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Inky Shades


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Fluttershy receives a letter from Mist Town, a town she's never heard of before, deep in the Everfree Forest. The letter is requesting her assistance in helping a sick manticore. However, when she arrives, she learns that there is more to this mysterious little town than meets the eye.

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Just because i know someone else will say it...
Transformers Robots In Disguise.......

Wasn't gray hoof a pony in blanks?

The ending struck to me a bit abrupt. Also, why was the mayor bothering to tell Fluttershy anything about his motives? He was going to kill her, after all. I think this story could do better if you made it longer.

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Perhaps the story did end suddenly, but that is what I intended (mostly).

Before the venom took hold of Fluttershy the first time, she was about to ask why the mayor was doing this. The mayor doesn't necessarily view himself as a bad pony, so he felt obligated to answer her question. Yes, he didn't have to explain anything to her. However, he wanted her to know why he was going to kill her. Also, his motivations were necessary for me to get across.

I think the story could've been received better for a variety of reasons. I mostly think it had to do with its original upload time. Admittedly, the timing could've been better. The story was originally just supposed to be a short one-shot for Halloween, so longer was out of the question. Who knows though... maybe I will return to this story at a later date and expand upon it.

Thanks for reading and the feedback!

I knew something bad was probably gonna happen before I started reading. That was a tense ride, all the way through.

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I'm glad you thought so!

3431223 What makes you say that?

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5517159 Someone didn't have a childhood :rainbowlaugh:

This a good story I have to ask why don't Fluttershy ask one her friend to come with her? It's seem like something she would do.

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I'm glad you enjoyed the story. That's actually a good question. Maybe she thought that since there was an animal in trouble, she could handle it herself despite her fear of the forest.

Put this in my read for later section for over a year. I have finally read it. It's a lot different than what I expected it to be. Reminds me of an episode of supernatural. I liked it though.

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I don't even want to know how long I've had some of the stories in my read later list for. Glad you liked it! Thanks for commenting!

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