First! Awsome fanfic so far, I'd love to see where it goes.

I like it so far. Keep it up.

I can't wait to see the chief kick some dragon ass with is bare hands!! lol kidding

>>1330613306 Chief? Dragon? Bare hands? The Chief is brave, but he is not stupid. But I'm sure he will kick some dragon ass with the appropriate firepower. Though, he might do hand-to-hand with a manticore.

I really appreciate all the positive criticism. I am already working on Chapter Two, and it will be out tomorrow.

>>1329413294 I actually got inspiration from your story, believe it or not. Arby FTW!

Do like

Especially since you seem to be going with the character's personalities.

I looking forward to more.

Please continue with this.....

or I will send ninja grunts after you.

You don't want that.

>>1332413324 I have my battle rifle ready for an endless stream of head shots.

A solid start my friend keep it up.

>>1335113351 Thank you. I already have Chapter Two done, and it will be out tomarrow.

I haven't played a Halo game in years, but I always liked the dynamic between MC and the Arbiter?  I take it that this is just MC and Cortana in Equestria?  

>>1335613356 In the end of Halo 3, the Arbiter and Master Chief were in the same Frigate, the U.N.S.C. Forward Onto Dawn. They were escaping the collapsing Halo ring, but the portal collapsed and cut the Frigate in half. One half reached Earth, which was holding the Arbiter. The Chief, however, was in the other half of the Dawn. So yeah, no Arbiter, yet, anyways. And that isn't a hint to my plans to the plot, but I might include him in it.

>>1332613326

Two things.

One: A battle rifle is only as useful as you are accurate and far.

The other thing: Try for chapters of 2500+ Words, and if you can't then chapters with 1500+

This allows for quick, decent length chapters. There needs to be much detail and dialogue given how it seems the story is going, but you also need to make sure the chief speaks mostly when spoken to, when needed, or when he really really wants to let his thoughts out, for it seems like that's when he talks.

Okay, there's a pretty glaring error in the synopsis.

You have the story happening in 2664, "Twelve Years," after the destruction of the Ark and the end of Halo 3. However, the Ark was destroyed in 2552. You have it happening in 2652, nearly a hundred years later.

>>1337213372 One. I found the battle rifle is great against foes with no shoes in close quarters. So a BR vs a bunch of grunts = BR wins. Two. Yeah, I normally do chapters around that length, but these are beginning chapters, not really much action yet. That will change rather quickly. As for the dialogue, it's that way on purpose. It's not going to be like that in Chapter Two and beyond, though.

Not bad, not bad. I look forward to future chapters.

>>1337313373 Thanks for pointing that out to me, man. xD That is a pretty bad error. I'll have it fixed immediately.

>>1337413374

Oh, another thing: With the Covenant scattered and ruined, and the flood supposedly extinct, you need a new foe.

Note the supposedly

>>1338213382 In the end, the Covenant are known as crippled, but we don't know for sure that the Covenant is completely wiped out.

>>1338313383

Hence Scattered and ruined.

You can be ruined, but recover.

Destroyed is another matter entirely.

>>1338713387 Exactly.

>>1338913389

Great to see an agreement reached quickly.

Faster than I'm used to.

Oh god, i just started thinking, the flood entering Equestria

That would be a little more than terrifying.

>>1339113391 The flood? Probably not. I doubt I could write as them. Besides, they creep the shit out of me, even if they are the most awesome zombies I have ever seen.

Remember ninja grunts You can't shoot what you can't see Marksman.

Now look behind you....See nothing.....That just proves my point ninja grunts

Sleep tight.

Motion Tracker.

>>1337413374 Wait... NO SHOES?!

This should be interesting hopefully chief doesn't jump the gun when the pony's show up

Fucking Troll

MIND BLOWN!

Based on the first chapter, it looks good.

Will the chief have equipment such as a bubble shield?

Oh and also, just how much ordnance is in tact?

>>1344513445 Enough for one man. You will see in the second chapter.

YOU BASTARD!! I WAS THINKING OF DOING THIS SAME THING!!!

Haha kidding. Well, I was serious about thinking of this same idea, but apparently someone got to it first. Oh, well, there's probably going to be something along the lines of this in Halo: Fall of Equestria (spoiler alert).

Anywho, it looks like this is off to an excellent start. I can only imagine how the Chief - a killing machine bred for war - will fare on a planet of friendship and magic.

>>1341013410

I counter by walking.

I walk over your deploy-able landmine.

I walk up behind you.

Ninja grunts just slowly make their way to you.

>>1337413374

Screw Battle Riffle, give me a DMR.

And I gave you the idea! You said so yourself!

>>1354913549

Direct upgrade from pistol, nothing more.

Now that I think about, I don't need ninja grunts.

Update this story or I will glass your entire planet!

Who needs a switchblade when you got a chainsaw.

>>1355813558

the chainsaw is one of the WORST weapons you can use.

Needs fuel, extremely loud, bulky, heavy...

Only useful against trees and walls.

I wonder how Fluttershy will react to Chief...

>>1354913549 Yeah, you also gave me the idea.

>>1356113561 She will either shit herself, or snap his neck like that bear.

>>1347813478 Oh well, I really love your story. I'm glad you like this one too.

I honestly didn't expect to get this much of a positive reaction when I made this story. Hell, I was expecting a bunch of haters and trolls. Chapter Two is out.

Hope you people liked it. ^_^

Liked it theirs master chief, twilight sparkle,guns and warthogs WHATS NOT TO LIKE

Also im looking forward to when chief meets with celestia this is going to be interesting keep it up. well guss i have to wait for a wile until i can read up on how you describe an alien genocide to pony's ...............

Another one for the track list.....

>>1359313593 I'm glad you liked it.

Btw people, I am looking for TWO pre readers. If you would like to be one, PM me.

And isn't the Assault Riffle MA5B?

>>1359813598 That's the assault rifle in Halo: Combat Evolved. The assault rifle in Halo 3 is the MA5C. I am such a Halo nerd.

This is going to be interesting.

>>1360013600

Oh.

>>1360013600

I'm the only one of the people i know in real life who pays attention to the type of Assault Rifle.

I once saw an argument on the internet about why it sounds different between the games, and my response was merely a "Different kind of gun" response.

I love my inner Halo Nerd

Gonna read the newest chapter.

>>1360413604 I hope you like it.

"For the record, that was awesome."

So much truth.

there are some errors in grammar though, such as "He throw it on it's back."

It's should be its and throw should be threw.

>>1360713607 Thanks for pointing that out to me, I'll fix that.