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This story is a sequel to A Night with the Night.
Princess Celestia has stood guard over Equestria for a thousand years alone. With the return of her sister, and in the wake of her sister finding love, will she herself be able to pull off the same trick with you?
A successor to 'A Night with the Night'. It is in the same universe, but further down the line. This means humanized with wings, but no horns.
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Pizza Margherita! Love that stuff! Great story, love the plot!
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Might want to get rid of this part!
this made me want an epilogue about them getting married.
Anthro... err, okay.
Wings. Hawt.
No horns! Dabaq!
4027686 might want to read the tags again. If they were anthro, the tag would be there. They are humans, but those who were pegasi have wings.
Credit to you for a well written story. The dialogue was a bit formal at times, and the protagonist walked the line of being a Mary Sue rather more frequently than I'm generally comfortable with.
That being said, I feel the plot made up for this. It was touching - a little rushed, I felt, for a being with a potentially millennia old emotional issue to get over it, though I suppose it had to be resolved sometime. Using tragedy as a foundation for joy is always a sweet sensation. I think it may have worked better if the roles had been reversed somewhat.
But I still thoroughly enjoyed it. Thank you for writing this.
Pretty faptastic
Yes. Nothing else can describe.
4027741 Regardless of technical definitions, human is anthro taken to the furthest extreme, and I consider anthro and humanized to be on the same tier... Meh, unless magically induced for plot purpose or due to real interactions between Earth and Equestria (e.g., Equestria Girls, MerlosTheMad's A Twilight Landing/My Little Marriage (Twilight is stuck on Earth in a magicless human body, and a human wife and mother of two is stuck in a pony form), When a Pony Calls/The Alchemist's Heart (this is almost exclusively human to pony, save for a small bit with Lyra, and the second story being exclusively set in Equestria. Also grimdark as fuck with plot and politics and bad, bad things), and Celestia Sleeps In/Onto the Pony Planet and Twilight Sparkle makes First Contact (both of which feature magically induced travel between the two realms, with no transformations, but HUGE cultural impasses as the two very different species experience the struggles to communicate and learn from one another).
As for straight up anthro and humanized ponies... They never caught my eye. I make exceptions when a rating draws attention. I gave the Luna story you did a chance... at some point, as I upvoted and tracked it, though it's slipped from memory. I guess I saw this since it's linked to that story. I might give this a read eventually.
Still doesn't change the wat factor with including wings, but ditching horns?
Is still confuzzled
4032532 My thought process in that was wings are necessary to fly, but to use magic, well that can be done with all sorts of implements, and in some places, none at all. For instance, In Harry Potter, wizards and witches just need a wand, and the proper knowledge, to let out a spell as they recite it in their heads. Some magic (the ward on Harry) didn't use any wand or knowledge to be used. Flying without some outside force though is borderline DBZ stuff, and that just seems, out of place to me. That is my explanation for this.
4032958 I'm on your side on this one, though the fact that most of the stuff I write race wise is kinda the same means nothing
Anyways, my thoughts. This is gonna sound really freakin weird, especially coming from me, an advocate on clop with good story, but I thought the clop was lacking. You built up this nice world, excellent plot, and character development between the first and second that was, for the most part, believable. It goes above and beyond what I look for in erotic romance, (I am a cheesy romanticist. I deny nothing.) and draws a nearly satisfying conclusion. With everything being said and done, the lack of sex seems unnecessary. I would recommend actually removing it, because then it can be a great story itself without the promise of sex. Just a thought. You could also lengthen it, but entirely up to you.
4037004 I know, both myself and (at my behest) my editor looked over it and though we found it lacking comparatively, we found no real harm in letting it stay.
4037187 I just want to make it clear that it isn't bad, and again the quality of your work is astounding. Whatever you do, I doubt it will be a bad choice, so best of luck to you.
I can say that has not been said already beautiful story
but it makes me think that if someone is in a loving relationship with pricesas
of equetria
and if in a moment of weakness that betrays ufff have mercy on your soul
This was a really good story, I loved the plot if it.
However, I don't think the clop really needs to be in the story. It almost feels like a better story without it altogether.
That... is one of the best humanized Celestia pics ever. It looks like a real portrait.
Sorry, but that art... wow. Is there an emoticon for speechless?
(thanks for giving the source, by the way)
Anyway, on to the fic.
Great story, I loved the whole thing. Have a fave and a thumbs up!
Love !!!
OMG twilight
4254639 how small a world we live in. I am actually the one that had that artwork commissioned. if you like this one you should see the artwork that artist did that made me want to get this one done. She drew this amazing rainbowdash and so after seeing that I knew I HAD to have her do a Celestia one.
4314889 Already seen, fav'd, and watched on DA.
4315548 your comment matches your avatar lol
4315585 I get that a lot.
*Clenches chest* Feels attack! Aaaargh! But anyways, this is just a wonderful story. I hope to read more in the future!
Definetly a fave
especially since you didn't have them get laid like most stories I've read.
4428678 originally this did end that way, but I felt even before publishing that it was a bad idea. A few days later and the comments agreed with me. I then changed it to go with what I felt like it should end as and here we are now. Wish I could say this was the original end, but I can't lol.
4429091 At least you were willing to change it.
Most would have left it that way.
*maximum " "Daww " mode activated*
4429091 I'm rather surprised that he felt no pangs, twinges or somesuch with transitioning from his wife to Celestia. No sense of melancholy, regret, or even though for his departed wife, as he goes to bed with Celestia. I feel it would deepen the protagonist's character more if he were to experience such a gamut of emotions and thoughts, because as it is, it just seems like he too easily casts aside his deceased wife as he's starting up a relationship with Celestia. It makes it seem as if he didn't value her all that much, if he doesn't have to struggle with the ghosts of his past, and the memory of his wife haunting him. Including these elements into your story can only improve your story, in my honest opinion.
Peace,
AuthorGenesis
4634945 I can understand that, but the point of it was that he had fully accepted it. He knew she would die, and he had sometime to get out of the rut he was in. I could have indeed gone deeper, but honestly, wasn't thinking of it at the time. Thank you though for this wonderful little insight into becoming a better author. I shall add it to my growing list of 'things to remember when writing' (it is an actual thing).
Amazing story and plot. Would live to read more!!!!!!
4921814 Well, this is a sequel to another story (rated mature), but there might always be more. You never know.
4923367 Just rereading this.
Celestia really needs to look on the bright side of things.
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That's the problem -- she's always looking on the bright side. That's been her job for millennia. She's so used to it that it barely even registers anymore. What she really needs is a nice emo week. Some shitty poetry and black & purple hair dye should fix her right up.
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... and now I want to see an emo Celestia.
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Damn. That second crown. And I thought the second monocle was classy.
amazing very amazing my friend
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