Oh god. Perfection. Take a bow my good sir because you have officially won. At life. And the internet. And the pony of your choice.

Overalll? tracked, favorited, commented. Great read!

Great story so far. I look forward to reading more. You have made both ponies and avian americans about 20% cooler.

>>303786303786 i concur. oh, and

FIRST!

cool story bro, and i truly mean it.

I saw the title and immediately knew I had to read this story. So. Much. Win!

Now that I have expressed how awesome this story is already (Characters are perfect, by the way) I did see some minor mistakes.

-"you read the other books... didn't you?"

The 'you' should be capitalized.

-""Jeezum, Fang!" i yelped"

Need a capital 'i'

-"He turned and walked away, revealing his jet-black wings folded neatly into his back, my mom had been kind enough to cut slits in our clothes for our extra limbs."

It would be best to replace the comma with a semicolon or period in this case.

-"tried to "enhance" his night-vision, now's he's"

I'm sure you can see it.

-"pointed to Angel, flashed me a grin that was,"

Should be a who between Angel and flashed.

That is the end of my nitpicking. No major problems, great writing, and I can't wait to see more!

Jesus christ i fucking love you

INSTANT FANBOY SQUEAL. MAXIMUM RIDE

This is awesome, it combines two thing I like, Maximum Ride and MLP:FiM into one story, this is brilliant, I am tracking it favorite it.

Nice! Was not expected at all, but I love the books, so you get a read. Very accurate in terms of Max's tone of voice, chapter was short as hell (just like the 'Original Trilogy', I seem to recall they got longer around The Final Warning), and you certainly seem to know what you're doing in relation to the books. I'll admit, the only thing that through me was introducing the Flock as bronies, but since I'm assuming it's related to the plot, I'll let you have it.

Excellent! Track and have some thumbs

Maximum Ride and My Little Pony?

Best. Combination. Ever. /)(\

>>303768303768 I still can't decide!

>>303786303786 gahh! Overused meme! Thanks

>>303819303819Jeez, thanks, I'll fix all that as soon as I can

>>303821303821 I love you too

>>303836303836 I concur

>>303864303864 Thanks!

>>303968303968 thanks, and yes, I am more of a fan of the pacing of the first three, so that'll probably come into play

>>304020304020 I just don't know why I was the first to think of it

everypony, thank you so much for reading, I have to mention that this takes place btween books 3 and 4, I forgot to add it in the description and will asap

btw, still one chapter before the actual crossing over begins, sorry

Quick question, what did you guys think of my picks for each character's favorite pony? I tried to relate by personality

they seem good, but Max liking Twi? That one confuzzles me, i would have AJ or something. But your the author>>304379304379

>>304389304389 that's right son! Actually, I thought it fit pretty well, both are kind of the de facto leader of their respective groups, and both enjoy so good old-fashioned sarcasm, but that's just my take on it.

>>304219304219 I agree with you about being disappointed that this hasn't been done before

I haven't even read this yet and I can tell IT'S GONNA BE GGGGGGGGGGGGGGGOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOODDDDDDDDDDDDDD

SERIOUSLY?!?!?!?!

they're watching MLP?

*reads rest of chapter*

okay, first things first

1) I saw many grammatical errors

2) I am a Grammar Nazi

3) I would like to help with those errors

4) I have lots of free time (though not this weekend)

5) just to make this indivisible by two

>>303819303819 I thought that when I saw the name as well

>>303836303836you must reaaaaaaaaaally like Max

>>304020304020 all i can give you here is /] a Big Mac Brohoof!

>>304815304815 I'm saying I love the books, not the character

Hmm, i see a bright future here. "Smirk" i ask of you good sir, to keep up the magnificent work and i hope to read a new chapter soon.

-WW

>>307263307263 appreciate it!

I have never read the books, yet this is pretty awesome

I think I shall read them.

When is the next one out? I need MOAR

>>307605307605 You can understand what's going on ok right? I wasn't sure if I wrote it so people who haven't read the series knew what's what.

>>308417308417

From what I got from it, they are a group of kids that have been mutated by some laboratory place. And from the mutation they all got wings based on different birds. I am taking a guess that they are also all chilling in one of their parent's home. As for the voice, that is one thing I am confused on, but I will assume it is part of the mutation.

Is that right? If so then you are doing fine in the writing of this. Cool protagonists as well

Give yourself a cookie my friend, i'd give you one but 1) I don't know where you live and 2) I om nom nomed it already

>>309067309067 in reality, nobody knows what the voice is, not even max, the books haven't revealed exactly what it is, and none of the other members of the flock have one

YES! i love this, this is amazing. I can't wait for more.

First

And nice with the Danial X and Halo: Reach reference. I immediately caught those, and this story is awesome and I want more, please.

awesome story so far, but i'm not sure ED is going to accept it, if only because not many people know what MR is. Keep it up however, i'm looking foreward to more

>>327972327972 Well Dresden Files can't be much more popular than MR, but you've got a point.

Open the portal, jump in! I love this so far.

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"It's a FAR GATE!!! WE ARE NOT GETTING SUED!"

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"It just needs a mohawk and a wheelchair"

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Oh God I have not read this story in forever, and I didn't even know there was a fourth book!

If this really takes place between the two, I might as well just read this first before I jump to the fourth one, right?

Keep up the good work. It's almost like Patterson wrote this himself. You captured the flock perfectly.

all I can say is that this is awesome

but I did see some grammatical errors in there

and I can't wait for the next chapter

>>328737328737 I concur here, have a

>>328737328737 My life is complete! Thanks a lot.

>>328860328860 Would you mind pointing them out? I never can catch all of them, not to mention I was listening to Bronyville while typing.

>>328877328877 Will do!

"it was better than him throwing the bombs tat he also always had close by."

"Another balloon burst on my lg as I banked and flew up towards them."

"I shot through the portal, and immediately elt as if every cell in my body was being stretched to its limit"

are the three I saw if there are anymore I don't know

Sweet story so far! I agree with RazgrizS57, you write the flock very well. Possible Fang X Max in the future?

This deserves a Spikestash Seal of Apporval   

>>330577330577 I honestly don't know, I might throw in little references to it but for the most part I'm gonna try to avoid it... I'm REALLY bad at shipping

Like practically everybody else has said, you've captured the flock really well

>>335544335544 How do you know I'm not James Patterson? My self insert story may not be a self insert after all. Best selling authors can be bronies too.

>>335704335704 You never know. Still, good writing

>>335706335706 Seriously though, thanks. This is only my second attempt at writing anything other than school reports and the like. So thanks for the ego stoking.

>>335716335716 No prob, All up and coming writers need a little support

Keep up this wonderful story it is prehaps one of the greatest MR crossovers EVER... of all time.

Do the people like this story?

Eeyup

>>335960335960 Rvb reference? If not I'm retarded and you should ignore this comment. Also,

>>336001336001Refrence. Why would i ignore anthing writen from such a wonderful writer as yourself. um...don't take it that way. That came out wrong NOT THE FACE!

MOAR!

and you stole my idea!

>>407123407123 uh oh, what's wrong with it?

nothing just surprised

Ooooh, this looks good! I'll read it later, I've heard good things about Maximum Ride, too, and I should probably find and read it so this will be fully stunning.

i can not spell so bear with me

>>407144407144 Nothings spelled wrong, ur good, and awesome user name btw, I'm a quarter of the way through inheritance

i know eragon is AWESOME

>>407155407155 Um you might want to to do a once over one this story for I noticed a few misspelled words and missing spaces in between words.

and this was my reaction when i saw this new story update SWEET

Oh nice Eragon referance too

>>407798407798 appreciate it if you point those out either in the comments or in a pm, there's always some spots where my finger slips and I can never see it.  Also, spellcheck ain't working on my computer, so it's not catching those either.  Thanks for the enthusiasm and it wasn't really a reference, just saying I liked it Glad you're enjoying the story so far!

>>413284413284 translation: I don't know what my feelings are doing

Am I correct?

I tried to find those books online and found nothing any know where I can't find them?

great chapter although i would like to point out that they lived in colorado before being chased around everywhere arizona is where they are currently

omg this is awesome I think that RD and max will tie in their race also I love how pinkie pie breaks the fourth wall and probably only the flock may know what she is talking about, and the part where you mentioned "not reading much fanfiction because gazzy found one about baked goods" was that a cupcakes reference because I was also thinking of the max ride series when I read that.

>>435665435665 k first comment: uber derp second 1: they have no idea what she's talking about 2: yes it was, but when I read that max wasn't the first thing I thought about. It was mainly "oh god, why?"

>>415118415118 To buy, idk. To find info about, try www.maximumride.com or just plain wikipedia

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But, I only got the chance to read book one (local library and school library I am disappoint.) a few years back. Sadly, I'll have to pass for the sake of not driving myself insane due to all of the characters showing up that I know next to nothing about.

>>472078472078 sorry to hear that, the series is amazing, but the first three or four wer the best

*ahem*

instant fav.

Instant thumbs up.

All my money.

All the internets.

I GIVE THEM TO YOU

>>473028473028 thank you. When I take over the world your death will be quick and painless.

(most obvious reference ever)

>>473066473066 why not I be in charge of the military, Mr Griffin?

A veritable army of 4th wall hating ponies. "This is the way the world ends" to quote Cortana.

Millions upon millions of Pinkie Pies, together, they shall complete the prophesies.Yes.

To meet that many Pinkies... would be a dream come true

oh and also good job on this update and I can't wait for more.

I am now crying at what you made Luna see. poor Luna

Best chapter yet! Very book-accurate, as usual. Looking forward to the next installation!

>>504676504676 in all fairness, she was the one who invaded max's mind

>>504963504963 thanks! I think so too. The wait for next chapter is probably going to be even longer though

>>504425504425 OH GOD YOU SIR WIN A MUSTAHCE

Well, Luna got what she deserved at least. I feel no pity for her. Nope. None at all.

I'M SO SORRY LUNA I DIDN'T MEAN IT DON'T HURT ME!

>>506126506126 *sniff sniff* you like me! You really like me! I can't tell you how much this Oscar  . . .

Wait. Wrong award. oops!

Thank you

>>506423506423 i'll gladly take that oscar of yours. Oscar off your hooves for you.

>>508996508996 I'll trade it for some muffins. Got any Banana Blue Berry?

(Dual posts are bad for internets) >>509004509004

Shut up and take my Muffins!

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>>509028509028>>509004509004 this comment section has become oatmeal... AND I LOVE IT!!!!

I love the books and I am loving this you sir are great

>>509389509389 Who wouldn't?

>>509389509389 I know, right? It's great! . . . Wait. I think we've been influenced by Pinkie. JSPANG! You have created an army of Pinkies, and now they're infecting the rest of us!! WHAT HAVE YOU DONE!

>>509403509403 Here's you Oscar! The care booklet is in the stand! Thanks for the muffins!

>>510206510206 Thanks, and how do you keep messeging me RIGHT as i get back to fimfic

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>>510243510243 Egads! You've found me out! I shall have to erase your memory! . . .

I forgot the spell.

Truthfully? Most, if not all, my time is spent on the computer. I have about 0.0002% of my social life remaining.

>>510273510273 PPhht, social life who needs it.

>>510282510282 Hooray! Someone who understands me! Let us wallow in social ineptitude forever more!

>>510294510294

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>>510336510336

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You are officially the coolest person I have ever met on the internet ever!

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>>510384510384 and what am I? Chopped liver... That's a really weird expression.

>>511466511466 Of course you're great! You posted this amazing story after all! I just though that it was so obvious I didn't need to say anything.

>>512799512799 Yay! Ego stoking!

>>514395514395 No problem.  

Hey, do you even know where "Chopped Liver" came from? I'm rather curious.

>>514879514879 I think it's because nobody likes liver, idk

>>514950514950 . . . Man, these comment sections degrade fast. Instant oatmeal, with the little candy dinosaurs inside! Any way, I've taken up too much of your time. GREAT STORY!

Can't wait for next chapter, comrade.

MLP: FiM and Maximum Ride crossover?(my reaction to this in emoticons)

This is the greatest combination prose EVER!

I only read the first volume, and I love the 6 mutant kids with wings. I have never thought that you could make a story out this novel, meeting along with the Mane 6.

All I can say that this story is pure win, I hope I can get to read another awesome chapter!

>>560011560011 appreciate it!

Ya I just love this story so far, I hope you update soon