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DiscordedWhovian


Diehard Brony/Whovian. Discord is best villain, Fluttershy is best canon pony, and askdiscordwhooves is best pony (check him out on tumblr). any questions? Hope to be a valuable member here!

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When an alicorn filly appears out of nowhere, Princess Twilight Sparkle takes on the responsibility of raising her; but something is different about her. When young Harmony runs away, she goes with a madpony in a blue box, intent upon saving Equestria from an unknown threat.

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honestly, the pacing is a little quick and the prologue feels like its missing a few parts. keep on writing and work on your pacing, man. you can only get better.

SPELLING! :pinkiegasp:
It's nothing serious, really! You spelt "down" "diwn" and the likes. Just double check it when it is not the middle of the night, okay? Anyway, please continue.

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I want to point out that the problem with alicorns in the brony community isn't the fact that they're alicorns, but that they're seen as OP, mary-sues, or royalty. It all depends in how the character is written to be. I understand the problem, but this has been very thouroughly thought out, and I want you to wait until the story really develops.

(I'm not even sorry)

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Thanks for the feedback! I will take this into consideration.

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Got it.

(really need to get an editor)

:rainbowderp:
KILL THEM! :twilightangry2:
(Btw, where the heck is the Doctor?)
:rainbowhuh:

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All in due time, my dear readers. This "more" you request is coming shortly.

*squeals with glee at successfull cliffhanger*

Whoop! Doctor Whooves you are late Mr! :twilightangry2:
Oh well, DERPY X DOCTOR! :yay:

Oh!! Wait... does this mean that Harmony is Jenny Smith from that one episode of Doctor Who when he and Martha landed on that one place where most of the people where made from genetic samples and the big war the two species were in the middle of... *big intake of air*... And this war was only a week old and the Doctor kept on insisting that he wasn't a father since he had bad memories tied to the idea of being a father and Donna was there too and she was the one that figured out that this big war had started only a week ago and the episode ended with the Doctor finally realizing that he saw Jenny as his daughter and Jenny regenerated only without having g her whole body die and be remade... *wheeze, wheeze* season 4, right?
Random moustache! :moustache:

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Yeah, and he still thinks Jenny is dead. :fluttershysad:

Unfortunately, that is an amazing idea. Unfortunately, the answer is no, although maybe a *little* more indepth, although I may possibly do an alternate ending tiwh that outcome.

I hate when people come up with better story ideas than I do :p

3649322 Wait, what? The first part of your response makes sense. Harmony is Jenny, and the Doctor still believes that she died. And that she couldn't regenerate. But the other bit confuses me. As that episode was part of the season where Donna Noble is the Doctor's companion, that means it was season 4. Martha had only came along since she just happened to be with them at the point in time when the TARDIS took off. The previous episode was with the sontarans. Martha was in that episode since she is with UNIT as a doctor and had called him back for that episode. ..... I lost my train of thought. So I'm just genna leave with this: random moustache is random! :moustache:

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As in, you just came up with what is probably a better idea than what I have planned. Of course, if you know what the fob watch means, then you can possibly guess one thing. HOWEVER. There will be plot twists - Soooooo much with the plot twists! And they actually make sense with the show!

Now all I have to do is plan the part between NOW and THEN.

Nyeeugh *facehoof*

3649984 I came up with an idea? I had only go Pinkie for a bit. I can't remember the name of the episode so I channeled Pinkie and just typed some of the basic story summary from the episode. And yes. I do completely understand what the fob watch means. And I'm extremely excited to see what happens with it. :yay: But can you please explain about this idea I seemed to have made? 'Cause I don't recall one. Just channeling Pinkie and remembering what happened in the episode.
Strategic moustache! :moustache:

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The whole "Harmony is Jenny" thing.

3650101 I thought that 'Harmony is Jenny' was what you already had planned? I mean, when the main character has a dream about a silver fob watch in a story with the Doctor in it, then that must mean something huge! And since the main character is female, that must mean it's Jenny, right? Or am I just make a bunch of really big assumptions here?
Psst. Come here. Closer, closer, just a little closer... Random moustache! :moustache: Muhahahahaha!!

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Random moustache right back at you! :moustache:

And no, that isn't what I had planned... The fact that you have no clue will make it even better :duck:
(although no one could ever guess it except maybe Pinkie Pie :pinkiehappy:)

:trollestia: :duck: :moustache:

*cliffhangers*

Sorry this chapter is a little late, I try to post another every 1-3 days. CURSE YOU SCHOOL AND SPORTS :flutterrage:

I won't be getting anything done over the weekend, family is coming in for Christmas, and then there's Christmas itself next wednesday.

:derpytongue2:

I volunteer to be your editor! Trust me on this, Kay?:pinkiehappy:

:pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp:Celestia, damn these cliff hangers! Luckily the next chapter is out so... BYE!

Oh,wait... No it isn't :raritycry::raritycry::raritycry:Of all the things that could happen... This is the WORST.POSSIBLE.THING!!!!!

Comment posted by DiscordedWhovian deleted Jan 6th, 2014

Excellent :moustache: good plot, interesting oc, and only a tiny typo which im not even going to point out because you are a much better writer than me. I cant wait to see how this plays out. And i too, do most of my writing in the night

Ah. So EVERY class has a diamond tiara and silver spoon. Lovely. God danit... Harmony, y u ignore blue box?!:flutterrage:

OH GOD RIVER DO SOMETHING!!!! :fluttershbad:

Hmmmhmm. Oh, that TARDIS. Clever girl...:raritywink:

Damn. Stuffs about to go down!:pinkiegasp:

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You knew that it was the TARDIS! :rainbowkiss: :yay: yaaaaaaaaaaay

everything was waaayy too fast

probably faster then rainbow :rainbowdetermined2:

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Wowh. That fast, huh?

I maaaaaaay just work on it a little to see if I can slow it down... (although in my defense, Harmony was supposed to be in and out as quickly as possible, to avoid exactly what happened, and therefore collapsing in the TARDIS.)

But pfft, who needs excuses? I'm procrastinating until tomorrow. When I have access to a computer instead of an iPod.

yyeeeeeeeaaaaaaa
I need a life

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Tomorrow. Tomorrow is always the best time to do anything remotely important. Yes... Tomorrow it will happen! :twilightsmile:

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Good job on story and all, but be a bit more detailed please...:fluttershysad:

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Thanks for the tip, I'll work on that...

OH GOD IT'S TOMORROW ISN'T IT
SINCE WHEN DOES TOMORROW BECOME TODAY

:fluttershysad:
*thinkthinkthinkthink* :duck:
PERFECT. I KNOW JUST THE THING.

Lesson zero twilight is scariest twilight. This really got me thinking about how little of a grasp these ponies have on their own sanity. Pinkie Pie the embodiment of laughter, suffers from depression. Rarity has breakdowns 20 times a day. Fluttershy has a boiling rage inside her. Rainbow dash craves attention and thrives on it. Applejack would work until her body stopped functioning. Twilight's fear of failure has overtaken her many times. Basically, the mane 6 need psychologists

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I fully and completely agree.

Don't expect much of anything from me tomorrow, family issues and therefore babysitting 7 and 8 year old cousins who are veeeeeery rambunctious. Computers are being hidden, rooms being off-limits, yada yada kids with no rules in their lives. :pinkiesick: Wish us luck!

IT HAS BEEN DONE.
There were no problems, actually. The only thing was when we went on a walk with our dog, and they kept yelling about farts and the dog taking a dump. :facehoof: Just... Just no. Please?

Gimme a couple hours, new chapter is coming.
And thank you for the salute. o7 I salute right back to you. :yay:

I hate to say it but I like this fixed chapter better. :pinkiehappy: I love how you brought crazy Twi into it!! :rainbowlaugh: Pure. Genius. :rainbowlaugh:

'Dear mum, it read. Please forgive me for hanging Spike from that branch. I needed to get out of here, something was wrong with my head. Twilight squinted her eyes a little with worry, and continued. I made some new friends, and they're helping me find out where I'm from. Their names are Ditzy Do and Doctor Whooves, you may or may not know them. We're starting in Trottingham, because of my accent. I hope you're not too angry with me. Twilight could imagine the steam pouring out of her ears. I love you. Goodbye.' Twilight didn't notice the tears streaming down her face, but she did notice something on the bottom of the page. P.S. You look kind of insane. Your hair is all messed up, you keep making weird faces, and your wings need preened. Kind of like in that story you told me about the whole "Smarty Pants friendship problem." Twilight blinked a few times, dropped the letter, and went to clean herself up

I was dying!! :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

Why, thank you. I cannot agree more. Just wait. Next chapter we have Doctor learning pony customs. in a slightly awkward situation. But I can't tell you. Spoilers!~ :pinkiecrazy:

Speculate away!

Think you went overboard with having Twilight be insane again.

Is Harmony and Twilight going to properly reconcile?

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eeeeeeeeeventually. I don't really know, I plan these glorious things in my head, only to forget them as soon as I'm faced with a keyboard. :facehoof: I just let the creative juices flow, man. :coolphoto: Just let 'em flow.

*coughcough-crazy-twi-is-best-twi-coughcough*

(I'm not even sorry)

3709085 Now that I look at your name... :pinkiegasp: ITS YOUUUUUUUU (The Wolf Among Us)

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