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It's the eve of the 992nd Annual Prom, and Crimson Brass is nervous about asking his very special somepony to the prom. He finally gathers enough courage to ask Twilight Sparkle out, and is excited that the mare agreed. But another unicorn seems adamant in ruining what Crimson thought was going to be the best night of his life.
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[Cover image by SpectrumPony]
That was... Very tragic. 
I'd like to think it was the poison joke that made Twilight act that way, but, I think that might've been partly the way she was before she knew how to make friends and moved to Ponyville. She used to be one of the shy, quiet ones who was bullied or ignored, and without a constant, strong enough support to help anchor her (which Crimson would have been if she gave him enough time and chances), all of that hidden pain lashed out and made her do unto others what had been done to her.
I feel especially bad for Crimson himself. I wonder what happened to him after this whole ordeal 
I hope somewhere down the line he finally did find real love, or at least found some form of happiness.
This is extremely well-written! The dark atmosphere, painfully interrupted promises of hope and biting social culture reminded me of that classic film "Carrie". I love it! 
It has been a little over 11 hours since I read this story and I have spent most of that time thinking about it. The last story that made me think about it this long was Ships That Pass in the Night and its sequel The Three Notes, both of whom were Romance Tragedies. As such I have spent a good deal of this time comparing them to Want It; Need It! , and I have come to a new opinion. I do NOT think there should be an epilogue!
Why the 180 in my opinion you ask? Well its simple, you can blame it on Ships That Pass in the Night and The Three Notes. You see Ships That Pass in the Night, like Want It; Need It!, had a vary sad ending while leaving you with a shred of hope. Its that hope that that you cling to, its the thing that allows you to stand tall and say "things may look bleak now, but as long as there is hope things can work out." So that's exactly what you do, allow that hope to fuel your imagination and you make your own ending. Sad endings just crush that hope and leave you depressed. Happy endings typically wrap things up to nicely so you cant make up your own ending anymore, this typically makes the stories easy to forget as well.
Btw if you like Romance Tragedies you should check out Ships That Pass in the Night and The Three Notes
>>326547 Haven't been a fan of epilogues for a while now. Every time I think about a story having an epilogue I just think back to Ships That Pass in the Night and The Three Notes. The Three Notes was basically the epilogue to Ships That Pass in the Night that took the sad path, and I ended up depressed after reading it. Its always funner to imagine your own ending.
I don't think an epilogue would do this story any good, it would be rushed. This kind of confict needs months or years to be solved, not a single night. This kind of stuff leaves a scar too deep to be healed in a single day of talking.
If I may ask, a good way to make people happy would be writing a full story, using this as the first chapter. Could you do it? I would be very happy to see it happening.
Thanks.
But leave him to rot is kind of too much. He doesn't need to be with Twilight. What keeps him from getting laid whit anot-IDEA!
The episode left Crimison traumatized, so he decided never to fall in love again. But he breaks his own promisse years later, falling in love with [inset mane six/oc here].
There, now we only need someone to write that. (I cant; already behind the scheldule with my fics.)
Brilliant Story. I can understand why Twilight did that. She was DESPERATE for friendship, so she took it to the extreme. We saw her crack like this in Lesson Zero, before.
A few nitpicks:
There's no such thing as a "Stud Stamp". They're called Cutie Marks, regardless of the Pony's gender.
Luna doesn't possess any of the elements. They were kept in the old royal castle in the Everfree Forest.
Why Can't This Be Love - Van Halen
I don't post nearly enough Van Halen.
Ah, satisfying. Honestly, I would have acted in the exact same way as Crimson.
Maybe I just like vengeance. You do wrong, you get repaid in double. I hope Twi learned her lesson and is so distracted that she fails all her exams!
Yay, destruction!
Bwahaha, great read. 
Ok, let me just say this.... I wouldn't care if she were a girl. I wouldn't care if she was the love of my dreams . If a girl did something like that to me....... then i would have slapped her right in the face. Hard. Then i would have looked her in the eyes and said........
..... You disgust me.....
Seriously! She deserved to feel pityfull for that. That was just so rude. Poor Crim-sy
I find it interesing how most people seem to only consider the mental damage Twi did to Crimson. Am I the only one who considers how his life is pretty much ruined to no end now? The beginning of the story pretty much set up how he was useless outside of the magic university, and now that he had to leave it(not much choice at that point) he really got nowhere much to go...(Sure he can go back home, but not being able to study the magic as a proffesion he will probably end up being a useless pony with no well paying job and a whole lot of problems) This makes me even more sad then just the mental damage he has taken.(as that hopefully will pass in time... but having to leave the only school you can attent and losing your only shot at a successful life seems pretty final.)
I know... just a story.. I am thinking about it to much.
A plot hole btw, in the story it seems to be common knowledge that Luna is the sister of Celestia, but in Ep 2 season 1 the mane 6 are surprised by the whole sister thing.(Which actully is a really weird setup from the show and I would blame the show for this... but their stuff is the cannon stuff)
Twi also should know Trixie by the setup of this story.. but she doesn't seem to in the show.
And when does this take place? Doesn't Twilight become Celestia's student the moment she passes the entrance exam.?(I doubt Celestia's star student would either do this or have anyone make fun of her... don't screw with the pupil of the goddes)
I think there was one more thing.. but my mind is tired and I forgot it.
Anyway, standing on its own this is a really good story... it makes me really sad (somuch so I regret reading it) but when taken as an "alternate"(I imagened it as a world were Luna had already returned and the mane 6 have never been needed. As such Twi just passed the exam normally and while still being the same self at basis her heart is colder without Celestia's support. Also explains the Luna plothole.) reality story it works well enough.
The moment I read the line "
"It's just a simple spell, where's the harm?" she insisted.
"
I knew what this was based on... and part of me rejoiced in the dark turn this was going to take... the other part was not yet allert enough to know how sad it was going to be.
On side note, you really enjoy writing stories with no decisive ending, yes?(I had no idea you wrote Borderline till I looked at your account but both of these stories are not super decisive ending)
I don't really mind in this story,(in Borderline I personally feel like the whole story just fell apart in the last act of it... maybe i missed some important step in the story but to me it feels like the story did not take the twist it should have, as such the lack of ending just helped to emphasise the bad last act. I don't hate Borderline btw, I really like the first 3/4th of it... I just think the setup was wasted big time) in this story I managed to picture myself an ending and how Crimson's life will continue after these events.(Granted.. his future is dark.. but that isn't really the point of debate here)
Don't write an Epiloge to this, it works as it is.
But she didn't mean to do it. Something came over her, and she didn't know exactly what it was. She still loved Crimson, right? She never said she didn't love him (she did in the first part, but Lucefudu seems to have fixed it.)
I'm making a follow up to this (already have his permission). I'm still a little fuzzy on some subjects, but I think that the graphic novel where he appears in should be out by June 2012 
I need to get 2 other novels out before hand though.
>>394707 Thank you for that. I really want Twi to meet Crimson again. But really? who do such a thing. but the main part is that this particular event happened to me and my girlfriend a long time ago. Not exactly like this, but she made me feel like shit in front of my whole class. So you can say that it was mostly my feelings getting to me in that comment. I'm sorry 
>>326547 Wow, don't be an ass about it.
We're just asking, not forcing you to. And when someone says that he likes it you immediately be all "THIS FAN IS BETTAR THAN U ALL HURRDURR".
Seriously, this was pretty crappy closure. All it says that Crimson moved on(in more ways than one), but like another guy said(Sorry, forgot your name!), he's lost everything now that he left Canterlot.
>>426972 Wait, wait, wait, wait, waitwaitwaitwaitwaitwait!
When was I an ass? When I didn't use any derogatory terms to reference people whom weren't pleased with the ending? When I expressed my thoughts upon the subject? The most offensive-like comment I made were these two: >>330695 and >>385811
And even there, I'm not being an ass. I'm being clean: if you don't like the ending, you can come up with your own and write it (in fact, someone contacted me and asked me permission to use Crimson in a fanfic of his, in which Crimson will have a future; a believable one).
Its a matter of "to me, this fanfic ends here."
If you're talking about SpectrumPony, she and I have a story. I'm not praising her just because she liked the story, I'm praising her because she did the cover art for this. If you were to dislike it (and judging by what you stated, you did dislike it) and point out why exactly you disliked it, I most certainly would give you props for telling me about it. I'm not an idiot who doesn't know how to take criticism. I enjoy comments that point out where exactly I made mistakes far more than just "OMG URE AWESOMZ". In fact, I don't like the latter at all. I can give you N reasons for me wanting to leave it open-ended, but I would like to know why you didn't like the closure (or the intentional lack thereof) instead.
In fact, if you're feeling like it, go ahead and criticize the whole story. I will read it and I will like it. Just don't jump to conclusions when you don't know what is going on.
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It's very well written and it's explains alot 
omg it wuz amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
First game, or second? 
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