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HB_DS2013

Joined November 2013
15 followers

My name is HB_DS2013, but I prefer to be called Hebi. A struggling writer and a closet brony, my obsession lies with foxes and food.

Stories (2)

  • SF One-Shot: A Burning Surprise
    Twilight and Spike discover curry on a winter night while Azul Flame discovers a good use for his flames.

    1,814 words · 188 views · 5 likes · 0 dislikes
  • Sealed Fox: Lunar Sage
    Alchemy is hard, timberwolves stink. Frozen foxes awaken, friendship burns ablaze.
    3,103 words · 403 views · 22 likes · 19 dislikes

Blog Posts (20)


On an ambiguous night, a functionally illiterate, mute telepathic and kleptomaniacal kitsune named Kogemori duels a human named Kagayaki Hikaru, and loses.  Taking on the alias of Jommohg Doe, Kogemori is then awakened by Applebloom and Zecora many centuries later in the land of Equestria, physically and mentally regressed and with little memory of himself in a form not his own. The only hints would be a slave collar engraved with a six-pointed star and the family in which it is associated with.

Not sure if it works, but go here anyway. I managed to procure a copy before deleting them.

First Published
6th Nov 2013
Last Modified
18th Aug 2014

Comments ( 11 )

#1 · Chapter 2 · 15w, 12h ago · · ·

In case you didn't know your link shows up white so nobody can read it.

#2 · Chapter 2 · 15w, 12h ago · · ·

Fixed. You should see the link now.

#3 · Chapter 1 · 7w, 5d ago · · ·

This is actually a rather decent, at the least, beginning and now I absolutely know I'm not worthy of your favourite. All in all though this is a rather intriguing beginning and I am moving on to the next chapter so I can continue reading.

#4 · Chapter 2 · 7w, 5d ago · · ·

This chapter is a pretty good continuation, if not for the few errors that I took note of it would be perfect and entrancing. I really do like how much description you put into everything and that makes me think that you've actually put time and love into this story. Although, the part where Apple Bloom knows that it was the pack that killed her parents pulled me out of the world just a bit. Because from what I understand, canonically at least, she was too young to have any memory of the event and I doubt anyone decided to take a picture while their parents were being eaten. Either way, I'm probably just trying to be nit-picky and you should ignore me.

#5 · Chapter 3 · 7w, 5d ago · · ·

I need more naow. In all reality there were a few parts that brought me out of this once again, such as this little piece.

To her unrelief, Zecora lay unconscious and the vulpine statue was nowhere to be seen, save for some rubble.

Applebloom shook her head and trotted closer to the creature. It resembled a bipedal hedgehog clad in foreign clothes and most of his head resembed hedgehog spikes that extended all the way to its legs.

Not trying to be a grammar Nazi but I don't think unrelief is an actual word, try using worry or some other synonym. And this part kind of confused me, I don't remember another creature being pointed out before and I would really appreciate if you could show it to me.

#6 · Chapter 3 · 7w, 5d ago · · ·

>>4672793 What's with the green text?

#7 · Chapter 3 · 7w, 5d ago · · ·

>>4674209

I used to share this with a friend and he would type in red and I would type in green to keep people from becoming confused. He's no longer on the internet as much as he once was so now it's just me on here, so I guess this is kind of to keep his memory alive for my old followers? Either that or habit I can't break.

#8 · Chapter 3 · 7w, 5d ago · · ·

>>4674250 Keeping an old memory alive? That's understandable.

#9 · Chapter 3 · 7w, 5d ago · · ·

>>4674269

Yeah, you can find a couple places where he was on some of my old stories (including the Halo crossover which was the last thing he worked on) and in the comment sections of a lot of the favourites on my profile, not to mention the My Little Pony: Off the Record series by KingOfHearts in which we actually commented on every single chapter, even the offshoots of it.

#10 · Chapter 1 · 2w, 5h ago · · ·

>>4672705 Wait everbodys see the green text right?

#11 · Chapter 0 · 2w, 4h ago · · ·

>>4877315

Uhh, did you happen to miss the entire thread behind that because I explained why I type in green.

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