• Member Since 1st Mar, 2012
  • online

The Psychopath


My very first (self-published) book can be found on Amazon Kindle for 5 or 12 paperback! If you love dragons, give it a look! https://www.amazon.com/dp/B0CSM7QQ2M

T
Source

FMTM fully rewritten on December 12th, 2019.
Old version backup
Big Mac is also in this story.
Part 2:From man to mare: chaotic convergence
Part 3:From man to mare: an aching heart
Part 4:From man to mare: I love my mommy
Part 5:From man to mare: Time to tell

Derry Wilhall; a man having received a large inheritance from his grandfather, decides to live like he's always dreamed: alone and separated from society. A little excursion through the woods for some sight seeing throws him into the throngs of another world. "He" ends up in a body that is not his and will see things from another perspective.

Chapters (14)
Comments ( 506 )

rmadere.files.wordpress.com/2011/08/i-dont-want-to-live-on-this-planet.png

I'm sure the ending was perfect for this to be use I really like this for some reason. Track!:pinkiehappy:

DDAAAAAYYUUUUMMM!

Now, I shall wait for the next chapter.:rainbowkiss:

First.
This is awesome. please continue it.
MOOOOAAAAR!:flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:

this is pretty damn good if I do say so myself
imma tell mah friend sergeant invictus to read this
and before I forget
RANDOM PICTURE TIME!!
THAT DOESN WORK GOD DAMNIT

316286 because he like evrything he sees you dummy
he gon like this story brother......I hope

316292 I was joking. *sniff* Noone has my sense of humor:fluttercry:

316294
*uberhaxornova mode ON
FUCK YOUUUUUUUU!!
*uberhaxornova mode OFF
there for being an ass about getting the help of my friend

I refrain from passing judgement yet. A few chapters in, perhaps then. Tracking for now.

316313
dont even bother, ok?
I like your story thus I tracked it
then liked it because its so fugging funny

316350 I'm just messing with you! Why would I need to mock you or your friend? I find those sort of things useless...although I have been told that my humor tends to be taken seriously.... I need to work on that.:unsuresweetie:

316384>>316350 here i am Chavis
and i have yet to read, but im getting there

316414 I'm currently "writing" (more liek typing) the second chapter as we breathe.

Edit: I think I accidentally a comment.

I'm unsure about this story :unsuresweetie:, so buck up and make the next chapter so good I'm forced to favorite this! :pinkiehappy:

Also, mare means female horse. Does this mean that Derry will become a female? That would be VERY interesting.

316432 Noone knows until they experiment. Let's see what I can do. *cracks fingers* ....shoot.

aat first i was like :twilightsmile:
then i was like :rainbowlaugh:
then i was like :rainbowhuh:
and finially i was like :pinkiehappy:

good so far
i kinda got confused about the whole cracking part
you think someone would hear that

316459 Glad to know that I can cause several different emotions all at once. Now if only I could render some people insane. *looks back at you and squints eyes*.....you heard nothing:trixieshiftleft:

316481 oh
i heard everything friend
everything
watch yourself, for i am a veteran space marine!
ik
im awesome

316492 Space marine? Why not join Khorne , he has lovely Khorne flakes for breakfast and the best positive thinking in the galaxy.:ajbemused:

316505 lol
i prefer being a space marine friend
i mean
Khorne has one of the best catch phrases
"Skulls for the skull throne, blood for the blood god"
no one can compete with that

>_> <_< First?

Excellent, most excellent indeed. I am waiting for the next installment, you my good sir/madam/other have my track and thumbs up.

Funny how the main character didn't notice he had been altered until getting to that pond and that it's just AFTER noticing the chnages that he/she couldn't walk anymore....

besides that, can be a good story, most Human in Equestria seem to be about bronies or at least socially able people entering, this is gonna be nice... I sense a triple perspective take for MC

Different from most mlp cross dimensional fanfics ... I like:rainbowkiss:

And you don't have a proof-reader/editor? Well written.

318917 Well , I did have English as my first language and I had to study it from pre-school to the 5th grade.And since I like to read in english and talk with my mom in english despite being in a french/dutch speaking country , let's just say that I do my best. Thanks for the compliment.

Your description of Derry raging sounds eerily much like me when I do that...

But anyways, great story! :twilightsmile:

So, you're from Belgium?

Anyways, I should note that the plural form of 'pegasus' is either 'pegasai,' or 'pegasi.'
Furthermore, if you do an ellipsis (multiple periods), you should always use three dots, like this: '...'

That aside, still like the story. :twilightsmile:

319101 I know about the plural form of the Pegasi species. Also , I usually do three dot elipsis when I feel that the need for a short silence is needed. I extend them to give a longer feeling of wait or confusion when necessary. And it has been quite needed. Also , the only thing Derry and I have in common is that rage mode. Yeah , I took it from myself. It only happened once. Thanks for the grammatical advice though.

Edit: Wait , how did you know I'm from Belgium just by seeing the languages spoken? Are you STALKING ME?:rainbowderp:

(No.Not THAT joke)

What joke, i'm curious now?


Lol, are a pervert if you wear a dress. ull be a cross dressing pony, and thats just wrong on a whole different level.

319380 Ignore that. It's a bad joke that's been circulating about the net for quite awhile. I was hoping noone would use it if I pointed that out. Luckily , you didn't get it.:trollestia:

"Nothing bad, just funny" damned cliffhangers.....

besides that, this still seems to be on a good path.... as well as being updated a LOT....

319688 My imagination is a black hole that I pull thinks out of. What can I say? I've imagined MANY things and I'm not about to stop!

This is fun and I love it... but can I say one thing?

The whole 'Space-comma-space' thing is a little bugging. Other than that I spotted no other errors.

Anyways... Still tracking like a bawss.

319778 Oh yeah. Sorry 'bout that. It's a habit I've grown while typing. I know there aren't supposed to be any spaces between word and commas,but I do that automatically(like here. I just corrected it.) I'll try and pay more attention to that later on.

319806
Er... you need a space, just after the comma.

Its no biggie, at least you use the things!

Well, it's nice that this updates frequently. Need to do that for mine. I'm a bit tired now, so I can't quite put forth a coherent opinion of the story so far. Gee, I almost spelled "opinion" as "onion" :rainbowlaugh:
Still though, I must've missed where Derry reasons why he hasn't yet spoken about him being a, well, a him, or then I'm simply too drowsy :ajsleepy: to recall the why.

Hey, have you read my story? I'm sure you'd find it interesting.

320030 I'll probably read it , but not now. I've been writing this story while I've been having some...uhhh...IRL issues right now.Not exactly issues, but, meh. So I'll check out your story eventually.

A few typos here and there and some questionable use of language, but overall I would say it's okay.

320190 Questionable use of language? Like? You mean the cursing? The American way of writing english? Or perhaps the franglish that might be in there? Could you show me an example so I can correct it?

I knew if I waited a bit from when we talked I would be able to read more of your story. If you keep posting parts of it I won't get any sleep.

:twilightsmile: Somehow I am very okay with this.

Also, I love the Story. but the Hoofpalm needs ta be a slight bit adjusted. How about a Facehoof? :3

322397 THen I will post so many parts that you will forget what slumber is. "Cue diabolical laughter" :ajbemused:

Login or register to comment