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No Appledash? Well, I really need to read a story besides Appledash. I really like the it so far.
Huh. Hopefully this one doesn't end up like mines. Cause its the same concept and everything.
Is it going to be a Sunlight fic?
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Errrr...no. Sorry.
3465306 Oh! I'll go next. Is it gonna be Twitavia?
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Sorry, no Twitavi here.
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It...it's not going to be a TwixFlash ship is it? Please say no.
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...no comment
3465531 Then I find your coverart misleading. So, can you spoil the pairing? Or at least tell me if it's F/F?
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1. I dont know what F/F is.
2. This is the only cover art I could find to relate to my story the most. I could make Tavi and Twilight long distant friends, though.
3465706 Don't you mean 'Flashlight'?
3465306 Meh, I had to ask. F/F means Female/Female pairing sometimes called Shoujo-ai or "Girl's Love" or Yuri meaning "Lily".
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Oh, thanks. I'm not really into Female/Female pairings.
Says the girl who ships AppleDash.
Who said that?!
3465801 I ship Vinyl/Octavia...I really need to come up with a cool sounding name for it.
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How about: "Octavinyl?"
That was my best shot. It sucks though.
3465870 Meh, I've heard worse.
3465878 how about musicshipping?
3466043 Basshipping? You have to admit Octavia's Cello does look like a Double Bass.
Uhhh, genreshipping? Cos they like different music genre
I like the premise, and so far you wrote it well, though I'm hesitant to keep following due to the tags..
Oh well, Allons-y!
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Tavinyl!
*blinkblinks* What just happened?
*goes through checklist, but has to put a red X next to 'Instant Best Friends'*
Okay, this needs to get out and I feel a little rusty so I kind of need to keep up my skills.
This style of writing is awful.
It doesn't hurt to read, but it is still awful to read. You keep interrupting with your own comments and break the fourth wall when it is better to leave it alone. I can speak from experience that such writing is awful and most will overlook you in favor of something better.
Example 1: Your Author's Note right in the middle of the chapter after Twilight ran out of the mess hall does not belong. It is a large block of "Do Not Want" for readers who want a good story but keep getting interrupted of their reading. I recommend abstaining from using the AN in such a manner for the sake of a good flow.
Example 2:
For most readers, this kind of sentence is a big no-no. It is redundant, I know, but to break the fourth wall intentionally is ugly on a good plotline. Here might be a solution.
Either might work.
Please do not take this the wrong way. I am honestly in favor of you writing this story and all I am saying at this point is that you can get better. I favorited this for a reason and that is to see where this is headed. But I have trouble keeping my eyes on this as it is being written at the moment. Please consider that I am willing to help you get better as a writer.
I have to agree, stopping to story for an author's note disrupts things, author's notes belong at the end of the story. And while you seem to be trying to answer questions before they get asked, it's annoying, I know it seems like it wouldn't be but it is. If some detail is that glaring to you then you should either fix it or have a in story comment explain it. Like in Brawny's example you can have Twilight notice Sunset Shimmer is missing or just add her in. And remember criticism that points out flaws and suggests solutions is from people who actually like your story.
Well looks like another story that I enjoy.
Like and fav
I'm non entirely sure how I feel about this fic, but I'm curious as to where it's heading.
Needs more muffins. :D
And so Octavia dated Vinyl.
Can't find a fic that Octavia NOT shipped with Vinyl.
This redeemed that horrible Equestria Girls movie for me.
3477687 I hate when girls date girls!