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GreyGuardPony


Just a simple pegasister who likes world building.

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This story is a sequel to Of Kingdoms and Cutie-Marks


The Great and Powerful Trixie. Showmare. Illusionist.

Hunted.

With an artifact smuggler trying to kill her over incriminating information she found, she's been forced onto the road and towards the small town of Ponyville, where her destiny will clash with the town's inhabitants.

Including one pony originally from another reality.

A Skitchverse story.

Cover art by GatesMcCloud

Chapters (12)
Comments ( 136 )

Thank you for adding your fic to my group! All I all ask is that you only submit to one folder, please!

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Whoops. My apologies good sir. Didn't mean to do that. :twilightoops:

3494845 S'all good, mate. I just like to see my group well organized, and going through and removing double submissions seems a bit troublesome.

Suhweet! This story has started on a high note, and I can't wait to read more!

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Thanks DarkPony! And worry not, more is coming. :pinkiehappy:

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I suppose that's the disconnect. I don't really view the story as having two main characters, so much as me naturally moving forward the world and the events from where things were left off at the end of Of Kingdoms and Cutie-Marks.

At the end of that fic, I mentioned that Skitch-Sketch would become part of an ensemble cast and I view the world as a very large ensemble.

Naturally, I think that the story will work, but I always encourage my readers to make up their own minds as the work continues. :twilightsmile:

Lab

Always a good day when one of your stories updates.

The green coated, light blue maned unicorn mare that had rigged it up was currently dragging a large wicker basked of dark blue flowers towards the lines with her magic, taking great care to make sure she didn't touch any of them directly as she floated and clipped each one to the line.

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She glanced up at Fluttershy as she worked, smiling at her friend continued to have her one sided conversation- well, to her at least- with Manny the Manticore.

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Thanks Lab! A comment like that always helps put a spring in my step. :pinkiehappy:

Saw that reaction coming a mile away! *sigh* Trixie, Trixie, Trixie. You've really done it this time.

When did this go up?!

You tricked me!!

:pinkiegasp:A Bat Pony as an adoptive parent? That would explain a few things...:ajbemused:

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Scootaloo 100% approves of being adopted by a mom as awesome as a bat pony. :scootangel:

Though this is probably why she's as equally attracted to the awesomeness that is Rainbow Dash too. She likes awesome ponies!

3634472 I did read a story where Luna adopts Scootaloo, how about as a side story later on how Moon Crescent adopted her and the circumstances surrounding it?

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Funny you should mention that. I'm actually working on a story about just that, on the side, while I keep working on this one.

3634493 :yay: :yay:There's also one where Diamond Tiara adopts her.

Lab

Not only was it not-a-spider, but also not-a-cockroach.

I'm sorry, couldn't resist.

Lab

I would not want to be that chicken.

I’m still waiting for the necklace to go really haywire and accidentally summon Ace Blueblood.

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And, with respect Samuru, the idea that Skitch is the focus of this story is boggling to me.

None of her character threads are driving this story, the mention of her being harassed by muckrakers more of a background thing.

Meanwhile, the villains are tied to Trixie's past, have been interested in her, and even the illusion monsters only exist because the crime lord that killed her family used an ancient amulet to try and get her.

And the next chapter, is going to have a large section with Trixie, with her playing a the big damn hero.

Could this story be tightened up some? Probably. I've been juggling a lot of stuff as of late. But I just do not view this story as being "about" Skitch.

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Your opinion here makes me wonder if you feel Skitch has too much screen time in my Rockets & Rainbooms….

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She's not the major secondary plot.
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The major plots here are;
1; Trixie's struggle with Evil McJerkbag via henchponies and Thorn.
2; Twilight's response to the abduction of Spike.

Skitch does contribute here; she's an element of the story in that she is the humanizing element for Trixie, Trixie's uses her in her show, and Trixie's use of Humans in her show provides a pacing decision in that it sends her away momentarially. The necklace gives her a reason to return, and adds special effects, but the story isn't about Skitch or the necklace. They just empower the other elements. :trixieshiftright:

As for it being predictable that she got the necklace... okay. And? Predicable doesn't mean bad the same way that tropes aren't cliches. And yes, the creatures appearing would be connected to her due to previous stories... because that's foreshadowing. Chekov's Gun stuff. :rainbowhuh:

Sammy, you are spot on in saying that those are your opinions and thereby they're not universal. But if you want to contribute, you want to do more than present an opinion. Give details or suggestions! I'm guessing on some level you do like this story, as you keep reading it, and you clearly have a take on where to take it. So help him make it better! :pinkiehappy:

Hey Skitch, the Rainbow Factory called.

They want all of your Equestria's ponies.

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Sorry, we don't have an extradition treaty with that universe. :rainbowwild:

So the Rainbow Factory has shown up does that mean Sunny Town and the Torture Chamber underneath Sugarcube Corner is there as well?

“A balrog.” She gulped, “A demon of the ancient world.”

is it Tuesday already? There isn’t going to be much Ponyville left, at this rate!

Lab

Bowl of clam chowder and a new chapter of Boast Bypassed. Today is a good day.

Um, you got Twist's lisp wrong. Generally when lisps are transliterated it's done so thru changing th S's to Th's.

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Fair point. :ajsleepy: I'll make sure to fix that as soon as I can.

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While you're on the subject of typo fixes, you used the wrong 'horde' for 'hoard'.

'Hoard', refers to the action of stockpiling and gathering, or a cache - E.G., a dragon's hoard. 'Horde' is a large group of something. Usually a large group of something out to get blood - a horde of Orcs.

WHEW! New chapter of Boast Bypassed! And with a Blarog to boot! I can't tell you how much I loved that ending for the chapter!!!

Lab

Aww, poor Trixie. She really needs homeowner's insurance. Cartowner's insurance?

Poor Trixie. Great chapter though.

I have to admit, you managed to make Trixie likeable.

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I suppose it would be cart-owners insurance.

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Don't worry! Everything will work out.

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Thanks Voldine. I was always inspired by the Lunaverse to get writing, so I wanted to go with a more heroic Trixie. :twilightsmile:

Lab

4516705 Insurance is expensive in Ponyville anyway, especially if you get the policy that covers damages caused by the CMC.

Personally I can see magic, honesty and generosity coming together to make Trixe a new home. Applejack has the know how I'd imagine to build a new cart, Twilight cold cast a spell to make the interior bigger, and I doubt very much that it take much at all for Rarity to convince the others to help build Trixe a new cart.

All this talk of the multiverse reminds me of my O.C., who travels to a whole bunch of different realities.

So Skitch-verse Cadence was born as an Earth Pony?

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That is a good point, and not one that I was thinking about. Admittedly. That being said, I think that the plan that actually happens in the next chapter will be a bit more long term satisfying. :pinkiehappy:

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Gotta love world hoppers. :pinkiehappy:

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Yup. I had made that decision before someone told me that she was established as a pegasus in some book that I've not had a chance to read. I'm going to keep her as an earth pony though.

I think it fits the character arc I plotted out for her in the Skitchverse better.

4556436 Well it is an AU. Such liberties are to be exptected.

To take a quote from the previous chapters, 'the bear has been poked!'

1) Cadence and Shining just got involved in magical fallout of a 'cleanup' gone bad.
2) Twilight and Spike were targets of part of that 'cleanup'.
3) Trixie has sufficient knowledge of the operations that she will be trouble.
4) Thorn has been forced into a position I'm sure she doesn't much enjoy, money or not.
5) Skitch ended up accidentally taking the 'bullet' for Trixie.

None of these players have a reason to leave Bayou Runner alone anymore.
Looking forward to 'La Bonne Vie!' where the party heads to Neigh Orleans for a little old fashioned love and tolerance.
On that note.
Skitch: "What are we gonna do? We're gonna love and tolerate the buck out of that bastard.
Fluttershy: "Um. Could we maybe just, put him in jail? If you don't mind, I mean."

Enjoying the slightly rough and tumble version of Equestria in the skitch-verse, but man, watch your typos! I've just powered through the chapters, and you have Applejack using Ah'll (I'll) when you want All, creek (where water runs) instead of creak (a noise), and similar issues with homophones. Keep up the good work.

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Ugh. Yeah. Those things always seem to slip past me when I'm trying to meet a self imposed posting deadline. I start to feel guilty when I've not updated a story in a bit, which can sometimes bite me.

You aren't entirely off on the their next move though. It's time to take down a mob boss. :rainbowdetermined2:

4589002 (Which was why it was spoilered! Spoilers dude! Hide them! Quick! :trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright: Before people notice!)

I may go back through in the near future and do a cleanup pass, but getting this far in roughly two days has me a little full on the Skitchverse for the moment.

Lab

More chapters should start with toast.

Dat Leverage quote. Dang, I'm really excited to see where this goes and the upcoming shenanigans.

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Would it be too much of a Mary Sue to let Twilight or Cadance use a fix-it spell to at least restore the book? The cart is a lost cause. It's like a red shirt in Star Trek.

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All around the country, from coast to coast
People always say, "What do you like most?"
I don't wanna brag, I don't wanna boast.
I always tell 'em, "I like toast." YEAH TOAST!

This most recent of developments can only end horribly well. :pinkiecrazy:

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