A Pie Worth Makin'

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A Pie Worth Makin'

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This story is a sequel to Let Them Eat Cake

Applejack takes a moment to consider apple pie, and the stories behind them.

Edited by: PropdowPony
Apple Family Christmas used with ChiuuChiuu's permission.

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Cerulean Voice

Cerulean Voice #1 · Nov 20th, 2013 · · ·

D'awww, this was great man!

There's a couple of teeny tiny errors in there, but you really got into the spirit of Applejack's attitude.
A cute little advice fic, made me feel warm inside this morning.

TwiwnB

TwiwnB #2 · Nov 20th, 2013 · · ·

Yeah, that sounds about right; family is just like apple pie.

How not to make a connection with sisterhooves social... You extended the comparison.

If you tried to make a good apple pie out of some dried apples, even if you were the best cook in the world, there’s no way the pie is going to turn out.

I think you lost me there, for personal reason, begoing one of the dried apples of my family. So I couldn't agree with that sentence (even if, given my bias, I interpreted it my way).
On a more general point of view, You tend to affirm things and let little place for other possibilities. The fact that you tell a very universal and already accepted message lower the risk, but it was to be expected that if someone were to disagree anywhere in what you said, then he wouldn't be able to enjoy the story because he wouldn't have anybody else than the narrator to identify with.

Family isn’t always easy, but

Friendship isn't always easy, but... another reference. This one I'm not sure you should have made, knowing your target public and the association (you make a connection between friendship and family that can work in principle, but that you don't seem to have wanted to develop there).

Well, it was nicely written, just didn't completely work for me.

Ogopogo

Ogopogo #3 · Nov 20th, 2013 · · ·

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How not to make a connection with sisterhooves social... You extended the comparison.

Oh....
I did not even realize sisterhooves social used that comparison. Now I feel like a bit of an idiot.

I think you lost me there, for personal reason, begoing one of the dried apples of my family. So I couldn't agree with that sentence (even if, given my bias, I interpreted it my way).

There are plenty of other things you can make with dried apples that you can't make with apples that are just as good, however. Just a little different

On a more general point of view, You tend to affirm things and let little place for other possibilities. The fact that you tell a very universal and already accepted message lower the risk, but it was to be expected that if someone were to disagree anywhere in what you said, then he wouldn't be able to enjoy the story because he wouldn't have anybody else than the narrator to identify with.

I agree.

The hardest part with this story was trying to balance Applejack's character with making it appealing to many. It isn't the easiest topic to discuss without being too bland, unless there is a little bit that some might object to. In many ways, I don't think that everything Applejack thinks or says would be agreeable to everyone. It's nice to see that at least it is not the story itself that doesn't work, just something that she claims.

TwiwnB

TwiwnB #4 · Nov 20th, 2013 · · ·

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First, thank you for taking my remarks so well .

Now I feel like a bit of an idiot.

No reason to. Your story stands very well on its own. My comment was phrased in a weird manner, but I saw no problem there. None at all.

There are plenty of other things you can make with dried apples that you can't make with apples that are just as good, however. Just a little different

It isn't the easiest topic to discuss without being too bland,

I agree there, you chose a very difficult type of story and a very difficult subject. And you did a good job with it. At least enough to keep me reading to the very end even if I was in a disagreement. Can't please everybody, even when you don't do anything "wrong".

BrianPony

BrianPony #5 · Dec 10th, 2013 · · ·

Well done. Nopony better to talk about family than Applejack. I really like this.

Flint Sparks

Flint Sparks #6 · Dec 11th, 2013 · · ·

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Skeeter The Lurker

Skeeter The Lurker #7 · Dec 11th, 2013 · · ·

Well now.

This was quite the story.

I can see why 3611000 tossed this into the Library. Well done.

~Skeeter The Lurker

Hoof of Approval

Hoof of Approval #8 · Jan 2nd, 2014 · · ·

A perfect compliment to Let Them Eat Cake.

NEXT!

Soge

Soge #9 · Jan 23rd, 2014 · · ·

I liked the metaphors and the structure, but I think it was a little too heavy-handed – even if that fits Applejack. Some more in-depth thoughts here.

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