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  • E Awaken, Scootaloo

    When Scootaloo loses hope, Princess Luna is there to help her learn to dream again.
    6,531 words · 4,810 views  ·  612  ·  5
  • E Diary of a Silent Tyrant

    Encased in stone, Discord observes the events around him and reflects on his life
    3,163 words · 6,740 views  ·  669  ·  7
  • E Apple Ninjas and Other Vital Concerns

    Big Mac shows Apple Bloom that the farm can be a blast, even when her friends are all busy for the day.
    3,725 words · 1,381 views  ·  170  ·  0
  • E Checkmates

    After finding a chess set in the library's storage closet, Twilight is eager to play a few games and turns to Applejack and Rainbow Dash. Teaching the two most competitive ponies in Ponyville a new game should be a snap, right? RIGHT?!
    3,673 words · 6,297 views  ·  463  ·  5
  • E Diary of a Pliant Tyrant

    When Fluttershy finds out that Discord used to keep a mental diary while imprisoned in stone, she begs him to continue it. Grudgingly, he promises to document his thoughts about his new life among old enemies
    16,437 words · 8,132 views  ·  825  ·  14
  • T Cheerilee's Thousand

    Cheerilee goes on one thousand terrible dates.
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  • E The Carrot Dog Fight

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  • E Easy As Pie

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  • Wednesday
    Shut Up, Brain!

    It's really annoying when you have what should be a passing idea that becomes a permanent, insistent idea. I was talking with Steel Resolve the other day, and he was lamenting the dearth of Fluttershy/Rarity romance stories. Mostly joking, I told him that I'm going to write him one some day, and that it would suck, but I'd write it for him all the same.

    Strange thing is, I can't quit thinking about it!

    Now let's break down why this is ridiculous:

    1)  I don't have any freakin' time.  Seriously, I just semi-retired because I can't get three seconds together to write.

    2)  Fluttershy is not a favorite of mine.  I don't particularly care for writing her.

    3)  I've tried to write romance several times. It's never really come together, besides what I write with Steel.  I'm going to have to give him most of the credit on that one.

    4)  Every idea that I have for it is miserably sad.

    All of this points to it being a horrible idea, but my mind is fixated on it for some reason. I should probably just bang out a chapter so that I can look at it and say, "Oh, yeah. That's bad. Let's throw that in a drawer where no one will see it again."

    But it's something about challenge. I have all these great ideas that I think people will like and that I know I'll enjoy writing, but they aren't as challenging as writing a miserable romance about a character that I don't like in a genre that is my weakest. So my interest is all piqued. It crowds out all the thoughts that I need, and I find my imagination playing out scenes of a story I don't want to be working on.

    Why, brain? Why?!

    Ugh.

    8 comments · 52 views
  • Saturday
    It's My Cheeri-versary!

    26 comments · 126 views
  • 1w, 1d
    Story Recommendation #3

    Wow.  It's been a long time since I've read a story that I liked well enough to recommend.  Yeesh.

    So let's discuss Spring is Dumb by HoofbitingActionOverload.  As is the case with these things, I'm going to try to avoid spoilers, but what is below this might contain them.  Consider yourself warned!  Warned, I say!

    This is a romantic comedy, and romance really isn't my genre.  I like the idea of it, but I find most stories to be generally overwrought, and no category has more offenders in that department than romance.  And that's precisely what makes this story nice.  The romance in it felt very natural to me.

    Less natural was the comedy. Now don't get me wrong. This story is funny enough to get a couple of actual laughs out of me. I almost never actually laugh out loud. It's more of a mental registry that something is, indeed, funny. My mind makes a little mental checkmark, but it doesn't usually translate into a smile or a chuckle. This story did a time or two, and for that, I applaud it.

    However, that didn't stop it from feeling like it was clubbing me on the head with the premise from time to time. There is a certain repetition that is going on in the story for comedic effect, but there is a fine line between 'still funny' and 'getting old.' Toward the middle of the story, I was starting to get pretty tired of the schtick, but the great thing is that the story also mostly does away with it at that point, too.  Not quite quickly enough for me, but I'm prickly and easily irritated, so for most readers, it will probably be right in the sweet spot.

    One thing that I really liked here is that this is a comedy with romantic elements, and that really lets the romance at the end have greater impact. It sets up the conclusion well, then delivers because you're ready for that change of pace. I think the instinct on it was good.

    Occasionally, the narrative voicing falls off track, but it's a rare problem.  Once or twice, HBAO has Rainbow think things that are humorous, but not really something that Rainbow would think. Then he kind of has Rainbow point that out to herself, but that's a false joke in my book. You can't have someone think about how they'd never actually think like that. But like I said, it's a nit-pick, not a recurrent thing.

    I was left wondering why it was divided up into two chapters. I didn't see the need to break up the flow.

    In the end, I found myself really enjoying this one. It's not perfect, but who knows more about Not Perfect fics than me? Eh? Eh?!

    No one, that's who.

    But the comedy hit its marks quite a bit of the time, and the romance was heartwarming. That seems like a win in my book.

    2 comments · 54 views
  • 1w, 5d
    So BABSCon...

    I know it's kind of a ways off, but I was curious to know who among you are planning to go to BABSCon. I'm not very confident about the fanfic side of things this year, so I figure if we want to represent, we will probably need to get on top of things.

    Are any of you planning on trying to host a panel of some sort? Do people want to meet up in a hotel room like we did last year? Should we get a group together and go get some food? Should we stage a coup and storm the main stage, taking the Goldies for ourselves?

    It's kind of a strange thing, these cons.  Everyone is always waiting for everyone else to get on top of things. I figured I'd try and get the ball rolling. We have a lot of creative, interesting people with informed opinions. It'd be a shame if we couldn't get some great panels out of all that experience.

    18 comments · 82 views
  • 1w, 6d
    Do You Like Melodic EDM?

    Well, if you do, why not check out statoose's bandcamp page, and see if his new track is up your alley. At a single dollar, that's quite affordable for three tracks totaling over eighteen minutes.

    For those of you who don't know him, statoose is a great guy who's helped me with quite a few of my stories. He's particularly good at picking out sentences that don't work well within the context of the paragraph that contain them, and he's helped me shine up many a lackluster phrasing. There's not much I can usually do but say thanks, but this is my chance! My opportunity to make a small dent in the imbalance of our karmic scales.

    However, I wouldn't do it if I didn't also like the end product. Melodic trance/Uplifting Progressive House isn't my usual EDM choice, but this is well done, in my opinion. I could certainly mix this into a set for my more melodic friends, and I'm sure they'd love it.

    So if it's your bag, swing on over and give it a listen. Free streaming, so what do you have to lose?

    0 comments · 38 views
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The Crystal Empire is slowly being destroyed by a patchwork monstrosity of unspeakable power.  King Sombra's forces have fought valiantly, but what hope did they have against a creature that can twist reality itself?  In a desperate bid to save his people, Sombra, and his wife, Queen Chrystal, have called the great Star Swirl the Bearded.  However, solutions often come with a heavy price.  Sometimes the results aren't what were expected.

Cover art by Ezpt (2135D here on FIMFiction)

First Published
25th Nov 2013
Last Modified
8th Jan 2014
#1 · 51w, 3d ago · 1 · · The Ritual ·

Wait.

This is...

OH HELL YES IT'S FINALLY OUT!

~Skeeter The Lurker

Looks like you might have botched the italics.

This creature...  I wonder, is it Discord?

The lion's paw it has...  And what it said...

~Skeeter The Lurker

>>3534383  Damn it!  That's the second time I've screwed italics up today.

Thanks for catching that!

I'm getting a kind of Game of Thrones feel from the perspectives you're doing.

I quite like it.

All in all, this is a incredibly awesome start to this fic.  I can;t wait to see where it goes.

~Skeeter The Lurker

>>3534405  Thanks, man.  I wanted to use some different perspective to get across the feel of the world.  

Oooh, I like the new take on Sombra. I'm guessing you already have a plan for how he's going to be corrupted? It already seems like his heart was torn out... Is there anything more to it than that?

>>3535932  Lots more.  The next few chapters will explain a lot.

#11 · 50w, 6d ago · · · The Ritual ·

Have you ever considered submitting this story to Equestria Daily? You can find out how to do so here.

>>3555944  Yes, it's been submitted already, but EQD waits are usually pretty long, so I wouldn't expect to see it there for a month, at least.

But thanks for having the confidence in it to think it should be submitted!  I really appreciate it!

Run away, my crystal pony equivalent.

I noticed one error (I wrote this down on my notepad earlier, but forgot about it until now):

Sombra’s mouth had sagged open as the creature fell to the ground, cackling and clutching its stomach. “Oh! Oh, you should see the look on your face! You’re simple too much!”

Also, just a nitpicky thought, you could probably remove the 'had' here. Though that really is a tiny detail. :pinkiecrazy:

>>3722561 Thanks!  It's never too late to point out an error to me.  I love squashing them!

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