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Kaidan


Q(^_^Q). The friendliest misanthrope you'll ever meet.

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Leave it to Twisted...

~Skeeter The Lurker

Skeeter, you and I gave this a favorite at the same time. Well done!

~SolidFire

I've seen lots of hot shit recently, but this one takes the cake.

This was incredibly fun to watch being written.

You WILL get wet, YOU MAY GET SOAKED!, feminine ejaculate, transformation & transgendered, forced feeding, nightmare fuel.

My body can take it!!! :moustache:

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< --Look at this adorable, innocent face. No one knows what goes on in this head of mine.

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Looks mean nothing. Actions do.

You created 5/4. So to put anything past you would be folly.

...Nice job prompting this.

~Skeeter The Lurker

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Nice new avatar, by the way.

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Are you calling this a hot shit cake? :rainbowlaugh:

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Nopony turns humans into ponies and robs them of their humanity like Twist.

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It was just as fun to write.

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Bring a snorkel and goggles. :rainbowdetermined2:

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Are there thoughts of sugarplums and candy canes in that innocent head, or desires far more sinister?:pinkiegasp:

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I had an idea for an HiE when I wrote Shattered Prism (which is I story I winded up hating.) I was inspired to finally write my HiE when I discovered 5/4, and read it all over a few days. That and When a Pony Calls then went on to be sources of ideas and inspiration to pull my HiE idea off.

So in a way, he can take credit, along with Seven Fates, for my HiE. :scootangel:

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I am guilty of many TF clopfic ideas, but alas, Dash of Humanity is not one of them. It is a fantastic fic though! :pinkiehappy:

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Occasionally there are sugar plums raping fairies with candy canes... if that's what you mean.

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I was thinking the sugar plums are using candy canes as strap ons to rape a fairy.

(And the award for most out of place comment goes to...)

my brain had a years worth of "the fuck" and "yes!" moments. it was just plain amazing from beginning to end

3521166 If a world renowned Psychiatrist attempted to decipher and explain what goes on inside your head, he would spontaneously combust :moustache:

after getting a massive boner

I didn't think you would actually write that.... :fluttershbad:

Was labeled as a force feeding fic elsewhere, but you neglected to mention TF and TS's involvement...now I'm fairly certain I do not actually want. Especially considering the parts that would excite me are probably secondary and completely overwritten by TS's preferences.

Sigh...

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The main part of the story is repeated forced drinking of mare cum caused by a mare capturing and raping a human over and over again. The TF is just the side effect and isn't the main part of the story. Nearly all of the cloppiness deals with the former.

Wow! You had me hoping and praying that it would end all happy and Lyra would see the error of her ways and... :applejackunsure: Then he lost his manhood.... Oh but its OK she was kind of a cold hard bitch about it but.. but...:pinkiesad2: He cant live without her cum... :pinkiecrazy: Wait this could be good now theyll live together happily FOREVER!! :flutterrage: SHE SOLD HIM!!!!! :facehoof: Then I realized Psychopath Lyra is Best Lyra

Bwuuh...that ending. Congrats on becoming evil, Lyra...

This is all sorts of odd kink. But it was alright. I was totally correct, though.

3521445 Yeah I ended up reading it anyways. It was alright.

Dafuck is wrong with you

O-ok that was pretty weird. But in all honesty kinda arousing at the same time wrong with a hint of rape.

“Trust me, running away will be the last thing on his mind after we get done...”

Famous last words.

With a loud pop, a human stumbled forward and fell onto her sofa.

Enter, Kaidan.

I mean, I have nothing against a good dicking, but you just can’t beat a good bout of sixty-nining!

A good woman/mare will do seventy chores: Cooking and sixty-nining.

“My names Rick.”

"Name's" in this case should have an apostrophe s. Also, now that the introductions are over, let us continue.

Something about her cum was intoxicating.

well, she has been drinking. Maybe that is where it all *puts on sunglasses* came from.:yay:

“I paid every single bit I had for you, and you’re going to drink until I can’t stand the thought of having another orgasm. Understood?”

That does not seem like too bad of a deal.

The tiny invisible hairs that normally covered his chest and stomach had been tinged a sort of fuchsia. It was hard to discern perfectly in the dark basement, but they definitely seemed to be a feminine shade of pink.

Uh-oh, he is turning into Pinkie Pie!:pinkiegasp: Oh well, at least he will be able to break the fourth wall and get out of there... That is, if he still wants to.

“Oh it’s okay, Ricky, I just was too excited.”

The "just" and "was" should be switched.

“Lyra! Lyra I need you!”

There should be a comma between the second "Lyra" and "I."

He tried to kick the blanket off that was still wrapped around his waist.

You my want to move that "off" to just after "kick."

“Sorry, I’m late! You can take care of yourself until I get back! Happy one week anniversary!”

He has not peed in a week? He must have to *puts on sunglasses* piss like a racehorse.:yay:

It still feels great, it’s just that I want something more.

At least part of him is still a man.

“Yes, honey. You’ll have a marvelous day. I promise you’ll never have to worry about satiating your sexual desires again.”

Uh-oh.

PGAD, that was awesome.:pinkiecrazy: Between you and TittySparkles, I have been desensitized to just about everything, so, thank you both for that. You deserve a Rarity ahegao :raritydespair: and take a Fluttershy as a bonus.:fluttershbad:

Wow. Just wow. Lyra how could you! :fluttercry:

Still a good story and worth the read. Nice job Kaidan. That ending! Wow.

:rainbowderp:

What in the actual, virtual, and metaphysical fuck did I just read?

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who doesn't want to be force fed Lyra's minty cum until they're turned into a beautiful mare who loves cock?
Dafuck is wrong with me?! :rainbowderp: Dafuck is wrong with you! :rainbowlaugh:

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The best story ever? Too bad I can't mail it to Bronius, I've always wanted to see if my clop was good enough to give a man a boner bad enough he had to 'fix' it with eighty other men watching. :rainbowlaugh:

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Thank you, I'm sure that it'll give you "Yes!" and "the Fuck!" moments for months to come.

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Sounds about right, though if Fluttershy tried it, she'd love it.

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I didn't think you didn't think I'd write it. Now who looks silly.

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TF? I get TS = TwistedSpectrum, but his involvement was the idea of delicious pony cum turning a human into a pony. :rainbowwild:

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The cycle continues. She won't have to order me to drink twice.

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Yeah, Rose needs to be careful what he wishes for. Lyra loved her so much, and all she cared about was a good dicking... perhaps she'll realize that Lyra loved her enough to let her go. Someday...

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The best clop contains a lovingly crafted mix of sexiness, with a hint of ravishment, and a heavy dose of mind-altering substances. :twilightsmile:

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How couldn't Lyra? Imagine having an insatiable desire to have sex, and cumming gallons! Nopony understood her, nopony loved her!

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Can I officially hire you now? You're like the voice of "typo-catching" that my brain lacks.

I enjoyed this... although, if she tied me up, I would lick at her, coax her clit out, and tear it out with my teeth.

3521928 If you would like to, I would happily oblige.:twilightsmile:

I approve of this.

Cost 300 bits to get a human to Equstria.

Get 100 bits selling human into slavery.

Net: -200 bits.

And Lyra is doing this for money?:rainbowhuh:

3522022 Pretty sure the 100 was on top of whatever she'd sold him for, as long as they got to work out their pent up lust while making a purchase.

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Could be, but again the 100 bits is the only money mentioned.

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This may be a bit mathmatical but... she paid Trixie 300 at the start to summon a human, and made triple for selling him. That means she made 900, minus the 100 for the "happy ending", and the price of a virgin sex slave with no citizenship or friends/family to miss them is 800 bits. :twilightsmile:

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From the story: “Hell, we’ll pay you an extra hundred bits per pony if you make that a standing offer."

The 100 bits was a tip given on top of the sack of gold they gave her for Rose.

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Ahh okay, Lyra is an artist, but even that should not make her engage in such a bad buissenes.

But for 800 Bits or more at the cost of 300 plus income for lost concerts maybe 200 bits still leaves 300 bits or more in profit.:twilightsmile:

Thanks for clearing it up... says a lot that with all the ethical red lamps blinking in this story it's the money that makes me pause and question the story's logic.:rainbowlaugh:

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hmm yes, Rose was a bit of a twit. Not saying that he didnt get what he wanted in the end, but WHAT did Lyra expect. When training your pet you need to give it more than just food. You need to make it require everything from you, food, affection, desire to please, everything. I hope when she trains me she has the common decency to see to my sexual needs instead of only her own. That was her problem, well if shes gonna make a career out of this then maybe not but still..
Hmm I kinda want to see what happens. What happens after Rose gets used up? Would female human become a stallion or is Lyra's cum magic all girl? When do the authorities start noticing all the undocumented ponies? Did Rose get her cutiemark? If so please dont tell me its something like a ball gag.
God WHY am I so Into this?

Thus the birth of a villain was born.

WHAT IN THE HOLY FUCK DID I JUST READ!!!! :rainbowhuh:

3521928 ya here is my optshens 1. back away from the dragend lunatic with a slave fedish. or 2 done my Ultramarine armor and grab my chainsword and bolter gun

Soon: mafia from Canterlot starts to think where Lyra gets all those prostitutes from. The Godfather offers her a deal she can't refuse: 50% of money or a pair of concrete shoes and one-way trip to the river bottom...

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Two weeks later, the mafia boss realizes that isn't non-dairy creamer that somepony was putting in his coffee... robbed of his stallionhood, he must explain to the brotherhood why the Don is now the Donette.

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Oh, well if we're in the 40k universe then clearly all the ponies are mutants, and I'll fully support the exterminatus. :twilightsmile:

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The best clop you'll ever read. Sorry, but nothing will ever compare to it again. :trollestia:

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True, perhaps she figures out one of the pets needs more than her cum and trains them properly. Perhaps even degrading into a BDSM scenario... I already want to write an alt. ending, but suddenly I'm giddy thinking of the possibilities.

Rose getting used up? Eventually the brothel will start to buy Lyra's juice as an aphrodisiac. It won't morph ponies, but it'll give them one hell of a hard-on.

Female human I considered stallion, but it'll likely work better as all-girl... unless Lyra wanted to have a permenant stallion pet.

Pfft, when Rose escapes and the authorities are like "Who the hell are you?~"

I was thinking a milk bottle for her cutie mark at first, since she loves nursing and suckling... but I didn't get it much thought. Probably not a ball gag though. More like a smiley face, smiling, with a bit.

Because it's hot.

3521003 Cute, yes. Innocent, yes. And it makes me want to huggle you.

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Are you calling this a hot shit cake? :rainbowlaugh:

Yes, this hot shit is quite the cake.

Wait what?

this is by far the most FUCKED UP THING I HAVE EVER READ :flutterrage::flutterrage::pinkiesick::pinkiesick::pinkiesick:

Kaidan you have a sick sick mind, and don't you dare change. That's why we love ya

I'll give a like, but Im not really a fan of human trafficking or in this case, pony trafficking. Sorry, interesting to say the least.

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