... Crap, I really DO have to read Tears in the Snow, don't I? XD

I CALL SHENANIGANS!!!

I love how Twilight is handling her pregnancy XD.

god damnit!! make with the new chapter soon!!!

Whoa, Scootaloo fits somehow just right in this story now- let's see what happens in next chapter. Keep up the good work good chap!

>>296092296092

Oh, just wait until later. If you like this, you're going to love what we have planned.

>>302612302612

Glad you like it so much.

>>302984302984

Glad the part with Scootaloo is liked. I was worried it might seem kinda forced. Glad it wasn't

>>303088303088 yeah man, i loved the fuck out of the previous story and this one is getting really good!

WHAT?!?

Great job man can't wait for the next chapter

Interesting so far.  The only suggestion I have is that you should make use of the horizontal rule to point out breaks where your story shifts perspective or setting.  Otherwise it gets difficult for the reader to track.  

>>303734303734

That issue will be taken care of shortly.

XD I'm not sure if I should read this a second time or not so I know what to comment! xD The downside of being an impromptu pre-reader.... *Sighs*

Anyways, can't wait to see what happens next! 8D

~ Moonstone, Minstrel of Equestria

>>303734303734

Horizontal rules have been inserted into chapters 1 and 2, and shall be used in all subsequent chapters.  Thanks for pointing that out.

Two good chapters, my good chap!

I love the punishment that Twilight put on Cerulean, blue cactus pfft.

>>309443309443

There is one even bigger than that coming up. Glad you like everything though.

If I could speak to storm, my words would be these, "Man the hell up Nancy!"  seriously.  Not a bad fic though, keep up the good work.

great chapter up date soon, pwease

Ahah! Found you, after your last story it took me a bit but i found your profile! and low and behold you had another great story. Imagine that.

noting rather odd fauna adorning the inside;

Presumably you meant flora instead.  

>>315829315829

fixed, my bad

Pffft a wingboner at end when she hugged Storm XD

Another excellent chapter, keep it up.

For some reason, I get the feeling that courtroom shenanigans will eventually ensue.  

HHHNNNNNGGGGFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFF

(I qan haz furtchst?) :D

Aw cute haha.

Very nice, but I sense Cerberus creeping closer with every chapter.

Also, daikon leek brownies...well played sir, well played...  

On second thought, that recipe sounds worth trying.  

>>330917330917>>330980330980

Oh thank goodness these two chapters were well received. I was a bit worried about them. Glad to know it was pointless worrying.

*inhale*

D'aw

Okay, I'm enjoying your story a lot, but I really feel that Proud Skies could use some rounding out as a character.  You have a great base to build on with regards to that.  Having his wife be happier in her affair with Quakehoof than with him gives you plenty of fuel for developing a sense of inadequacy with him.  Or how about the fact that none of his kids are actually his?  Is there a specific reason for this (maybe I didn't read closely enough because I couldn't find one)?  Is he sterile perhaps?  All juicy material for fleshing out his character.  You can still have him as a villain, but I feel that there needs more than Proud Skies walking in, plotting to make everypony's lives miserable then leaving.  Other than that, keep up the good work.  

>>334119334119

My general idea for him was for people to have fun filling in the blanks themselves. If you want, he can be sterile. Or Grace just finds some way to always be on the pill with him as she does not want to give birth to his demon spawn. Also, there will be a lot more of Proud Skies being seen in several chapters.

But there will be more to him later. Well, more to how his mind works anyway.

Twinge, uh oh, my "Old one sided flame is coming back and will cause misunderstanding in the current wonderful relationship" sense is tingling.

>>337997337997

That is a oddly specific sense to have. Do you have any others like it?

>>337997337997 it's not tingling for me. She have stated that she only want to see him once, probably to rekindle a friendship.

this story need more moustache

but other than that this is the best story i have ever read.

i liked the paart with the random kissing

And so... The three pegasi starts the shitstorm!

This is my new favorite story... It's fffffffffffffreally good.

I get the feeling that Flying Grace not taking that evidence to the authorities or whomever is really gonna come back to bite everypony in the ass before long.  Trying to keep a guy like Proud Skies in check with blackmail is only going to make him angrier and it still leaves him free to turn the tables.  Furthermore, those letters prove that he has the means to commit some pretty unsavory deeds without even having to leave the house.  Yep, I don't think we've seen the last of him.  

>>344694344694 Eeeeeeeeenope, we haven't. The only way a-holes like him learn are by losing everything, and even then, some are too stupid to learn, so... Yea-no, we haven't seen the last of him... ~_~

har har, found a loophole at the end of this chapter.

Dun dun duunnnnnn. I'll get the fans, you get the other half of the equation.

>>348102348102 *snaps some gloves on, pick up some brown "waste"*

Ready here

Just a heads up, switched the rating on this to Teen... was originally intending for this story to be cleaner than "Tears," but alas, twas not to be.

Ahh what a sweet ending to an otherwise sadistically satisfying chapter. Props to you sir. Keep it up.

Yet another great chapter :D

Haha, cruel truth have been discovered!

>>357718357718

Indeed. This chapter was a long time waiting ever since the first flying lesson when Scootaloo asked about their wings.

I believe Proud Skies has just committed political suicide.    Given the events of a couple of chapters ago, he may already be on his way out.  One last "Buck you!" for the road then?  

dun dun DUN!!!!!!!

*le gasp*

By decree of Celestia (and probably all the elements of harmony), proud skies has been executed