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IdentityMatrix


One day, one minute, you'll have thirty seconds to live. See you then.

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Good Job, your story seems well-developed and to have a direction. I can't find anything about the story to criticize. If I had to come up with something it would be that you had the changeling girl say "bucking" a bit too much. So, great job and keep writing. :scootangel:

3643928 Thanks! And I'll take out some of the 'bucks' :twilightsmile:
Wait a sec... did you say changeling girl?...

sorry, got mixed up from earlier story I was reading meant bat pony

This... this is going somewhere. I expect great things.

You have my attention.

3644415 :pinkiehappy:
... *looks at your avatar* :duck: and you have my attention, spidey :raritywink::trollestia:

Hmm...

This looks like it might end up being interesting. Not only have you stumbled onto my personal weakness, but gods only know there isn't nearly enough bat-pony stories around here for my rich palate. Keep it up, I'll be watching.

Also, as a side note, it might be a good idea to put a space between each paragraph, instead of just indenting them. Makes it easier to read that way. Your call though.


~Signed, InfiniteBrony

3644502 yay! I'll do my best to not let you down! And I'll go ahead space out those paragraphs.
Thank you so much!

Fave and like without reading it yet. Yea This got my attention quick with the bat pony and human and sex.

3644529 :rainbowlaugh: Thank you so much, the "juicy" part has yet to come, though.

3644536 Thats cool. I like them with some fleshy bits to them.

3644306 And now I wanna know what story that was now?

The crazy side of me loves this so far and the sensible side of me has already been drugged, beaten, tied up and stuffed into the furthest reaches of my mind for raising a hoof to interject. :pinkiecrazy:
In all seriousness though, loving it so far! :pinkiehappy: The character's relatable, his actions upon being startled are believable and you have bat ponies! :yay: You, my good sir, have definitely caught my attention. :pinkiecrazy:

3644565 hehe, thank you! And you can thank my lack of a sensible side for the drugging of your own :raritywink::rainbowwild:

you're getting popular fast it seems. Enjoy the popularity.:pinkiehappy:

3644679 :twilightsmile: thanks, I definitely wasn't expecting so many people to be this nice! :rainbowlaugh:

You picked a good topic and gave a character that people liked. It's not a surprise to me.:twilightsmile:

Fucking awesome chapter!!! Please keep going :)

You have my attention, please proceed. :moustache:

3646338 I shall! Thanks for giving it a chance!

Definitely something to keep an eye on. Well worth a fav and a like:heart:.

So will he snap out of his stupor fast enough to resist and retaliate or is he gonna get dragged there kicking and screaming ? I'd like to say the former simply because of how you introduced him being trained in karate but that's just a guess

3647533 thanks!
And you'll have to find out yourself! :twilightsmile:

3647729
*sob*But I wanted to know now :fluttercry:.

What ? Even a flutter cry wont break you ? :rainbowhuh:, Damn your made of tougher stuff.

Well for that i will wait then, Hope you update soon.

this is my kind of gig!:yay: though its 3 AM where im at so i will read it later:twilightsheepish:

She does realize that he easily knocked out one of them right. So why does she think she can threaten him?

i thank this is going to be a very good story, and i can't wait to read more of this story. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

3656261
Ok, this sucks. i love you for asking this question, and ive had the answer for a day now but my tablet died and will not charge. im using my wii to type this comment out, so i apologize if it freaked out and replied too many times or something to that effect. rest assured, your question will be answered. its just that its a pretty lengthly response and typing on the wii is no fun

3656261 All right, your answer, dear reader.
It's the alchemy of personas, as I like to call it. The way a character interacts with another character or with his/her environment is almost completely dependent on personality and characteristics. So, to answer your question, I'll have to unravel the blueprints of both Caleb and Satin and the scene you're referring to.
First and foremost, the capability to detect fear (and other emotions) is a rather common natural instinct in the wild, so we can assume that Satin, thanks to her animal-like qualities, subliminally knows that Caleb is just as wary, if not more, of Satin than she is of him.
Now, keep in mind that both Satin and Caleb share a very distinct quality: they are both very instinct driven, prone to acting before thinking. However, Satin acts on emotion while Caleb acts on muscle.
So when Caleb knocked out that batpony, he was hardly thinking at all and acting purely out of self-defense. Seeing their companion taken out Caleb, the other two ponies flee because they're aware that Caleb sees them as threats due to their affiliation with the fallen batpony. Satin, on the other hand was sitting away from the fray and therefore, whether she knows it or not, is not going to be attacked by Caleb the instant he sees her.
You see, another crucial part of this is Caleb's non-confrontational personality. No matter how freaked out he becomes, two stages of defense exist for him: defensive and offensive, and though they are still driven by instinct, Caleb is not going to stike unless attacked first. If he isn't physically assaulted or threatened first, he's going to turtle shell, especially in this situation, where he wants notning to do with anything around him.
And this ties in with Satin. I've already covered the detecting fear, emotional instinct, and the fact that she did not attack Caleb when he first saw her. So, when she sees her carefully thought-out plan fall to pieces when some random creature appears and takes out her targets for her, the first thing she's going to do, regardless of the situation, is speak her mind. She is pissed, and so the world must know. Her tantrum at first is not even directed at Caleb, which makes him even less inclined to start a fight. Maybe she doesn't see him, right?
So, this is what we have: A scared and confused Caleb who wants nothing to do with these creatures and wishes they would go away, and a flustered, angry, and equally confused Satin who didn't get what she wanted and now must blame someone or something. Caleb's brain starts functioning again, though very slowly, and asks no one in particular to please take him home. Satin, still in rant mode, takes offense to this and, at first wants him to get lost, but then realizes that she can make his life even more miserable by imprisoning him.
Now, remember, Satin isn't thinking this through. Also remember, Caleb 1) doesn't want to start a fight, and 2) wants and needs a place to stay.
So, as to why Satin doesn't seem afraid of him, she acts first and thinks second, and as to why Caleb doesn't sock her in the face, while he does hate the creatures, he doesn't want to get into more fights with them. I hope this answers your question. :twilightsmile:

3663386 So he's gonna go with the ageold concept of climbing the ranks,But this time with the other cliche of doing so by Beating the shit out of the strongest one he can find?

3687874 I like the way you think, but I'm pretty sure Caleb's not looking to pick fights with these creatures. He's just kinda scared and confused at the moment, and definitely not in the mental state to be thinking ahead. In fact, Caleb's not the kind of guy to think ahead as it is, and is also naturally non confrontational, so I don't think climbing the ranks is what he wants.
But good guess. You'll just have to wait for chapter two :raritywink:

3688921 He's a springloaded trap as it were,He just needs someone to set him off,and BAM,King Protagonist

3689738 you do have a point there, he definitely reacts violently when set off the right way. But again, he's not enough of a thinker to have an ulterior motive.

3690082 Who says you need to be a thinker to get lucky with who you kill in beserk mode?

Awesome first chapter and I am immensely interested in where this goes.

3694681 Good, 'cause guess what?! *shoves chapter two in your face*
Thanks for favouriting :twilightsheepish:

3695196 I can tell. unfortunately, I am not familiar with my tablet's strange language. :applejackunsure:

I hope to see a tsundere Sattin and a snarky Caleb

Try copy and paste on the name or tell the tablet that is a new word in the dictionary. :)

3695442 I could do that... or I could just rename her Satan :raritywink: :trollestia: :rainbowlaugh:

Very awesome can't wait for more chapters :D

Well this is gonna be spectacularly bad. Gotta love bratty batty teenager mares!

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