This story is based five years after the events of another story or stories called Upheaval, owned and written by Visiden.
The one enemy of Equestria, the one enemy you can never fight. Is not the teeth and claw of the Wolven or the venom and slavery of the Ophlidites. No, the enemy is time itself. You follow the story of one unicorn half breed named Theran Razrblade, who is looking for a reason to exist after losing everything he loved and cared about at the endless void of time. That reason to be, might just be around the next corner.
Chapters (32)
You need to put some work into the formatting of this story in order to make it easier to read as it's rather difficult to go through as it is. Put some spacing between paragraphs, use a comma instead of a period when you have dialogue that has speech tags...and a bunch of other things. I recommend a thorough reading of the materials provided in the FAQ of this site.
The swearing is off-putting , especially since it's the typical "fuck" and "shit". Try to lessen the swearing and be more creative with them whenever you have to use them.
Oh, um ok?
Reamember this is darker and a little more mature than your Upheaval stories. Though I will take in your concern on the swearing. Sorry I read Fallout fan-fics and I myself swear a lot.
If you don't know yet, Theran is my Oc so he's got some of my personality e,g swearing a lot.
Personally, I'm loving the store, a though spelling mistakes here and there, but apart from that, a great job
SPELLING.
Otherwise, you deserve an add to my group. Here ya go.
Thanks and some of my spelling mistakes are on purpose, mostly in character dialogue.
See I'm from scotland and many of the words in the story are real words.
Fight me!!!
Huh
Just saying, but chapter sixteen is password protected
Just so you know, you can respond to comments by moving your mouse over to the right of the comment and clicking on the >> that appears. How many chapters long is this story going to be for?
Cameron, you....are sexy!
Does this story have any spoilers for the end of Upheaval: Journeys?
6612041 Nope. In fact it's pretty much its own story, I just piggyback off the Upheaval universe