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Blog Posts49

  • 1w, 23h
    A Prime Example of What Not to Do

    Good day, good day to all. It has been an interesting day and so, I thought I'd share a little story.

    This afternoon, I got an intriguing message from one reader named Smoker. Despite the fact that his by "no means its biggest fan - it has its share of flaws, no offense -" (direct quote, as is basically everything else), he wanted to write a sequel to The Journey of Graves. At the same time, I noticed that he'd left some comments on A Long, Winding Road. Naturally, I figured I'd give it a look and see what he had to say about the story.

    For ducks sake have these bitches heard of common sense.

    Hmm... interesting opening comment. But maybe his later comments get better.

    I have To say after last chapter, this one just seems like the author is desperately trying not to make graves seem over powered. And he falls miserably.

    Okay, so I'm a failure of a writer? Well that's... interesting. What else?

    This is quite possibly the most stupidly overpowered mary sue I have ever encountered in my entire life.

    ... Yeah, I'm not following anymore. But more there is.

    At the very least, there is a tiny little silver lining: Rarity actually grows a brain cell and decides NOT to go on her suicide mission to find him. Point to Rarity.

    ...

    Wait, no, just read the last bit of the story. She's fucking stupid as hell after all. Two points from Rarity house.

    Alright, now he's dissing the marshal's girl. That isn't gonna end well and indeed, it doesn't, for you see, his last comment was:

    Not - not even humoring us.

    fuck it. i'm done.

    Well, what to do, what to do? I'm usually pleased as punch about having a reader want to do work based on The Journey, but this? This was just not cool. Considering he doesn't even understand what I'm trying to write here, let alone appreciate it, meant that obviously, I had to deny his request in the absolute. His response?

    ...and developed characters i've seen more well developed characters on the back of a cereal box you think this is good writing this is just malignant tripe you send form letters to everyone who comments on your stories as an attempt to whore yourself out and get more followers what is this bullshit none of it makes sense.

    Ladies and gentlemen, as I have stated in the title, this is a prime example of what you don't want to do. First, don't ask to write a sequel after posting horrendously mean spirited remarks. Second, when you're predictably refused, don't throw a hissy fit. I mean, seriously, "malignant tripe?" And calling me a whore? Though I don't need to defend myself, I figure I should explain. Yes, I do sent out letters to commentors, favoriters, and the like because I happen to love people who read my stories. Also, I always figure that a personal invitation to join in is a nice little touch, especially since if it happens, people can keep up with my stories more easily and I can grow The Journey community a little more. Everybody wins! Why Smoker considers this "bullshit none of it makes sense" is truly beyond me.

    Now, some of you may be asking why I'm making a post about this. Because a gentleman always defends his honor and the honor of those in his care, wot wot! But really, I did it I want to make it clear that I will not stand for this sort of behavior. Am I salty about it? About as much as saltwater taffy, I suppose. These sorts of comments do irk me a bit (after all, nobody likes being called a whore), but on the bright side, they also makes me really grateful for the people who do understand.

    I may have to deal with hecklers like Smoker, but I've gotten to meet infinitely more wonderful people. There are the artists like The Reanimator (creator of Journey's End artwork) and Captain Pudge Muffin (creator of Untangling the Knot artwork), MrBackPack, the editor who helped me get my start, Intrapulation the YouTuber, the remaining anonymous reader who sent me The Definition of Worth letter, Valient Bug, the first person to ever follow me who is still following The Journey to this very day, and so many more. I could go on (and I will at a later date), but I just realized it's funny how a bad egg can make you count all the blessings you really have.

    So yeah, all in all, I guess that not even the greatest communities can keep out the trolls (reference intended), but it really doesn't matter. What's important is that I say thanks to all the readers who continue to enjoy The Journey. Hope you get a chuckle out of this message and know that I am so grateful for each and every one of you. Adieu!

    Sincerely,

    GentlemanJ

    P.S. New chapter comes out tomorrow, 6:30 Eastern. I think that'll be the standard time for all posts unless people want a different time? Let me know!

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  • 2w, 3d
    And For the Piece de Resistance...

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  • 5w, 2d
    Consider, If You Will...

    H'okay folks, here's a question for ya.

    So reader Coolbauch sends me a message with two very interesting things. One, that the Rarity Graves pairing, in traditional portmanteu methodology, should thus be known as "Gravity." I personally think that's just the bee's knees and wanted to see what you all thought of it.

    Second, he made a rather interesting proposition. What if, and I do stress IF, Graves and Rarity weren't the couple? What if Graves were wooed by some other lucky lady instead? I have to say, I really like this idea, not because Gravity isn't the best pairing in the universe because it is, but because it sounds fun. As such, I was considering writing a one shot about a potential, budding romance between Graves and another.

    And thus, dear readers, I turn to you. Which pairing do you like the best? This can be Mane 6 OR ANOTHER PONY! GASP! SUCH VARIETY! Also, what sort of situation might emerge? At what point in the series would this alternative dimension occur?  In this message, the wonderful Coolbauch also included examples of various likely scenarios, but I would also like your opinions on the subject. Thus, if you would oblige me by sending in your preferences below, I might just have a nifty little side project to start.

    As always, thanks for reading and hope to hear all sorts of scandalous suggestions soon!

    Sincerely,

    GentlemanJ

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  • 12w, 3d
    "I HAVE RETURNED," quoth the Protoss Dragoon

    Ladies and Gentlemen!

    "Finally, after an eternity away from you all, [GentlemanJ] is back!"

                                            -Jack of Blades, Fable

    What can I say? I was working, I was international, I was dealing with enough unexpected drama to make Calculon cry foul. But after a whole lot of writing, rewriting, revisions and additions, I am finally ready to get back to posting. Probably.

    So here's the deal. School starts next week and since I don't foresee it being a major issue, I will in all likelihood be able to start posting by week's end. That's Saturday, September 6 at the usual 6-7 PM Eastern time slot I usually do, for all ye who are less than temporally inclined. However, it may end up that I will have to postpone one week to make sure that my posts are up to the quality you all deserve. After all, I figure that since I've been so egregiously delayed, what's one more week in the grand scheme of things?

    "BUT WAIT! THERE'S MORE!"

                                            -Billy Mays

    Now, a lot of you are no doubt wondering why I've taken so long off. Well, dear readers, that's because I have been working on a narrative of grand and epic proportions. Of course, it's easy to say that when I'm judging my own works, so what does that mean for you? Since I am kind and merciful, I will tell you:

    Over. Forty. Complete. Chapters.

    That's right. You thought A Long, Winding Road was intense? I'm about to lay down the hammer on you suckers! This is going to be by far the longest, most ambitious arc I've ever done and once I start posting, there will literally be one week of hiatus at most in that gigantic deluge of adventure smacks you upside the face like a blue fin tuna in class five hurricane! I know it's been a long time in coming, but it's been necessary in order to give you my greatest and most complext work to date.

    To those who've been patiently waiting, I ask for you patience for just a week or so longer. Go back and reread the series. Freshen up on your Journey lore because I promise you, once this train leaves the station, there will be no more stops.

    "[DEAR READERS]! PREPARE FOR GLORY!"

                                            -King Leonidas, 300

    Sincerely, and at most 2 weeks away,

    GentlemanJ

    P.S. More readings by Intrapulation available here. Or at least a dramatic interlude. Close enough.

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  • 22w, 5d
    Art, Audio, and Au Revoirs

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This story is a sequel to When the Man Comes Around

The third story in The Journey of Graves.

Graves is finally getting settled into Ponyville: his things have arrived, and many of his new friends are helping him move in. However, the housewarming will just have to wait, as the marshal receives word that there's trouble brewing in the Everfree Forest. Simple enough really, except for one minor problem: Graves has already promised Rarity he'd take care of Sweetie Belle for the day. What will the marshal do when his troublesome job meets the walking disaster?

First Published
10th Mar 2012
Last Modified
19th Jul 2012
#1 · 141w, 22h ago · 3 · · Chapter 3 ·

D'oh!:facehoof:

That poor poor fool.  Tempting murphy he is.

#2 · 141w, 22h ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

>>320733

He knows not the powers he trifles with. :twilightsheepish:

#3 · 141w, 21h ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

yeah.  that about sums it up.

#4 · 140w, 5d ago · 4 · · Chapter 4 ·

One does not simply take out a troll.

#5 · 140w, 2d ago · 1 · · Chapter 5 ·

>>329895

it can be done as long as the troll isn't fed. :)

#6 · 140w, 1d ago · 5 · · Chapter 5 ·

'  " Ms sweetie bell" he said standing up offering her a helping hand up, " How good at you are annoying people?" '    

Sir, that line just made my day. :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

#7 · 140w, 20h ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

>>343799

Glad you enjoyed it! Next chapter should be up tomorrow evening!:pinkiehappy:

#8 · 140w, 16h ago · 1 · · Chapter 5 ·

This series totally caught me off guard in how well it was written and how much I enjoyed your original character.

I cannot wait for more.

#9 · 140w, 8h ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

>>348572

You sir, just made my day. Thanks so much!:twilightsmile:

#10 · 139w, 6d ago · 3 · · Chapter 6 ·

*sigh*  I kind of envy Graves at that point.

#11 · 139w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

I gotta ask, if you were to compare his gun to something in real life, what would it be?

I keep switching between a M16A4 and a Winchester Model 1873.

#12 · 139w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

>>351440

Really? :rainbowderp: How so?

#13 · 139w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

>>351950

The standard spell gun is much more like the Winchester. However, Graves had a slightly different model.

http://dsc.discovery.com/tv/surviving-the-cut/images/surviving-the-cut-snipers-8.jpg

I was thinking something around late 19th century, sort of at the height of the old west time period. Graves would have one like this, only made of grey metal and not wood. Also, no engravings on his: strictly designed to be sturdy and serviceable.

#14 · 139w, 4d ago · 1 · · Chapter 6 ·

Yay.:yay: My favorite Crusader.

#15 · 139w, 4d ago · 1 · · Chapter 6 ·

>>360768

Sweetie Belle is best little pony. :rainbowkiss:

#16 · 139w, 4d ago · 1 · · Chapter 6 ·

I love your stories, glad to see this out:twilightsmile:

You need more attention, I mean, the concept of Graves/Marshall/Humans is very entertaining, but there's not enough ponies reading:fluttercry:

#17 · 139w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

>>362188

I know, huh?  I just can't figure out how to get people to notice me. So sad. :applecry:

But hey, when people like you write and let me know you enjoy it, that's enough to keep me going. Thanks!:twilightsmile:

#18 · 139w, 3d ago · 1 · · Chapter 6 ·

Well, I suppose patience is the answer, I mean, no one puts something up and gets famous overnight. Right?:applejackunsure:

Unless your the luckiest pony ever.:pinkiesmile:

#19 · 139w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

>>363072

That may very well be the case: I have the luck of a deaf mole with a bad case of the sniffles. Go figure. :facehoof:

#20 · 139w, 1d ago · 1 · · Chapter 2 ·

I am beginning to love your stories, mate. Keep up the good work!

#21 · 139w, 1d ago · 1 · · Chapter 6 ·

I guess you can say those trolls got.... *le puts on sunglasses*:coolphoto:

... Counter trolled...

#22 · 139w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

>>373617

YEEEEEAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!:rainbowlaugh:

And thanks! Glad you're enjoying them!

#23 · 139w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

DUDE... I LOVE THIS SERIS, and to show it I give you, (drum roll)

:moustache: :moustache:  :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: 10 out of 10 moustaches

#24 · 139w, 1d ago · 1 · · Chapter 6 ·

>>374958

*HNNG!* My heart! :twilightoops: It's too... much... win!

#25 · 139w, 1h ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

Graves get in there

#26 · 138w, 4d ago · 1 · · Chapter 6 ·

The whole storyline has been very good. As I have no real criticism to make, I don't know what else to say :twilightsheepish:

#27 · 137w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Yeah, I never could figure out why so many anime characters are covered in belts. Also, Sweetie Belle isn't really that much of an airhead in the show anymore. She's the one who decided to hook up Cheerilee with someone and who thought of having Applebloom playing hookie.

#28 · 137w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

>>414637

Everything you say is true. I just love the air headed Sweetie Belle: she's just so lovably derpy that way. :rainbowkiss:

Other than that, have you enjoyed the series?

#29 · 137w, 5d ago · 2 · · Chapter 6 ·

You know for a man who's job requires constant awareness and being three steps ahead........ Graves isn't the most perceptive bugger is he. :rainbowlaugh:

#30 · 137w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

>>417756

Maybe he doesn't pick up on them cause... they aren't life-threatening? Mostly? :applejackconfused:

...

Yeah, let's just go with that. :twilightblush:

#31 · 137w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

More minor editing:

"Twilight meticulously collapsed all the cardboard boxes and whisked away shredded wrapping paper with a flick of her want."

I assume that you meant:

"Twilight meticulously collapsed all the cardboard boxes and whisked away shredded wrapping paper with a flick of her wand"

#32 · 136w, 3d ago · 1 · · Chapter 6 ·

:rainbowlaugh: AHAHAHAHAHA Oh oh my ribs*falls over laughing holding hsi ribs* I loved the trolls. I so have to use these guys intellect skills for the ones in mine :rainbowlaugh: They are Equestrias lemmings!

#33 · 136w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

>>454263

Lemmings of Equestria? I like it! :pinkiehappy: If you do use it, just give me a shout out, okay? That'd just tickle me pink. :raritywink:

#34 · 132w, 3d ago · 1 · · Chapter 2 ·

is this anthro or human cus you you said sweetie bell had pony eyes just wanna know. good work so far

#35 · 132w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

>>582626

Human. The meaning was puppy dog eyes, the euphemism for big, innocent eyes, but since we all know that pony eyes are better, I changed the wording.

#36 · 132w, 3d ago · 1 · · Chapter 6 ·

i have a question where do the cutey marks do they appear as a tattoo like image or what. and where does it go i was just wondering, love the story so far. keep up the good work.  

#37 · 132w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

>>584910

That question will be answered in a later story (the fifth one, to be specific).

#38 · 129w, 3d ago · 1 · · Chapter 6 ·

>>363052

Have you considered sending it to EQD?

The pre-readers will probably tell you work on the grammar a bit, but the story quality is more than high enough to get past them.

The first chapter of my first story wasn't as well written as your stories when I submitted it, but they still accepted it.

Also, very entertaining story. Graves is a classic lawman and you manage to capture a genuine 'old west' feel in his adventures. A formula that blends surprisingly well with our favorite ponies. Well done. :moustache:

#39 · 124w, 4d ago · 6 · · Chapter 3 ·

Famous last words.

#40 · 124w, 3d ago · 1 · · Chapter 3 ·

"What’s the worst that could happen?"

Famous last words...

#41 · 124w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

“You’re wardrobe, of course!”

No but seriously. I'm a huge fan of the Graves stories.

#42 · 124w, 3d ago · 1 · · Chapter 2 ·

“…as long as it’s not frou-frou,”  the marshal slowly agreed, causing Rarity to squeal in delight.”

extra quotation mark.

Don't get the wrong idea from my constant bitching. This is still head and shoulders above most fics.

#43 · 124w, 3d ago · 1 · · Chapter 5 ·

‘sever damage to a commanding officer’s posterior’

think it's "severe"

#44 · 124w, 3d ago · 2 · · Chapter 5 ·

BOOM! Ass-shot!

#45 · 124w, 2d ago · 1 · · Chapter 2 ·

>>582626 yeah. it's been that way from the start. one of the tags on all the stories is "Human"

#46 · 124w, 2d ago · 2 · · Chapter 3 ·

"What's a troll?"

"Just a big nuisance."

lol ain't that the truth XD

#47 · 124w, 1d ago · 1 · · Chapter 2 ·

Pfft. Poor Graves...

#48 · 124w, 1d ago · 3 · · Chapter 3 ·

"What's a troll?"

"Just a big nuisance."

I'm expecting the troll to be like an internet troll now.

What’s the worst that could happen?

Never ask that question. EVER.

#49 · 124w, 1d ago · 2 · · Chapter 4 ·

:rainbowderp: This can only end well

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