D'oh!

That poor poor fool.  Tempting murphy he is.

>>320733320733

He knows not the powers he trifles with.

yeah.  that about sums it up.

One does not simply take out a troll.

>>329895329895

it can be done as long as the troll isn't fed. :)

'  " Ms sweetie bell" he said standing up offering her a helping hand up, " How good at you are annoying people?" '    

Sir, that line just made my day.

>>343799343799

Glad you enjoyed it! Next chapter should be up tomorrow evening!

This series totally caught me off guard in how well it was written and how much I enjoyed your original character.

I cannot wait for more.

>>348572348572

You sir, just made my day. Thanks so much!

*sigh*  I kind of envy Graves at that point.

I gotta ask, if you were to compare his gun to something in real life, what would it be?

I keep switching between a M16A4 and a Winchester Model 1873.

>>351440351440

Really? How so?

>>351950351950

The standard spell gun is much more like the Winchester. However, Graves had a slightly different model.

http://dsc.discovery.com/tv/surviving-the-cut/images/surviving-the-cut-snipers-8.jpg

I was thinking something around late 19th century, sort of at the height of the old west time period. Graves would have one like this, only made of grey metal and not wood. Also, no engravings on his: strictly designed to be sturdy and serviceable.

Yay. My favorite Crusader.

>>360768360768

Sweetie Belle is best little pony.

I love your stories, glad to see this out

You need more attention, I mean, the concept of Graves/Marshall/Humans is very entertaining, but there's not enough ponies reading

>>362188362188

I know, huh?  I just can't figure out how to get people to notice me. So sad.

But hey, when people like you write and let me know you enjoy it, that's enough to keep me going. Thanks!

Well, I suppose patience is the answer, I mean, no one puts something up and gets famous overnight. Right?

Unless your the luckiest pony ever.

>>363072363072

That may very well be the case: I have the luck of a deaf mole with a bad case of the sniffles. Go figure.

I am beginning to love your stories, mate. Keep up the good work!

I guess you can say those trolls got.... *le puts on sunglasses*

... Counter trolled...

>>373617373617

YEEEEEAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!

And thanks! Glad you're enjoying them!

DUDE... I LOVE THIS SERIS, and to show it I give you, (drum roll)

   10 out of 10 moustaches

>>374958374958

*HNNG!* My heart! It's too... much... win!

Graves get in there

The whole storyline has been very good. As I have no real criticism to make, I don't know what else to say

Yeah, I never could figure out why so many anime characters are covered in belts. Also, Sweetie Belle isn't really that much of an airhead in the show anymore. She's the one who decided to hook up Cheerilee with someone and who thought of having Applebloom playing hookie.

>>414637414637

Everything you say is true. I just love the air headed Sweetie Belle: she's just so lovably derpy that way.

Other than that, have you enjoyed the series?

You know for a man who's job requires constant awareness and being three steps ahead........ Graves isn't the most perceptive bugger is he.

>>417756417756

Maybe he doesn't pick up on them cause... they aren't life-threatening? Mostly?

...

Yeah, let's just go with that.

More minor editing:

"Twilight meticulously collapsed all the cardboard boxes and whisked away shredded wrapping paper with a flick of her want."

I assume that you meant:

"Twilight meticulously collapsed all the cardboard boxes and whisked away shredded wrapping paper with a flick of her wand"

AHAHAHAHAHA Oh oh my ribs*falls over laughing holding hsi ribs* I loved the trolls. I so have to use these guys intellect skills for the ones in mine They are Equestrias lemmings!

>>454263454263

Lemmings of Equestria? I like it! If you do use it, just give me a shout out, okay? That'd just tickle me pink.

is this anthro or human cus you you said sweetie bell had pony eyes just wanna know. good work so far

>>582626582626

Human. The meaning was puppy dog eyes, the euphemism for big, innocent eyes, but since we all know that pony eyes are better, I changed the wording.

i have a question where do the cutey marks do they appear as a tattoo like image or what. and where does it go i was just wondering, love the story so far. keep up the good work.  

>>584910584910

That question will be answered in a later story (the fifth one, to be specific).

>>363052363052

Have you considered sending it to EQD?

The pre-readers will probably tell you work on the grammar a bit, but the story quality is more than high enough to get past them.

The first chapter of my first story wasn't as well written as your stories when I submitted it, but they still accepted it.

Also, very entertaining story. Graves is a classic lawman and you manage to capture a genuine 'old west' feel in his adventures. A formula that blends surprisingly well with our favorite ponies. Well done.

Famous last words.

"What’s the worst that could happen?"

Famous last words...

“You’re wardrobe, of course!”

No but seriously. I'm a huge fan of the Graves stories.

“…as long as it’s not frou-frou,”  the marshal slowly agreed, causing Rarity to squeal in delight.”

extra quotation mark.

Don't get the wrong idea from my constant bitching. This is still head and shoulders above most fics.

‘sever damage to a commanding officer’s posterior’

think it's "severe"

BOOM! Ass-shot!

>>582626582626 yeah. it's been that way from the start. one of the tags on all the stories is "Human"

"What's a troll?"

"Just a big nuisance."

lol ain't that the truth XD

Pfft. Poor Graves...

"What's a troll?"

"Just a big nuisance."

I'm expecting the troll to be like an internet troll now.

What’s the worst that could happen?

Never ask that question. EVER.

This can only end well

>>348572348572 Ditto.

>>691080691080 Everything this guy said.

Sweetie really is best little pony, and I am definitely growing fond of Graves as well.

Applejack wouldn't mind if Graves bothered her.

So, some sort of update in chapter 1 got this story in the feature box, at the moment. :)

Reading this chapter in retrospect, I'm wondering what the purpose of those medals are for.

Are they going to be brought up in a later story, or are you just showing how cool Graves is?

>>936303936303

All in due time, good sir. All in due time.

I gotta say the pleading pony eyes thing really throws me. to be honest I have yet to see an explanation of why the stories are humanised rather than simply as ponies.

Sweetie bell deserves a cutie mark in annoing folks XD

>>353445353445

I keep thinking of his gun Destiny from LoL because of him being Graves sans-beard.

Okay, this isn't REALLY a complaint, but... Buck? Seriously? They aren't even ponies anymore, so how do you justify using that?

““Wait, what did you–”

Click.

“–say?”

... XD I don't know why, but Graves reminds me a lot of Garion from the Belgariad series. XD

I'm a tad confused about how you mentioned cutie marks near the beginning.  Do humanized ponies still get cutie marks?  

>>964337964337

Indeed. The details will be filled in during story 5.

nothing bad ever happens when you take children with you to exterminate mythical beast, nothing.

>>948556948556 I would say it's justified, people make up fake curse words all the time, in a attempt to be less offensive. It only makes sense to me that in a society that still relies on horses, that there would be some that would use that as a curse word.

Was Rainbow reading Trigun?

>>10245431024543

Ding ding ding! Yes, that was the image I referenced! For this, I present you with a Derpy of Unexpected Observance.

' “Miss Sweetie Belle,” he said, standing up and offering her a helping hand, “how good are you at annoying people?” '

My response to this is, "Quite well sir." Best line in this chapter. For that I grant you a mustache.

And agreed with maskedferret, Sweetie Bell deserves a cutie mark in annoying everypony, or in this case everbody.

>>938583938583 Since no one answered you: Why not? It's an interesting take one this whole thing. Not only that, but he does it nicely.

>>11144931114493 It wasn't even rmotely meant to be a complaint sorry I was honestly just curious about why it was chosen that way. I agree it's a really neat take on things and a lot of fun. Other than the pleading pony eyes thing that tends to trip me up >.<

So you mean to tell me. Twilight Sparkle, our resident egghead, bookworm extraordinary, miss know it all...

1.- Has no idea what ANY of those medals are.

2.- Has NO curiosity to find what any of those mean...

You 're really bucking it up with Twi, right?

So you now have Rarity making clothes with colors that DO NOT MATCH the wearer. Really? Magenta? For a man. A marshall? Really? It seems a doppleganger has kidnapped Rarity and now our "hero" has to rescue her...

Also:

" pleading pony eyes you’ve ever seen. Her big sister could only smile sadly."

Ok man, make up you mind already, humanized or ponies?

That's it, I'm not reading anything more from you. It's not THAT bad... But the bad parts are really bad for me.

What’s the worst that could happen?

Let's find out!

A wild Trollestia has been spotted in the woods

I'm confused.  Some bits in the last part made it seem. Like 2nd person

I've read this one fic a dozen times. I just love the trolls in it. The monster ones :P the way you describe them and the scene where trolls willingly jump off a cliff is just too much I fall over laughing.

Spike... I'd try.  I've got a feeling that, given the state in which Graves stores those medals, they are a source of acute embarrasment to him.

If I were Graves, I'd submit to Rarity's whims in an effort to escape as soon as possible.  You have to save up your capital for important battles and the important battle isn't a set of nice new suits and clothes, it is stopping her from imposing a woman's touch on his house - there is only so much pink and lace a man can take before starting to lacitate, you know!

"What is the worst that could happen".  Graves, you're a Royal Marshall, a darn monster hunter and you are still asking that question?!?

“Miss Sweetie Belle,” he said, standing up and offering her a helping hand, “how good are you at annoying people?”

Brother? She's a professional!

Mwahahahaha! Score one to Rarity!

That was a great action sequence.  I wonder just how much went into those screams when Sweetie Bell consciously meant them.  I've got a feeling that she's a Choromancer.  What that means is that she makes magic with her voice, primarily through singing but other vocalisations have Power too; that's why she gets her way so much because she can subconsciously place light geas on people when she pleads with them.

(ESPN theme)

I know this isn't a ship fic, you found a way to make a full blown nerdmance.

Nerdmance- when an attractive man who is obsessed with one line of work or fandom doesn't realize when a woman or girl is trying to send a message. If you know what I mean.

Image: http://www.memecreator.org/static/images/templates/12161.jpg

Ai six words that should never be put together, EVER.

Wait till dat old professor sees all of Graves' medals hehe :P

oh my god that is the most adorable picture ever

Just on the off chance you care:

“Marshal,” Rarity said, standing up and looking him in the eye. “I hate to be a bother, but would you mind taking Sweetie Belle into town? I need to concentrate, and I’m sure she’d have more fun whilst not trying to keep quite here.”

Is this supposed to be 'quiet' or am I missing something?

Enough nit-picking for me.  Back to reading.

>>948717948717 It's because he's completely and totally whipped and just hasn't realised it yet.  He's beginning to see the danger, but it's far too late to run now.....the trap is set and the noose is already around his neck, it's just waiting for Rarity to kick the stool out from under him........

>>14172781417278 XD Too true, though I'm not sure how much I like comparing Rares to C'Nedra, TBH. (Gosh, now I'm wondering if I spelled Cee's name right or not! It's been a few YEARS since I've re-read the series! XD I'm so insecure...)

And Rares, kicking a stool isn't very lady-like. Would you care for one of us to do it for you, so that you don't strain yourself?

>>880843880843

Image: http://www.trollmania.org/wp-content/uploads/2012/07/tumblr_lud4cyxdOh1qf087qo1_500.png

those damn trolls

I was a it confused about cutie marks. Do humans still get cutie marks somewhere(preferably apropriate like arm)? or is it like a badge? Please explain

"The dejection on Sweetie’s face could have made a stone weep." So sad, that imagery absolutely struck me.

>>414637414637

When i first saw your name, No offence, i thought it said "Erect mane six".

Human minds eh?

Wait, She burned Juice?

Is that even Possible?

Women...

I actually expected Rarity to beat the snot out of Graves for putting Sweetie Belle in danger. Guess he got off easy.

ok i been reading these stories on and off all day today, and I jsut have to say now  before i go to the next one....WOW.....you.....you really know how ot engage somebody to WANT to read a story, and just a little side note but whenever I think of Graves I think of the main character from Red steel 2 , This guy, but with the long hair and instead of the revolver and katana his badass sniper rifle

>>17562231756223 To be honest I thought the EXACT same thing, or at least she'd get pissed and tell him to never show his face around her again or something of the sorts

The cover art reminds me of chrona from soul easter

Image: https://encrypted-tbn0.gstatic.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcQXr5x6CDMsNkEGId7wjiCzKmtSlVYMSXtncVV7EJX_Vp_toSp1

So wait... If all ponies are humanized, and spike is as well... Does that mean that ALL the pets are humanized?

Image: http://media.tumblr.com/tumblr_mcxxxqYMgX1r271cy.png

Dear God...