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Princess Twilight Sparkle has lived in Ponyville for many years. While most of these years have been fun and adventurous for her and her friends, recent years have taken much away. The passing of Applejack, the last of her remaining friends, hurts her greatly. After the pain was starting to subside, a new greater problem comes to light. Twilight will do all she can to prepare for this coming problem, but a simple letter might not be enough to prevent the pain that will follow.

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I'm liking the premise here, but I think you're giving away too much in the description.

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I was kind of wondering on that. I tend to give overly lengthy descriptions on things for some reason sometimes. I will try altering it some in a bit.

These first two chapters feel very much like filler; there's nothing particularly novel or exciting about them.

They also are very telly rather than showy and consequently feel a lot more like a summary than an engaging story.

Nevertheless, judging by the description, the interesting part will come after Twilight's passing. I'll reserve judgment until then.

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