Thanks for reading my story! Sorry for low quality of first chapter, the second one should be better, I felt rushed to get them all introduced. Notice any errors? Got suggestions? I'm open to anythin'!

THAT PICTURE, IT'S TOO CUTE!!! "explodes from dawwness."

>>302067302067 Suggestions, really you need to space paragraphs and speech out with a line space, and you need to say whos speaking with 'Twilight said.' or 'said Twilight.' to make it clear. Its a good idea for a story though.

Like the concept, Characterization needs work though. Sometimes some of what the mane 6 say feels really out of character. And your guy is being WAY too calm and collected. I just don't think anyone would react as calmly as he does to the prospect of the mane 6 replacing his miniatures.

Still, could be interesting.

>>302602302602 IKR? I found it and I just HAD to use it. :D

wish I knew who made it tho... I have no clue

:>>302609302609 Yes, I wrote in Onenote instead of Word, which I usually use... turns out it doesn't space properly. as for who's speakin', I derped, didn't I? I'll go back through n fix those tonight. Thanks for the help!

Honestly i would of reacted the same way if i was in his shoes. Universal Slip conversions... *shrugs*  

>>302647302647 ya, he's just kind of in shock. I'm gonna make him freak out in the morning. As I've said, this is kind of low quality.... I'm just too lazy to go and redo it... XD

It feels a bit... rushed. But it was alright, take a breather, go slower. Still exposition out of the way, on to the hijinks ^^

>>302714302714 eeeeeeyup.

>>302691302691 I was aiming for the 'he's in shock/thinks he's dreaming still' kind of thing... although to be honest I think some of the freakout sessions are overdone. just me tho.

I'm not gonna beat the dead horse by saying "take it slower" like everyone else, but-

Wait. Dammit, I just did. Well, whatever. Work on your pacing a little, and we'll have something neat going on.

T-t-t-tracking.

>>302732302732 Thanks man! DEAD HORSE??? WHERE??? WHO WOULD DO SUCH A THING?!?

>>302660302660 Thats much better now its been edited. Glad I could help

I have to say this, when i saw that picture I dawwed for like 10 mintues.

The concept is very unique. However, take it slower. I dislike the fact that you told them about the show though... Oh well

>>302739302739 Dead horse? I prefer deadmau5

Love the picture, like where this is going. I had a genuine lol at one point. Definitely rushed, especially around the end. I expected to see more reactions.

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>>302647302647

second chapter better, ya'll?

>>303022303022 never would've guessed from you picture

Not bad, not bad. He's still taking this a bit well, all things considered, but maybe some high-jinx will get a rise out of him.

Not bad. Short chapters though. And also 'overdo' should be 'overdue'. Just trying to help.

>>303183303183...perhaps as I've said I find the freak-outs in most stories ridiculous, this is just what I think would happen.

>>303187303187 fixed

cute! a little fast though

more please

>>303279303279 lolol okay Mr. impatient. I'll be sure to at least get SOME hi-jinks out by tomorrow. I'll do what I can do.

What did they get into a vacu cleaner

>>303361303361 .....huh?

The second chapter they got into trubel. An it is hard to spel on a phone. I wondered if rhey got stuck i a vacum clener (sorry fore bad english)

Kimdan translated: What, did they get sucked into a vacum cleaner?

>>303283303283 ima girl

>>303378303378well, now, you'll just have to wait and see. that's a good idea, though... maybe I'll out that in somewhere...

>>303392303392 fine MS. Impatient better?

I only think about Tom & Jerry when i see the story pic

Dang... You beat me to that idea....

I require more of this darling story, if you please?   I mean... i-if that's okay with you.

I want more

>>303538303538 finders keepers losers sad appleblooms I picked this idea out mostly because I hadn't seen any stories about it... sorry bro too slow!

>>303556303556 I'm workin on it. I'm trying to keep the chapters short so as not to keep people waiting as long... I always get annoyed at the writers who take like a month for a chapter

This is unique to say the least, and very interesting. I will be waiting for more...

Im looking forward to more of this. You're style is already getting better. But feel free to take your time onthe project i dont mind waiting a day or two inbetween if it enables you to tweak the story to your satisfaction.

>>302647302647 dude if the mane six replaced MY minutures (Which i tottaly don't have *shifty eyes*) I would be very happy............

Good... Good My plans will now work. EQUESTRIA WILL BE MINE! Wait did I type that? Anyways good story. Tracked, and thumbs up

Tracking just for the pic

I vote for describing, but you are the author so you have the final say

Write it then decide if your writing does it justice, besides sometimes it's a good way to get your creative juices flowing... Or atleast that's what I do. (has 3 Conversion Bureau stories that hopefully will never see the light of day)

would be cool if Pinkie Pie did some party with a modern day spin to it...Maybe uses an iPhone or something as the music player for the whole party, uses the TV to watch a movie, etc.

*imagines the cuteness factor of all of the Mane 6 running around on an iPad screen making art and surfing the web with their hooves*

Describe the party or else!

Makin us do all the work? Uh, lazy

but good story, even if you make us write some of it

>>304539304539

Image: http://i0.kym-cdn.com/entries/icons/original/000/007/508/watch-out-we-got-a-badass-over-here-meme.png

Okey dokey. I'll write it. Tomorrow. I'm too tired right now...

>>304577304577 How'd you know I was lazy? oh wait I think I already said I was. oh well.

Looking forward to the party

You sir have earned yourself a Fluffle Puff!

Image: http://img.ponibooru.org/_images/30bff997f6fd5732d6b61374716323f2/130145%20-%20%3Erape%20animated%20artist%3Amixermike622%20Fluffle_Puff%20fluffy%20fluffy_pony%20Fuzzy%20hump%20rape%20twilight_sparkle.gif

Enjoy!

>>305234305234 the fucq

>>305234305234 TWILIGHT GET OFF HER!!! ......... it's my turn.

>>305619305619 my first response.

That was.... disturbing.

Image: http://1.bp.blogspot.com/-JADLLqdiZhE/T1fPWpbpN-I/AAAAAAAAhv0/COWrUtmIu6Y/s1600/144802+-+applejack+Artist+Doomy.jpg

I hope you don't take this idea. I have alredy started.

Image source For those that want to give credit.

>>307206307206 ah, thank you. for some reason I couldn't find out where it came from... adding link to description

>>307511307511Your welcome. I just used Googles reverse image search.

>>305234305234 ... What the buck......

I just love everyone's reaction to that pic. I have no regrets.

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Agreed.

noooooooooooo! dont give them hard cider!

>>323156323156 ....well they said it was the same as in the show... and thus the craziness begins

Hard Cider?

Pinkie on an Xbox?

*rubs hands together* This should be good....

>>323198323198 eeyup!

Wow. This will be fun. *Can not hold my smile back* Damit!

>>323575323575 smile smile SMILE! ....SERIOUSLY SMILE PINKIE WILL HUNT YOU DOWN IF YOU DON'T!!!

If you're smiling I'm doing my job right! I just wish Greg wasn't such a Gary Stu... I'm just unsure of how to write a normal guy (probably because I'm not one )

>>323617323617

I'm not scared of Pinkie. I'm killing aliens that is trying to invade Equestria and every other nation on this planet. It is the life of a X-COM soldier. Last time the whol squad of the 13 ponys that was left (including me) almost got all killed. Thos dame space crabs and 'snakmens' is very strong. And my coment battle whit Darkace got very wird including a rip in time and space and a ION cannon destroying a whol nation, the moon trying to crach into me and i don't have forgoten the classic puling-Darkace-out-of-tophat-trick. So yes Pinkie don't scare me. She maybe able to breack the 4th wall but she can't defeat aliens like X-COM. If you are interested in a place. I will se what I can do.

X-COM Commander Kim Fareseed (my OC name) over and out.

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Put your hoofs in the air! X-COM is here!

>>323661323661 I ain't afraid of no ghosts I mean pinkies

Yeah viva pinyata Sucks ass btw.

just saying...it sucks.

"Whats that, u don't agree"

"Shutup random bystanders"

"Your opinions don't matter"

"I'm All powerful"

>>323712323712 I don't even own an Xbox so how would I know? Besides they've never played video games before an atari would impress them.

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I have never played that game but I heve seen it and it dos not look bad. And my rocket launcher tank is almost fully repered now. If you don't argu whit me the planet is safe.

Image: http://1.bp.blogspot.com/-JADLLqdiZhE/T1fPWpbpN-I/AAAAAAAAhv0/COWrUtmIu6Y/s1600/144802+-+applejack+Artist+Doomy.jpg

This gon be good!

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/me argues>>323728323728

You have not played it, but u think it doesnt look bad. hmm what games looked goood but sucked...hard. gimme a minute.

black ops (will probably get yelled at for saying it, but really that game was just terrible)

um, eh ill think of more later.

>>324396324396 no kidding, black ops sucked, I'm only buying modern warfare incarnations now, completely ruined their little 'off-shoot' franchises.

>>324546324546Well that brings up another problem for me, they underpowered the snipers...Again. MW2 was the perfect ratio, where u could 1 shot someone to the chest and head only.

Because a 50 caliber rifle will ffing blow off your arm. enough said, and as for MW3 they screwed up the ratio, and they really need to fix the spawning on every kind of game that is like this.

Woop woop another cool chapter bro!

And I wonder what kind of crazy stuff will happen next!

Sorry for lame sounding comment, I'm just a bit bored right now.

>>325290325290 lawl I laugh at the weirdness

mainly because I'm weird.

>>324662324662 I don't snipe much so IDK

I want the mane 6 to play Gears of War... not Equestrian Warfare or any fps crap, but Gears of War... I mean really, you can turn off the mature language and graphics don't cha know?       You don't even own an Xbox? Son, I am dissapoint... because there shall be no Gears of War.

>>325792325792 .......OR WILL THERE???

Silly fluff. Rather empty fluff so far, but still entertaining for five minutes.

>>337484337484 why thank you. I know this isn't the best of my works by any stretch...only reason I have so many views is because of that picture oh well, next chapter should be entertaining...

Wish I had my own minature mane six then I could dawww all of you with real live footage id put up on the site :P

I would panic only slightly if I found the mane six in my house and they were about half the size of a house cat maybe less. Then I would just go YESSSSS in my mind.

Now if I found the full size versions....then there would be plenty of panic attacks.

This will be interesting. GIVE ME MORE

>>342442342442 haha, I'll be writing up the next chapter soon. I've been caught up with a couple other projects, such as setting up my new Brony Radio station online :D

...I felt like I owed you guys an update, but I'm too lazy to make a full chapter right now... Blame Skyrim. I've got next week free though so I should be able to get some real stuff out then if not before the weekend. I also blame my Brony Radio show. Because I blame stuff.

Update's good.  Should be interesting to see what happens next...we'll just have to wait til you're not so lazy ; )

>>354693354693 yup. XD I am the epitome of lazy

Don't I know it LOL

They continue to grow... smaller. Edit: OH HELL YEAH! If they get to respawn it'll be cool, I guess, but seriously if it's like constant action and killing like the Haylo fanfic then i'll get pretty bored.   Man I played Halo: Reach like 2 days ago.... no one ever plays nice or talks.

>>354717354717 ....well it IS a mini-chapter....

Concidering that your last chapter wasn't far behind mine I think I need to get writing.

Heh, reminds me of the fanfics I read about Warhammer 40k playset figurines come to life and sorts of mayhem erupts from the opposing armies!

Holy goachamole! Six drunk ponys, a human and a wargame. This will be wild!

Shit just got real!

>>356669356669 I know, right man!

I finally noticed Celestia in the list of characters.... oh my goddesses.

Is the next chapter gonna start with "-It."? Probably not, I guess.

*See's there's an update.* *Reads it.*

>>395175395175 hehehehe

What the fu-? Oh for Christ's sake. This is gonna be a day of annoyances, I just know it...