Twilight, Fluttershy, Applejack, Rarity, and Pinkie Pie are severely injured. Rainbow is waiting in the hospital for any news about their health. When she doesn't agree with what the doctors are planning to do, she goes in search of a way to save them. But how far will she go to protect them? And how much pain is she willing to go through before she breaks?
ART NOT MINE!!!! Credit goes to Deviant Art(ist) Jykinturah
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@Aqua Shimmer...
If you did not know, the partial cover-art you are using is from Deviant Art(ist) Jykinturah, so you should properly credit him for it.
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Thank you. I'll do that right away.
You now have my attention. Continue.
3612424
I'll try.
Is twilight a unicorn?
3613316
Yes. In this one she is still a unicorn.
Well...I'm already hooked...please, go on.
PS: *whispers* Why you make me cry for Rainbow?
3617394
Will do.
P.S. I'm sorry. I didn't mean to make you cry.
Next Chapter. Need. Now.
3618173
Can you wait a few days? It's still under production.
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Sure - Please don't take my comment too seriously, I just wanted to say with it that I really like the story ^.^! (But, still, need moar
3618246
I understand your feeling. Give me 3-4 days. You might have your chapter by then.
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Yay! And sorry if I stressed you
3618510
You didn't stress me. The only thing stopping it from being uploaded on Saturday is the names.
There are some problems I forgot to mention, but I do not know what universe this is. Meaning I do not know if you changed anything.
1. Is Discord real? Because he is a spirit so he should not get hurt at all.
2. How on earth did they got kidnapped? You got a unicorn who can freeze up to 5 people movement. A pegasus who knows martial arts and is extremely fast. Fluttershy with her Stare. Lastly Pinkie with her fourth wall breaking skills. But I do not know if you took these away.
3.
Ok, none of them should be walking in that state. Rarity should be blind and twilight should have served head damage due to the dehorning. Lastly fluttershy should not be even moving.
3619416
1. He represents the spirit of chaos but is real. It's like the elements of harmony. Rainbow Dash represents the spirit of loyalty
2. I didn't include the kidnap part for those reasons.
3. ………………shut up.
3619481
1. That is a interesting perspective. I'm surprised I have not thought of that.
2. Eh I do not really like that reason but that's my opinion.
3.I'm not trying to offend you, I KNOW that victims can still walk but when you bring maiming into it, it is more likely they will not be able to walk. For example the dehorning of Twilight would have caused major nerve damage around her head, not to mention the headaches she would receive. So it would be hard for her to concentrate to walk. Defacing Rarity I could see her walking but not for long, due to the loss of blood from the head she would black out more quickly not to mention the blood getting into her eyes. Fluttershy could walk but due to her nature she would be in shock.
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1. That's how I always think.
2. I don't do kidnapping and rape scenes very well either so there is another reason.
3. Unadded fact to the story: Ponyville was not that far away from where they were. Close enough so they could get into town and others could help get them to the hospital.
Yep, people like this
! Awesome Chapter. I'm curious whats happening next..
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All I can say is hospital visits.
Whats going on? Umm....Talent and interesting story writing skills, thats what.
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Talent? You must have me confused with someone else.
3632000 nope.
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Are you sure?
3632015 Yep, sure. Talent. Clearly you do. I know it when I see it. Don't put yourself down.
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And here my mom said writing fanfiction wasn't going to improve my literary skills.
3632036 Then you proved her wrong.
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I guess so.
Poison? Really? Poison is just a type of venom. Ever heard of antivenom, doctor? Of course not, thats why they can't think of something sensible to do other than put them to sleep for good.
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Yep. The doctors are idiots in this story. Twilight would probably be able to find a cure. If she wasn't in a coma that is.
Nice chapter you have natural writing talent, can't wait to read more
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Thanks and I might be done sometime soon, I might not. I'm sorry if I'm not.
4145180 Don't sweat it take your time
4145756
I know but then you'll have to wait for a long time.
4148350 You'd think!
4148865
It's going to be longer than the other chapters and I'm running out of inspiration.
4149071 Figured but that doesn't mean that any of your readers would get mad or anything in fact I'm pretty sure most of us would rather you take as much time as you need to finish the chapter
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I'm almost done. It might be released today or on Monday.
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4299682 Sacrificed herself for her friends. javascript:smilie('
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I wub Rainbow.
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Isn't that what best friends do?
4301266 yes, I suppose so. Just kinda sad...javascript:smilie('
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I know.
While this could be written better, the ending was still depressing enough all the same. I think I'll stare at the sky blankly for a couple hours.