This story is a sequel to Nyx's Time with Rainbow Dash
Takes place after the events of Nyxs time with Rainbow Dash
Lunar is given a tour around Ponyville by Twilight, Nyx and Rainbow Dash. But they then discover that Lunar has strange powers that are similar to what Nyx now has. What could it mean? Could it be linked to the Equestrian Emeralds?
The cover art is made by me by using Pony Creator
http://xxmaskedponyxx.deviantart.com/art/Lunar-eclipse-413158777
Nyx belongs to Pen Stroke
This is an unofficial sequel/side story of Past Sins
Chapters (5)
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3487984 any other errors that I need to know about?
3487997 there are some errors in capitalization
3488135 any others or is that all of it? i'm trying to get everything fix so i can submit it as a new story
3488142 what about
instead of
And that should be the last of them.
3489477 Thanks
3489541you're welcome
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Capitalize the "I"
Capitalize the first letter after the period.
Nyx's
shield
Welcome
at Fluttershy's
The fact that there are three capitalization errors in the story description alone is dissuading me from reading this. I'm not going to tell you what they are; I want you to go over it word by word and clean it up. The more you learn to catch your own mistakes, the fewer you'll make in the future.
3564260 aware of that. I just didn't have the time. when i have time, I will go make corrections.
3564267 The time for making corrections is before you publish. No one wants to read something that needs to be deciphered.
3564274 I know that, but if someone tells me there's an error in to story or description, i will go and fix it, even if its already published. besides JoeyJumper94 is helping me out if theres an error. but thank you for telling me anyway
3564397
She should be uppercase
Nyx's
at Fluttershy and Rarity's
"I" and "I'm" should be uppercase
what's this?
Celestia should be uppercase
Applebloom should be uppercase
3567286 Thanks.
Capitalization error in the title. Nice.
Punctuation error in another title. Fantastic.
Capitalization again.
Yeah, we're done here.
3583194 the punctuation error in the other title, is my fault. sorry. but thanks for the comment, it really helps when i come back and do revisions.
found some mistakes
i think you meant great
the should be they
i should be it
other than that i enjoyed it
get some help with your spelling
3564260
Me: *spots an error* meh *continues reading*.