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Grymm BlackHeart


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Discord is seen by many as a monster. Princess Celestia has told the story of discord the spirit of chaos and disharmony, but no pony knows the truth behind it all, until one day Twilight finds an old artifact that tells the story behind the conflict between Celestia and Discord. She finds that Monsters aren't born they are created and that not all stories end 'happily ever after'...
(inspired by the comic 'Discordantly' by the CrappyUnicorn on deviantart, 'Marvel: origins' and the song 'My Curse' By Killswitch engaged) Some thanks and credit to my brony Critical Lighthouse for helping with the grammar and editing.

Chapters (15)
Comments ( 55 )

Seem good. Will stay around for more.

This story seems pretty good so far. I cant wait to read more! :heart:

i like where this is going, but try to leave out things that are so lore breakingly big, such as video games

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thanks for the constructive criticism :rainbowkiss:

Nice story. Keep up the good work.

So sad, your doing a great job so far, although a longer chapter would be nice next update :scootangel:

"What did you do with my stuff... ?" he asked in a dangerous tone.

"Whatever! Next time you decide to mess with my shit you'd better think twice or else!"


I'm sorry, but the Alicorn's dialogue here seems horrendously childish and petulant, and not threatening at all.

"stuff," and "whatever," are simply out of place. Not to mention, the curse words don't seem to fit his characterization as a brooding, animalistic early-age man (alicorn).



"What have you done with my belongings?"

"How dare you think yourself high enough to violate my things!"

"Never disturb my things, woman!"

Et cetera. Just giving suggestions.

I don't buy Discord's characterization here, but maybe that's because I'm not keeping in mind that this is not current-times Discord.

Current times Discord would suffer from his memories, certainly, but he wouldn't show it. He'd brush it off with a riddle or proverb, and if the issue was pushed too much, he might be aggressive (Often, children who were abused grow up to be aggressive and detest the idea of being "victimized," so much so that they victimize others.) But he would not break down in front of somepony and let out his sob story. Still, the "special circumstances" situation will let that float for the time being, at least.

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I'm sorry I'm still sorta new at this :twilightsheepish: I promise I'll get things to make sense later in the story :pinkiesmile: just wait!

O.O *prays it'll be Twicord/Discolight* Anyway, that is some ending to the chapter I mean, look at Twilight. She's speechless! > :twilightoops:

Oh, darn you! As if I didn't already feel sympathetic to Discord! :fluttercry:

Oooh, Dizzy, I'm so sorry! Celestia is cruel for telling us you were evil! :fluttercry:

And then, this happened. Curse those tyrants they call their Princesses. Btw, LOVED THE KISS! Was so hoping that would come out of this!

How about.. Chrysalis?! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/lolface_Queen_Chrysalis.png If not her then I suppose you could do NMM. And btw, Discord has been, is, and always will be, epic in every way shape and form possible.

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Why not both? But honestly I would like to see an "Equestrian Archives" story with Trixie. There's not much known about the character's past so you can pretty much do whatever you want. :twilightsmile:

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I would do one for Chrysalis but... nevermind it's gonna be a surprise :trollestia:

I the cover art! :rainbowkiss: I just had to say that before I read it!

Awww... Poor Dissy! Oh yeah, and I also fangirl freaked out a tiny bit when she said I haven't had a first kiss: dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_RageFace.png "SHUT UP SHUT UP SHUT UP! YOU HAVE AND IT WAS FROM DISCORD SO JUST SHUT UP OMGOMGOMG" *reads on and sees she wasn't including it* Oh.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_TwilightWut.png

I WANT MORE! I WANT MORE!

Welp here it is! the long awaited chapter! I finished it early just for you guys, I worked through the night and didn't bother doing homework just so that I could get it out for you guys! I hope you enjoy! :twilightsmile:

EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE! YOURE AWESOME! That was so, OMG!!!!!!!!

YEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE BOIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII KEEP IT COMING!!!

in b4 First comment about being first (I hate those guys. lol), at least I hope so. you can't tell when you're typing if someones just posted:twilightsheepish:


Edit: I was! :yay:

:fluttercry:Teenage girly tears shed. Poor Dissy.

Good chapter and let me guess, when everybody finds out what happened they'll all condemn Discord as a monster and want him punished/killed despite Stormer raping and killing his mother and raping his sister on top of all the abuse?

This is one of the most depressing things I have ever read. :fluttercry:
But I LOVE IT! :flutterrage:

Exactly to feel nothing after killing is sociopath route and discord is no where near that


this is an amazing piece bravo sir may this fic grow to popularity that is on par with my little dashie. Well done and please update soon!

Raped his mind and read his soul... Sounds like a charming female. :unsuresweetie:

He should have sliced off everything except Stormer's torso and head, sutured the wounds, and thrown him off a cliff in the Everfree. Eris is going to need some extreme therapy. Can't wait to see more of Princess Crystal. She's so adorable with the rapist/lover mindset. I want to see her similar to Princess Molestia, what with the needle eyes and indiscriminate roughing.

Well, that was an unexpected twist. :twilightoops: I for some reason thought the platinum-maned filly would be Princess Platinum. Oh well. Still a cool chapter, and also, is that.. a relationship I see forming between Twilight and Discord?

Poor Dizzy! Can't wait to see what happens next though. :pinkiehappy:
Good job! Can't wait for more Discolight :heart: :twilightsmile:
Personally, I love Discolight but I fear most of my fellow readers do not. :ajsleepy:

Crystal is going to end up being Chrysalis, isn't she? :pinkiegasp:
I can't wait for more!! :pinkiehappy:
"How was your very first kiss...?" Flustered Twilight! :twilightblush: That. Was. Adorable.

2903066 .-. shat sorreh I'll fix it T^T I haven't been getting much sleep

bronies at arms

I couldn't help but giggle at that. :rainbowlaugh:
Also, Shadow of the Colossus moment. :moustache:

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Annnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnndddddddddddddddddddddddd.... completely wrong emotion for this chapter...

This story doesn't get enough attention.

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Did I word it weird? Sorry. What I meant was: This story doesn't get as many views as it should. Too many great stories are overlooked, such as yours.

3484058 Oh its cool really ^-^ I'm not as good as the authors of my little dashie or the silent ponyville series. I'm happy with what I get :pinkiehappy:

Why did it take me so long to read this chapter? It's really good! Poor Dissy, finding out about the war...

Comment posted by Disorderly chaos deleted Dec 26th, 2013

I am grammar Nazi and I have found mistakes,but over all i am crying from so much feel.:raritydespair:

NEAT cant wait till the next chapter!!!!:rainbowkiss:

this story makes almost 0 sense xD
dont get me wrong i enjoy mostly of it but its just so stupid that noone never saw any of the bruieses and stuff Discord and Eris got from him and that they never went to the hospital
gosh

holy shit that Author's Note

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