "family." The character is equal parts lovable and tragic, and I actually felt a little sad at the ending. Not a favorite, but definitely worth reading.

#34 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

Well this is just awesome. Poor pony. I'd like to know her real name... you think you'll do a continuation with her real name and real cutie mark? And I liked the guard, too. Kind loving heart to a poor disgraced pony.

#35 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

I don't always read tragedy/sad fics, but when I do, they blow my mind.

#36 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

AAAAAHHHHHHH DAMMIT

I ALREADY STARTED a 1st person present tense stream-of-consciousness story detailing Screw Loose :fluttercry:

Sighhh....  You and I think alike, author

#37 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

this needs a lot more views. :heart:

#38 · 135w, 3d ago · · ·

WHY SADFIC WHYYYYYY?! :raritydespair: I don't know why I decided to read this sadfic. But hay, it was good.

#39 · 135w, 3d ago · · ·

yOkay. Seriously. A lot of this reminds me of Screwball in the Pony POV Series. Okay, maybe it's simply due to both being mad ponies in a mental ward with those who still care for them. But still the line 'Her name isn't' is right out of Rarity's Reharmonization chapter.

Someone whose insane in the pony verse was obviously traumatized by something. I'll admit I never figured that her family being slaughtered by dogs would be the reason. I wonder if the three dogs she saw in the woods were real, or a delusion of hers. Telling a POV from the point of view of  a lunatic always has that problem.

I'll admit her 'eating a tomato out of a salad', I would have NEVER GUESSED was her biting a doctor! She's not even aware that's what she's doing!

Are they just going to feed, wash, and house her until she dies of old age? Or do they actually have any treatments in store to try and repair her psyche?

I'll admit the 'shouting over the dogs' was not something I would have thought up. I'd have gone the simple 'thinks she's a dog' delusion. This is a completely different take on this sad broken pony. How DO you heal a pony this lost in her own world? Does the nurse really understand what she's saying, or does she just figure it out form her body language?

#40 · 135w, 3d ago · · ·

Well done.

#41 · 135w, 3d ago · · ·

Well, PTSD doesn't work like this, there are many instances of children seeing their entire families killed (Holocaust, Rwanada, various major natural disasters, for examples) and were not driven to this level of insanity.  But it's an interesting first-person story.

It becomes plausible, however, if I add in an assumption that she's also autistic, in which case the mental trauma would be much more likely to lock itself into a continuous loop, due to the obsessive and repetitive nature of severely autistic personalities.  (biologist, focusing on developmental neurobiology and genetics)  :twistnerd:

#42 · 135w, 3d ago · · ·

>>350918

Well you have to take into consideration a few other things in the case of this pony. First of all, this is Equestria, where, supposedly, there are such few evil things that it is basically a utopia, and had been for a long time. When you live in such a peaceful place all your life, with the most violence having been seen was caused only by yourself, seeing a pack of wild dogs/wolves kill your entire family is going to be much more traumatic than if you grew up in a place like Earth. Also, she is repeatedly reminded of the event almost every night because she relives the event in her dreams. Imagine seeing your entire family slaughtered, and then dreaming about it every day for the rest of your life, and waking up remembering every detail. You wouldn't be in a good mental state either. Just stating my own opinion here. Feel free to put in your ideas on what I say :derpytongue2: Good day to you sir :twilightsmile:

#43 · 135w, 3d ago · · ·

>>351477  That's the classic literary device for this level of insanity.  However, research has quite thoroughly proven that for such a severe psychological disturbance, an organic disorder of the brain is the primary culprit, with the traumatic event exacerbating/accelerating/triggering the final irreversible onset.  

Single traumatic events, no matter how horrible, do not lead to such overt behavioral and mental derangement.  I've seen young patients in PTSD literature noted as very withdrawn, sometimes with violent outbursts and a tendancy for criminal behavior depending on the individual, but never anything close to this extent without an underlying neuropsychiatric disease.

She doesn't appear to have any of the classic schiziform syndrome pathology, plus her onset trigger was the emotional trauma as a filly places her too young for any of the classic schizophrenia psychotic breaks; therefore it's most likely she was moderately autistic and the severe emotional damage triggered a cascading mental breakdown.  Autistic children recall trauma VERY astutely, and can occaisionally react with very violent and savage behavior when they recall it or are confronted with something they associate with the trauma.  Barking Pony's repetitive episodic behavior and many of her ways of thinking (especially focusing almost obsessively on the liking/disliking of the hat and tie) remind me very much of moderate to severe autistic children I have known.

#44 · 135w, 3d ago · · ·

>>351599

Wow, you have thought about this deeply, huh? I'm glad, because I'm learning a thing or two in this debate. Anyway, I forgot to mention in my last comment that you also have to take in the consideration that BM is not human. Also, she is technically from another world, which could mean any number of things like this are possible. Personally, I think she focuses on the hat and tie alot because her parents either A) had similar jobs to the nurse and the guard or B)They may have been wearing a hat and/or tie similar looking ot what BM sees the nurse and Vigilance wearing. It would make sense to me. Then again, I am not yet a trained psychologist, and am only going on what I know so far. I plan to major in it though!

#45 · 135w, 2d ago · · ·

:raritydespair: so sad! grats on EQD, by the way!

#46 · 135w, 1d ago · · ·

Really liked the story. At first the writing style put me off, but it worked well in establishing the mindset of the character. However, I believe that changing it on the sections "outside" his mind would make for a better story, with a better contrast between both sections. Not that it detracts a lot from the final product, but I believe it would make the final scene more impacting.

#47 · 135w, 1d ago · · ·

It took reading a few of the comments in order for me to understand what was going on. I'll try not to ruin it for those who want to figure it out, but when I figured out what the true significance of her "family" was, I was chilled to the bone. I'm working on my Psych degree and I have spent my fair share of time in asylums and mental hospitals. While you didn't exactly capture the character of a madman (madmare?) perfectly (No sane person can truly understand it though...), you made a damn good story. I look forward to the sequel if it means you explaining what happened to Screw Loose to cause her trauma.

Cii
#48 · 133w, 6d ago · · ·

My first Favorite, great job! Quite the interesting narration, one that I hope to write like soon!

P.S. woah, dude...similar titles, lol: youtube.com/watch?v=BUHylymfhjg

#49 · 133w, 1h ago · · ·

Yeah, I figured it was all in her head. Poor dear. :pinkiesad2:

#50 · 132w, 6d ago · · ·

>>423774

Yeah:fluttercry:. Sorry to say that she won't get any better in the sequel.

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