It's the beginning, so the word count will be much higher in the chapters after this. Please rate and comment!~

>>305033305033 Nice, man. Good to see this up.

And for all-a yous out there, reading this fic, I just want to say thanks for waste- er, spending your time on my friend here. He worked very hard on this, and I gotta say that this is much better than what he first had drafted, so he can only get better.

Keep it up, Wolfie!

A little bit viabu. A little bit smuggish. But overall - nicely paced, enjoyable story. Text swells can be annoying sometimes, though.

Keep the good work and get your deserved like.

Stalin commands to dance!

But... Katana... Fingers... Ah never mind.

Will track.

Didn't expect to get this many comments so soon!

Thanks, you guys!

>>306035306035 Thank you for the advice, I'll try to work on it.

>>306183306183 Heh, I wouldn't look into it too much, but just kind of imagine him wrap his hoof around it if that helps. Thank you for tracking me!

>>305851305851 Thank you so much, Mac!

>>306553306553 Okie dokie lokie!

And your welcome!

>>306553306553 Can we haz next chapter?

>>322316322316 Funny you asked that, I'm actually still working on it.

It's gonna be a long chapter too, so I hope you'll look forward to that! Thank you for reading!

Sorry it took me a week to update, I've been busy lately. However, I think I made up for it with this ridiculously long chapter!

I'm gonna try to make them this long from now on.

Please Rate and Comment!~

Oh man, I like this story. Let's see how this goes!

Tracked and thumbs up!

>>329263329263 *Cough, Hack, Dies*

Blehh... you're lucky, Wolfie... you've been alive for the last week, not DEAD from a weird freaking SICKNESS. Blehhh~~~

I'm going back to bed. Just stop Skyping me every five damn seconds, lol.

Peace out, everypony.

May you find better health than me,

And a new friend's smile.

May your day fill with glee,

As you just relax for a while.

I wish upon all that this have read,

That you have peaceful dreams 'pon your time for bed.

Live each day as one anew,

And feel re-freshened from Spring's dew.

Hope with all your hearts, my friends,

That this time, it never ends,

For with my fellow bronies I say,

This show I watch makes me feel gay.

And no, I'm pretty damn straight.

I meant gay like happy, you ingrate.

I'm sick and in bed,

But that does not mean I'm sick in the head.

Not that being gay is wrong.

A friend of mine is, and he's quite strong.

He's a great wrestler, who knows his own power,

And defeats foe after foe, every match, every hour.

I'll stop right here, before I ramble on,

So I'm here to say "so long!"

Now keep yourselves happy,

Or I won't be the only one feeling crappy,

'Cause I'll hit you all with a gong.

When Crimson gets depressed, UNSPEAKABLE THINGS HAPPEN!!! Nah, he just gets drunk off his ass!

i honestly laughed my ass off at this part

and the cover art is fabulous

>>329334329334 Thank you, man! I'm happy you like it!

>>329335329335 ... Mac, WHY ARE YOU SO AWESOME!!!

>>329348329348 Thank you, I'm glad you guys like that part! And the master mind who made this piece of work, and his fic, are in the description!

Glad the fic is doing well!

you sir... are a genius

i can not wait for the next chapter  

Okay, time to check my tracked fi- HOLY WORD TOWERS THAT'S A LONG CHAPTER!!

Heh, sorry about that.

Keep up the good work!

>>329487329487 Thank you very much!

>>330140330140 Yeah, I even surprised myself at how long I made this chapter! And thank you, I'll try my best at making this fic good!

>>330140330140 *reads comment, checks word count on chapter*

Only eight thousand? Pfffft. Barely a five minute read for me.

*Pulls up latest chapter of Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons*

TWENTY SIX THOUSAND, ONE HUNDRED AND SEVENTY WORDS. Huh. It took me only an hour and a half to read. Iiinteresting...

*Is not impressed with your outburst* Seriously?

KK, lol, just kidding. But, seriously. Our little Wolfie is just that bad ass. My chapters strayed between three-and-six thousand words, because I put as much detail I think is necessary, and not much else. Wolfie here actually goes beyond that. Which is why I really want you todo quality control on my fic, Nick!

>>336609336609 I was so cranky and pissed off today, but this definitely cheered me up.   Thank you, Mac.

>>336866336866

>>336609336609 Twenty... Six.. THOUSAND?!?!?! *faints dramatically*

Over reactions, I has them.   

>>339793339793 Yeah, I know, right?! Seriously. I've read BOOKS with more words than that.

...

BOOKS. As in, HARDBACKS.

Great story so far but I have one question:

Did you get your idea for this story from the story "steelhoof" ?

Just curious because this has some simularitys to this.

>>343041343041 Steelhoof? Not sure what that is.

Link, please?

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7343084/1/Steelhoof_the_life_I_lead

Not the same premise but saw some simularites,

.Some one getting cashed out of town for a reason.

.A group of people after  them to hunt him down.

I would recommend you read it anyway,it's quiet enjoyable.

>>343094343094 Will do!

I WAS A DAY LATE, I'M SO SORRY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I got so preoccupied over the week, and because of certain events I won't get into...

This is also the chapter Mac helped me the least on. He barely edited anything for this one, though he did come up with the chapter name.

So enjoy, and please rate and comment!~

Bueno

Good chapter, Im bit scared about the eventual conflict between Shadow and Storm. It would be battle of epic proprieties.

Well done.

>>363148363148 Epic, and Emotional!

Weee, time to comment reply!

>>363116363116 Gracias!

>>363148363148 Heh, the next chapter shall be epic! Well, as epic as I can write it to be...

>>363293363293 Thank you very much!

>>365522365522 Yes, it will be both!

You got one more comment to reply too

Its really good

Better than any stuff i could ever come up with

SO MUCH WIN

>>381324381324 Aww, thanks man!

Don't crush your hopes man, you can make a great fic!

this is my 3rd fic i read and its comming along quite well thanks for writing this fantastic fic!

>>385583385583 Thanks, man! Glad to be liked!

No Prob:

Aaaaaand published!

Sorry about the late chapter, Spring Break really had me distracted. But I think Mac and I did a pretty good job on this!

Well, I hope...

Please rate and comment!

Edit: Also, Mac's Editors Note was added in, so read it!

  “J-Just Get out of the way already!” she creamed, getting more impatient by the second.

wat

>>404383404383

You THINK you did ok on this chapter?

...

That was...AMAZING!

Best chapter by far!

Congrats to you sir!

>>404480404480 I'm fixing that. Also, Mac admit that was his fault. He took out the 's' and forgot to put it back.

>>404545404545 Wow, I thought it was good but.. THANK YOU!!!

>>404383404383 Well, we did better than most of our other chapters. Oh, and for those of you wondering, I wrote a little Cloppa-cloppa that will more than likely get posted as a separate entity, or in a later chapter. So... stay tuned!

>>404480404480 Unlike your name, that mishap was completely intentional.

>>404644404644

>>404634404634

Epic fight, now let's see what his treatment from the girls is like.

Especially from Pinkie and Applejack as they had their own "close" encounter with him throughout this.

>>404762404762 Eeyup. Didja like those? I have to say, I loved writing those bits. He's got good action, but I've got great... 'action', giggity.

>>404782404782

“Hey guys, what’d I miss?”  the cyan mare asked the apple farmer first. “Are they still going at it? ...And why are yours and Pinkie’s faces so red?”

lol'd :P. Personally I think Applejack is bit good match for him, after all opposite attract or something.

>>404798404798 Yeah? Well, I'll let you in on a little secret... No, come closer... closer... closer... okay! I... have already written... a clop scene for both Pinkie and Applejack! The only problem is, Flame doesn't know which to choose.

Once we get further along, we'll post an excerpt from both, and ask the readers which they want to see in the fic. Now, shhh!!! And remember, don't. Tell. Anybody.

>>404928404928 Yeah? Well, still. Don't. Tell. ANYBODY.

I'll know it if you do! D:<

>>404817404817

Yeah? Come closer, closer... *whispers* you know everypony can read this comment page right? Shh hehe

....holy..fucking, shit.  you sir are LEGAND!!!!

>>404762404762 Indeed...

>>405109405109 Oh, you so silly.

You are an amazing writer my friend..and make my mind Hurt when you post things innapotiate in Skype :c (inside jokes are fun)

I'll be waiting till next time <3

i have to wait an other week for the next chapter!?

look what you did flame, now the fillies are crying

P.S. AWESOME CHAPTER!!!

right big mac? eeyup!

>>406486406486 Eeeeeeeeeyup!

An' Ah'm Editing.

Blehhh... A whole week of brainstorming, typing, and editing, and he gets all the credit. TT_TT

...

Bah, who cares. I'll just go read something...

>>406392406392 Be ready for next time, my friend...

>>406486406486 Thanks, man!

>>406561406561 Dude, I wouldn't be this far without you. We're a team, don't be upset!

>>406603406603 Do I look upset?

>>406607406607 LOL!

>>406606406606 ...I dunno.

And in case nopony gets the title's joke, Deck relates to Wildcard, while the whole thing is like saying "Duck and Cover". I know. I'm pretty crazy, eh?

Wooooo, early update!

This was the quickest chapter we've done so far, and that second flashback was the first thing to this fstory I've ever written, I wrote it way before I knew I was going to make a fic.

Please rate and comment!~

>>406486406486 TROLLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOL

Be happy. We updated!

And seriously, >>413732413732, I think you mean extremely early update! Woot! Next two weeks off editing duty! Woooooooo!!!! *runs off into the sunset; falls into the sun* AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAGGGGHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *Jumps into a body of water, turns out its a glass of water that someone's drinking from* AAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *Wakes up* Phew! No more chicken alfredo pizza for me right before bed!

I didn't expect it to update this soon.

why does it have to be so hard for you Crimson

(don't you dare make a that's what she/he said joke about that)

You magnificent bastards out-do yourselves everytime.

>>413777413777 i sure am!

>>413951413951 Thank you.

>>413955413955 Glad to hear it.

>>413860413860

I... I just... DAMN IT!!!

Okay, okay, okay... bwahaha... we had most of this chapter written out even before we decided where to start the fic. I was editing his brainstorms over Skype. Freaking hilarious. But, yeah. Some of that we just wrote last night and today, and... well, I definitely couldn't help but cry while writing... that scene...   Poor Star Bright... I put my poetic touch in there with those few lines he said, but... I couldn't even continue.

So... yeah. I had a good cry, and I feel better, but also terrible. Hope you all have a nice day today.

Damn great chapter, and finally we learn something more about Crimson!

>>413860413860 poor Crimson indeed...

>>413951413951 Hehe, why thank you!

>>414044414044 Tis a life of a sad pony.

>>413955413955 Good to hear, man.

>>413982413982  &  >>415081415081

through your tears and your effort of BOTH of you have given this...EXCELLENT Piece work.

I want to let you know that this work your putting into this fanfic is being appreciated & effort by all of us here.

                                                  ~Here is a congratulations from all of us who are reading this~

                                                ~Thank you Both for your AMAZING work you have put into this Fanfic~

>>427756427756 You're the best!

>>427756427756 ... I love you, man!

*sniff* I-I-I'm not crying *sniff*

You write very powerful my friend..yes indeed..*sniff*

I n-need to f-find a t-tissue now...*sniff*

>>434152434152 Don't cry, my friend.

And thank you for my 69th comment!

I'm a poivert.

>>434230434230

No your not.i was the one that pointed it out

I was late again...

I had a lot of school related stuff to catch up on. ...I hate school.

But yeah, I think we did okay on this one. I like it atleast.

Please rate and comment!~

>>446928446928 Our longest one yet... And I even deleted quite a lot of text!

Ha! I see a mistake we made already.

The editor's note (by me) is italicized. So is Flame's comment. We forgot to close the italic!

Edit(by the editor!): Alright, you fixed it!

“However, I will give you some advice.... Ditch the asshole. He’s dangerous and unstable, I wouldn’t above him if he killed you all in your sleep.

something is up with the last part of that sentence

Also, look at all those words

>>447452447452 Yeah... I seriously could not get that one out right... It's a lot less confusing than it used to be, though!

>>447452447452

>>447840447840

I think I was able to fix it.

>>447863447863 good. I hate answering comments on my iPod.

OH THE PUNS THERE EVERYWHERE!!!!!!!!!

also, which one of the girls went to sleep with Crimson first, and what did the second one think when they came to sleep with him and found the other girl there?

Good job on this chapter!

Don't fret about it being late,I haven't updated mine in 2 weeks!

But anyways, great job.the conflict is still good, and as far as I'm concerned there both assholes

This story belongs in the category of all time greats.

>>448780448780 Indeed.

>>448790448790 tis a mystery, my friend. Maybe you'll find out next chapter.

>>449714449714 Ha, yes they are.

>>453915453915 Oh wow, I.... Thank you!

seeing the new episode of mlp... twilight really have a brother problem. she fell in love with a pony that has same colored and same job has her brother!? thats a problem, right twi?

>>483761483761 I swear I thought of Storm's design before I even knew who Shining Armor was!

But they're not completely similar, for example, Storm's hair is white, Armor's is blue. He looks more like a DJ Pon3 to me. But I'd be lying if I said I didn't see the resemblance...

>>486287486287 Haha, indeed!

>>485257485257 i know, its thats kinda... wired but funny none the less when you think of it

Sorry, guys. Had finals and state testing, so I was really busy.

Also, be warned, the beginning of this chapter is pretty damn Grimdark. If you have a weak stomach, you might wanna skip it.

Also, longest chapter to date! I think it was pretty good, too!

Please Rate and Comment!~

Also, for everyone who's curious about what Storm looks like...

file:///C:/Documents%20and%20Settings/Administrator.USER-VGHD6PA75Y/My%20Documents/My%20Pictures/Storm%202.jpg

And him without his jacket:

file:///C:/Documents%20and%20Settings/Administrator.USER-VGHD6PA75Y/My%20Documents/My%20Pictures/Storm.jpg

>>501487501487 doesn't work like that. We don't have the files, so we can't see them.  

  “Autumn!!!” Winter laughed, darting away as she prepared for a game of cat and mouse. Plz fix!

Also, what's your opinion on the nightmare? Over done? And as for Aj's behavior, think of it like how guys seem to love smelling panties. I wanted to make fun of that.

Oh, and I bunged up the title. That's next chapter's title. This one should be "Season of decay".

Cried for ten minutes that is longer than how long I cried to my little dashie I mean that was just so sad to read I felt like my heart was going to overflow with tears

love this chapter!

i know a bit of Japanese but i taught that 'akuma tenshi' was 'bear angle' until i remembered kuma= bear not akuma!

p.s. the links to your pictures of storm doesn't work or its just my CPU

let me try something

Image: file:///C:/Documents%20and%20Settings/Administrator.USER-VGHD6PA75Y/My%20Documents/My%20Pictures/Storm%202.jpg

Image: file:///C:/Documents%20and%20Settings/Administrator.USER-VGHD6PA75Y/My%20Documents/My%20Pictures/Storm.jpg

if that doesn't work then its my CPU  

well, damn.. it doesn't work! let me try this

Image: http://fc01.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2012/112/1/3/light_and_dark_by_lifeinjapanofficial-d4x7xw0.png

well if this works, why are your pictures not showing?

>>501830501830 & >>501860501860

Shit, let me see if I can get the pics to work. Also, fixed the name thing.

>>501988501988 It's not your CPU, man. I'll figure this out some how. Akuma = Demon by the way.

And nice drawing!

Image: http://images.wikia.com/mlp/images/3/37/Storm_3.jpg

And Jacket-less:

Image: http://images.wikia.com/mlp/images/2/24/Storm.jpg

Also, how many people would be in favor for a "Character Bios" kinda thing somewhere?

>>501882501882 Sorry, man, did not catch your comment. But yes, I cried to that chapter also... and My Little Dashie even made me cry, too.

>>502017502017 thanks, all the arts on my page like my wolf avatar are made by me

if you have a picture from deviantart, photobucket or others you could probably post your pics by taking the url and putting it in the (picture box/'Insert Image' box), the one by the (anchor/'Insert Link' box). very easy!  

>>502059502059 i wouldn't mind character bios

P.P.S.  love the pics of storm, did you do draw it?  

>>502074502074 Nah, I'm not the artist behinds those. I can draw, but no where near as good as my friend who drew those, here's his DA. He also has a fic on this site called 'Dragon Of The Eclipse'. You should give it a read, it's very well done.

Just if you're curious, here's my DA. I'm not all that great, though. At least, compared to the more famous artists in this fandom.

Geez man, I love this story more than Nachos

And I frickin' Love Nachos

>>502569502569 Nachos is my favorite food group!

... Fuck, Flames. lol...

“Look at me, Red! I’m getting pretty good, huh?” The white filly was twirling around a tanfa staff like an expert, smacking it against the practice dummies with enough force to create a thwack with each hit, but not much else.

Tonfa, not tanfa. Also, it's technically not a staff.

I fucked up, people! So sorry!

>>502569502569 Not sure if that's a fic or not, so I'll just assume it's the food. But yeah, great to hear that you're liking this story, man.

>>504050504050 I changed it to Bō.

>>506255506255 I wouldn't go that far, but thank you so much, man!

And okay, what the eff? I've posted the Storm drawings 5 damn times now, yet they keep disappearing every couple hours!