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The Crystal Empire is slowly being destroyed by a patchwork monstrosity of unspeakable power.  King Sombra's forces have fought valiantly, but what hope did they have against a creature that can twist reality itself?  In a desperate bid to save his people, Sombra, and his wife, Queen Chrystal, have called the great Star Swirl the Bearded.  However, solutions often come with a heavy price.  Sometimes the results aren't what were expected.

Cover art by Ezpt (2135D here on FIMFiction)

First Published
25th Nov 2013
Last Modified
8th Jan 2014
#1 · 56w, 21h ago · 1 · · The Ritual ·

Wait.

This is...

OH HELL YES IT'S FINALLY OUT!

~Skeeter The Lurker

Looks like you might have botched the italics.

This creature...  I wonder, is it Discord?

The lion's paw it has...  And what it said...

~Skeeter The Lurker

>>3534383  Damn it!  That's the second time I've screwed italics up today.

Thanks for catching that!

I'm getting a kind of Game of Thrones feel from the perspectives you're doing.

I quite like it.

All in all, this is a incredibly awesome start to this fic.  I can;t wait to see where it goes.

~Skeeter The Lurker

>>3534405  Thanks, man.  I wanted to use some different perspective to get across the feel of the world.  

Oooh, I like the new take on Sombra. I'm guessing you already have a plan for how he's going to be corrupted? It already seems like his heart was torn out... Is there anything more to it than that?

>>3535932  Lots more.  The next few chapters will explain a lot.

#11 · 55w, 3d ago · · · The Ritual ·

Have you ever considered submitting this story to Equestria Daily? You can find out how to do so here.

>>3555944  Yes, it's been submitted already, but EQD waits are usually pretty long, so I wouldn't expect to see it there for a month, at least.

But thanks for having the confidence in it to think it should be submitted!  I really appreciate it!

Run away, my crystal pony equivalent.

I noticed one error (I wrote this down on my notepad earlier, but forgot about it until now):

Sombra’s mouth had sagged open as the creature fell to the ground, cackling and clutching its stomach. “Oh! Oh, you should see the look on your face! You’re simple too much!”

Also, just a nitpicky thought, you could probably remove the 'had' here. Though that really is a tiny detail. :pinkiecrazy:

>>3722561 Thanks!  It's never too late to point out an error to me.  I love squashing them!

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